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|"Prevention is better than cure," functions of governments
4 - Yes... you need to have a conclusion. Sum up everything you said above and re-instate your opinion. :)...
Writing Feedbackpipi2082 - Jun 16, 2012 / dumi - Jun 16, 2012
|GRE argument "Of the two leading real estate firms in our town- ...
3 - Thank you for your advice. Yes, I should come to for each paragraph a conclusion how the assumption will...
Writing Feedbackchenokay - May 24, 2012 / chenokay - Jun 16, 2012
|Those who make the room clean and dirty are more successful in the future.
3 - Hi, just some suggestions about the introduction: For the time being, an increasingAs time passes the number of...
Writing FeedbackPrisunny - Jun 16, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jun 16, 2012
|IELTS: Stop smoking in public places, life is a circle between before and after
3 - the use of earth is not appropriate. It would be better to point more specific things such as...
Writing Feedbackhadi1981 - Jun 15, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jun 16, 2012
|pluralism in the society
Writing Feedbackplumedor - Jun 15, 2012 / dumi - Jun 15, 2012
|IELTS- 'reducing the amount of rubbish produced'
Writing FeedbackIslam - Jun 15, 2012 / Islam - Jun 15, 2012
|'two hours school working at home' - My ILET is tmw
2 - Hi, First of all it is the "IELTS" test, not "ILETS". Unfortunately, this essay cannot get the score...
Writing FeedbackIslam - Jun 15, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jun 15, 2012
|IELTS Benefits of unpaid work of teenagers
4 - Hi Mriytunjay, it would be better to start a new thread to people can edit your essay more easily....
Writing Feedbackhadi1981 - Jun 14, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jun 15, 2012
|Ielts - 'equal ability to compete in the society (males/females students'
Writing Feedbackkarenkk - Jun 14, 2012 / karenkk - Jun 15, 2012
|'nation's social development' - GRE Issue Task-- characteristics of a society
3 - Hi, To tell the truth, I just read the introduction because the essay was long :). Please accept my...
Writing Feedbackcalvin1993 - Jun 15, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jun 15, 2012
|'education, production and entertainment' - ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF COMPUTERS
Writing Feedbackkissingyou0912 - Jun 12, 2012 / kissingyou0912 - Jun 15, 2012
|Contribution of artists and scientists are both important to society.
Writing Feedbackhungvud - Jun 13, 2012 / hungvud - Jun 15, 2012
|Isolation of a country from their neighbors abroad can only cause issues in the long run
4 - I would suggest starting with an opening statement that is more "attention grabbing" and clarifying your first paragraph all...
Writing Feedbackinform - Jun 10, 2012 / EF_Susan - Jun 14, 2012
|Culture shock - preventing people from accommodating to a new life?
NEW - This is the assignment form Understanding international communication class.My teacher ask us to choose a topic from chap 5:Culture...
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|'Inoculations against cow flu' - essay
4 - Hi Susan & Dumi First, thank you for your suggestions, I really appreciate your time reading and correcting...
Writing FeedbackMuath - Jun 13, 2012 / Muath - Jun 13, 2012
|'parents should be aware of the type of children's environment' - ILET
7 - Thank you all very much, I will take all your note in writing another essay better Thanks very...
Writing FeedbackIslam - Jun 12, 2012 / Islam - Jun 13, 2012
|'going to live once' - IELTS: worst diet
6 - The points that you have mentioned on your essay is perfect but the way that you have presented is...
Writing Feedbackhadi1981 - Jun 13, 2012 / Archu - Jun 13, 2012
|Essay on Group Therapy vs. Individual Therapy
3 - I think you should improve the introduction. An introduction reveals that what points are going to argue in an...
Writing Feedbacklnddancer1 - Jun 12, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jun 13, 2012
|IELTS task .Expaining why you want to take IELTS exam
Writing Feedbackgiahuy17496 - Jun 9, 2012 / hadi1981 - Jun 13, 2012
|When people depend too much on their government, it leads to dire consequences
Writing FeedbackDiana Safiy - Jun 10, 2012 / Diana Safiy - Jun 13, 2012
|'a great political leader must have wits and tact' - Gre issue essay
Writing Feedbackviviana15077 - Jun 9, 2012 / viviana15077 - Jun 13, 2012
|TOEFL (Small University of Big University)
NEW - Q: Some students prefer to attend a small university. Others prefer to attend a big university. Discuss the advantages...
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|TOEFL Essay: "Reasons to work other than earning money"
Writing Feedbackana_p - Jun 7, 2012 / ana_p - Jun 12, 2012
|toefl essay: friends for fun or for giving help
Writing Feedbackskyss109 - Jun 12, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jun 12, 2012
|'one year break can be long for young people' - encouraged to work or travel
Writing Feedbacksheyh - May 13, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jun 12, 2012
|'to travel or work before starting their university study' - ILETS
Writing FeedbackIslam - Jun 12, 2012 / Islam - Jun 12, 2012
|'physical qualifications that a female cannot do' - ILET
2 - In theWith regard ofto the number of females toand males accepted in universities, I am within the opinion...
Writing FeedbackIslam - Jun 12, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jun 12, 2012
|movies and television positive and negative effects; 'distracts young people'
3 - thank you so much for correcting my essay. it was hard for me to find the errors.. its really...
Writing Feedbackskyss109 - Jun 12, 2012 / skyss109 - Jun 12, 2012
|IELTS ESSAY1 A letter to the college accommodation service
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|IELTS TASK 2 Space travel and our routine life
2 - AroundIn the 16th century, human acrossman conquered the sea andfindfoundthe new land successful. Plenty of land and naturenatural...
Writing Feedbackland1111 - Jun 11, 2012 / dumi - Jun 12, 2012
|TOEFL Essay - 'disagree with building the new military base here'
2 - In conclusion, military base camps givebring a lot of disadvantages to the people. The last reason I disagree...
Writing Feedbackvickey - Jun 11, 2012 / dumi - Jun 12, 2012
|Narrative writing on "we all had different ideas about the parcel"
Writing Feedbackaleen - Jun 10, 2012 / aleen - Jun 12, 2012
|Does advertising make people be the same?
3 - critisms = criticisms sucessful = successful adolesents = adolescents (and no comma after) " her peers...
Writing Feedbacksophie789 - Jun 11, 2012 / lovekayliex - Jun 12, 2012
|Interview paper with an entreprenuer, Cynthia Odo
2 - ...Twelve years ago, she started her business, while leaving LIVING in New Jersey. Her decision to move forward was...
Writing Feedbacknmckenziedesign - Jun 3, 2012 / EF_Susan - Jun 11, 2012
|ROSARY, MY BEST FRIEND
2 - Ever since I met my good friend Rosary, ---You don't need a comma here.---several years ago, she has been...
Writing FeedbackAdragotto - Jun 11, 2012 / EF_Susan - Jun 11, 2012
|A college or university should be open for every student or only for good ones?
Writing Feedbackhungvud - Jun 11, 2012 / dumi - Jun 11, 2012
|'change is a great investment for everyone' - GRE essay
4 - this change has bettered students' lives off This type of change will let retirees see things in different...
Writing Feedbackviviana15077 - Jun 10, 2012 / hungvud - Jun 11, 2012
|Encourage to take private health care insurance or maintain free health care systems?
4 - okkkkkkk.... now I get your point :) especially during the period that the price of health care services...
Writing Feedbackhungvud - Jun 10, 2012 / dumi - Jun 11, 2012
|Should Students (not administrators) control their own education?
3 - Hi Sudhir, Even though it is important that students should be given full control in planning their education,...
Writing Feedbackinform - Jun 10, 2012 / dumi - Jun 10, 2012
|TEACHERS SHOULD NOT DISTURB THEIR STUDENTS QUESTIONING
Writing Feedbackinform - Jun 8, 2012 / dumi - Jun 10, 2012
|IELTS Taks 2 - People resist to changes in their lives/ Problems & Solutions
Writing FeedbackIELTSPT - Jun 10, 2012 / lovekayliex - Jun 10, 2012
|'Scientists renew people daily life' - IELTS
Writing Feedbackland1111 - Jun 8, 2012 / land1111 - Jun 10, 2012
|IELTS 2-- old buildings should be knocked down?
Writing Feedbackland1111 - Jun 7, 2012 / land1111 - Jun 10, 2012
|'The house' - IELTS, A letter to ask your friend for help.
Writing Feedbackhadi1981 - Jun 10, 2012 / nina2 - Jun 10, 2012
|Children with different levels of intelligence should be taught separately???
11 - dont criticize your paper because of the length because trust me, i did that once and i submitted an...
Writing Feedbackhungvud - Jun 8, 2012 / nina2 - Jun 10, 2012
|Classification Paper on Reality TV
2 - Some more reasons on popularity of the reality show :- Reality Show is a change from the usual...
Writing Feedbackdberryhill - Jun 9, 2012 / inform - Jun 10, 2012
|AIR POLLUTION AND HOW TO REDUCE IT
3 - aponiiik Oh. Thank you very much. I am so grateful to you for having corrected my essay.It is really...
Writing Feedbackkissingyou0912 - Jun 9, 2012 / kissingyou0912 - Jun 9, 2012
|'Modern culture understanding'/ GRE AWA
Writing Feedbacksicong - Jun 3, 2012 / sicong - Jun 9, 2012
|Essay about - Is spending a lot on parties is worthwhile or not?
2 - From a purely social point of view, the main purpose of inviting relatives and friends to a party is...
Writing Feedbackfk6268 - Jun 5, 2012 / EF_Susan - Jun 9, 2012
|'Rumblefish'(Rob and Renee ) - Summary
2 - After five years of marriage, Rob lost his wife Renee to a pulmonary embolism, a blockage of the main...
Writing Feedbacklovekayliex - Jun 9, 2012 / EF_Susan - Jun 9, 2012
|TOEFL:both books recording real things and imaginative things is worth reading.
2 - But if we read books that record fabricated facts like what had been wrotewritten in the autographautobiography of Hitler,...
Writing Feedbackhywb2 - May 13, 2012 / dumi - Jun 9, 2012
|Should violent films that have adverse effects be controlled?
Writing Feedbacksophie789 - Jun 9, 2012 / greencactus - Jun 9, 2012
|'The Kitchen' - IELTS, Neighbours complain
2 - You stated this before explaining the reason of the noise. I think you should mention this after the...
Writing Feedbackhadi1981 - Jun 9, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jun 9, 2012
|IELTS: 'more and more international' - world is becoming a global village
3 - If you record your essay then play it back after you have done the Reading practice you will find...
Writing Feedbackwillywonka - Jun 8, 2012 / ernhen - Jun 9, 2012
|'reports on vicious crime attract a lot of viewers' - IELTS2 Essay
Writing Feedbackrt2012 - Jun 7, 2012 / Mriytunjay - Jun 9, 2012
|ielts 2 - 'parents are superior to the teachers in terms of development'
4 - I hope this could help :) Today-In this day and age. In conclusion-With all things taken into consideration/account....
Writing Feedbackhehelovehaha - Jun 6, 2012 / willywonka - Jun 8, 2012
|[TOEFL] - living on campus in a dormitory is the best choice to live the campus life.
4 - Thanks for your comment! :) It's really helpful to me. I'll try to improve my writing and rewrite this....
Writing Feedbackjanetyang - Jun 7, 2012 / janetyang - Jun 8, 2012
|essay about technology and traditional skills and life ways--feedback
2 - Hi! In the first paragraph, I would suggest that you give a basic and general overview stating the...
Writing FeedbackTISIA000 - Jun 8, 2012 / sean_neuman - Jun 8, 2012
|Should restrict detailed descriptions of crime reports?
NEW - Some people suggest that there should be restrictions on a detailed description of crimes in the newspapers and on...
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|Computers make some jobs easier.
4 - Madman59770 thanks indeed Anthony Nguyen. I am Moroccan and my first language is Amazigh (= Berber)/ Arabic is the...
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