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|Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
2 - Two things: 1. There should be a space after comma. 2. This, for example: "a society flourishing there...
Writing Feedbacksanyagoyal1988 - Sep 11, 2012 / ace - Sep 18, 2012
|Toefl: Do you agree or disagree? "Automobile has improved modern life"
Writing FeedbackMoonMoon - Sep 17, 2012 / ace - Sep 18, 2012
|Plase Evaluate my essay for Toefl - Category - Aggree or Disagree
4 - ...
Writing Feedbacknamrta - Sep 9, 2012 / meili luo - Sep 18, 2012
|IELTS Essay: Pollution, traffic congestion and solutions
2 - Drivers should be charged for congestion fee, thus this will force people to use public transport rather than private...
Writing Feedbackquy - Sep 17, 2012 / monajha - Sep 17, 2012
|[IELTS TASK 2] Developing countries are focusing on tourism. Reason and your opinion.
2 - Nowadays, an increasing number of impoverished nations are focusing on the development of tourism. It(There) is no doubt that...
Writing Feedbackrtfbvg - Sep 17, 2012 / quy - Sep 17, 2012
|Successful sports professionals - international reputation of the nation role
3 - certain high schools require students to learn foreign language while other let students learn subjects of their choice.which policy...
Writing Feedbackgag379 - Sep 13, 2012 / bhupender - Sep 17, 2012
|Love or Jealousy paragraph- Is this to harsh?
2 - is stronger because it thieves and festers off the ever-present pillars of Truth and Reality. Yeah it is...
Writing FeedbackTooDamn_Funky - Sep 16, 2012 / Pirateking - Sep 16, 2012
|best choice for a particular groups; Traditional and International music value
4 - Hi, I think following sentences describe the importance of international and traditional music. How could I improve these any...
Writing Feedbackquy - Sep 15, 2012 / quy - Sep 16, 2012
|IELTS Essay: Talent or Training
NEW - Could you please check my essay and give me some feedback? I would appreciate it. Topic: It is...
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|healthy body - learning prevention will lead to many useful things in our life
Writing Feedbacktaher abdallah - Sep 14, 2012 / oanhmiss2 - Sep 16, 2012
|A person should never make an important decision alone? I dont agree
Writing Feedbackhungvud - Sep 12, 2012 / hungvud - Sep 15, 2012
|SOCIAL NETWORKING SITES (pros and cons)
2 - Some thoughts: - Try not to use 'also' so much (synonyms: too, as well, in addition, additionally, along...
Writing Feedbackmonajha - Sep 13, 2012 / nikhi - Sep 15, 2012
|Do you prefer using machines or doing work by hand? 'Machines are quite precise'
4 - Some of your sentences seems inaccurate and unnecessary. For example: Machines do not make any mistakes. (Technically not true...
Writing Feedbackmeili luo - Sep 15, 2012 / Shay87 - Sep 15, 2012
|Toefl: Do you agree or disagree? "Grades (marks) encourage students to learn more."
2 - I recommand you to give some personal experiences or qoute some cases . It is not thorough enough ....
Writing FeedbackMelika Abasi - Sep 15, 2012 / zer000 - Sep 15, 2012
|Autism Vs vaccines essay - the Controversy
2 - Essay sounded awesome! I have a younger sister with Autism, and I loved this! Do you at least have...
Writing Feedbackleshiro - Sep 2, 2012 / amcd - Sep 14, 2012
|Report-International survey about attitudes to job
Writing Feedbackkittyas - Sep 14, 2012 / kittyas - Sep 14, 2012
|Crime, population, and taxpayer's role - essay
NEW - Can you help with other essay please? Write about the following topic: In many cities crime is increasing. Why...
Writing Feedbackoptal - Sep 13, 2012 / — -
|'Living with parents and generation gap' - Topic: iBT writing
Writing Feedbackmahtabk - Sep 9, 2012 / krishnakant - Sep 13, 2012
|TOEFL: There is nothing uneducated people can teach educated people. Do you agree?
4 - Your essay is very good, organized your thoughts well..but you had some grammatical errors...i mentioned two..so like go over...
Writing Feedbackthaonguyen1901 - Sep 12, 2012 / Shayke_96 - Sep 13, 2012
|"Luck or success' - Is success in life earned, or do people succeed because they are lucky?
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|'self-satisfaction' - GRE:True success can be measured
3 - Thanks Dumi...
Writing Feedbackmahsaa - Sep 9, 2012 / mahsaa - Sep 13, 2012
|Does our happiness come at the cost of others' misery?
2 - I strongly recommend you to separate your essay to 3-4 paragraph. It will be more clear to indicate your...
Writing Feedbackandshewashappy8 - Sep 9, 2012 / zer000 - Sep 12, 2012
|brings equality, create unity; Should schools strickly enforce dress codes?
5 - You made some very good points in your essay. I think school dress codes also help keep students more...
Writing Feedbackhp709 - Sep 11, 2012 / chess1921 - Sep 12, 2012
|Toefl Topic: Do you prefer living in a place with diverse climate or a place ...
2 - Writing in "first person" means that you are writing as if you are speaking it, in real time. It...
Writing FeedbackMoonMoon - Sep 11, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 12, 2012
|GRE issue topic-The surest indicator of a great nation
2 - I think it's a great, well thought out essay. I guess there are some problems with commas, like: ...
Writing Feedbackmujunlin - Sep 12, 2012 / ace - Sep 12, 2012
|IELTS essay; assess this essay and show me my mistakes?
3 - I wrote another essay, i hope it could score better. The bar chart above, shows the proportion of...
Writing Feedbackfedail - Sep 8, 2012 / fedail - Sep 12, 2012
|Toefl -Many people believe that it is very important to make large amounts of money,
4 - O'K i will try to explain what I mean when I say concrete introduction. You should generalize what bot...
Writing Feedbacknamrta - Sep 11, 2012 / eradulova - Sep 12, 2012
|The world is changing fast, people are less happy.
Writing FeedbackChrisLiu - Aug 28, 2012 / IMQ - Sep 12, 2012
|Everything was silent. I did not hear the heavy drumming sounds of the dog breathing.
2 - Hi :) You have done a very nice job with your essay. It is very descriptive, and definitely takes...
Writing Feedbackzmelman - Sep 10, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 11, 2012
|IELTS TASK 1; Figures of the hamburgers annual sales of Marry
2 - The line graph illustrates the figures of theMarry'sannual hamburgers annual salesof Marryat his restaurant. The report will give a...
Writing Feedbackweareone_08 - Sep 11, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 11, 2012
|TOEFL: University student should not be required to attend classes.
3 - Your essay is quite good...but i think you should revise the essay and look out for all those silly...
Writing Feedbackmissbjang - Sep 11, 2012 / Shayke_96 - Sep 11, 2012
|'free entrance to museums and art galleries' -revise my IELTS writing task 2
6 - Hm, you didn't add anything useful. You just rewrote Grama's input... You should add someting more unique....
Writing Feedbackoptal - Sep 10, 2012 / ace - Sep 11, 2012
|'The quest to be Lake City's new mayor' - Argument writing
Writing Feedbackgolnar - Aug 15, 2012 / sanyagoyal1988 - Sep 11, 2012
|[IELTS]Men and women employed in full-time jobs have to share evenly household chores
3 - In your second as well as third para you didn't mention the present situation/modern world in which Men and...
Writing FeedbackTomy6240 - Sep 10, 2012 / amittt - Sep 11, 2012
|'overseas investment by companies' - IELTS Essay
Writing Feedbackqinying - Sep 8, 2012 / qinying - Sep 11, 2012
|IELTS MODERN SOCIETIES NEED SPECIALIST IN CERTAIN FIELDS
3 - It depends on your opinion. If you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages you should mention more positive...
Writing Feedbackdidiconopidi - Sep 9, 2012 / ah_zafari - Sep 11, 2012
|IELTS Essay: Scientific research sould be carried out by the governments or not?
3 - You have repeated the word "some" frequently. Synonyms for "some" could be various, several etc.....
Writing Feedbackrocia0717 - Aug 26, 2012 / Tomy6240 - Sep 10, 2012
|Obamacare: Heading Down? (against the health care programs promoted)
5 - You should look at the advantages and disadvantages of Obamacare then come up with a stronger thesis which will...
Writing Feedbackjamessuh - Feb 6, 2011 / oscarsalmons - Sep 10, 2012
|TOEFL: Making large amounts of money or earning a comfortable living ?
4 - Thanks for corrections by contributors, I want to ask you people if we made corrections how to make improvements?...
Writing Feedbackthaonguyen1901 - Sep 7, 2012 / amitt - Sep 10, 2012
|Traffic Congestion - The fundamental problem of modern cities
Writing FeedbackArienne - Sep 9, 2012 / Amany - Sep 10, 2012
|IELTS - give us your view about engertainment and educative museums .
3 - Hi, For this kind of essay, you must discuss both views in two paragraphs (one for entertainment and...
Writing FeedbackSaeed7 - Sep 6, 2012 / April April - Sep 10, 2012
|College is a waste of money and time/ ROI in sending teenagers to University
2 - Haha that would be true if you're speaking of community colleges or low-mid tier colleges. But the benefits and...
Writing Feedbackzhuyian - Sep 5, 2012 / Dactylic126 - Sep 9, 2012
|IELTS: Causes and solution of today teenagers' behaviour
3 - nguyen has offered excellent help for you by editing your essay. ------- when you say parents'performance, the...
Writing Feedbackstraw99 - Sep 6, 2012 / dumi - Sep 8, 2012
|IELTS: punishment policies in schools
2 - This sounds better if you write it in direct speech; Schools adopt their policies to ensure that there...
Writing Feedbacklsalamon - Sep 8, 2012 / dumi - Sep 8, 2012
|Internet, social networks and Internet to humankind - IELTS
4 - This sentence does not provide much enthusiasm to your reader. In my view, you better state your opinion...
Writing Feedbackenchanted178 - Sep 8, 2012 / dumi - Sep 8, 2012
|GRE;People are too quick to take action; issue based essay
NEW - Issue: "People are too quick to take action;instead they should stop to think of possible consequence of what they...
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|Difference between present and past generation about stress
5 - Give some examples and explain the example: such as stress due to study,money pressure,stress to employer due to meet...
Writing Feedbacksarahira - Sep 4, 2012 / Siddharthvora01 - Sep 8, 2012
|GRE: students choose their fields on study based on their long-term career goals
2 - Open the introduction with a "Motivator" and then write the thesis statement. What you wrote as an introduction...
Writing Feedbackmohammmo - Sep 8, 2012 / ah_zafari - Sep 8, 2012
|Toefl ibt :Salary increases and promotions to new positions are not the only ways to
2 - It is unquestionable that salary increases and promotions to new positionsare very common ways to reward employees for their...
Writing Feedbacklebay153 - Sep 7, 2012 / dumi - Sep 7, 2012
|Topic : The effect of the illiteracy
3 - try lengthier paragraphs. the diction is interesting though, but this could be a lot better with mroe substance...
Writing Feedbackcaihuu - Sep 6, 2012 / katiecohen96 - Sep 6, 2012
|Students should value their present time and use it right so that they will never regret later.
Writing Feedbackthaonguyen1901 - Sep 6, 2012 / thaonguyen1901 - Sep 6, 2012
|'the shortest and the safest goals' - Why do you think people attend universities?
4 - Hi Moonmoon I am just new. I'd like to comment your essaybriefly as follows: 1/ Your ideal is so...
Writing FeedbackMoonMoon - Sep 1, 2012 / caihuu - Sep 6, 2012
|Topic: studying abroad & studying in Viet Nam
NEW - Some people would like to attend universities in VN while others love studying abroad. Although both studying abroad or...
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|'an imaginary pupil' - Rousseau essay (english lit)
NEW - okay first off i am terribly in english i just would apperisate it if someone would look over and...
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|Scandals are useful - they stir up all people in any level of classification
Writing Feedbackhsn - Sep 4, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 5, 2012
|Compare the contributions of artists to society - 'scientist is more important'
Writing FeedbackLena05031 - Sep 5, 2012 / Lena05031 - Sep 5, 2012
|ESSAY ON ALCOHOL - lowered or not?
3 - Thanks so much for the response. I did realize my mistakes and about how i kept asking questions, i...
Writing Feedbacksillyxo - Sep 5, 2012 / sillyxo - Sep 5, 2012
|Museum; see things in reality and feel their texture - it's unforgettable moment
4 - An interesting Topic. I think your writing is rather short and need some ideas. I suggest you some more...
Writing Feedbackgag379 - Sep 4, 2012 / thaonguyen1901 - Sep 5, 2012
|Pets should be treated as family members or not? 'pets are also live creatures'
5 - Thank you guys, especially Jennifer for your precise responses. Although I was overtime for this writing ( 40 mins...
Writing Feedbackthaonguyen1901 - Sep 4, 2012 / thaonguyen1901 - Sep 5, 2012
|Paid work in children - My discussion essay written following writing task 2 IELTS
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