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|IELTS :How fast foods impact on people?
4 - Furthermore, by comparing to (by comparison with ?) traditional meal which was usually need extra efforts on buying ingredients,...
Writing Feedbackthread_c - Sep 14, 2011 / marucat - Sep 19, 2011
|Essay about the government decision on where put money - feedback
6 - EF_Kevin Hi Kevin, really appreciate it that you made useful comments on my writing. As for the below...
Writing Feedbackmarucat - Aug 21, 2011 / marucat - Sep 19, 2011
|[Toefl] essays are better to test students than the objective tests - writing task
Writing Feedbackcombatant - Sep 18, 2011 / combatant - Sep 18, 2011
|Why do you think cross cultural romantic relationship face difficulties?
3 - much better! acutally, i can tell u r adept at varying sentence lengths and patterns. my another sugesstion is...
Writing Feedbacknnene - Sep 17, 2011 / inaustin - Sep 18, 2011
|IELTS-schools should only teach students skill not ethical value?
Writing Feedbackwjxjj123 - Sep 17, 2011 / wjxjj123 - Sep 18, 2011
|Modern Day Serial Killer (descriptive essay -material thing that has changed my life)
2 - Imagine if you could picture each and every person on earth who has died a slow, painful death due...
Writing Feedbackjameszimm1 - Sep 16, 2011 / EF_Susan - Sep 17, 2011
|Music and Arts plays an essential role - discuss
Writing Feedbacksaddam1990 - Sep 16, 2011 / saddam1990 - Sep 17, 2011
|my GRE argument of "Jazz club loan, city of Monroe"--feedback
NEW - This is the first article of GRE argument written by myself, I'm quite at a loss how to develop...
Writing FeedbackKlose_Jun - Sep 17, 2011 / — -
|Essay about learning about past is valuable or not..
4 - However, in my view the past is ...----I added "the" ...valuable, and learning about it helps us in...
Writing Feedbackwinchesters - Sep 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Sep 16, 2011
|Most of the students who take advantage of a good sense of humor are much happier in their life
3 - Hi Mahsa; I found some errors in your essay like; Besides, it shows that this kind of people has...
Writing Feedbackghafarimahsa - Sep 15, 2011 / bahareh - Sep 16, 2011
|OPINION ESSAY - The Usage of Internet = individual paper
NEW - Nowadays, the usage of internet is rapidly spreading. Highly technologies that growing very fast in new generations drive us...
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|Punishment should be fixed or circumstantial ?
2 - Given that the criminal rate increasing considerably in the recent years, Firstly, along with the disappearence of vegue...
Writing Feedbackerica yu - Sep 16, 2011 / Icecreamquest - Sep 16, 2011
|"teacher performs a vital role" - Computers should replace teachers in a classroom?
5 - Basawang No,I wanted to test myself in essay typing,then i didn't take care of the grammar part... sorry for...
Writing FeedbackTank - Sep 15, 2011 / Tank - Sep 16, 2011
|"Friendly and helping others" - the qualities of a good neighbor?
Writing Feedbackbasawang - Sep 15, 2011 / basawang - Sep 15, 2011
|Children should not be engaged in paid work till they finish their basic schooling
3 - Some people say that it adds a lifetimeof valuable experience to a child, which makes them more responsible, while...
Writing Feedbackritu_168 - Sep 6, 2011 / EF_Susan - Sep 15, 2011
|The amount of leisure time of working men and women - IELTS graph
3 - The graph shows the leisure time in a typical week enjoyed by each sex, compared with employment status during...
Writing Feedbackmanman - Sep 6, 2011 / EF_Susan - Sep 15, 2011
|Teaching children of different abilities; 1% inspiration, 99% perspiration
4 - beskate I really appreciate your detail advice. I usually feel hard in intro and conclusion. I will carefully...
Writing Feedbackjellyfish Roy - Sep 15, 2011 / jellyfish Roy - Sep 15, 2011
|'Burning Up' - Satirycal Essay on Marijuana
NEW - Burning Up Every year, thousands of pot-smoking Americans get locked up for the use, possession, or sale of...
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|"obese, immature and dishonest" - Describing a person my chef
Writing Feedbacklisa8 - Sep 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Sep 15, 2011
|Learning foreign language in your own country or in the country which it is spoke
Writing Feedbackbahareh - Sep 15, 2011 / executive101 - Sep 15, 2011
|"coming from small village in Trinidad' - A profile about myself
NEW - I grew up in small village in Trinidad which is mainly dominated by Indians. In an Indian cultured home,...
Writing FeedbackRajsingh - Sep 15, 2011 / — -
|Essay: Going abroad for studying or not?
2 - There seems to be a few grammatical mistakes. for ex- newly is not a proper word, it should be...
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Sep 14, 2011 / anik4546 - Sep 15, 2011
|ielts - what should the government do to make the country more successful
2 - Hence, the government must provide its citizens with rights of freedom. For example, to choose their own rulers, provided...
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Sep 15, 2011 / soshianet - Sep 15, 2011
|In a team, those who do not accpet others' criticism cannot achieve success. Toefl.
Writing Feedbackdjyhu - Sep 13, 2011 / soshianet - Sep 15, 2011
|TOEFL-Is Money the most important aspect of a job?
9 - People should consider an occupation that they are passionate ABOUT in order to avoid an insipid life. Assuming...
Writing Feedbackbasawang - Sep 11, 2011 / Geenesh - Sep 15, 2011
|TOEFL- 'efforts are just in vain' - best way to improve the quality of education
NEW - Money can be a very powerful motivation for people's efficiency. It is common sense or a convention accepted by...
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|GMAT essay--whether offensive words and behavior should be censored
NEW - "In some countries, television and radio programs are carefully censored for offensive language and behavior. In other countries, there...
Writing Feedbackfannie88 - Sep 15, 2011 / — -
|There is nothing that an uneducated person can teach an educated person. Do you agree
Writing Feedbackghafarimahsa - Sep 9, 2011 / ghafarimahsa - Sep 15, 2011
|[TOEFL] A professor with a good sense of humour is more successful in teaching
NEW - subject: Do you agree or disagree that a serious and strict is more effective than a teacher with humor...
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|"a cruise with my boyfriend" - Describe your perfect vacation
Writing Feedbackrchadwick - Sep 14, 2011 / djyhu - Sep 14, 2011
|'everything appears to be fun' - childhood is the happiest time of a person's life
Writing Feedbacksoshianet - Sep 14, 2011 / djyhu - Sep 14, 2011
|SPENDING Money is easier than SAVING Money
2 - Enjoying money is much easier than saving, but you should have enough saved money for enjoying it These days,...
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Sep 14, 2011 / soshianet - Sep 14, 2011
|IELTS: people are losing their moral values
3 - the living quality -> word choice: living standard/ life quality concern anything -> concern about anything it would...
Writing Feedbackncm - Sep 2, 2011 / oonguyenminh - Sep 14, 2011
|Is money the most important aspect of a job? I THINK SO!
Writing Feedbackkarremflores - Sep 12, 2011 / karremflores - Sep 14, 2011
|TOEFL - Where should children grow up? Countryside or Big city?
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Sep 13, 2011 / mhh2531 - Sep 14, 2011
|'technology does not deteriorate the ability of humans to think' GRE essay
Writing Feedbackaleks - Sep 13, 2011 / aleks - Sep 14, 2011
|"gender equality should not be the concern" equal numbers of male and female students
2 - I have a few tips for you from reading your essay. In my experience, having a range of different...
Writing Feedbackmark83 - Sep 9, 2011 / CarrieC92 - Sep 14, 2011
|TOEFL- The importance of learning process - Do students need to attend classes?
NEW - Some people believe that university students should be required to attend classes. Others believe that going to classes should...
Writing Feedbackbasawang - Sep 13, 2011 / — -
|Reward for the performance of employees is a way of management (article review)
Writing Feedbacksoshianes - Sep 13, 2011 / soshianet - Sep 13, 2011
|[Toefl] One change that should be remembered about 20th century...
4 - You should write uppercase the first letter of these words "facebook", "orkut", "bing", "linkedin". As the basawang says these...
Writing Feedbackcombatant - Sep 13, 2011 / abc1400 - Sep 13, 2011
|IELTS: arranged marriage or not? Which system is better?
6 - However, the couple has not choice, leading to an imposed life which is un likely to not match personal...
Writing Feedbackmrscatoni - Sep 11, 2011 / marucat - Sep 13, 2011
|Freedom of artists-ielts task 2
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Sep 12, 2011 / beepro21 - Sep 13, 2011
|A profile article on an Idol's contestant who made it to the top 9
Writing Feedbackkhumalo - Sep 12, 2011 / khumalo - Sep 13, 2011
|TOEFL - Universities should give money to sport activities or libraries
2 - Dear abc1400, I revised your introduction as follows: Libraries and sport activities both play important roles in...
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Sep 12, 2011 / basawang - Sep 13, 2011
|IELTS - Firm discipline is a necessary part of teaching children . agree or disagree
2 - For this case i agree in firm discipline,but it depends in how you handled it,and how the way you...
Writing Feedbacknotaoom - Sep 12, 2011 / karremflores - Sep 12, 2011
|"a nail technician is not an easy and pleasant job" - why I dislike my job
2 - People always says , "A nail technician is a healthy and beautiful professional, who works to improve and decorate...
Writing Feedbackvsam - Sep 11, 2011 / Belle15 - Sep 12, 2011
|make comments or even criticism on teachers or not ----IELTS
Writing FeedbackIcecreamquest - Sep 9, 2011 / Icecreamquest - Sep 12, 2011
|IELTS ESSAY - GOVERNMENT SUPPORTING ARTISTS
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Sep 11, 2011 / khumalo - Sep 12, 2011
|Ielts test: compare three of these communicating tools and choose the best effective
7 - Dear Mai Chu, Your reasoning is unfounded. In the forth paragraph, you mentioned two advantages of films. The...
Writing FeedbackMai Chu - Aug 29, 2011 / basawang - Sep 11, 2011
|health risk assessment of fifty respondents [graph]
NEW - This graph illustrate about sample of health risk assessment of fifty respondent in age ranged between 20 years old...
Writing Feedbackalya - Sep 11, 2011 / — -
|"taking a break before starting higher education is a good idea" - IELTS
5 - Thanks Geenesh for your inputs/corrections. Thanks so much!! Thanks mrscatoni for pointing out the informality in my paragraph....
Writing Feedbackritu_168 - Sep 7, 2011 / ritu_168 - Sep 11, 2011
|Legal Studies Essay (Legalisation of Prostitution)
2 - Though it is generally tolerated, it is frowned upon in many societies for numerous reasons. it is sorta...
Writing Feedbackdancebaby279 - Sep 11, 2011 / ucfdream16 - Sep 11, 2011
|TOEFL-To eat at a restaurant or at home? What do you prefer?
5 - Dear isabellaclaudia, I can develop another paragraph about the advantage, but I am afraid that I will...
Writing Feedbackbasawang - Sep 10, 2011 / basawang - Sep 11, 2011
|IELTS - QUALITIES A PERSON NEED TO BE SUCCESSFUL
2 - The qualities a person needs to become successful in today's world cannot be learned at a university or similar...
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Sep 11, 2011 / mrscatoni - Sep 11, 2011
|World's economic status and lack of jobs - reasons for going to college or university
4 - Thank you to everybody. I just discover that even On conclusion is wrong...In conclusion is the right way.thank for...
Writing Feedbackmrscatoni - Sep 1, 2011 / mrscatoni - Sep 11, 2011
|traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods(agree/disagree)
2 - if you are writing IELTS essay, i think in your introduction, u should state to what extent do you...
Writing FeedbackDaniel1991 - Sep 8, 2011 / Geenesh - Sep 11, 2011
|"the young boy with a lady" - Dreams (narrative)
Writing FeedbackGladys1620 - Sep 3, 2011 / Angelad2012 - Sep 11, 2011
|TOEFL - The government should support science research
12 - I think you got a nice start though strating with 'some people' are generic.. however, i feel that conclusion...
Writing Feedbacksunglyeol - Jul 26, 2011 / hjy222 - Sep 10, 2011
|Toefl - Topic: Some young adults want independence from their parents quickly
NEW - Topic: Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live...
Writing Feedbackkrista - Sep 10, 2011 / — -
|Toefl-the best way to improve the education is to improve the salary of teachers
NEW - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to improve the quality of education in...
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