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|Knowledge gained from personal experience or from books and other printed material; which is better?
4 - Kim, this being a compare and contrast essay, the approach should have been coming first from a public approach...
Writing FeedbackKim Truong - Jun 9, 2018 / Holt - Jun 10, 2018
|Legalizing Same-Sex Marriage - Argumentative essay
2 - @mei987 your argument is flawed and incorrect as the US Supreme Court has already upheld the validity of same...
Writing Feedbackmei987 - Jun 9, 2018 / Holt - Jun 10, 2018
|IELTS1: the percentage of rural, suburban populations in the Northwest Region between 1990 and 2050.
2 - Hai, let's start with your mistakes in using English terms. A century is equivalent to 100 years. 50 years...
Writing Feedbackcloverjm - Jun 9, 2018 / Holt - Jun 10, 2018
|Enviroment problem - forest protection necessity
2 - Please include the complete prompt for your essay. It is difficult to review when you have an incomplete topic....
Writing Feedbackhungbui - Jun 9, 2018 / jalp - Jun 9, 2018
|Do u think there were more advantages-disadvantages to be part of a large family in the past? IELTS2
4 - Chrissanth, I have no idea what prompt you are responding to with this essay and whether or not you...
Writing FeedbackChrissanth_12 - Jun 8, 2018 / Holt - Jun 9, 2018
|The paragraph in response to the topic: the disadvantages of being left-handed.
3 - Tung, the disadvantages of being left handed is not referred as "downsized" but rather "down sides". There are two...
Writing FeedbackTung - Jun 8, 2018 / Holt - Jun 9, 2018
|What members of a city sports club think about the club's activities, facilities and opening hours?
Writing Feedbackrubychautran - Jun 7, 2018 / rubychautran - Jun 8, 2018
|Should universities apply business-like skills instead of providing theoretical knowledge?
4 - Quan, in addition to what Tran pointed out above, I would like to offer you a reminder when writing...
Writing Feedbackminhquan2121 - Jun 6, 2018 / Holt - Jun 8, 2018
|Social and practical problems abroad without local language knowledge
5 - Thewin, try to avoid using the same phrases in the prompt restatement as was used in the original. Your...
Writing Feedbackkruhem - Jun 7, 2018 / Holt - Jun 8, 2018
|(GRE) Is it necessary for people questioning the authority?
4 - For starters, essays of these kind, analytical essays, do not always have to agree with a given statement. It...
Writing Feedbackyjhsgi - Jun 6, 2018 / Holt - Jun 8, 2018
|Drunken Irony | A Literary Criticism of "The Drunkard" by Frank O'Connor and its underlying irony |
2 - Alex, it would be better if you present the types of irony within the story in a chronological manner....
Writing Feedbackalpal227 - Jun 7, 2018 / Holt - Jun 7, 2018
|International aid for the development plans for developing countries
3 - Hi there. I have some opinions about your second paragraph. You see, you didn't really provide any supporting reason...
Writing FeedbackChuni lal - Jun 5, 2018 / rubychautran - Jun 7, 2018
|IELTS TASK comment and maybe give me the band for this essay)
3 - Hi, I thought your report was pretty clear. One point you might have mentioned is that even though their...
Writing Feedbackroxana_0610 - Jun 6, 2018 / TJLuschen - Jun 6, 2018
|Levels of youth crime are getting higher in major cities in Viet Nam. Analyze reasons and solutions.
2 - U should pay attention to adj and v value--valuable aware--awareness "the action of thieves" is not correct "that they...
Writing FeedbackJollie - Jun 6, 2018 / JohnsonFan - Jun 6, 2018
|Whether working or going on further study after graduation? Discuss both views.
2 - To obtain obtaining a job ... brings to people much has numerous advantages in some ways. Due to ...
Writing Feedbackhuyennguyen203 - Jun 6, 2018 / roxana_0610 - Jun 6, 2018
|Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow them to do whatever they want
3 - Tran, I like the way that you presented your ideas in this essay. You should have expanded upon your...
Writing Feedbackhieuttbk - Jun 5, 2018 / Holt - Jun 6, 2018
|[TOEFL]Keeping their rooms tidy and organized, students have a chance to get closer to success
2 - some words are not used appropriately like... Different kind of books have their positions accordingly and the...
Writing FeedbackClara_cyy - Jun 5, 2018 / Chuni lal - Jun 5, 2018
|The advantages and disadvantages in using bicycles - a popular way of commuting or transportation
NEW - Some people believe bicycles have a lot of advantages, whereas others believe bicycles have more disadvantages. Discuss both views...
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|Unhealthy activities that most people do and how to change them.
4 - @zajacfury Thank you very much for giving me ideas. Your sentences do sound better. Hope to see you around...
Writing Feedbackjalp - Jun 3, 2018 / jalp - Jun 5, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 1- chart of frequency of eating at fast food restaurants
2 - Joey, this is a very weak analytical report based on the chart you were provided. Several presentation problems occurred...
Writing Feedbackjoeychk - Jun 4, 2018 / Holt - Jun 5, 2018
|Protect From Cyber Attackers
2 - Jong, your first paragraph makes absolutely no sense because of the lack of proper connecting words, transitional words, and...
Writing Feedbackkekebuke - Jun 4, 2018 / Holt - Jun 5, 2018
|Human activities has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world.
3 - @Holt, Thank you so much, unexpected details description, I am really glad to hear from you. thank you once...
Writing FeedbackBHATVISHAL - Jun 3, 2018 / BHATVISHAL - Jun 4, 2018
|Writing on working skills standard
Writing FeedbackWorkRelated - Jun 3, 2018 / Holt - Jun 4, 2018
|We don't have a close relationship with neighbors nowadays. Why and how can we improve this contact?
2 - S0341039 , this is a direct question essay. Therefore, you cannot close the thesis statement paragraph with a question....
Writing FeedbackS0341039 - Jun 3, 2018 / Holt - Jun 4, 2018
|Life of people in modern world is much easier than in the past. Discuss both views give your opinion
3 - Nguyen, your total approach to this essay would be considered only partially correct in an actual test setting. this...
Writing Feedbackduyphuc - Jun 3, 2018 / Holt - Jun 4, 2018
|IELTS writing task 1 : the population changes in four countries during 1990-2000 and its projection
NEW - Any comments and advice are deeply appreciated. If it is possible, can you tell me the estimated band score...
Writing Feedbackravatrav - Jun 4, 2018 / — -
|Is it essential for new residents to adopt the traditions and customs of local community?
4 - @anhtu96 I think the contributor means that you have to specify instead of using 'people', since you are...
Writing Feedbackanhtu96 - May 29, 2018 / jalp - Jun 3, 2018
|The shares of six age groups of both sexes who did exercises frequently in 2010 in Australia
3 - Kelsie, your summary overview is incomplete. This is always presented in at least a 3 sentence format. You only...
Writing Feedbackkelsieee - May 31, 2018 / Holt - Jun 2, 2018
|The tradition that family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? impact?
2 - Tuan, this is a direct reasoning essay. It is not a comparison essay based upon the original prompt instructions....
Writing Feedbacktuanydbg - Jun 1, 2018 / Holt - Jun 2, 2018
|The two maps show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information.
2 - Tuan, several errors are present in your analytical report. There is a lack of comparison discussion for certain aspects,...
Writing Feedbacktuanydbg - Jun 1, 2018 / Holt - Jun 2, 2018
|Sharing information in scientific research, business and academic field for free or not
2 - @uou3456 There is a lack of clarity in your presentation. The prompt for this essay requires 3 points of...
Writing Feedbackuou3456 - Jun 1, 2018 / Holt - Jun 1, 2018
|The question whether the children should read stories themselves or with a help from parents
Writing Feedbackbeobeo281 - May 31, 2018 / Holt - Jun 1, 2018
|It is argued that besides making the profit, companies also have responsibilities toward society
2 - Nguyen, your essay has a throw away, meaning, an irrelevant discussion in the second paragraph. You used that paragraph...
Writing Feedbackhuyen smile - May 31, 2018 / Holt - Jun 1, 2018
|Children whose both working parents should be taken care of by grandparents or childcare center
3 - Lyralei, the biggest problem with your essay is that you did not properly outline the discussion in order to...
Writing Feedbacklyralei - May 31, 2018 / Holt - Jun 1, 2018
|How Well Do You Think Standardized Tests Measure Student's Abilities?
Writing FeedbackKim Truong - May 31, 2018 / Holt - Jun 1, 2018
|What is the most effective method of dealing with the rising crime rate, prison? Ielts task2
3 - Minh, post the complete prompt next time in order to receive more accurate reviews of your work. At this...
Writing Feedbackliliaxa - May 31, 2018 / Holt - Jun 1, 2018
|Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they released from prison. Causes and solutions??
3 - There is a fact ... >> ... more criminals repeat offend after releasing from prison, which is a complicated...
Writing Feedbackphuongthao810 - May 29, 2018 / liliaxa - May 31, 2018
|IELTS1 - pie chart marking the retail sections of the online sales in Canada during 2005 and 2010
3 - This report writing is well put, but some improvements are needed. Let me start with the opening paragraph. In...
Writing Feedbackemilyyellowleade - May 29, 2018 / eddies - May 31, 2018
|An increasing number of transport revolutions. Which are considered as the most remarkable?
3 - Thanks. I highly appreciate your comment. I'll consider all what you said to write better essays....
Writing Feedbacklecongdoo3 - May 21, 2018 / lecongdoo3 - May 30, 2018
|To what extent do you agree that letter writing is disappearing? IELTS 2.
4 - Thank you very much for the criticisms. I actuallu didn't think of editing my second essay because I thought...
Writing Feedbackjalp - May 25, 2018 / jalp - May 30, 2018
|Ielts writing task 2 - eating local food or food from other regions
4 - Because I am a reading, not a professional writer so I just comment on my point-of-view. Your thesis statement...
Writing Feedbackhqcxx1516 - May 28, 2018 / Kim Truong - May 29, 2018
|Is it possible to become a truly successful person without a natural strong talent?
3 - Huy, since you did not provide the correct prompt for the topic in your essay, I will be unable...
Writing Feedbackghuylee - May 28, 2018 / Holt - May 29, 2018
|Do we need to require sport in school curriculum?
3 - Kim, since you failed to provide the complete prompt instructions for us to consider your writing on, I will...
Writing FeedbackKim Truong - May 28, 2018 / Holt - May 29, 2018
|'Religion and Global Perspective' - Semester at Sea Application Essay
2 - Truth be told the first 2 paragraphs of your essay is all fluff. Lots of words, beautiful words, but...
Writing Feedbackkatemanning - May 28, 2018 / Holt - May 29, 2018
|How technology affect our relationships? Has this been a positive or negative development
2 - @aitruong This is not a comparison essay. This is a single opinion essay that should have focused on one...
Writing Feedbackaitruong - May 26, 2018 / Holt - May 28, 2018
|IELTS writing task 2 : One could learn about another country from TV
3 - Nguyen, your essay is taking a totally different approach to the given discussion for several reasons. For starters, you...
Writing Feedbackjasonnguyen - May 27, 2018 / Holt - May 28, 2018
|IELTS2: Some people believe that graduation from university is the key to a fulfilling career
3 - Duc, while your opening paraphrase was excellent, your body of paragraphs were lacking in the proper representation of the...
Writing FeedbackDucgiangbin - May 24, 2018 / Holt - May 28, 2018
|Many people keep dogs and cats as companion , Do the advantages outweigh the disadvatages?
2 - Aural, your essay suffers from severe punctuation errors. You are using comma's throughout the essay instead of placing periods...
Writing Feedbackauralfat - May 26, 2018 / Holt - May 27, 2018
|Who should be in charge of activities related to scientific research?
Writing Feedbacklinhlinhlinh - May 25, 2018 / linhlinhlinh - May 26, 2018
|Human being actions are leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio-diversity
Writing Feedbackkmc - May 25, 2018 / kmc - May 26, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2 (People argue about children's decision)
6 - i think : the fifth line : the structure of the sentence is wrong because instead of : children...
Writing Feedbackabang yoga - May 23, 2018 / mailoc - May 26, 2018
|There's a question whether school teachers should incorporate homework into the teaching scheme
2 - Grey, unfortunately, your approach tot he whole discussion is incorrect. You have turned a compare and contrast with personal...
Writing Feedbackgreynd - May 25, 2018 / Holt - May 26, 2018
|The way of communication between people has been changed due to the modern technology; IELTS2
3 - Bimal, you have written a focused essay that speaks of only one point of view. Excellent work. That is...
Writing Feedbackbimalp - May 24, 2018 / Holt - May 25, 2018
|Violence and disaters images in the media, what are the causes and our solutions
3 - Vu, since you did not post the complete prompt with this essay, I cannot really tell what your required...
Writing Feedbackvu1111 - May 24, 2018 / Holt - May 25, 2018
|Multiple short school-free days or one long vacation for children?
3 - Ahh, thank you very much for the review of my essay. I am slowly learning from my mistakes, nonetheless,...
Writing Feedbackjalp - May 13, 2018 / jalp - May 25, 2018
|Increasing the prices of fuels are the only way to reduce its consumption and pressure on the world
2 - Hi, make sure to always include the complete prompt so we can determine if you have addressed it in...
Writing Feedbacklamtuyen0610 - May 23, 2018 / TJLuschen - May 24, 2018
|The given diagram illustrates the process of brick making [Writing task 1]
4 - Yes, treating is not the same as handling. Think of a water treatment plant, where water is filtered and...
Writing Feedbackphongdang04 - May 23, 2018 / TJLuschen - May 24, 2018
|People have different views about what young individuals should do when they leave high school.
Writing Feedbackthaoduyen - May 18, 2018 / thaoduyen - May 23, 2018
|Effect of technology. Do the advantages of the online business meetings outweigh the disadvantages ?
2 - Mai, the issue is not about online tools. It is about online business meetings. Your reference to business tools...
Writing Feedbackmailoc - May 20, 2018 / Holt - May 23, 2018
|IELTS GT Essay - The use of cellular phones has negatively impacted person to person communication
2 - Neha, opinion discussions in the opening statement is only acceptable in the direct question essay. Unfortunately, this essay that...
Writing FeedbackNeha_b123 - May 22, 2018 / Holt - May 23, 2018
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