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|'family, school, and state' - CAUSES OF DROUPOUTS
3 - I am happy that you have corrected my mistakes. I really like your revisions!! Thank you a lot, for...
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|IELTS - Task 1 : rental charges and salaries in three areas of London
Writing Feedbacksamenmohammad - Jul 29, 2012 / ah_zafari - Aug 2, 2012
|"police office shouldn't carry guns" - do you agree or disagree with statement
Writing Feedbackpooh17 - Aug 1, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Aug 1, 2012
|TOEFL iBT - Qualities of a good neighbor; polite, friendly, not vociferous
Writing FeedbackKiranmayi - Jul 30, 2012 / pooh17 - Aug 1, 2012
|'digitalization is revolutionizing' - Public libraries limited resources on
2 - In the introduction u did not say anything about "computer software, videos or DVDs". In fact the thesis...
Writing Feedbackeva123 - Jul 31, 2012 / ah_zafari - Aug 1, 2012
|'aspects of mobile phones' - IELTS writing task2
3 - Your I/P: It's better to combine the first 2 (even 3) sentences into 1 for a complete thoughts....
Writing Feedbackiamrabin - Jul 31, 2012 / Tong - Aug 1, 2012
|'Main, modern media' - My Essay: dicuss a topic.
Writing Feedbackpandawii - Jul 31, 2012 / pandawii - Aug 1, 2012
|Benefit from response to emergency needs
Writing Feedbackgakimaa123 - Jul 26, 2012 / gakimaa123 - Jul 31, 2012
|'Multitasking skills' - Effects of new technology on society
2 - Hi :) I can help you with your grammar The enhancements of new technology make people life change...
Writing Feedbacktharncl - Jul 30, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Jul 31, 2012
|'the change of food preparing' - Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare
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|TOEFL Essay,"Success in life: Risk or Planning"
8 - You are very welcome Ana for your beautiful words. This gives me extra mileage to review more essays....
Writing Feedbackana_p - Jul 23, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 31, 2012
|'parents should let children do the things they want' - TOEFL ESSAY
Writing Feedbacksosiforever - Jul 30, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 31, 2012
|Essay: "describe nightfall as you reach camp in the middle of a jungle".
Writing FeedbackTanvi116 - Jul 30, 2012 / Tanvi116 - Jul 31, 2012
|IELTS-overpopulation, governments should prison families who have more than one child
Writing FeedbackLutcifier - Jul 28, 2012 / iamrabin - Jul 31, 2012
|Essay on "Women will always make better parents than men"
Writing Feedbackkoreagunba - Jul 29, 2012 / Lutcifier - Jul 31, 2012
|IELTS - Univeristies knowledge and skill essay.
3 - University is the last step and the highest level of education... On the one hand... People believed that...
Writing Feedbackseunggi8 - Jul 29, 2012 / Lutcifier - Jul 31, 2012
|'Do not rely on government to offer tuition' - GRE writing
5 - Some more suggestion: # While writing essay you disclose your opinion or general view in the first paragraph of...
Writing Feedbackgcgcmary - Jul 28, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 30, 2012
|IELTS- 'qualifications, not sexes' - the number of female and male pupils
2 - these educational places playsplay an important role in our community On the other hand, some people, speciallyespecially university...
Writing Feedbacksamenmohammad - Jul 28, 2012 / ricaud - Jul 29, 2012
|IELTS task 2 : Olympic Games not playing a role in 21st century?
Writing FeedbackIceecreami - Jul 26, 2012 / Iceecreami - Jul 29, 2012
|IELTS - Should parent teach children or schools?
Writing Feedbacksamenmohammad - Jul 28, 2012 / samenmohammad - Jul 29, 2012
|TOEFL Essay,"It is important to know about current events.."
4 - You have written a good essay. Use of transitional word correctly. In addition, competition has increased a lot...
Writing Feedbackana_p - Jul 26, 2012 / viviana15077 - Jul 29, 2012
|Gre Issue - the visibility of the police force
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|IELTS essay -- individuals contribute to environment problems
2 - we see little effort of individuals help to combat this serious problem. The increasing number of...
Writing Feedbackbingle2012 - Jul 28, 2012 / woyunsi3000 - Jul 28, 2012
|'Spending money on hamburgers' - IELTS-Task1 Expenditure On Fast Food
Writing Feedbackjoellasun - Jul 27, 2012 / April April - Jul 28, 2012
|essay "to study history and literature rather than to study science and math"
3 - Sorry, I meant the humanities, human studies)) but I would appreciate if you mark at least a couple...
Writing Feedbackveragof - Jul 27, 2012 / veragof - Jul 28, 2012
|[IELTS Writing]: Urban development, should old building and houses be taken down ?
Writing Feedbacks3170066 - Jul 26, 2012 / bingle2012 - Jul 28, 2012
|My essay: work at home with computers and modems instead of working in offices daily.
Writing Feedbackpandawii - Jul 20, 2012 / pandawii - Jul 27, 2012
|Security Concerns of Pakistan / Foreign Policy
2 - It sounds like you are saying Pakistan's leaders should allow themselves to be influenced by coercion from the threat...
Writing Feedbackafzi16113 - Jul 23, 2012 / EF_Kevin - Jul 27, 2012
|'careful with ads' - advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need
2 - DO NOT copy the topic. Open the introduction with a motivator. The introduction should include four parts: 1)...
Writing Feedbackveragof - Jul 27, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 27, 2012
|CBEST. Why did I choose the hardships of teaching as a profession
Writing Feedbackzita - Jul 25, 2012 / zita - Jul 26, 2012
|Toefl - 'a more convenient life in a city'?
5 - It's my pleasure helping you dear Wang. I learn that you practice for TOEFL and I can say confidently...
Writing FeedbackWang Jia - Jul 21, 2012 / dumi - Jul 26, 2012
|(adopting greener forms of energy in the US) - IELTS Graph
Writing Feedbackbingle2012 - Jul 25, 2012 / bingle2012 - Jul 26, 2012
|IELTS population growth (let the governments decide if you can have children or not)
Writing Feedbacksamenmohammad - Jul 25, 2012 / ana_p - Jul 26, 2012
|IELTS - ECONOMY OR ENVIRONMENT
3 - ...
Writing Feedbackkowkow - Jul 26, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 26, 2012
|TOEFL Essay,"A person should never make an important decision alone"
3 - Thanks Frozener. Yeah, my vocabulary is very weak and that is the reason of repetition. I am working...
Writing Feedbackana_p - Jul 24, 2012 / ana_p - Jul 26, 2012
|TOEFL Essay, "Can movies tell us about the country, where it is made...?"
3 - Ramtin, I never understood English language => ? : I mean accent which I have explained in second...
Writing Feedbackana_p - Jul 24, 2012 / ana_p - Jul 26, 2012
|[IELTS]: "throw-away" society and solutions
NEW - We have developed into a "throw-away" society and are filling the environment with rubbish that we cannot fully dispose...
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|Ielts - working abroad (the potential problems)
3 - joshuanderitu01 Thank you very much for your help joshuanderitu01. I really appreciate . But i am just wondering with...
Writing FeedbackAnthony89 - Jul 25, 2012 / Anthony89 - Jul 26, 2012
|why an increasing number of college students taking part-time jobs
NEW - Why college students take part-time jobs Living up to the expectation of society, catering for the desire of...
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|Parents and educational places as schools are crucial, as they can influence on children's behaviour
Writing FeedbackPaijin - Jul 25, 2012 / Paijin - Jul 25, 2012
|IBT - Studying abroad studying abroad is rewarding, pros and cons
2 - Hi, I like reasons you provided. Just try to work on below given points(just a suggestion): Third...
Writing Feedbackramtinms - Jul 25, 2012 / ana_p - Jul 25, 2012
|IELTS: Economies and the Environment
5 - Well I used past tense because the research was carried out years ago. But thanks for the suggestions. I'll...
Writing FeedbackApril April - Jul 23, 2012 / April April - Jul 25, 2012
|GRE ISSUE:leadership, cooperation or competition?
NEW - The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields...
Writing Feedbackmmany - Jul 24, 2012 / — -
|'leadership is vital to a country to stay united' - essay
2 - Hi Yang, I think you will need to reference your explanations such as: or According to Mr.... leadership is...
Writing FeedbackYangTeng - Jul 24, 2012 / gakimaa123 - Jul 24, 2012
|Questioning Authority: Agree or Disagree (GRE Issue Essay)
11 - wow great essay!!!! can you give me some suggestions on writing.. I have many ideas but I am poor...
Writing Feedbackdeepakbaniya - Jul 7, 2012 / supercool - Jul 24, 2012
|TOEFL Essay,"Earth is being harmed by human activities OR not..? "
2 - ( Ana, I suggest you to reorganize the idea you already presented. Use more vocabulary related to...
Writing Feedbackana_p - Jul 24, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 24, 2012
|'long-time measure' - should wealthy nations help poorer nations ?
Writing Feedbacksamenmohammad - Jul 24, 2012 / ana_p - Jul 24, 2012
|Rent a house vs buying a house essay
Writing Feedbackfrozener - Jul 24, 2012 / ana_p - Jul 24, 2012
|GRE-innovations such as video,computers, and the Internet offer schools improved...
NEW - Hi,everyone. I write some passages about the topic of "innovations such as video,computers, and the Internet offer schools...
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|'mobiles are useful and dangerous' - essay
Writing Feedbackabdushukur84 - Jul 23, 2012 / abdushukur84 - Jul 24, 2012
|Universities to take students in equal number of both genders?
3 - Yes, like Aprilapril said, it is necessary to disclose your "agreement " or "disagreement" in the first paragraph. Most...
Writing FeedbackAhmad sharifa - Jul 23, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 23, 2012
|The expert teachers to make students learn the material?
Writing Feedbacksourenss - Jul 23, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Jul 23, 2012
|Consuming: People are never satisfied with what they have; Agree or disagree
3 - Hi, Try to explain your ideas with examples. For example, starting of your third para, seems like unclear...
Writing Feedbackboraceber - Jul 22, 2012 / ana_p - Jul 23, 2012
|TOEFL: A teacher's ability to relate well with students is more important than ...
4 - Hi, I think, in such types of essays, you have to agree or disagree, then clarify your opinion...
Writing FeedbackMariRangel - Jul 18, 2012 / ana_p - Jul 23, 2012
|Should the jury be given pastfacts of the defendant or not?
Writing FeedbackLinh Nguyen - Jul 20, 2012 / Linh Nguyen - Jul 22, 2012
|[IELTS]: The appearance of a building is more important than its function.
4 - Well you can either choose one side (agree OR disagree) and support only that side with the body paragraphs,...
Writing Feedbackwelnorze - Jul 18, 2012 / April April - Jul 22, 2012
|IBT writing - the happiest era in our life is our childhood
Writing Feedbackramtinms - Jul 22, 2012 / ramtinms - Jul 22, 2012
|Society should challenge what people in authority claim to be true
2 - ...
Writing Feedbackalphatio - Jul 22, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 22, 2012
|'Effects of Caffeine' - need to make this essay twice as long!
4 - I think you can make it twice by adding some scientific statement, religious prohibit and a little bit more...
Writing Feedbackcsomesan - Jul 19, 2012 / alphatio - Jul 22, 2012
|The causes of living poverty and presidents of poor countries
5 - I think you must improve your conclusion part by using expressions like To sum up briefly ... The aforementioned...
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