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|'tracing family history' - ielts writing
Writing Feedbackgaoboxm - Jan 5, 2012 / crystal77 - Jan 9, 2012
|'going back to university' - If you could go back to sometime and place in the past
3 - Your ideas are well thought of, but as Jennyflower said you should spend more time editing your grammar, and...
Writing Feedbackhedieh - Jan 8, 2012 / unwana11 - Jan 9, 2012
|The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women
2 - The below chart compares the hours of leisure time in a different weekstypical week between men and women, alongsidein...
Writing Feedbacknarsis_sh83 - Jan 9, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Jan 9, 2012
|Globalization and food
NEW - Traditions has been changed since the western food had reached to the GCC, according to Topics-mag.com (2007) "Many people...
Writing FeedbackMarwaAlAwadhi - Jan 9, 2012 / — -
|Is it important for people to get college education to get a good job
2 - Some people think that college education is very important for their future career and to get a highly-paid job....
Writing Feedbackn10a - Jan 8, 2012 / Essay_Writer - Jan 9, 2012
|'Humanity and Energy' - my sentence outline about Renewable Energy
NEW - Nic Kehe English 102 Instructor Ryan Jones Humanity and Energy Since the introduction of electrical technology, and...
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|'parents have the main duty of teaching their kids' - Cambridge IELTS
3 - Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology...
Writing Feedbackredmomede3 - Jan 7, 2012 / redmomede3 - Jan 9, 2012
|Do we live better than our forefathers?
Writing Feedbackken99m - Jan 7, 2012 / ken99m - Jan 9, 2012
|'the inexorable march of science and technology' - my GRE issue essay
Writing Feedbackshirat - Jan 4, 2012 / shirat - Jan 8, 2012
|TOEFL "schools should give equal amount of money to sports activities and libraries"
2 - As far as I know you have to write a para about introduction! Actually use 5 para for writing...
Writing Feedbackmilk355 - Jan 7, 2012 / hedieh - Jan 8, 2012
|'questions authority can lead to an improvement in the quality of life' - SAT Essay
4 - Alright. I think it's definitely at least a 10, but I would lean more towards 11-12 If there were...
Writing Feedbacklilyappleyard - Jan 8, 2012 / egpctim - Jan 8, 2012
|IELTS: agricultural land degradation; Deforestation and over-cultivation
6 - A very excellent writing. Just find some article might be omitted. In the last sentence, 'almost doubling than the...
Writing Feedbackphuongthao15389 - Dec 24, 2011 / RyanIelts - Jan 7, 2012
|TOEFL essay "building shoping centers in my neighborhood"
3 - Thank you for the help! If there's anyone reading this thread, essay editing would also be appreciated....
Writing Feedbackmilk355 - Jan 6, 2012 / milk355 - Jan 6, 2012
|Toefl - Schools are not the only places to receive true education.
Writing FeedbackLoveYoung - Jan 5, 2012 / apv - Jan 6, 2012
|'real life as a live tutor to learn'; knowledge gained from experience or books
NEW - From the moment that human kind found out it is strongly necessary to struggling to be alive, learning has...
Writing Feedbackamirmasoud - Jan 6, 2012 / — -
|Capital punishment and the methods to execute
2 - In fact, there are some coun tries which have given up this penalty. But most of countries are keeping...
Writing Feedbacktiandteo - Jan 6, 2012 / hoanghai549 - Jan 6, 2012
|'researching criminal profiling of serial killers' - research essay
2 - great essay! however you might want to reword parts of paragraph seven, like when saying perhaps try...
Writing FeedbackDiane820 - Jan 3, 2012 / dylanpreston123 - Jan 5, 2012
|Interesting essay about weird poem (my favorite anything)
Writing Feedbacksonya15 - Jan 3, 2012 / ItsokaytoGaga - Jan 5, 2012
|'sportsmen are the ambassadors of a country' - IELTS essay
2 - Hi. l find the idea in this Essay is quite confuse, l am not really understanding your 2nd and...
Writing Feedbackfarina - Jan 5, 2012 / lenaincanada - Jan 5, 2012
|Compare the advantages and disadvantages of TV, books, radio
2 - meo71 -Some people argues that most radio's listeners -but it highly affects many sides of our life -That is...
Writing Feedbackmeo71 - Jan 5, 2012 / farina - Jan 5, 2012
|'different people have different answer' - ielts task 2. definite happiness
4 - hi your essay is too confusing.its sentences starts and abruptly stop without giving any clear meaning. There is to...
Writing Feedbacklllpppricky - Dec 19, 2011 / farina - Jan 5, 2012
|Child can learn from classmates different type of study; common language
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Jan 5, 2012 / hoanghai549 - Jan 5, 2012
|Describe the best transportation in your country
2 - Hi, I think this is a TOEFL essay rather than undergraduate admission? It's always better to leave sentence in...
Writing Feedbackkieungan - Jan 5, 2012 / basketball - Jan 5, 2012
|TOEFL-Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Jan 4, 2012 / hoanghai549 - Jan 5, 2012
|'The Internet area - blessing or curse?' - check & point out my mistakes
3 - In this current era the internet is deeply ingrained in most everyone's life. This modern invention has made life...
Writing Feedbackken99m - Jan 4, 2012 / DaeDae - Jan 4, 2012
|'Job satisfaction and environment' - IELTS test
NEW - i believe there have so many mistake that l had made in this essay, but how about the idea,...
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|(Television's Impact on children) my essay
3 - First, I will talk about the positive effects: - It helps child to collect his lessons by watching educational...
Writing Feedbackchess1990 - Jan 3, 2012 / chess1990 - Jan 4, 2012
|the rothschilds and controlling world money reserve
Writing Feedback3robi_in_Paris - Jan 2, 2012 / 3robi_in_Paris - Jan 4, 2012
|Would you vote for moving your capital? IELTS
3 - Only 2 1/2 paragraphs in general. One introduction and 2 paragraphs with a small one at the end...
Writing Feedbackmartinger - Jan 3, 2012 / martinger - Jan 4, 2012
|Reading is an important thing in all humans life
3 - Try to make smoother transitions between paragraphs (don't start with "Firstly" and "Secondly") and try to make a better...
Writing Feedback3moooor - Jan 4, 2012 / GrimRippah - Jan 4, 2012
|IELTS (a new shopping complex task, Auckland, New Zealand opinion)
NEW - THe tables and pie chart show in percentage terms the results of a survey of a new shopping complex...
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Jan 3, 2012 / — -
|It is important to take entrance test in universities in higher level like Nursing, Engineering, IT
4 - I don't understand this topic sentence. psycology -> psychology. Is that what you mean? according to -> thanks...
Writing Feedbackrajkamal11in - Dec 29, 2011 / princedynasty - Jan 3, 2012
|ielts young people are much more aware of and concerned about poverty, animals etc
Writing Feedbackamon2006 - Jan 2, 2012 / amon2006 - Jan 3, 2012
|Topic:"Why do we need to read books"
Writing Feedbackhungnguyen1998 - Dec 14, 2011 / amon2006 - Jan 2, 2012
|'children need both mother and father' - bringing children up issue
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|Increase the cost of fuel to solve the world's environmental problems?
NEW - I would appreciate if you give your important comments. I sincerely thank you for your assistant. The best...
Writing Feedbackroshan4 - Jan 1, 2012 / — -
|IELTS - column chart about mobile phone ownerships in 6 countries.
2 - A glance at the column chart provides the number of mobile phone owners in six European countries in two...
Writing Feedbackphuongthao15389 - Jan 1, 2012 / roshan4 - Jan 1, 2012
|'UK school spending' - IELTS writing - pie charts
Writing Feedbackphuongthao15389 - Dec 31, 2011 / phuongthao15389 - Jan 1, 2012
|Improving standards of living of developing countries through education?
Writing Feedbackmilamiyamiila - Jan 1, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Jan 1, 2012
|'History is a source of patriotism' - I E L T S - studying the past
6 - thank you Stella. can you check my last ielts essay about competitive sports ,i believe i did something right...
Writing Feedbackamon2006 - Dec 30, 2011 / amon2006 - Jan 1, 2012
|Argue for or against sweet advert should be banned
2 - i agree , but here we are talking about money , compagnies are investing millions dollars in their ads,...
Writing Feedbackqaisjan123 - Jan 1, 2012 / 3robi_in_Paris - Jan 1, 2012
|TOEFL-Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their olde
2 - consular? I think you should use "counselor" instead. They cheat young ages because they believe they are immature...
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Jan 1, 2012 / phantuhoang - Jan 1, 2012
|'biggest reward in the class was dissection' - favorite class and why
Writing Feedbacksilentspring - Dec 31, 2011 / TheLeader - Jan 1, 2012
|'helpful exercise'; Games are as important for children as they are for adults.
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Dec 30, 2011 / lzhd1028 - Dec 31, 2011
|Chart - 'average house prices change 1990-1995 and 1996-2002' Ielts task
3 - Thank you Paris. Could you give me some suggestions about how to replace your highlighted sentences? I still don't...
Writing FeedbackRyanIelts - Dec 30, 2011 / RyanIelts - Dec 30, 2011
|IELTS - Local & International news , which is more important ?
5 - ' fastest growing nation in terms of economy' and I would rephrase the sentence 'a lot of countries are...
Writing Feedbacklearner26 - Dec 29, 2011 / amer77 - Dec 30, 2011
|Grandmother taught me to read - the grammar in this short essay?
Writing Feedbacktilasir - Dec 29, 2011 / tilasir - Dec 30, 2011
|Johns Hopkins: Tell us something about yourself that we wouldn't know...
6 - See, but I think I could be hilarious and dramatic on the first topic. The point of the second...
Writing Feedbackmarshizzle1 - Dec 29, 2011 / marshizzle1 - Dec 29, 2011
|IELTS - Prohibit public smoking ? - AGREE or DISAGREE ?
NEW - Some businesses prohibit smoking in any of their offices. Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do...
Writing Feedbacklearner26 - Dec 29, 2011 / — -
|Silent danger - essay
2 - Well,the beginning is pretty captivating. For starters,replace all the 2's with "two". My only question is what point are...
Writing FeedbackIcandoeverythin - Dec 29, 2011 / yusra12 - Dec 29, 2011
|ielts the position of women in society , juvenile delinqeuncy relationship
NEW - TOPIC THE POSITION OF WOMEN IN SOCIETY HAS CHANGED MARKEDLY IN THE LAST TWENTY YEARS .MANY OF THE PROBLEMS...
Writing Feedbackamon2006 - Dec 29, 2011 / — -
|IELTS: International travel and mass media? 'distinctive tradition of tribes'
NEW - Topic: The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world...
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Dec 29, 2011 / — -
|IELTS writing task 1-piechart provide the data of woman education grades in someland.
3 - Maybe it would be better to say "the graphs compare the participation of women in a range of education...
Writing Feedbackphuongthao15389 - Dec 28, 2011 / princedynasty - Dec 29, 2011
|TOEFL See Topic in the thread!!
2 - Hi Genadi, I think you should have 3 reasons to support your idea, because the longer the better,...
Writing Feedbackgenadik - Dec 29, 2011 / linhnguyen2112 - Dec 29, 2011
|'small hand with long tapering fingers' - essay
4 - Hi First, there is no doubt that individuals are not more than six meters. She is small and medium...
Writing Feedbacknathalierousse - Dec 27, 2011 / stellastella - Dec 28, 2011
|Change is inevitable; 'What motivates people to change' - SAT ESSAY
8 - Here's the thing: SAT essays are not scored logically. Do a little research and you will find that the...
Writing Feedbackilovecandy - Dec 27, 2011 / deremifri - Dec 28, 2011
|'where individuals often exist in their own bubbles' - Brown describe the community
Writing Feedbackmusic920 - Dec 28, 2011 / lethalityKD - Dec 28, 2011
|TOEFL; Businesses should be only concerned about making profits.
NEW - Businesses should do anything they can to make a profit. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? ...
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Dec 28, 2011 / — -
|UK has a wider variety of ways of dealing with waste products than the others.
3 - thank you Susan :X:X:X:X:X HOwever, could you help me explain why as regards needs to be replaced by in...
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Dec 27, 2011 / princedynasty - Dec 27, 2011
|'brothers who are already enrolled at NYU' - Why NYU?
Writing Feedbackibeckki - Dec 27, 2011 / silentspring - Dec 27, 2011
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