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|'to improve language little by little' - Children Learn Foreign Language Early
2 - The first and second sentences are disconnected to each other. What technological developments have to do with language...
Writing FeedbackKlein Evans - Jul 6, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 6, 2012
|'linking rising accidents to fatigued workers' - GRE Argument
5 - I agree. It gives smooth transition to other following ideas. Thank you Jan K Shenouda for your advice !...
Writing Feedbackdeepakbaniya - Jun 24, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 6, 2012
|FAST FOOD has many good effects on population?
Writing Feedbackchucnt - Jul 4, 2012 / chucnt - Jul 6, 2012
|IELTS - Death Penalty Committing Murder, Climate Change, Mass media shape ideas
3 - Maybe in the first essay, you wanna say "Life in prison is better than death penalty. Because - "...
Writing Feedbacktashappleaddict - Jul 5, 2012 / Jeslyn - Jul 6, 2012
|Essay about the benefits of online shopping over traditional off-line market
7 - And Duminda, your advices are also really helped me a lot. I believe you pointed out the main points....
Writing Feedbackemily713 - Jul 4, 2012 / emily713 - Jul 5, 2012
|'The goal isn't to live forever' - Toefl Essay
4 - His death has affected the people as much as its impact will affect the kingdom. Prince Nayef Bin...
Writing FeedbackJawaher - Jun 24, 2012 / EF_Susan - Jul 5, 2012
|'any child can be taught to develop their skill' People are born with certain talents
4 - This is true.... You better rephrase this sentence because it does not sound logical :) .... good call...
Writing FeedbackLegolasTheElf - Jul 5, 2012 / dumi - Jul 5, 2012
|Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trends
NEW - Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trends and fashions than an indication...
Writing Feedbackgag379 - Jul 5, 2012 / — -
|Without the benefit of planning, people are likely to make uninformed decisions
Writing Feedbackjhundais - Jul 5, 2012 / — -
|Essay: Poverty problem may invite various detrimental effects
7 - so many grammatical mistakes ,weaker vocabulary and poor organisation. work harder to improve....
Writing Feedbackmadan - Jul 3, 2012 / gag379 - Jul 5, 2012
|Do you prefer to eat at food stands/restaurants or prepare and eat at home?
Writing Feedbackartin - Jul 3, 2012 / dumi - Jul 5, 2012
|Variety and exploring new ideas by people is spice of life
4 - Ok, then say ; For example, we often get bored with the same style of dressing and therefore we...
Writing FeedbackSilentlips - Jul 5, 2012 / dumi - Jul 5, 2012
|ibt- 'honesty is better than lying all the time'
Writing Feedbackblur - Jul 4, 2012 / dumi - Jul 5, 2012
|IELTS: Young careless drivers_agree?
9 - Right. Many thanks to you, dumi! I'll combine both you two's options and change it in my writing. So...
Writing FeedbackApril April - Jul 4, 2012 / April April - Jul 5, 2012
|IELTS - Dangerous sports such as boxing or motor-racing should be banned.
NEW - Dangerous sports such as boxing or motor-racing should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with...
Writing Feedbacktashappleaddict - Jul 5, 2012 / — -
|Effect of the invention to auto car on the living of people in your contry.
Writing FeedbackAnan_WD - Jul 5, 2012 / Anan_WD - Jul 5, 2012
|GRE Argument Task--recommendation on opening a cafe store
Writing Feedbackcalvinhmw - Jul 4, 2012 / dumi - Jul 5, 2012
|'unnecessory and unethical' - DEATH PENALTY ESSENTAL OR NOT?
7 - THANKS AHMAD MAY DOD BLESS YOU Now I understand what you meant.I will try to adapt your ideas and...
Writing Feedbackjobymonpj - Jul 2, 2012 / jobymonpj - Jul 4, 2012
|'the depth and the width of the Brim river' - GRE Argumentative
2 - some more flaws; # the quantity of basket found in the village across the river. Is it only a...
Writing Feedbackroshb - Jul 3, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 4, 2012
|IELTS writing-international organisations should provide poor countries
6 - I agree with Mr. Zafari. It requires to either agree or disagree with the statement. Being indecisive or taking...
Writing Feedbackmiumiu0422 - Jul 3, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 4, 2012
|GREW issue topic:law to protect remaining wilderness against economic gain
2 - I could not understand that which paragraph was the introduction, but I thought what I quoted above was...
Writing FeedbackRamesh A - Jul 4, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 4, 2012
|Some items such as clothes or furniture can be made by hand or by machine?
Writing Feedbackchucnt - Jul 3, 2012 / chucnt - Jul 4, 2012
|People need government's help or not.
2 - Hi, The essay contains only 211 words, while u should write at least 250 words..You can use a free...
Writing FeedbackJeslyn - Jul 4, 2012 / chucnt - Jul 4, 2012
|IELTS (academic) city living in the 21 century is stressful
7 - In either case, you are free to express your opinion. You need to either agree. disagree or take a...
Writing FeedbackYurine - Jul 2, 2012 / dumi - Jul 3, 2012
|'I must learn from my father' - Academic writing for Ielts
2 - I am sorry to hear about your father. Thus your father has passed, I think, you should most use...
Writing Feedbackbsm_25 - Jul 3, 2012 / giovani - Jul 3, 2012
|"Do you agree/disagree that teenagers should work part time job?" - TOEFL Writing
4 - Thanks a lot. I struggle much in grammar and using the right vocabulary. I just discovered that I tend...
Writing Feedbackgiovani - Jun 29, 2012 / giovani - Jul 3, 2012
|IELTS: Stressful jobs and long working day_problem and solutions
7 - I've taken all your suggestions into account and will make the best out of them to improve this one...
Writing FeedbackApril April - Jul 1, 2012 / April April - Jul 2, 2012
|[Ielts Essay] Single Careeer vs Multiple career (A new fasion)
3 - Hi imagirl, There seems to be a lot of grammatical errors. Here's my correction to the first paragraph....
Writing Feedbackimagirl - Jul 2, 2012 / peterc - Jul 2, 2012
|IELTS GT -- should governments be responsible to help the unemployed and homeless
4 - Hi bingle2012, After reading your essay, I am confused that in the first paragraph you state "it is...
Writing Feedbackbingle2012 - Jun 30, 2012 / peterc - Jul 2, 2012
|'industrial dominance society' - The extended family is less important now
Writing Feedbackohyes7911 - Jul 2, 2012 / dumi - Jul 2, 2012
|'health is the most important thing' - fast food restaurants or not
NEW - The number of fast food restaurants has increased over the last few years. Some people are very anxious about...
Writing Feedbackchucnt - Jul 2, 2012 / — -
|My (Ever-Changing) Neighborhood - Windows on Williams
Writing Feedbacklafortuna - Jul 1, 2012 / lafortuna - Jul 1, 2012
|'Talk is cheap' -the way modern communication shapes the way people communicate
2 - I like the theme here... we communicate more but say less. I'll correct the run on thesis sentence at...
Writing FeedbackPh1lla - Jul 1, 2012 / EF_Kevin - Jul 1, 2012
|Argumentative Essay: Global Warming is simply part of nature's cycle.
2 - That is a wonderful essay but i know there definitely be people disagreeing with you so i suggest you...
Writing Feedbackpuppylove261 - Jul 1, 2012 / knan43 - Jul 1, 2012
|'Better future but lost family?' - advantages and disadvantages of studying aboard
4 - Either one of these works, but using both makes it wordy. You should probably go with "To begin...
Writing Feedbackkissingyou0912 - Jun 30, 2012 / rsr1919 - Jul 1, 2012
|Is it more difficult to teach children than it was in the past?
NEW - Nowadays, life is more and more developed, children also have better life conditions than their parents in the past....
Writing Feedbacksummer_0809 - Jul 1, 2012 / — -
|Causes of increasing spectator violence In international games . comment .
Writing FeedbackSandy _Angle - Jul 1, 2012 / Sandy _Angle - Jul 1, 2012
|IELTS: People migrating to cities causing problems?
9 - --------------- usually, IELTS and TOEFL essays expect you to support your reasons with examples. That is generally expressed...
Writing FeedbackApril April - Jun 30, 2012 / dumi - Jul 1, 2012
|IELTS-children in wealthy and poor families....
5 - Well.... here you talk about adults who have been children of wealthy parents. That's why the correction ''are...
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Jun 29, 2012 / dumi - Jun 30, 2012
|Go out to work (both parents have to work nowadays)
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Jun 27, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jun 30, 2012
|IELTS-drug use in children (parents should be more attentive to their children)
2 - The structure of the body is not appropriate. The topic asked you to write about "causes", "effects", and "solutions"....
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Jun 30, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jun 30, 2012
|LIFE IN A BIG CITY (disadvantages)
Writing Feedbackkissingyou0912 - Jun 28, 2012 / Silentlips - Jun 29, 2012
|'The exploration and development of safe alternative to fossile fuels' -My IELTS
10 - Indeed, the use of "arise" in this context is better. Thank you so much for your suggestion....
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - May 7, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jun 29, 2012
|IELTS：Modern community life
7 - 1. Is it necessary to use firstly, secondly instead of first, second? The use of "firstly" in academic writing...
Writing Feedbackwoyunsi3000 - Jun 28, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jun 29, 2012
|THE CHILD IS FATHER OF MAN
Writing FeedbackSilentlips - Jun 29, 2012 / Silentlips - Jun 29, 2012
|IELTS- factors for teenagers to commit a crime
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Jun 28, 2012 / Slim shady - Jun 29, 2012
|As the delegate of Poland, and to share the idea about Euro crisis
Writing Feedbackecho5016 - Jun 28, 2012 / tau - Jun 29, 2012
|It is like making comments for a book without reading it; Some judge others by external appearance
Writing Feedbackgiovani - Jun 29, 2012 / canis89 - Jun 29, 2012
|"The function of university" ielts writing
6 - I think I just wrote a typical Chinese essay~most Chinese students will write with the same template and not...
Writing Feedbacktiffanyboa - Jun 28, 2012 / tiffanyboa - Jun 29, 2012
|Children should be allowed and guided to partake in free time activities
3 - You have good points to be discussed. I think your grammar and vocabulary are good as well. I suggest...
Writing Feedbackgag379 - Jun 28, 2012 / giovani - Jun 29, 2012
|Alternative forms of transport and international laws on controlling automobiles are necessary
4 - Thank you very much for your swift reply and careful correction. It's so helpful. As you mentioned, I have...
Writing FeedbackPasaAnkit - Jun 28, 2012 / PasaAnkit - Jun 28, 2012
|Hope is the buoy of life
Writing Feedbackkashifalvi - Jun 22, 2012 / EF_Susan - Jun 28, 2012
|Toefl: 'I can accumulate wealth' - purchase either a house or a business
3 - Prefer therefore or hence to so; that will make the essay more official. You can also use some great...
Writing Feedbackkrishnakant - Jun 21, 2012 / echo5016 - Jun 28, 2012
|SOCIETY essay; In China students have to take the classes at least 9 hours a day
NEW - Some people think that teachers at school are more responsible for children's intellectual and social development than parents. To...
Writing Feedbackzhangyebiaoba - Jun 28, 2012 / — -
|'good writer loves his/her characters' - AP English Essay
Writing Feedbackgulleyluke - Jun 27, 2012 / gulleyluke - Jun 28, 2012
|IELTS-travel, increase tension...
2 - learn different nations' [/i]traditions and cultures while others believe that it provides rising tension among people from different races[i]....
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Jun 28, 2012 / mppaniz - Jun 28, 2012
|Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they going.
NEW - Please check my essay. I'm so nervous now and i don't know how many mistakes are there. Thank you...
Writing FeedbackMadeka - Jun 28, 2012 / — -
|IELTS TASK 2: People gaining more weight_problem and solutions
2 - Nowadays it is undeniable that the average weight of people is increasing, leading to the decrease in their health...
Writing FeedbackApril April - Jun 28, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jun 28, 2012
|'selecting a city as my favorite place' - TOEFL:Where to Visit
2 - Hi! I just edited some of your errors. Others are more courageous andtowards undertaking the risk of traveling...
Writing Feedbackmamad60 - Jun 28, 2012 / niesaysi - Jun 28, 2012
|TOEFL (Business should hire employees for their entire lives)
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