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|( IELTS essay) computer games good or bad for children?
8 - Hai... Dumi and pahan.. As usual thanks for your valuable corrections.. Hai dev and Tutu... Thanks for your...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 19, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 21, 2013
|Cleaning is the most important job in my city
8 - Thank you....
Writing FeedbackChaz - Jan 10, 2013 / Chaz - Jan 21, 2013
|TOEFL - dowsing is a quite efficient way of spotting the location of underground water
4 - Yeah, it sounds better, but it depends if you include that first sentence I quoted. If you do include...
Writing FeedbackShantalya - Jan 18, 2013 / love_mashimaro2 - Jan 20, 2013
|Should married women give up their jobs to look after their children ?
3 - This sentence has many issues; grammar, clarity of your idea, inappropriate words "range of people" is not appropriate...
Writing Feedbackvivu_hoian - Jan 20, 2013 / dumi - Jan 20, 2013
|'Plan is required' - Students are encouraged to work or travel before university
8 - Hai... It will help them not only can...===>it not only help them to understand the value of money...
Writing Feedbacksalmav - Jan 18, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 20, 2013
|Old and good friends are a treasure, we should spend our time with them rather than new ones
Writing Feedbacknastaranfarajza - Jan 17, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 20, 2013
|IELTS- Families shouldn't pay taxes if not sending children to government schools
Writing FeedbackAtalla - Jan 19, 2013 / Atalla - Jan 20, 2013
|IELTS -children play computer games than traditional games; good or a bad way?
2 - ... this is your opening sentence. So I feel it needs some improvement in its presentation; Technology revolutionized...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 20, 2013 / dumi - Jan 20, 2013
|IELTS-Many shops work for 24 hours a day 7 days a week; Compare customer, shop keeper
4 - Hai Dev.. In each view try to add disadvantages too.. :When...Ř›..:When my cousin was suffered with asthmatic...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 19, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 20, 2013
|IELTS (TASK 1) CHARTS of diversity and change
Writing FeedbackRasheed101 - Jan 19, 2013 / dumi - Jan 20, 2013
|( IELTS essay) television has a great impact on our lives..?
6 - Hai .... Dumi, Pahan, Dev and Cuong... Hai dumi... Thanks for your correction.. Hai Pahan.. Thanks for...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 18, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 19, 2013
|The Rez Sisters Essay- How men treated the women and their role
Writing Feedbackkabamawekesa - Jan 16, 2013 / dumi - Jan 19, 2013
|IELTS ESSAY: prison could prevent them from becoming criminals
4 - You need to work on your grammar and presentation. You have good poiwhich are not presented nicely. ...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 18, 2013 / Pahan - Jan 19, 2013
|(IELTS essay) inborn talents vs trained talents.
7 - On the contrary, people can acquire some talents through training. sports persons/ legends/ hard work However,...
Writing Feedbackash5005 - Jan 19, 2013 / dumi - Jan 19, 2013
|IELTS- Television makes the biggest impact on our daily life.
5 - Television is a major cause for students to be distracted from their studies. It also has a major...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 19, 2013 / Pahan - Jan 19, 2013
|Plaintiff sues defendant;Statement of Facts: Law
Writing Feedbackpacers7ind - Jan 18, 2013 / Lan archue - Jan 19, 2013
|IELTS;USAGE OF COMPUTERS in education would threaten teachers role in future
3 - nice essay..i liked it.. u follow good essay format and perfect use of connective words. good luck...
Writing FeedbackMehdi_1982 - Jan 19, 2013 / ash5005 - Jan 19, 2013
|Television is one cause of communication lack between friends and family, it kills free time
Writing FeedbackLimitsup79 - Jan 19, 2013 / Limitsup79 - Jan 19, 2013
|IELTS 1 - (EXPENSES in a School in UK in 1981,1991 & 2001) - Pie Chart
3 - This is good advice from Pahan. Yes, you need to introduce the graphical representation to the reader first;...
Writing Feedbackmcuong01 - Jan 19, 2013 / dumi - Jan 19, 2013
|Some welcome change while others are not. Which way is better?
Writing Feedbackthanh_bin90 - Jan 18, 2013 / thanh_bin90 - Jan 19, 2013
|IELTS writings - Reasons for Obesity and solutions to it
10 - I completely agree with salmav. To get high marks, you are required to use as much complicated as possible,...
Writing FeedbackIricBear - Jan 17, 2013 / mcuong01 - Jan 19, 2013
|Population aged 65 over in 3 different countries(1940-2040);IELTS1-Graphs
2 - Well, when you explain about the graph features you can use present tense. For example; The graph illustrates/...
Writing Feedbackmcuong01 - Jan 18, 2013 / dumi - Jan 19, 2013
|Marriage Partners: similar or not?
Writing Feedbackdumi - Oct 4, 2010 / dumi - Jan 18, 2013
|IELTS-should universities accept equal number of both genders ?
Writing Feedbackvietukr - Jan 18, 2013 / devabe2005 - Jan 18, 2013
|IELTS 2 - teach children at home or at schools
Writing Feedbackmcuong01 - Jan 18, 2013 / salmav - Jan 18, 2013
|INTERNET has been bringing us many benefit compared to negative affects
3 - "that it is possible to communicate easily by sitting in front of computer with another person" -> that it...
Writing FeedbackSardor - Jan 18, 2013 / salmav - Jan 18, 2013
|IELTS: university students live their families while others live away from home
3 - "Student who stay at home have full support from their family and relatives." -> students who stay ... "Students...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 18, 2013 / salmav - Jan 18, 2013
|Less stress, more harmony; is it better to live in small towns or big cities?
6 - Hi abcdefgh :D Well, I think you better open your own thread under this topic to have responses...
Writing Feedbackriyak - Jan 10, 2013 / dumi - Jan 18, 2013
|(IELTS) factors affecting job satisfaction in adulthood
Writing Feedbackash5005 - Jan 18, 2013 / dumi - Jan 18, 2013
|'Uniting together' -In many cities, crime is increasing why do u think that happening
Writing Feedbackthanh_bin90 - Jan 3, 2013 / thanh_bin90 - Jan 18, 2013
|Contrast advantages and disadvantages of three different media; books, radio and TV
3 - Good job. Why do not you try "the pros and cons" instead of "the advantages and disadvantages"? It sounds...
Writing Feedbackzesea - Jan 17, 2013 / mcuong01 - Jan 18, 2013
|( IELTS essay) Stay in hostel or at home during university studies?
4 - Hai Dumi... Thanks for the wonderful correction.. yes, it is an error in expression. I mean what you...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 17, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 18, 2013
|IELTS 2: Shopping as a hobby. Why? Good or Bad!
4 - You could say, "For example many dresses are shown" and you could add "which are" between excessively and...
Writing Feedbacksanaqvi - Jan 17, 2013 / jasmine4ever - Jan 17, 2013
|IELTS shopping is replaced by other leisure activities ,it is positive or negative
4 - In today's globalized world , shopping is has been popped up as a regular activity dramatically and it is...
Writing Feedbackalphy - Jan 17, 2013 / dumi - Jan 17, 2013
|Using cell phone while driving should be banned
6 - dumi Thank you so much for responding. However, in the first sentence I wanted to use something about...
Writing Feedbackfarzan23 - Jan 6, 2013 / farzan23 - Jan 17, 2013
|Media does not only reflect culture and social life
Writing Feedbackankurhimanshu - Jan 15, 2013 / ankurhimanshu - Jan 17, 2013
|Young people have little leisure time and work hard with their studies_IELTS task 2
3 - thanks for all your helpful comments, I will re-write my essay. Maybe, this time I have not clear ideas...
Writing Feedbacksalmav - Jan 16, 2013 / salmav - Jan 17, 2013
|( IELTS essay) prevention of crimes makes no difference
4 - Hai.... Dumi, Ahmad and Pahan... A big thanks to Ahmad... It was really great... : if my introduction is...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 17, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 17, 2013
|(IELTS ESSAY) success in life based on hardwork or luck?
2 - Avoid more complicated sentence structures. They make the reader tired. You should have nice key words, but sentence...
Writing Feedbackash5005 - Jan 17, 2013 / dumi - Jan 17, 2013
|Friendship issue: Money is not always harmful
Writing FeedbackJangGemini - Jan 16, 2013 / JangGemini - Jan 17, 2013
|IELTS T-2: Write Pros and Cons of crime prevention in society, give your opinion
Writing Feedbacksanaqvi - Jan 16, 2013 / dumi - Jan 17, 2013
|Studying quantum physics
3 - Don't start the sentence using "Chief reason..." because it does not sound good. Try something like, The...
Writing FeedbackOlivia18 - Jan 17, 2013 / Pahan - Jan 17, 2013
|( IELTS essay) Ignoring national celebrations and enjoying themselves?
10 - Hai Pahan... Thanks for correcting the opening para sentance... Thanks for all for their valuable comments... ...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 14, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 17, 2013
|ESSAY: Is there a good reason to be impolite (rude) to another person?
8 - They are the most important people in your life, therefore you must not use rudeness with them and...
Writing Feedbackheadshot0313 - Dec 31, 2012 / Pahan - Jan 16, 2013
|The character I would add to "Of Mice & Men" would be Auburn
Writing Feedbackbrighteyes07191 - Jan 11, 2013 / hannahsarch - Jan 16, 2013
|Parents expect children to spend long time studying in and after school -IELTS 2013.1
Writing FeedbackCallie0202 - Jan 15, 2013 / Callie0202 - Jan 16, 2013
|IELTS; Shopping is an unavoidable worrying necessity for many people
7 - Hai dumi and Nick... Nick... Thanks for the correct spellling...). Hai Dumi... Your corrections are much...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 15, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 16, 2013
|Men & women in future education in Britain (IELTS -Graph)
4 - Hey noorkhan, in task 1, you do not need to summarize so you may concentrate on body paragraph to...
Writing Feedbacknoorkhan - Jan 14, 2013 / ntdang92 - Jan 16, 2013
|Eating is a very important part of people's lifestyles
2 - You already said this in the opening sentence. Time is a significant component that promotes this trend. ...
Writing FeedbackDidier Toure - Jan 16, 2013 / dumi - Jan 16, 2013
|What problems can be caused by increase of average life expectancy? IELTS TASK 2
Writing Feedbackfollowmydream - Jan 16, 2013 / followmydream - Jan 16, 2013
|Task 1 - Process of manufacturing and distributing Bricks
2 - It's nice and easily understood, but the only note is making sure to try to make all the paragraph...
Writing Feedbackmcuong01 - Jan 14, 2013 / shenoooo - Jan 16, 2013
|Improved visibility of police force; GRE argument essay
3 - That's a great help, thanks a lot for your help, the problem in the second note, that I developed...
Writing Feedbackshenoooo - Jan 15, 2013 / shenoooo - Jan 16, 2013
|Forget, Repress & Relinquish THE PAST to Move up the ladder of Success & Achievement
Writing FeedbackPhoebe Africa - Jan 16, 2013 / Phoebe Africa - Jan 16, 2013
|People want to be attractive so that everyone will have to look on their costumes and accessories
3 - .... "visiting retail" is not a proper phrase. People have various reasons for choosing shopping as a favored...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 15, 2013 / dumi - Jan 16, 2013
|TOEFL ESSAY: Economic Growth or Environmental Concerns ?
3 - It's better if you say this in present tense; It is undeniable that economic development brings positive changes...
Writing Feedbackptlove4ever - Jan 13, 2013 / dumi - Jan 16, 2013
|Ielts:necessity of extra benefits for employees
5 - Hi sweetdreamzz Thanks a lot for your encouraging comment. I'll do practise as you said. Hi dear dumi...
Writing Feedbackmonaph - Jan 14, 2013 / monaph - Jan 16, 2013
|Importance of advertisement in our modern society
Writing FeedbackMabossani - Jan 14, 2013 / dumi - Jan 15, 2013
|Living with friends or alone Vs living with families; IELTS
Writing Feedbackmodna415 - Jan 15, 2013 / modna415 - Jan 15, 2013
|GRE Analytical: Relationships can only develop after a CONFLICT
3 - Conclusion paragraph: I believe that we can develop our relationship with others with or without any conflict. It...
Writing Feedbackffsfdasfa - Dec 30, 2012 / shenoooo - Jan 15, 2013
|Decline in educational standards, causes and solutions??
4 - viable solutions for this issue. This is originated from the fact that education industry has become...
Writing Feedbackhungvud - Jan 15, 2013 / dumi - Jan 15, 2013
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