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|'your own magical show stage' essay
Writing FeedbackPieng - Aug 23, 2012 / Macrusa - Sep 2, 2012
|Plan to build a new restaurant - do you support or oppose essay
2 - please se the attached file, you dedicated a large portion of the essay for strictly "personal" reasons. I...
Writing Feedbackneo1989 - Sep 1, 2012 / mohammmo - Sep 2, 2012
|Essay about National education in Hong Kong
3 - Not sure how to help but i'' provide you with my personal suggestions on some phrases. They are only...
Writing Feedbackwalterbb - Aug 27, 2012 / mohammmo - Sep 2, 2012
|TOEFL: Why visit MUSEUMS? Learn History &Culture, Making friends
3 - the topic is: Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people...
Writing Feedbackmeili luo - Sep 2, 2012 / layla88 - Sep 2, 2012
|"Arrival to the United States" - Culture Shock Essay
2 - I remember when I first arrived to the United States, my family and I was were, not was because...
Writing Feedbackrabeyar22 - Sep 1, 2012 / twinklae - Sep 1, 2012
|What do you want to change about your school?
5 - I think your essay needs some transitional expressions,such as :First of all, However,Finally... That would make your essay seem...
Writing Feedbacklayla88 - Sep 1, 2012 / Jason sp - Sep 1, 2012
|Fictional or Historical Character Essay: Selfless Selfishness
Writing Feedbackmolluscs - Aug 28, 2012 / pretty3295 - Sep 1, 2012
|IELTS- In some countries people are not taking care of their elderly relatives
8 - can't we say this includes : medical management and promoting regular performance of their daily life activities???...
Writing Feedbackclarkmc - Sep 1, 2012 / amitt - Sep 1, 2012
|My visit to a beautiful place (Hyderabad in India)
8 - Actually I know what you meant by your bolded letters but the thing is one must point out what's...
Writing Feedbackstephenie - Sep 1, 2012 / stephenie - Sep 1, 2012
|TOEFL--It is more important to relate well with people than studying hard at school.
Writing FeedbackJason sp - Sep 1, 2012 / ace - Sep 1, 2012
|Creativity can be dangerous when exercised excessively
Writing Feedbackjisthesmartest - Aug 31, 2012 / amitt - Sep 1, 2012
|The influence of globalization on the world's economics
2 - outer space means space beyond the earth's atmosphere or beyond the solar system. production of...
Writing Feedbacksweetdreamzz - Aug 27, 2012 / layla88 - Aug 31, 2012
|'improve and evolve' - SAT: to learn from the past in order to understand the present
Writing Feedbackbeibeibajin - Aug 26, 2012 / MoonMoon - Aug 31, 2012
|[IELTS] different preferences of leisure activities
Writing Feedbackclarkmc - Aug 26, 2012 / clarkmc - Aug 31, 2012
|'the progress of the nation' - spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding
3 - performing the same things repeatedly --- you just used the exact same phrase in the intro. ''the same set...
Writing Feedbackumasampath54 - Aug 30, 2012 / April April - Aug 31, 2012
|IELTS- balanced argument regarding the effects of technology
6 - You have given your stand in your introduction, so you have to support your stand throughout the essay or...
Writing Feedbackcharrmaine - Aug 30, 2012 / clarkmc - Aug 31, 2012
|TOEFL iBT integrated writing - Whether folic acids should be added in flour?
4 - You are Welcome Lin... It's better to practice skim reading and noting down facts in a manner only you...
Writing FeedbackCharles Lin - Aug 29, 2012 / dumi - Aug 31, 2012
|Schools should contain some obligatory courses that are necessary for students
Writing Feedbacklayla88 - Aug 30, 2012 / clarkmc - Aug 31, 2012
|IELTS - Job training is far important than broad-based education
2 - clarkmc It is a good writing, however,If I were instead of you I would change these sentences : ...
Writing Feedbackclarkmc - Aug 30, 2012 / layla88 - Aug 31, 2012
|'People change their life style' - doing the same things and avoiding changes
3 - in theirlife, ] lives , promote constantly improve throughout theirlifelives some times they feel fear sometimes...
Writing Feedbacksidhu52 - Aug 27, 2012 / charrmaine - Aug 30, 2012
|job satisfaction; employees feel more satisfied if their hard work is recognized
6 - Over all your essay has good structure and content. I have few suggestions for you 1. In introduction state...
Writing Feedbacksampath3319 - Aug 23, 2012 / umasampath54 - Aug 30, 2012
|[IELTS] Successful sport professionals and providing high salaries for them
3 - Over all your essay has good structure and content. I have few suggestions for you 1. In introduction state...
Writing Feedbacksampath3319 - Aug 26, 2012 / umasampath54 - Aug 30, 2012
|Television is responsible for destroying communication among friends and family;TOEFL
NEW - Television, the most famous entertainment tool in our life. During the last decade tons of new channel started their...
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|'Give good lectures' - what qualities are required of a good teacher?
2 - I think many of your sentences are too long and complex. And you use the words like: 'consequently,' 'to...
Writing Feedbacklengoctrang - Aug 27, 2012 / ace - Aug 30, 2012
|Should High School be Extended for 1 Extra Year?
2 - As students progress further into high school, they will have to eventually deal with an enormous problem. Time. During...
Writing FeedbackNotSoAverageJoe - Aug 29, 2012 / alooa95 - Aug 30, 2012
|'away from non smokers' - essay on smoking in public places
Writing Feedbackelizabethva - Aug 28, 2012 / ace - Aug 30, 2012
|IELTS : Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities
4 - Thanks Ahmad and Duminda for your review. I will remember your feedback when I write my next essay....
Writing FeedbackMurko - Aug 30, 2012 / Murko - Aug 30, 2012
|'Famous park in Sanadaj' - Describe your last summer holiday
Writing Feedbackblackklightt - Aug 30, 2012 / blackklightt - Aug 30, 2012
|[IELTS] schools are no longer needed?
Writing Feedbacklyao1690 - Aug 30, 2012 / dumi - Aug 30, 2012
|IELTS - Popularity of convenience foods wouldn't replace traditional foods
Writing Feedbackgolay - Aug 29, 2012 / amitt - Aug 30, 2012
|IELTS- Should government intervene with individual's family planning rights?
5 - False belief and religious traditions are also causes of over population. Also we must omit out blind faith that...
Writing Feedbackcharrmaine - Aug 27, 2012 / amitt - Aug 30, 2012
|HIGH SCHOOL STUDENTS WITH THE LEARNING OF ENGLISH: PROBLEMS AND SUGGESTIONS ESSAY
NEW - NAME: LE THI THUY TRANG CLASS: 10 ENGLISH LE QUY DON GIFTED HIGH SCHOOL HIGH SCHOOL STUDENTS WITH...
Writing Feedbacklengoctrang - Aug 29, 2012 / — -
|Agree or disagree with forcing a school uniform .
2 - Is this an introduction? Sorry, but what you wrote as an introduction does not include any crucial parts...
Writing FeedbackMohamedos - Aug 29, 2012 / ah_zafari - Aug 29, 2012
|IELTS ESSAY: Air transport is increasingly used to export agricultural products.
Writing Feedbackchristyzhongs - Aug 26, 2012 / golay - Aug 29, 2012
|IELTS: Is school too academic?
Writing Feedbackssani607 - Aug 27, 2012 / golay - Aug 29, 2012
|IELTS-Gender Equality at WORK or preferences for certain gender?
4 - By wrote "carers", I mean "caregivers" who usually look after kids or elders. Thank you, Malavika....
Writing Feedbackgolay - Aug 21, 2012 / golay - Aug 29, 2012
|ESSAY: Is life better in a city or in a small town?
6 - Thank you for all of your ideas and suggestions! All of your input has helped me and I appreciate...
Writing FeedbackBillabongfox - Aug 28, 2012 / Billabongfox - Aug 29, 2012
|[TOEFL] Attending university classes should be required or optional-Feedback
Writing Feedbackultraann - Aug 20, 2012 / ultraann - Aug 28, 2012
|Solid education system is the only critical factor to development of country
3 - Solid Education systems paves the way for Research & development in lot of field (defence/food/metal/transport) that bring new technologies...
Writing Feedbackandi2013 - Aug 27, 2012 / amitt - Aug 28, 2012
|Physical exercise is important issue, should be a required part of every school day
4 - I think so much disection of essay is also not fruitful... if one contributor is giving his/her views in...
Writing Feedbacksiminbiazar - Aug 10, 2012 / amitt - Aug 28, 2012
|'choosing big cities is wise' - Do you prefer big cities or small towns, to live in?
5 - ---------- heheheeeeeeee .... this is really interesting.... you guys talk in Farsi in an English forum... so, may...
Writing FeedbackMoonMoon - Aug 23, 2012 / dumi - Aug 28, 2012
|Essay: Agree or Disagree: There really are no better teachers than parents
Writing FeedbackMoonMoon - Aug 27, 2012 / dumi - Aug 28, 2012
|TOEFL IBT - Do televisions or movies infuence our behavior?
6 - Dear Duminda, I found you a good adviser. would you please have a look on my essays and leave...
Writing Feedbacktrungandhoai - Aug 24, 2012 / MoonMoon - Aug 28, 2012
|'getting a connection' - When people succeed, it is because of hard work?
Writing Feedbackamrayoub - Aug 27, 2012 / MoonMoon - Aug 27, 2012
|'Finance equally' - [IELTS] Prevention is better than cure?
Writing FeedbackTomy6240 - Aug 26, 2012 / Tomy6240 - Aug 27, 2012
|TOEFL iBT - Having a teacher or studying along?
Writing Feedbacktrungandhoai - Aug 25, 2012 / dumi - Aug 26, 2012
|IELTS;High sales are due to requirements, not because of power of advertisements
8 - i have read from a book (writing for ielts)Introduction should describe the situation or the problem ,discuss the opposing...
Writing Feedbackumasampath54 - Aug 25, 2012 / clarkmc - Aug 26, 2012
|'Education system and culture, traditions, and economy' - Compare/Contrast Essay
Writing Feedbackmsjessicaplatz - Aug 26, 2012 / ace - Aug 26, 2012
|'the hardest question for a teenage boy or girl' - article on "I want to become a..."
4 - hi! First of all, you should enter the name of the university you are applying to and explain...
Writing FeedbackSweetCandy - Aug 26, 2012 / anurag24 - Aug 26, 2012
|TOEFL - Do you agree with the viewpoint that people are now easier to becom educated
5 - Many country countries have even established a compulsory policy to decrease the rate of illiterate....
Writing Feedbackee470474137 - Aug 18, 2012 / ichenk - Aug 26, 2012
|Alternative form of transport and car ownership.
Writing FeedbackHuongPinky - Aug 25, 2012 / HuongPinky - Aug 26, 2012
|LIFESTYLES comparison essay - families in Asian and Western countries
3 - It needs more emotion and excitement to capture the reader's attention. Has alot of information and substance, but kind...
Writing Feedbacktuan_minh929 - Aug 24, 2012 / freakosaur - Aug 26, 2012
|'leading, making quick decisions, patiently helping others' - A good leader
Writing Feedbackneo1989 - Aug 24, 2012 / dumi - Aug 25, 2012
|Major cities provides best understanding about characteristics of a society
NEW - could please any check this essay and correct my points. Thank you by advance. To understand the most...
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|'technological development' -advanced technology widens the gap between rich and poor
2 - "has helped each and every the individuals" check this sentence it irks me. "For example earlier mobile was...
Writing FeedbackLIGE - Aug 25, 2012 / amitt - Aug 25, 2012
|'parents will give their sympathy' - What are some of the qualities of a good parent?
2 - Dear Thao Nguyen, After reading your essay, I have to admit that your writing is quite well ( though...
Writing Feedbackthaonguyen1901 - Aug 24, 2012 / trungandhoai - Aug 25, 2012
|'very essential to any people' - TOEFL IBT - Why do people need to attend university?
Writing Feedbacktrungandhoai - Aug 19, 2012 / trungandhoai - Aug 25, 2012
|My School Days (school article)
5 - @KhanhZ..thanks a lot for your help :) @ah_zafari..I see I've got to improve a lot..thanks fr your help!...
Writing Feedbackstephenie - Aug 20, 2012 / stephenie - Aug 25, 2012
|IELTS Task 1: Changes in Town_Maps
5 - @Artin: So glad you found my comments useful. I'll try my best to help with your next essays :)...
Writing FeedbackApril April - Aug 19, 2012 / April April - Aug 25, 2012
|Benefits from Extracurricular Activities
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