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|governments waste millions of workers' dollars each year their space programs.
Writing Feedbacksoroush - Oct 5, 2011 / soroush - Oct 30, 2011
|corrections in my essay "aspects of teenage life"
18 - heyy, this is really good. after reading the first few sentences, i was nervous that your claim was a...
Writing Feedbackhafsa abid - Apr 7, 2011 / joeservidio - Oct 30, 2011
|why more school leavers unable find a job?
NEW - After they complete their studies, some students are unable to find jobs that would be a common phenomenon in...
Writing Feedbackamanda guo - Oct 30, 2011 / — -
|Balance the balance of freedom and responsibility
3 - Really good essay (: One's most precious thing in life is freedom. Freedom cannot exist only by...
Writing Feedbackwangyida - Oct 26, 2011 / anisemc - Oct 29, 2011
|Stereotype essay (races); Imagine having no friends in school just because of your skin color
Writing FeedbackJAM843 - Apr 30, 2010 / Uzi987 - Oct 29, 2011
|TOEFL- Sometimes a situation demands people to do thing they do not like!
2 - The topic you chose to write on was extraordinarily awesome. You could do so much better under this topic...
Writing Feedbackmonamona - Oct 29, 2011 / Iridescent - Oct 29, 2011
|The Cause I Believe In - Uphold Peace
NEW - "If you wish to experience peace, provide peace for another." Mahatma Gandhi. Peace is not something you own;...
Writing FeedbackIridescent - Oct 29, 2011 / — -
|Studying the English language in an English-Speaking country is the best
4 - English is a really ancient language... It had been changing since the middle ages and yet known from the...
Writing Feedbackdhammika1973 - May 25, 2011 / Iridescent - Oct 29, 2011
|'education is the backbone of success' - personal essay
2 - What is the question you are responding to? I feel that the premise is maybe a bit too pedestrian...
Writing Feedbacksarahadams - Oct 26, 2011 / AussieTechie - Oct 29, 2011
|SAT essay: Do incidents from the past continue to influence the present?
3 - Thank you for your feedback Nityaa. :) The sentence in the first paragraph, "it is not hard to...
Writing FeedbackLily Rose - Oct 27, 2011 / Lily Rose - Oct 29, 2011
|Sat: Creativity is like eating and respiration for people.
Writing Feedbackheba - Oct 28, 2011 / sashnv - Oct 28, 2011
|'The only factor in grading should be examinations?' - toefl writing
2 - I find your essay great, your meaning about 'The only factor in grading should be examinations?'is total clear. Your...
Writing Feedbackmakme - Oct 26, 2011 / Sindthia13 - Oct 28, 2011
|'Men and women are not equally suited for the same tasks' - GRE ANALYTICAL WRITING
Writing Feedbackgre_nov - Oct 28, 2011 / gre_nov - Oct 28, 2011
|discuss upsetting or controversial problems by text-messaging OR voice-messaging?
Writing Feedbackzmengran - Oct 28, 2011 / — -
|'congratulations by FTMS to all graduates' - Press Release
NEW - Example Press Release Congratulations to the FTMS College Graduates who have successfully completed their studies and was awarded...
Writing Feedbackisai - Oct 28, 2011 / — -
|historical women in US history
2 - "No matter where you are around the world" "no matter where you are" "no matter" change those first...
Writing Feedbacksarahadams - Oct 27, 2011 / NeonGhost - Oct 27, 2011
|IELTS (four charts show the death reasons of registered Indians and total population)
2 - These pie charts represent the main causes of death (Injuries, Circulatory, Cancers, Respiratory, Infectious and Others) for registered Indians...
Writing FeedbackTomLin - Oct 23, 2011 / EF_Susan - Oct 27, 2011
|European people spent most on the basic needs like food, drinks and tobacco
NEW - Hello. Please help me check whether emphasized words and underlined phrases and sentences are written in proper ways. Thank...
Writing Feedbackwhitney - Oct 27, 2011 / — -
|CLEP 30 min. Practice Essay: Colleges need to have a mandatory core curriculum...
3 - Thanks for the input, EF_Susan! I actually saw those mistakes, but not during the 30 minutes so I...
Writing Feedbackultramanjones - Oct 24, 2011 / ultramanjones - Oct 26, 2011
|"Love" - essay on the reflection of the notion/idea of love
3 - artists draw and , paint and sculpt I wouldn't spend large amounts of time with someone and ,...
Writing Feedbackscarlet67 - Oct 24, 2011 / Chigozie - Oct 26, 2011
|Compare/ Contrast: Intellectual vs. Ideological in the new age.
Writing FeedbackDevinJCan - Oct 24, 2011 / DevinJCan - Oct 26, 2011
|The role of parents in school: students to study more and be responsible
Writing Feedbackcelu - Jul 4, 2011 / EF_Susan - Oct 26, 2011
|TOEFL_Some prefer to work for a company, some prefer to work for themselves.
Writing Feedbackmonamona - Oct 26, 2011 / soshianet - Oct 26, 2011
|'how society perceives of your identity' - advice on my book essay
2 - If you can write an intro paragraph like this one above, I don't think you need to worry about...
Writing Feedbacklollypop12 - Oct 22, 2011 / Rajiv - Oct 26, 2011
|Do you think it is the good idea for a student to have a part time job?
4 - Hi Nowaday is wrong should writ nowadays . Also it is better to separate your paragraphs. Best wish...
Writing Feedbackshinbonis - Oct 24, 2011 / monamona - Oct 26, 2011
|It is better to have one or two close friends than to have a large number of casuals
4 - Thankyou Soshianet and Lena for helping me. I think I need more time to revise my essay properly. wish...
Writing Feedbackbahareh - Oct 24, 2011 / bahareh - Oct 24, 2011
|Freedom from stress and hunger.
2 - I'm sorry but I couldn't even get through your first paragraph! Sorry to be so brutal but it obvious...
Writing Feedbackisabellaclaudia - Oct 24, 2011 / daniel44992 - Oct 24, 2011
|'An excellent teacher and a good friend' - describe the best teacher you ever met
Writing Feedbacklena1202 - Oct 22, 2011 / lena1202 - Oct 24, 2011
|How important is it to look beyond superficial appearances?
3 - nice, thanks...
Writing Feedbackhugh_ng - Oct 23, 2011 / hugh_ng - Oct 24, 2011
|Toefl: Attending a live performance is exciting, amusing and energetic.
NEW - Some people prefer to stay at home and watching a live event on television; however, others would rather attend...
Writing Feedbacksoshianet - Oct 23, 2011 / — -
|History - which academic class has been your favorite
3 - Nice phrasing! your interest in the subject really comes across! I'm guessing you want to major in history? :D...
Writing Feedbackcapriciousprite - Oct 23, 2011 / artiQlate - Oct 23, 2011
|Charts; why adults decide to study/how costs of adult education should be shared
NEW - The charts below show the results of a survey of education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults...
Writing Feedbackhuynhthanhhuyen - Oct 23, 2011 / — -
|TOEFL;In 20 yrs, fewer cars in use ? only when the substitutions are available
Writing FeedbackAuguste - Oct 13, 2011 / Auguste - Oct 23, 2011
|'globalization brings different cultures together' - IELTS
3 - Its really so kind of you that you reviewed my essay. I posted few essays on some other sites...
Writing Feedbackgargankita - Oct 22, 2011 / gargankita - Oct 23, 2011
|Jordan is an image of success, talent and inspiration - meeting with him would be my dream
2 - If I could be a famous athlete, this would sure be Michael Jordan, the best basketball player of all...
Writing Feedbacktrantrongduc - Oct 22, 2011 / MellyLove - Oct 22, 2011
|Family Tree Essay- Introduction
4 - You're very welcome. I'm asking because you are actually posting a course work essay here in the undergraduate admission...
Writing FeedbackSalisburya - Oct 22, 2011 / cloudwatcher - Oct 22, 2011
|THEN THERE WAS ME
3 - This essay is really good. It is heartfelt and sincere, but never whiny, which is also a good thing....
Writing Feedbackcollege_bound17 - Oct 20, 2011 / Zeugma - Oct 21, 2011
|'headed for Sioux Falls, SD' - My presence and the community
NEW - Two days ago, a few underclassmen, classmates and I were headed for Sioux Falls, SD in our big yellow...
Writing Feedbackjameson1 - Oct 21, 2011 / — -
|'Studies abroad and the cultural aspect of the experience' - TOEFL
2 - Studying abroad is one of very common things that students do, and they have different reasons for that. I...
Writing FeedbackMideo29 - Oct 21, 2011 / BunyodBek - Oct 21, 2011
|Do violence and immorality in the media make our society more dangerous and immoral?
3 - Violence and immortality have raised many questions recently.(too plain sentence, add something catchy to begin your speech) The tough...
Writing Feedbackhugh_ng - Oct 16, 2011 / mvlauria94 - Oct 21, 2011
|'doing things we don't enjoy' - TOEFL Essay
3 - Thanks a lot for your valuable notes my friend! What do you think of my writing overall? The structure...
Writing FeedbackMideo29 - Oct 21, 2011 / Mideo29 - Oct 21, 2011
|"This is the third time you've almost lost it" - Free Response Essay
Writing Feedbackflipwhit - Oct 20, 2011 / flipwhit - Oct 21, 2011
|TOEFL-help from the government is often not necessary
4 - of course you can but in formal and professional writing, you should avoid using short sentence without a full...
Writing Feedbackhihihiah - Oct 19, 2011 / hugh_ng - Oct 21, 2011
|Do you think long distance flight should be banned?
2 - Individuals typically electconsider airplane as a relatively convenient, time-efficienct, and economical way oflong travel for a long time ....
Writing FeedbackBingbing - Oct 20, 2011 / dumi - Oct 21, 2011
|'Afraid of murders all my life' - Essay about my fear
3 - I think you used too much "fears" in the last paragraph so maybe you need to paraphrase. And maybe...
Writing Feedbacknaomiyeahnaomi - Oct 20, 2011 / ljxlrdjxdr - Oct 20, 2011
|Cause and Effect for Biological Purposes of Alcohol
Writing FeedbackBrezzySwaggg18 - Oct 19, 2011 / BrezzySwaggg18 - Oct 20, 2011
|"Respect everyone" is the most important school rule - O level
Writing Feedbackwraithseeker - Oct 18, 2011 / EF_Susan - Oct 20, 2011
|Identity Essay: My Experiences in Atheism
NEW - I totally bombed this essay the first time I tried to write it. Completely missed the whole point of...
Writing Feedbackjohnnymayer - Oct 20, 2011 / — -
|'I Live alone here at Rowosari street, Indonesia' - About My self
3 - Ratih : Excuse me ,may I enter this room ? Rosidah : Yes,please. I have never seen you before....
Writing Feedbackrosidah - Oct 2, 2011 / rosidah - Oct 20, 2011
|'my ideal image' a person you admire, and say why you admire hime/her
4 - tnx, i think it needs some more details, but im allowed to use 100 words in this essay. anyway...
Writing Feedbackfarnoosh1362 - Oct 19, 2011 / farnoosh1362 - Oct 20, 2011
|Having good co-workers - TOEFL Exam
5 - Merely google, searching by using the topic (question) of TOEFL or IELST you will find many sample essays. ...
Writing Feedbackshinju - Oct 11, 2011 / engstu - Oct 20, 2011
|About Betsy Hart, an adoptive writter (her writing style is evocative and simple)
NEW - Betsy Hart is a countrywide syndicated journalist for the Scripps Howard News Service. She is prominent for writing about...
Writing Feedbacksaxiibo10 - Oct 19, 2011 / — -
|Cause and Effect Essay on the power of words
Writing Feedbackmeagain - Oct 19, 2011 / — -
|Let's Marry! - issues of fake marriage in the immigration system
2 - This is what I would personally do in order to improve flow and grammar. There is one major problem...
Writing Feedbackbbish520 - Oct 17, 2011 / disaznboii19148 - Oct 19, 2011
|"Buddhism is gradually disappearing" - Buddhism in India
Writing Feedbackgivengift - Sep 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Oct 19, 2011
|Essay that identifies central argument from a a Homeless Man's Perspective
2 - Her statement holds true on several occasions ---'Occasions' doesn't seem like the right word to use here. Homeless...
Writing Feedbackhannbanana - Oct 17, 2011 / EF_Susan - Oct 19, 2011
|IT IS REALITY IT MIGHT LOOK LIKE STUPIDITY.
Writing FeedbackORTEGA EFE - Sep 28, 2011 / ORTEGA EFE - Oct 19, 2011
|'Which Way to Go' - my reflective essay
3 - What is the question for this essay? As Liebe has said, you need to add hook in the beginning...
Writing Feedbackvgrommes - Oct 18, 2011 / callmeapple - Oct 19, 2011
|IELTS essay, what benefits do skyscrapers bring?
Writing Feedbackdna - Oct 15, 2011 / dna - Oct 19, 2011
|Toefl IBT Writing, Topic: In order to be well-informed, ..
4 - Nowadays, people get more and more information from the media. Some people believe and feel enough about the sources,...
Writing Feedbackrita66q - Oct 14, 2011 / engstu - Oct 19, 2011
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