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|"The function of university" ielts writing
6 - I think I just wrote a typical Chinese essay~most Chinese students will write with the same template and not...
Writing Feedbacktiffanyboa - Jun 28, 2012 / tiffanyboa - Jun 29, 2012
|Children should be allowed and guided to partake in free time activities
3 - You have good points to be discussed. I think your grammar and vocabulary are good as well. I suggest...
Writing Feedbackgag379 - Jun 28, 2012 / giovani - Jun 29, 2012
|Alternative forms of transport and international laws on controlling automobiles are necessary
4 - Thank you very much for your swift reply and careful correction. It's so helpful. As you mentioned, I have...
Writing FeedbackPasaAnkit - Jun 28, 2012 / PasaAnkit - Jun 28, 2012
|Hope is the buoy of life
Writing Feedbackkashifalvi - Jun 22, 2012 / EF_Susan - Jun 28, 2012
|Toefl: 'I can accumulate wealth' - purchase either a house or a business
3 - Prefer therefore or hence to so; that will make the essay more official. You can also use some great...
Writing Feedbackkrishnakant - Jun 21, 2012 / echo5016 - Jun 28, 2012
|SOCIETY essay; In China students have to take the classes at least 9 hours a day
NEW - Some people think that teachers at school are more responsible for children's intellectual and social development than parents. To...
Writing Feedbackzhangyebiaoba - Jun 28, 2012 / — -
|'good writer loves his/her characters' - AP English Essay
Writing Feedbackgulleyluke - Jun 27, 2012 / gulleyluke - Jun 28, 2012
|IELTS-travel, increase tension...
2 - learn different nations' [/i]traditions and cultures while others believe that it provides rising tension among people from different races[i]....
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Jun 28, 2012 / mppaniz - Jun 28, 2012
|Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they going.
NEW - Please check my essay. I'm so nervous now and i don't know how many mistakes are there. Thank you...
Writing FeedbackMadeka - Jun 28, 2012 / — -
|IELTS TASK 2: People gaining more weight_problem and solutions
2 - Nowadays it is undeniable that the average weight of people is increasing, leading to the decrease in their health...
Writing FeedbackApril April - Jun 28, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jun 28, 2012
|'selecting a city as my favorite place' - TOEFL:Where to Visit
2 - Hi! I just edited some of your errors. Others are more courageous andtowards undertaking the risk of traveling...
Writing Feedbackmamad60 - Jun 28, 2012 / niesaysi - Jun 28, 2012
|TOEFL (Business should hire employees for their entire lives)
Writing Feedbackvickey - Jun 13, 2012 / Mark Jose - Jun 28, 2012
|IELTS2 - 'demanding sports and special diets and physical fitness'
Writing Feedbackdadudi - Jun 27, 2012 / zhangyebiaoba - Jun 28, 2012
|Writing an Essay on Unfairness - How it can shape our perspective on life
3 - Rigid but wordy.. Try to be concise as You've succeded in electrifying the idea! Please comment on...
Writing Feedbackaliciadylewski - Jun 27, 2012 / Opara - Jun 28, 2012
|IELTS TASK 2: PUBLIC TRANSPORT SHOULD BE FREE OF CHARGE
2 - This section has several issues; First, it sounds like you are going out of topic because you...
Writing Feedbackcryingshell - Jun 27, 2012 / dumi - Jun 28, 2012
|My life changed the morning I witnessed my friend have a diabetic seizure.
5 - The opening line is quite good. You're a good writer already! bang up job! When you finish writing it,...
Writing Feedbacknivanova889 - Jun 27, 2012 / Vineesha - Jun 27, 2012
|IELTS- children development and modern games
2 - It is undeniablewidely accepted that nowadaysmodern children's- games are totally different withthan the traditional games that kids entertained with....
Writing Feedbackmppaniz - Jun 27, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jun 27, 2012
|IELTS-Overpopulation - What problems can it cause and what are the possible solutions
NEW - thanks everybody. sorry, let me know band score by the way. Overpopulation. What problems does overpopulation cause? Suggest...
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Jun 27, 2012 / — -
|IELTS- Discussion & Opinion about an essay on how the new sport objects impacting people's health.
5 - hi wellwell! it is really good job, keep it. you have enough source of academic words and it is...
Writing Feedbackwellwell - Jun 17, 2012 / Slim shady - Jun 27, 2012
|Cities become unpleasent places....
NEW - It is an IELTS essay. I need more comments. thank you in advance!!! Many cities have become less...
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Jun 27, 2012 / — -
|IELTS ESSAY2: helping of wealthy countries to poor ones
4 - i completely concur with deepakbaniya. the first paragraph of the body part need to be rewritten....
Writing Feedbackhadi1981 - Jun 27, 2012 / Slim shady - Jun 27, 2012
|Topic: whether convenience food will replace traditional food
4 - It is believed that convenience food will become more popular and eventually replace the traditional food and the conventional...
Writing Feedbackhallucinate - Jun 27, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jun 27, 2012
|Persuasive essay - Why you should exercise
4 - More than (not that) 1.6 billion... " it's proven that exercising can improve self-esteem and confidence" THIS IS...
Writing Feedbackradair1014222 - Jun 26, 2012 / Opara - Jun 27, 2012
|TOEFL Essay,"Teachers should take courses or training to upgrade"
4 - and teachers are the most important person(u should use a plural word here) ...after parents to makeshape ...
Writing Feedbackana_p - Jun 26, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jun 26, 2012
|the age of the competition - IELTS - technologies and the demand for services change
6 - It has become a new /trend/ (requirement ) to learn more than one skill for (successful) career. In this...
Writing Feedbackdnile2012 - Jun 25, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jun 26, 2012
|Student can be severely influenced from school by unsuitable schedules and stresses
5 - @land1111: Thanks for your comments. What do you mean by the first sentence: "but your opinion does not off...
Writing FeedbackPhat Tran Van - Jun 25, 2012 / Phat Tran Van - Jun 26, 2012
|IELTS: London, Tokyo, New York, Madrid, Frankfurt - Average house prices in 5 cities.
Writing Feedbackmppaniz - Jun 26, 2012 / dumi - Jun 26, 2012
|Flying Piper Warrior ii in Malaysia
NEW - I am actually searching for " Raisin" who wrote a very touching essay back in 2008 with regards to...
Writing Feedbackcwchawt2000 - Jun 26, 2012 / — -
|'applying to several different schools is the better choice' -essay on college choice
2 - You follow the expected structure of TOEFL essays. Your introdutory para is great in which you give a brief...
Writing FeedbackShali95 - Jun 25, 2012 / dumi - Jun 25, 2012
|TOEFL Ess; development of housing or industry is also profitable but not healthy
4 - Thank you so much Duminda..:) That was very useful... I will try to insert that sentences and rewrite...
Writing Feedbackana_p - Jun 22, 2012 / ana_p - Jun 25, 2012
|Is it right to exclude females and males from certain professions because of gender?
2 - Good argument, but the essay is missing clarity and flow. I have fixed some of the grammatical errors, but...
Writing Feedbackmik2202 - Jun 25, 2012 / jaybird88 - Jun 25, 2012
|Fixed punishment for each type of crime? DISCUSS
NEW - Fix punishments Fix punishment for criminal behaviours is a very controversial debate, which has two sides. One group...
Writing Feedbackmppaniz - Jun 25, 2012 / — -
|Teenagers should work without a salary to help the local community?
4 - Good topic and thought process. Some schools in the Northern US require teens to provide 75 hours of community...
Writing FeedbackAlicesh - Jun 23, 2012 / Monkey2012 - Jun 24, 2012
|PROSTITUTION: WHAT CAN BRING IF IT IS BEING LEGALIZED?
5 - "So why dares to promote prostitution?" Are you trying to say "who" dares to promote prostitution ?...
Writing Feedbackniesaysi - Jun 22, 2012 / Monkey2012 - Jun 24, 2012
|'women are special weak group' - IELTS - EQUAL NUMBERS OF MALE AND FEMALE STUDENTS
NEW - Thank you for you help! UNIVERSITY SHOULD ACCEPT EQUAL NUMBERS OF MALE AND FEMALE STUDENTS IN EVERY SUBJECT....
Writing Feedbackland1111 - Jun 24, 2012 / — -
|New Perspective On Environmental Solution.
2 - Scientists have been proposing numerous possible solutions in arresting growing environmental problems ,such as global warming, air pollution, water...
Writing Feedbackdottedbow - Jun 24, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jun 24, 2012
|'There are convincing factors for not wasting money on Space Exploration' - IELTS
2 - .... .Beside above reason the unknown goals of space exploration projects is another challenge. it is highly acceptable that...
Writing FeedbackAlicesh - Jun 24, 2012 / dottedbow - Jun 24, 2012
|'I firmly object to it' - IELTS - Capital punishment is necessary or not ?
Writing Feedbacksnowqueen93 - Jun 22, 2012 / snowqueen93 - Jun 24, 2012
|'met hundreds of people' - need help on conclusion and more detail
2 - However, only a special few have had the ability tocould make an impact that will last a lifetimeon...
Writing Feedbackjalilt - Jun 23, 2012 / dumi - Jun 24, 2012
|IELTS: Indoor or outdoor teaching.. to get valuable results
3 - If you take off the part "for everyone" then this sentence reads better. The reason is when you...
Writing Feedbackhadi1981 - Jun 24, 2012 / dumi - Jun 24, 2012
|IELST : Letter : Complaint letter regarding work problems
3 - because it not only given--> gives it also provide--> provides I found difficult--> I found it difficult was missed.-->...
Writing Feedbackchwong - Jun 24, 2012 / kissingyou0912 - Jun 24, 2012
|THE IMPORTANCE OF EDUCATION (beneficial for society on the whole)
4 - Thanks emily and dumi. perhaps I will add another paragraph about the effects of children who are not educated...
Writing Feedbackkissingyou0912 - Jun 23, 2012 / kissingyou0912 - Jun 24, 2012
|The Good, the Bad and the Ugly Truth of Antibiotics
2 - Overall I like the topic you chose and how you prevented it. Your use of citations from other references...
Writing Feedbackkat110 - Jun 23, 2012 / sco2185312 - Jun 24, 2012
|'characteristics of societies while studying in big cities' - GRE issue essay
5 - Hi Duminda, Thank you so much for correcting my essay. I really appreciate the time and effort. :)...
Writing Feedbackviviana15077 - Jun 15, 2012 / viviana15077 - Jun 24, 2012
|'Strokes' - Mental Illness Bipolar Disorder
2 - While working with individuals diagnosed with bipolar disorder, I've learned... Complete and proper diagnoses of mental illnesses, symptoms...
Writing FeedbackLAK2061065 - Jun 23, 2012 / EF_Susan - Jun 23, 2012
|Spend money or Save money? I support saving for future
3 - We have to save money ,that helps for our children education in future. Maybe change this last line?...
Writing Feedbackjanardhan005 - Jun 13, 2012 / emily_browneyes - Jun 23, 2012
|IELST : spent money on space exploration is a complete waste of time
2 - which needs to spend---------- activity needs, activities need yet its discoveries may not necessarily bring in...
Writing Feedbackchwong - Jun 23, 2012 / dumi - Jun 23, 2012
|IELTS - 'choosing own career by young people'
3 - Like (someone says) --> I think it is As, not like Vividly --> vivid believed --> believe the people...
Writing Feedbackzhangyebiaoba - Jun 19, 2012 / kissingyou0912 - Jun 23, 2012
|Essay on iImportance of electricity in people's daily routine
Writing Feedbackkissingyou0912 - Jun 21, 2012 / kissingyou0912 - Jun 22, 2012
|'UK student income during ten-year period' - IELTS table
Writing Feedbackchinhbk - Jun 21, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jun 22, 2012
|TOEFL Essay: Popularity of movies in all over the world.
4 - Thanks both of you Susan and Colin. Susan: Thanks especially for this particular sentence "movies are one...
Writing Feedbackana_p - Jun 21, 2012 / ana_p - Jun 22, 2012
|Should drug companies make their drugs more available for third world countries?
2 - I go through your last two paragraphs. I feel that content is less its better if you can elaborate...
Writing Feedbackmae - Jun 21, 2012 / krishnakant - Jun 22, 2012
|Spanking kids isn't all good
3 - Spanking children has been a practice for many centuries. Infact,it is hard to imagine a time when children were...
Writing Feedbacksrtheesa - Jun 20, 2012 / EF_Susan - Jun 21, 2012
|IELTS - In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make?
3 - Thanks for your help!!!! As this essay may be asseseed in the real IELTS test, I would appreciate...
Writing Feedbackcolin - Jun 21, 2012 / colin - Jun 21, 2012
|'equally in every subject' - univerities to accept equal numbers of males and females
3 - "Education is the right of every student". Though this is a known fact, still the girls are not allowed...
Writing Feedbackhima bindu - Jun 20, 2012 / EF_Susan - Jun 21, 2012
|IELTS: Primary, secondary and further education - Free high education?
NEW - Hi all, I am trying my best to improve my writing everyday. Thanks in advanced for everyone's help ...
Writing Feedbackhadi1981 - Jun 21, 2012 / — -
|IELTS - 'Parents should shoulder responsibility of teaching their own children'
Writing Feedbackcolin - Jun 21, 2012 / colin - Jun 21, 2012
|'the fundamental activities for the patriory' International sporting, easing tensions
2 - Hi chwong. You should pay attention about Ielts words limit, otherwise u will loose serious markes. Good...
Writing Feedbackchwong - Jun 21, 2012 / hadi1981 - Jun 21, 2012
|IELTS: A complaining letter to the bank ('ordered a new cheque book')
Writing Feedbackhadi1981 - Jun 21, 2012 / hadi1981 - Jun 21, 2012
|More and more young people are turning to drugs. reasons and solutions
Writing Feedbackkissingyou0912 - Jun 16, 2012 / kissingyou0912 - Jun 21, 2012
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