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|IELTS Topic: Should Immigrants adapt to adopted country?
NEW - Nowadays, more people are migrating to other countries than ever before. In order to become integrated into society in...
Writing Feedbackjuliet0611 - Sep 7, 2011 / — -
|Writing ielts task 1_ Diagram: The water cycle
5 - yes i also agree that you should use the diagram below or above or whatever since in your answer,...
Writing Feedbacklylong - Aug 11, 2011 / bangshws - Sep 6, 2011
|Sports and social activities can offer the same significant things that classes and libraries offer
5 - Yes, I aware of that~~but could you please tell me how to write a good conclusion to this essay....
Writing Feedbackchxz1020 - Sep 4, 2011 / chxz1020 - Sep 6, 2011
|How I Learned My Strength-Personal Essay about something that impacted thinking
NEW - Topic: An incident or experience that impacted your thinking or development. Please let me know if I answered...
Writing Feedbackblynnleon - Sep 6, 2011 / — -
|"create a positive movement in my city first" -A company to build a large factory
NEW - A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and...
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Sep 6, 2011 / — -
|How important is sports in your country?
2 - I agree with what they said before me because they caught most of the errors and I also don't...
Writing Feedbackisabellaclaudia - Sep 6, 2011 / blynnleon - Sep 6, 2011
|"an unforgettable 3-day trip to the countryside" - Your last summer holiday.
NEW - It was an unforgettable 3-day trip to the countryside to visit my grandparents last summer holiday. My family decided...
Writing Feedbackviolonc_21 - Sep 6, 2011 / — -
|technology will completely replace the traditional teacher in classroom. Do you agree
Writing Feedbackmehdi0912 - Aug 25, 2011 / isabellaclaudia - Sep 6, 2011
|Family life these days has been affected by the hectic lives people lead.
2 - Your essay is excellent. There are only a few mistakes. From the time immemorial, parents hold the role...
Writing Feedbackisabellaclaudia - Sep 6, 2011 / Scientiana - Sep 6, 2011
|Space travel in the moon is a big step for mankind, but didn't contribute to our life
3 - Thanks Isabella for you valuable advise.I also noticed that.I dont know why my brain always get frozen if I...
Writing FeedbackRini - Sep 5, 2011 / Rini - Sep 6, 2011
|children engagement in paid work-ielts task 2
2 - i like your essay,it was succinct throughout. the ideas are clearly elaborated with some examples but it would be...
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Sep 5, 2011 / isabellaclaudia - Sep 6, 2011
|Is the effort involving inpursuing nay goal valuable, even if the goal is not reached
2 - prompt: Is the effort involving inpursuing nay goal valuable, even if the goal is not reached? Life is...
Writing Feedbackanangelaa - Sep 5, 2011 / Dhillon - Sep 6, 2011
|"Money should be spend to resolve global issues first, not wasted on space" - ielts
NEW - Topic: Should governments spend money on space exploration, or should they spend the money on problems here first? ...
Writing Feedbackritu_168 - Sep 5, 2011 / — -
|Should or not restrict on artists? ---Ielts Test
2 - Artists, who bring us creativitiesto the world of imagination , always desire to show all their imaginationcreativeness. But someone...
Writing FeedbackMai Chu - Sep 3, 2011 / Denice - Sep 5, 2011
|IELTS- Advertising and its impact on high sales and real needs of people
2 - I must say that your writing is not successful. Three reasons given are not convincing and logical. There are...
Writing Feedbackmkm123 - Sep 3, 2011 / beepro21 - Sep 5, 2011
|Is television a dangerous influence on teenagers behavior? (Argumentative Essay)
2 - Television is one of the greatest inventions ever. Over the past few decades it has evolved a lot from...
Writing Feedbackpulkit9999 - Sep 5, 2011 / Bobur - Sep 5, 2011
|people who go outside are more successful and happier than people who stay in village
2 - Should people stay in the village or go outside of it? ---I added some words to improve the grammar....
Writing Feedbackyc9055 - Aug 31, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Sep 4, 2011
|The importance of natural resources (forests, animals and clean water)
16 - Ana Maria, ARness and EF_Kevin. I would like to answer to your replies in order of their appearance....
Writing Feedbackbirdman - Aug 19, 2011 / birdman - Sep 4, 2011
|Improving the quality of education by not increasing teacher's salary.
2 - Higher salary does not necessarily mean teaching improvement. Whether a teacher is willing to or has the ability to...
Writing FeedbackHua0755 - Sep 4, 2011 / Icecreamquest - Sep 4, 2011
|the proportion of older people，postive and negative effects.-----IELTS
Writing FeedbackIcecreamquest - Sep 3, 2011 / Icecreamquest - Sep 4, 2011
|IELTS:some people think change is always a good thing but,some others don't
NEW - Task-1:- he charts give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000,and the marital status of...
Writing Feedbacksobin - Sep 4, 2011 / — -
|The media should consider famous people's lives
8 - I disagree that the media pay too much attention to the famous people's lives. From my point of view,...
Writing Feedbacksoshianet - Aug 24, 2011 / nathant - Sep 3, 2011
|"Mazes, Jigsaw puzzles.." - is this type of essay usable?
2 - It's a very creative start!! I like the idea and can see your voice through the piece, but for...
Writing Feedbackcornonthecobb - Sep 3, 2011 / niclarson - Sep 3, 2011
|IELTS2; Old, historic buildings need to be preserved or destroyed and replaced?
Writing Feedbackgsmaan - Aug 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Sep 3, 2011
|The reasons of increasing divorce rate (in Bushehr)
NEW - Woman shouts at the man "How dare you annoy and torture my poor daughter? I'm wiped out." and man...
Writing Feedbacksasan1358 - Sep 3, 2011 / — -
|All university students should take at least one class that teaches the other culture
Writing Feedbacksuperkorean - Sep 3, 2011 / superkorean - Sep 3, 2011
|IELTS Topic: Should Smoking and tobacco products be banned?
4 - deniable1982 Furthermore, smoking runs a high risk of miscarriage for pregnant women. And there are plenty evidences indicate that...
Writing Feedbackdeniable1982 - Sep 2, 2011 / Icecreamquest - Sep 3, 2011
|"population aged 65 and over" - writing graph
Writing Feedbacksuheyla - Sep 2, 2011 / suheyla - Sep 3, 2011
|Developing and industrialised countries in science and education - Chart description
7 - the chart provides information about the involvement of developing and industrialised countries in science and education in 1980 and...
Writing Feedbackkainam - Aug 28, 2011 / sobin - Sep 3, 2011
|TOEFL - Technology inspires children's creativity instead of weakening it.
Writing Feedbackchxz1020 - Aug 30, 2011 / chxz1020 - Sep 2, 2011
|What are the most important characteristics a public figure should possess?
2 - Hei Claudia! :D I really liked the essay, there are however two things I'd change about it. First...
Writing Feedbackisabellaclaudia - Sep 2, 2011 / amrosca - Sep 2, 2011
|Knowledge gained from real life?; Books are better resource for gain knowledge
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Sep 2, 2011 / abc1400 - Sep 2, 2011
|IELTS - topics on the contributions of technology to human life
3 - Yes , this question should be adopted from an August exam . Shouldn't the conclusion be short enough...
Writing Feedbackmonkey_forever - Sep 2, 2011 / monkey_forever - Sep 2, 2011
|[IELTS]a police force carrying guns will increase the crime rate
5 - I am not a expert but for IELTS they look very closely on your structure,maybe you better epand your...
Writing Feedbackjamliu0229 - Aug 31, 2011 / shahdad - Sep 2, 2011
|"Important milestone" - TOEFL- Why do you think people attend college or university?
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Sep 1, 2011 / Mai Chu - Sep 2, 2011
|An essay on teaching someone to ride a tricyle
NEW - For most children, a tricycle is a first step in learning to ride. I still remember those days where...
Writing FeedbackParimala - Sep 2, 2011 / — -
|IELTS: disruptive kids should be taught separately
6 - Coupled with a good guidances from their teachers , these students are (would tend to be ) more likely...
Writing FeedbackEagerlearner - Aug 28, 2011 / jamliu0229 - Sep 1, 2011
|[TOEFL] government budget focus, young children or university?
5 - Your essay is prefect but you didn't indent your paragraphs so it it is very hard to read your...
Writing Feedbackphilossophia - Aug 16, 2011 / abc1400 - Sep 1, 2011
|There is little doubt that more cars will in use than today, in twenty years.
NEW - There are lots of fancy about our future life. What our life will be? What changes will appear in...
Writing Feedbackyinyinfriends - Sep 1, 2011 / — -
|"independence from their parents" - Should people live with parents ?
4 - This sentenceis eloquent but inefficient!It takes too many words to express the thought. But it is so powerful...
Writing Feedbacksubhash_ghosh - Aug 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Sep 1, 2011
|Advertising industry has laid an adverse impact on real basic needs of consumer
2 - In the recent times, advertising has emerged as an unbreakable tool for marketing and promoting products. In my...
Writing Feedbacksmokinbomberz - Aug 31, 2011 / EF_Susan - Aug 31, 2011
|Whether save endangered species is a waste of valuable resources
NEW - Topic: Trying to save endangered animal species from extinction is a waste of valuable resources. Do you agree or...
Writing Feedbackkoei1982 - Aug 31, 2011 / — -
|Roles of international sports events -ielts task 2
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Aug 31, 2011 / beepro21 - Aug 31, 2011
|IELTS CAM 7 T4 TASK 1-----electricity production indicated in pie chart
Writing FeedbackIcecreamquest - Aug 30, 2011 / Icecreamquest - Aug 31, 2011
|Juvenile delinquency and mothers'care-ielts task 2
2 - First of all, the problems of the youth results(result ) from their ebullient nature. They are curious about new...
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Aug 29, 2011 / jamliu0229 - Aug 31, 2011
|Books have a greater impact on society than TV ( Toefl essay)
2 - I think TV has some advantages over books as well. In TOEFL, it is better to reason both sides....
Writing Feedbackcarolyn1219 - Aug 28, 2011 / chxz1020 - Aug 30, 2011
|IELTS -- Government wants people to move To Big Cities
4 - Again, thank you so much for your time and comments. They are really helpful. I really need to...
Writing Feedbackmarucat - Aug 28, 2011 / marucat - Aug 30, 2011
|TOEFL - Parents (those who pay attention) are the best teachers. Agree or disagree?
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Aug 30, 2011 / jamliu0229 - Aug 30, 2011
|A single career (old-fashion) OR several careers to earn more money
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Aug 25, 2011 / beepro21 - Aug 30, 2011
|Toefl - Television & Movies have a huge impact on our social behavior.
Writing Feedbacksab - Aug 26, 2011 / abc1400 - Aug 30, 2011
|Toefl :Advance in transportation and communication like the airplane and the phone
Writing Feedbackghafarimahsa - Aug 27, 2011 / abc1400 - Aug 30, 2011
|What kind of writing have you done at work and in school?
4 - These experiences have changed my perception on writing and now is an enjoyable part of English class I look...
Writing Feedbacksyed199343 - Aug 18, 2011 / Lindabrown - Aug 30, 2011
|Movies or television influence people's behavior badly.
Writing FeedbackMai Chu - Aug 29, 2011 / Mai Chu - Aug 29, 2011
|GRE: As technology becomes more and more advanced.. people rely on technology
5 - @Susan & Fang Yu Thanks for picking out my errors. I think i need to proofread my essays more...
Writing Feedbacksilentwf - Aug 26, 2011 / silentwf - Aug 29, 2011
|Ielts: Telecommuting and working at home
2 - Actually, i think there is a fault in your first paragraph. You can start with a fact, not necessarily...
Writing FeedbackEagerlearner - Aug 29, 2011 / skayode - Aug 29, 2011
|IELTS-Do university graduates deserve higher salary than those who have not?
2 - In detail,in the beginning of 1970's Mitchford city was producing around half a million of dollar worth wheat.during this...
Writing Feedbacksobin - Aug 20, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Aug 29, 2011
|"the unemployment crisis" - issue of local, national, or international significance.
3 - I agree with EF susan, this is an excellent essay! My biggest concern is that it does not quite...
Writing Feedbackjtorres89 - Aug 27, 2011 / namato - Aug 29, 2011
|Childhood is the happiest time of a person's life, but it cannot be generalized.
3 - Below please find some corrections. Some people believe that the childhood is the happiest time of a person's...
Writing Feedbackghafarimahsa - Aug 29, 2011 / mohamed nawaz - Aug 29, 2011
|'hard work works always' - When people succeed, it is because of hard work
Writing FeedbackMai Chu - Aug 28, 2011 / Mai Chu - Aug 29, 2011
|What will happen in twenty years? Number of cars are more likely to reduce
NEW - Agree or disagree:In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today. In modern...
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