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|[IELTS] - Topic:international organisations should provide technology
Writing Feedbackaimee8812 - Jul 9, 2012 / welnorze - Jul 11, 2012
|It is said that the human beings are becoming slaves of modern technology
5 - You begin the sentence with electricity and then talk about computers without establishing a link between them....
Writing Feedbackkissingyou0912 - Jul 9, 2012 / dumi - Jul 11, 2012
|Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in
2 - I believe that teenagers nowadays is very difficult. But I totally agree wit you. Nice one Tau...
Writing FeedbackALI ASADI - Jul 11, 2012 / tau - Jul 11, 2012
|'coming up with solution for social problems' - essay about issues and young people
Writing FeedbackPvtValley - Jul 9, 2012 / PvtValley - Jul 10, 2012
|'our friendship is not selfish' - my paragraph on my best friends
Writing Feedbackmilkyunique999 - Jun 25, 2012 / medapplicant12 - Jul 10, 2012
|highest purpose of university education, personal or national goals?
2 - Many individuals wonder the about the highest purpose of university education. The founders of tertiary institutions all around...
Writing Feedbackjueeem - Jul 10, 2012 / EF_Susan - Jul 10, 2012
|IELTS Topic: How do organizations give help to poor countries
Writing Feedbackwelnorze - Jul 9, 2012 / welnorze - Jul 10, 2012
|IELTS; How technology has affected the types of relationships people make?
3 - introduction: Toady new technology has become as indispensable part of my life and has affected a positive and negative...
Writing Feedbackduongphuong473 - Jul 10, 2012 / ALI ASADI - Jul 10, 2012
|TOEFL ESSAY:In the future, students have the choice of studying at home by using tech
5 - Dear farzin_1875 in my opinion , It will be useful if you consider some note as below: 1- take...
Writing Feedbackfarzin_1875 - Jul 8, 2012 / ALI ASADI - Jul 10, 2012
|IELTS Writing task 1: Percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet
2 - Hi, the essay contains 148 words, while u should write at least 150 words. However, I think the essay...
Writing Feedbacksmogito - Jul 9, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 9, 2012
|TOEFL ESSAY : best time usage - people visit museums when they travel to new places?
3 - These two sentences are very poor for opening your essay. They do not add value to your argument...
Writing Feedbackartin - Jul 9, 2012 / dumi - Jul 9, 2012
|"my aunt's weeding" - recent news story affected you the most?
Writing Feedbacksherry_6711 - Jul 7, 2012 / sherry_6711 - Jul 9, 2012
|'forced to become my own competitor' - UCF Essay
Writing Feedbackbbird17 - Jul 7, 2012 / joshuanderitu01 - Jul 9, 2012
|"our" city, bank and school district - Causal Essay, English 101
4 - Good job , and thanks for your comments Ahmad. You are always brilliant really You deserve more than 7...
Writing Feedbacklovekayliex - Jul 8, 2012 / hadi1981 - Jul 9, 2012
|LIFE SUCCEEDS IN THAT IT SEEMS TO FAIL
3 - The point depicted in the expression reveals that a person gets success in his life when he feels that...
Writing FeedbackSilentlips - Jun 30, 2012 / joshuanderitu01 - Jul 9, 2012
|'camping in the mountains' - Ideal Vacation Literary Essay
4 - Well.... I just gave you my suggestions for this part of your essay in view of improving its presentation....
Writing FeedbackSharonNicole - Jul 8, 2012 / dumi - Jul 9, 2012
|"The playback: late night, Brooklyn.." - respone to a narrative
Writing Feedbacklovekayliex - Jun 12, 2012 / aspiringwriter - Jul 8, 2012
|'acceptable solutions for global village' - IELTS-Globalisation
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Jul 8, 2012 / EF_Team - Jul 8, 2012
|Employee should have chance to select their retirement age
6 - It is quite embarrassing to talk about this issue. I know that there are a lot of problems in...
Writing FeedbackMrCuty - Jul 5, 2012 / MrCuty - Jul 8, 2012
|[IELTS] Teenagers with unpaid work is justifiable!
2 - ----- as Ahmad suggested, you better rephrase this sentence because your idea does not come out with...
Writing Feedbackpinkyjuju - Jul 8, 2012 / dumi - Jul 8, 2012
|IELTS-international media and cultural diversity.....
2 - -- cultural diversity means a variety of cultures in a specific region; cultural globalization actually refers to...
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Jul 7, 2012 / dumi - Jul 8, 2012
|Toefl essay:Every generation of people is different in important ways. How is your
Writing Feedbackfarzin_1875 - Jul 8, 2012 / farzin_1875 - Jul 8, 2012
|IELTS essay: Should government immunize people compulsively?
3 - --------------Though you have issues with presenting your ideas clearly, this introductory para is in line with the expected...
Writing FeedbackTinaGu - Jul 7, 2012 / dumi - Jul 8, 2012
|IELTS essay : About factors of job satisfaction
Writing FeedbackPaijin - Jul 7, 2012 / Paijin - Jul 8, 2012
|IELTS: Should people take care of others_Discuss?
9 - Absolutely! I will consider your suggestions and write my own version for the clincher. Thank you so much, Ahmad!...
Writing FeedbackApril April - Jul 7, 2012 / April April - Jul 8, 2012
|IELTS - REWRITE - Public libraries should not provide books only
Writing Feedbackltw - Jul 7, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 8, 2012
|'outstanding sport players deserve high salaries' - Essay
NEW - TASK: Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people...
Writing Feedbackcolin - Jul 7, 2012 / — -
|IELTS-people who have original ideas... (scientists and innovators)
2 - For an "agree and disagree" topic, an introduction should have four main parts :1) Motivator: use interesting opening sentence...
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Jul 7, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 7, 2012
|Both parents work, bad or good??
8 - Nowadays, it is very common that both parents in a family go out to work. Some people believe...
Writing Feedbackhungvud - Jun 20, 2012 / Slim shady - Jul 7, 2012
|IELTS essay : Fixed punishment for each type of crime or Flexibility in punishing?
6 - your ideas are not well-organized. you should pay attention to the topic question. in the essay you wrote...
Writing FeedbackPaijin - Jul 5, 2012 / Slim shady - Jul 7, 2012
|IELTS - REWRITE - children development and modern games
4 - The only way you can improve your speed is by practicing to write more and more essays. Also reading...
Writing Feedbackltw - Jul 7, 2012 / dumi - Jul 7, 2012
|toelf essay: offering a good platform (teachers lecture)
Writing Feedbackxxy8862002 - Jul 3, 2012 / xxy8862002 - Jul 7, 2012
|The best way to achieve happiness is not to make others happy.
2 - We all are social animal. the system prevailing in this world is like no one can live by cutting...
Writing FeedbackJeslyn - Jul 6, 2012 / suggestion - Jul 7, 2012
|(Music Choice / Pop Parade) IELTS COMPARISON OF TWO NEW MUSIC SITES
Writing Feedbackjobymonpj - Jul 6, 2012 / April April - Jul 7, 2012
|The skill of writing letters will disappear completely - do you agree?
2 - Mobile phones and computers , which are accompanied by thea considerable development ofin technology, have today become two...
Writing Feedbackjessicapham1612 - Jul 6, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 7, 2012
|'magnesium alloys' - The introduction of a scientific paper
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jun 15, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 6, 2012
|RENTING A HOUSE -PROS AND CONS
Writing Feedbackjobymonpj - Jul 6, 2012 / dumi - Jul 6, 2012
|'science books and skill books' - What kinds of books should we read?
2 - Books are one of the best tools that help connecting the world. Nowadays, many books are established, which makes...
Writing Feedbackpinkyjuju - Jul 6, 2012 / akanjigbolahan - Jul 6, 2012
|IELTS TASK 1 BAR CHART ABOUT RENTS AND SALARIES
Writing Feedbackjobymonpj - Jul 4, 2012 / April April - Jul 6, 2012
|'to improve language little by little' - Children Learn Foreign Language Early
2 - The first and second sentences are disconnected to each other. What technological developments have to do with language...
Writing FeedbackKlein Evans - Jul 6, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 6, 2012
|'linking rising accidents to fatigued workers' - GRE Argument
5 - I agree. It gives smooth transition to other following ideas. Thank you Jan K Shenouda for your advice !...
Writing Feedbackdeepakbaniya - Jun 24, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 6, 2012
|FAST FOOD has many good effects on population?
Writing Feedbackchucnt - Jul 4, 2012 / chucnt - Jul 6, 2012
|IELTS - Death Penalty Committing Murder, Climate Change, Mass media shape ideas
3 - Maybe in the first essay, you wanna say "Life in prison is better than death penalty. Because - "...
Writing Feedbacktashappleaddict - Jul 5, 2012 / Jeslyn - Jul 6, 2012
|Essay about the benefits of online shopping over traditional off-line market
7 - And Duminda, your advices are also really helped me a lot. I believe you pointed out the main points....
Writing Feedbackemily713 - Jul 4, 2012 / emily713 - Jul 5, 2012
|'The goal isn't to live forever' - Toefl Essay
4 - His death has affected the people as much as its impact will affect the kingdom. Prince Nayef Bin...
Writing FeedbackJawaher - Jun 24, 2012 / EF_Susan - Jul 5, 2012
|'any child can be taught to develop their skill' People are born with certain talents
4 - This is true.... You better rephrase this sentence because it does not sound logical :) .... good call...
Writing FeedbackLegolasTheElf - Jul 5, 2012 / dumi - Jul 5, 2012
|Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trends
NEW - Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trends and fashions than an indication...
Writing Feedbackgag379 - Jul 5, 2012 / — -
|Without the benefit of planning, people are likely to make uninformed decisions
Writing Feedbackjhundais - Jul 5, 2012 / — -
|Essay: Poverty problem may invite various detrimental effects
7 - so many grammatical mistakes ,weaker vocabulary and poor organisation. work harder to improve....
Writing Feedbackmadan - Jul 3, 2012 / gag379 - Jul 5, 2012
|Do you prefer to eat at food stands/restaurants or prepare and eat at home?
Writing Feedbackartin - Jul 3, 2012 / dumi - Jul 5, 2012
|Variety and exploring new ideas by people is spice of life
4 - Ok, then say ; For example, we often get bored with the same style of dressing and therefore we...
Writing FeedbackSilentlips - Jul 5, 2012 / dumi - Jul 5, 2012
|ibt- 'honesty is better than lying all the time'
Writing Feedbackblur - Jul 4, 2012 / dumi - Jul 5, 2012
|IELTS: Young careless drivers_agree?
9 - Right. Many thanks to you, dumi! I'll combine both you two's options and change it in my writing. So...
Writing FeedbackApril April - Jul 4, 2012 / April April - Jul 5, 2012
|IELTS - Dangerous sports such as boxing or motor-racing should be banned.
NEW - Dangerous sports such as boxing or motor-racing should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with...
Writing Feedbacktashappleaddict - Jul 5, 2012 / — -
|Effect of the invention to auto car on the living of people in your contry.
Writing FeedbackAnan_WD - Jul 5, 2012 / Anan_WD - Jul 5, 2012
|GRE Argument Task--recommendation on opening a cafe store
Writing Feedbackcalvinhmw - Jul 4, 2012 / dumi - Jul 5, 2012
|'unnecessory and unethical' - DEATH PENALTY ESSENTAL OR NOT?
7 - THANKS AHMAD MAY DOD BLESS YOU Now I understand what you meant.I will try to adapt your ideas and...
Writing Feedbackjobymonpj - Jul 2, 2012 / jobymonpj - Jul 4, 2012
|'the depth and the width of the Brim river' - GRE Argumentative
2 - some more flaws; # the quantity of basket found in the village across the river. Is it only a...
Writing Feedbackroshb - Jul 3, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 4, 2012
|IELTS writing-international organisations should provide poor countries
6 - I agree with Mr. Zafari. It requires to either agree or disagree with the statement. Being indecisive or taking...
Writing Feedbackmiumiu0422 - Jul 3, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 4, 2012
|GREW issue topic:law to protect remaining wilderness against economic gain
2 - I could not understand that which paragraph was the introduction, but I thought what I quoted above was...
Writing FeedbackRamesh A - Jul 4, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 4, 2012
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