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|'make a success by accomplishing meaningful things to them, not money' (TOEFL IBT 60)
2 - The first reason why I disagree with the above statement is that success doesn't mean money achievement, it concludes...
Writing Feedbackfamily_jvc - Jan 13, 2012 / phantuhoang - Jan 13, 2012
|Creativity is very important nowadays to make a better life
4 - Thank you....
Writing FeedbackBTDTXXDY - Jan 12, 2012 / BTDTXXDY - Jan 13, 2012
|The expression"never, never give up" _ essay
3 - Some people say that, ---No comma here.--- there is no real loser, he is a real defeated person when...
Writing FeedbackHuydq - Jan 9, 2012 / EF_Susan - Jan 12, 2012
|Introductory PARAGRAPH FOR ESSAY, WHY THE 1980S WAS DIFFICULT FOR CANADA.
2 - Canadian government created "The Meech Lake Accord" to bring Quebec into constitution.---Here is where you should tell a little...
Writing FeedbackStaygolden - Jan 12, 2012 / EF_Susan - Jan 12, 2012
|It is on vegetarianism? - Life, Death, and Vegetarian School Lunches
4 - Hello :) Your essay is very interesting. The intro- the way you wrote it is a little extreme, but...
Writing FeedbackRaga - Jan 11, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Jan 12, 2012
|The Supernatural: A Rise in Entertainment
2 - Hi :) You have written an exceptional essay- nice job! You use great critical thinking skills about your topic,...
Writing Feedbackakgold20 - Jan 6, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Jan 12, 2012
|Essay describing my personality and decisions - Grad School Essay.
5 - Would you write me a short essay on this topic: being your own boss because I don't understand english....
Writing Feedbackbdoan - Oct 3, 2007 / eclipse_1201 - Jan 12, 2012
|Overpopulation - causes and solutions
Writing Feedbackakari - Jan 8, 2012 / akari - Jan 12, 2012
|ielts preperation give me a band score
Writing FeedbackGURURE - Jan 9, 2012 / GURURE - Jan 12, 2012
|ENGLISH CLASS; The significance of errors
Writing Feedbackhussein6558331 - Jan 11, 2012 / singh955 - Jan 11, 2012
|'parents and adult relatives are important people in teenagers' life' - TOEFL IBT
2 - I'm not trying to make you rewrite your whole essay, but you should really trying ignoring the scenario "Certain...
Writing Feedbacksecretphuong - Jan 11, 2012 / singh955 - Jan 11, 2012
|'change is a way of life and brings new colours in it' - IELTS essay
3 - THIS IS MY RESPONSE TO YOUR ESSAY. Topic; some people prefer to spent their lives doing the same things...
Writing Feedbackfarina - Jan 10, 2012 / secretphuong - Jan 11, 2012
|Science and my previous teachers
Writing Feedbackmsw1225 - Jan 11, 2012 / Bleeckerandpine - Jan 11, 2012
|letter, e-mail, or telephone calls are much better than face to face communication
2 - It is so convenient that technology is not needed to make conversation. Otherwise this is not bad. ...
Writing Feedbacksecretphuong - Jan 11, 2012 / saurabh93 - Jan 11, 2012
|Over eating can be as harmful as smoking?
7 - Hi as far I concern over eating and eating junk food are two separate issues.I think you can pose...
Writing Feedbacksamba - Jan 10, 2012 / hussein6558331 - Jan 11, 2012
|Stress: Cause and solutions (IELTS essay)
NEW - In recent years there has been increasing awareness about the causes of stress and people have been trying to...
Writing Feedbackakari - Jan 11, 2012 / — -
|Facebook: A double-edged sword - a current scientific or social controversy
3 - I agree. That you have avoided conventional feedback and instead gave depth by examining both sides of the issue...
Writing Feedbackkayleighlevitt - Jan 10, 2012 / saurabh93 - Jan 10, 2012
|'the development of the disease tuberculosis in England' my graph description
2 - You seem to understand how to describe the graph. You might historically talk about events/reasons leading up to milestones...
Writing FeedbackMelly - Jan 9, 2012 / Coriolis - Jan 10, 2012
|'the nature advocates' - some people are born with certain talents ...
2 - Daniel Choi they are able to get aeligible to be successful According to the natures' advocates, just as a...
Writing FeedbackDaniel Choi - Jan 8, 2012 / farina - Jan 10, 2012
|'tracing family history' - ielts writing
Writing Feedbackgaoboxm - Jan 5, 2012 / crystal77 - Jan 9, 2012
|'going back to university' - If you could go back to sometime and place in the past
3 - Your ideas are well thought of, but as Jennyflower said you should spend more time editing your grammar, and...
Writing Feedbackhedieh - Jan 8, 2012 / unwana11 - Jan 9, 2012
|The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women
2 - The below chart compares the hours of leisure time in a different weekstypical week between men and women, alongsidein...
Writing Feedbacknarsis_sh83 - Jan 9, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Jan 9, 2012
|Globalization and food
NEW - Traditions has been changed since the western food had reached to the GCC, according to Topics-mag.com (2007) "Many people...
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|'Humanity and Energy' - my sentence outline about Renewable Energy
NEW - Nic Kehe English 102 Instructor Ryan Jones Humanity and Energy Since the introduction of electrical technology, and...
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|'parents have the main duty of teaching their kids' - Cambridge IELTS
3 - Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology...
Writing Feedbackredmomede3 - Jan 7, 2012 / redmomede3 - Jan 9, 2012
|Do we live better than our forefathers?
Writing Feedbackken99m - Jan 7, 2012 / ken99m - Jan 9, 2012
|'the inexorable march of science and technology' - my GRE issue essay
Writing Feedbackshirat - Jan 4, 2012 / shirat - Jan 8, 2012
|Is it important for people to get college education to get a good job
NEW - I'm in the twelfth grade, and it's hard to write essay please check. Some people think that college...
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|TOEFL "schools should give equal amount of money to sports activities and libraries"
2 - As far as I know you have to write a para about introduction! Actually use 5 para for writing...
Writing Feedbackmilk355 - Jan 7, 2012 / hedieh - Jan 8, 2012
|'questions authority can lead to an improvement in the quality of life' - SAT Essay
4 - Alright. I think it's definitely at least a 10, but I would lean more towards 11-12 If there were...
Writing Feedbacklilyappleyard - Jan 8, 2012 / egpctim - Jan 8, 2012
|IELTS: agricultural land degradation; Deforestation and over-cultivation
6 - A very excellent writing. Just find some article might be omitted. In the last sentence, 'almost doubling than the...
Writing Feedbackphuongthao15389 - Dec 24, 2011 / RyanIelts - Jan 7, 2012
|TOEFL essay "building shoping centers in my neighborhood"
3 - Thank you for the help! If there's anyone reading this thread, essay editing would also be appreciated....
Writing Feedbackmilk355 - Jan 6, 2012 / milk355 - Jan 6, 2012
|Toefl - Schools are not the only places to receive true education.
Writing FeedbackLoveYoung - Jan 5, 2012 / apv - Jan 6, 2012
|'real life as a live tutor to learn'; knowledge gained from experience or books
NEW - From the moment that human kind found out it is strongly necessary to struggling to be alive, learning has...
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|Capital punishment and the methods to execute
2 - In fact, there are some coun tries which have given up this penalty. But most of countries are keeping...
Writing Feedbacktiandteo - Jan 6, 2012 / hoanghai549 - Jan 6, 2012
|'researching criminal profiling of serial killers' - research essay
2 - great essay! however you might want to reword parts of paragraph seven, like when saying perhaps try...
Writing FeedbackDiane820 - Jan 3, 2012 / dylanpreston123 - Jan 5, 2012
|Interesting essay about weird poem (my favorite anything)
Writing Feedbacksonya15 - Jan 3, 2012 / ItsokaytoGaga - Jan 5, 2012
|'sportsmen are the ambassadors of a country' - IELTS essay
2 - Hi. l find the idea in this Essay is quite confuse, l am not really understanding your 2nd and...
Writing Feedbackfarina - Jan 5, 2012 / lenaincanada - Jan 5, 2012
|Compare the advantages and disadvantages of TV, books, radio
2 - meo71 -Some people argues that most radio's listeners -but it highly affects many sides of our life -That is...
Writing Feedbackmeo71 - Jan 5, 2012 / farina - Jan 5, 2012
|'different people have different answer' - ielts task 2. definite happiness
4 - hi your essay is too confusing.its sentences starts and abruptly stop without giving any clear meaning. There is to...
Writing Feedbacklllpppricky - Dec 19, 2011 / farina - Jan 5, 2012
|Child can learn from classmates different type of study; common language
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Jan 5, 2012 / hoanghai549 - Jan 5, 2012
|Describe the best transportation in your country
2 - Hi, I think this is a TOEFL essay rather than undergraduate admission? It's always better to leave sentence in...
Writing Feedbackkieungan - Jan 5, 2012 / basketball - Jan 5, 2012
|TOEFL-Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Jan 4, 2012 / hoanghai549 - Jan 5, 2012
|'The Internet area - blessing or curse?' - check & point out my mistakes
3 - In this current era the internet is deeply ingrained in most everyone's life. This modern invention has made life...
Writing Feedbackken99m - Jan 4, 2012 / DaeDae - Jan 4, 2012
|'Job satisfaction and environment' - IELTS test
NEW - i believe there have so many mistake that l had made in this essay, but how about the idea,...
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|(Television's Impact on children) my essay
3 - First, I will talk about the positive effects: - It helps child to collect his lessons by watching educational...
Writing Feedbackchess1990 - Jan 3, 2012 / chess1990 - Jan 4, 2012
|the rothschilds and controlling world money reserve
Writing Feedback3robi_in_Paris - Jan 2, 2012 / 3robi_in_Paris - Jan 4, 2012
|Would you vote for moving your capital? IELTS
3 - Only 2 1/2 paragraphs in general. One introduction and 2 paragraphs with a small one at the end...
Writing Feedbackmartinger - Jan 3, 2012 / martinger - Jan 4, 2012
|Reading is an important thing in all humans life
3 - Try to make smoother transitions between paragraphs (don't start with "Firstly" and "Secondly") and try to make a better...
Writing Feedback3moooor - Jan 4, 2012 / GrimRippah - Jan 4, 2012
|IELTS (a new shopping complex task, Auckland, New Zealand opinion)
NEW - THe tables and pie chart show in percentage terms the results of a survey of a new shopping complex...
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Jan 3, 2012 / — -
|It is important to take entrance test in universities in higher level like Nursing, Engineering, IT
4 - I don't understand this topic sentence. psycology -> psychology. Is that what you mean? according to -> thanks...
Writing Feedbackrajkamal11in - Dec 29, 2011 / princedynasty - Jan 3, 2012
|ielts young people are much more aware of and concerned about poverty, animals etc
Writing Feedbackamon2006 - Jan 2, 2012 / amon2006 - Jan 3, 2012
|Topic:"Why do we need to read books"
Writing Feedbackhungnguyen1998 - Dec 14, 2011 / amon2006 - Jan 2, 2012
|'children need both mother and father' - bringing children up issue
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|Increase the cost of fuel to solve the world's environmental problems?
NEW - I would appreciate if you give your important comments. I sincerely thank you for your assistant. The best...
Writing Feedbackroshan4 - Jan 1, 2012 / — -
|IELTS - column chart about mobile phone ownerships in 6 countries.
2 - A glance at the column chart provides the number of mobile phone owners in six European countries in two...
Writing Feedbackphuongthao15389 - Jan 1, 2012 / roshan4 - Jan 1, 2012
|'UK school spending' - IELTS writing - pie charts
Writing Feedbackphuongthao15389 - Dec 31, 2011 / phuongthao15389 - Jan 1, 2012
|Improving standards of living of developing countries through education?
Writing Feedbackmilamiyamiila - Jan 1, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Jan 1, 2012
|'History is a source of patriotism' - I E L T S - studying the past
6 - thank you Stella. can you check my last ielts essay about competitive sports ,i believe i did something right...
Writing Feedbackamon2006 - Dec 30, 2011 / amon2006 - Jan 1, 2012
|Argue for or against sweet advert should be banned
2 - i agree , but here we are talking about money , compagnies are investing millions dollars in their ads,...
Writing Feedbackqaisjan123 - Jan 1, 2012 / 3robi_in_Paris - Jan 1, 2012
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