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|'being a pharmacist' - which paragraph is better?
3 - I prefer the second. I'm not a native speak English, so I'm not able to correct the mistakes. However,...
Writing Feedbackunjh4545 - Jan 29, 2012 / Nayara - Jan 30, 2012
|'The New York Yankees are my favorite baseball team' - English II essay
NEW - I have yet to type up my intro paragraph and conclusion just because im not sure what she wants...
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|How are we better than our fore fathers - my essay
3 - thank you so much for your nice analysis...i didnt high lighted the worest side of the issue although i...
Writing Feedbackfarhatsultana - Jan 28, 2012 / farhatsultana - Jan 29, 2012
|'building a factory near my community is really a catastrophe' - TOEFL writing
2 - I would provide with the third paragraph as well. All in all, good points. Can you please look through...
Writing Feedbackr00524025 - Jan 28, 2012 / Parvina - Jan 28, 2012
|'the invention of (mobile) phone has changed all' - technology and people interaction
3 - It brings great convenience for us I think is "to us " You want ideas? Think about situations...
Writing Feedbackkiwiuua - Jan 23, 2012 / chufan Chou - Jan 28, 2012
|TV & MOVIES have a great impact on the life of modern people ; TOEFL
Writing Feedbackfansr0731 - Jan 28, 2012 / fansr0731 - Jan 28, 2012
|'The most time-consuming housework' - bar chart for IELTS
NEW - The chart shows the division of household tasks by gender in Great Britain. Write a report for a university...
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|knowledge; 'It's not true that young people enjoy more than older' - TOEFL
4 - Yes your arguments are very well-written. I just find one grammar error. They could save up some money during...
Writing FeedbackNayara - Jan 27, 2012 / saurabh93 - Jan 27, 2012
|Essay on the plight of children in Sub-Saharan Africa
4 - We need to help show these youthful children that someone loves them. We need to show them that even...
Writing Feedbackhc23881 - Jan 26, 2012 / saurabh93 - Jan 27, 2012
|IELTS: People should not be forced to retire at a particular age such as 60 or 65
2 - meo71 There is aare number of arguments in favour of not forcing people to retire. Firstly, the experience they...
Writing Feedbackmeo71 - Jan 27, 2012 / farina - Jan 27, 2012
|My Relationship With My brother, A memoir
Writing Feedbacksavstar26 - Jan 26, 2012 / savstar26 - Jan 26, 2012
|'I want to be a doctor in the future' - Describe your short and long-term goals
3 - --yes of cause I will read your essay! this is a 1000 characters paragraph. I cannot write it longer....
Writing Feedbackxinxin - Jan 26, 2012 / xinxin - Jan 26, 2012
|Does technology make us less creative or not?
3 - I made a few corrections. English is not my first language, but I think 'predicament' means similar to 'embarrassing...
Writing Feedbackcypress - Jan 26, 2012 / vargam91 - Jan 26, 2012
|'planning of up-to-date and metropolitan cities' - Ielts essay review
4 - however, it seems to me that governments would better handle this matter better than individual owners. Good essay.Keep it...
Writing FeedbackMahmoud Saeed - Jan 25, 2012 / cypress - Jan 26, 2012
|Government should fund fundamental science research
2 - Fundamental is the study of the laws of nature that govern the behavior of the universe, from the very...
Writing Feedbacksinghdeol - Jan 26, 2012 / cypress - Jan 26, 2012
|Prompt: Regret and Lucien
Writing FeedbackEltaria - Jan 26, 2012 / thatgirl12 - Jan 26, 2012
|Students should work part time work during their studying or not.
3 - Hi Thors Hammer; Thankyou for your comment, but I couldn't understant how I should put my first point for...
Writing Feedbackbahareh - Jan 19, 2012 / bahareh - Jan 26, 2012
|About good grades and positive thinking
NEW - Good grades are not something that you find on the streets and just pick up! Grades comes from hard...
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|computer is serving a lot of people in almost every field
Writing Feedbackmehak aijaz - Jan 25, 2012 / mehak aijaz - Jan 26, 2012
|'Multicultural country and gays' - benefits of being in a diverse cultural community
3 - My pleasure!...
Writing Feedbackchentangni1994 - Jan 25, 2012 / chentangni1994 - Jan 26, 2012
|'classes should be mandatory' - students should be required to attend classes....
Writing FeedbackParvina - Jan 23, 2012 / Parvina - Jan 25, 2012
|'I have lost him completely' - a difficult choice and face the consequences
Writing Feedbackraquelbee - Jan 25, 2012 / arianna_muv - Jan 25, 2012
|'experiences obtained from work and travel are valuable' - IELTS essay
2 - It has almost become a western tradition for students, who are about to commence the first year of university,...
Writing Feedbackcypress - Jan 24, 2012 / EF_Susan - Jan 24, 2012
|Many Teachers assign homeworks to student everyday. Homework = Progress?
6 - Expand on your ideas and give specific examples. Besides the spelling and grammer mistakes, your essay definetly has potential....
Writing FeedbackFayzi - Jan 14, 2012 / anita123 - Jan 24, 2012
|Descriptive Composition on City Street at night-feedback&suggestions.
NEW - From a bird's eye view, this may seem like speckles of various colours in combination to form a bokeh...
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|IELTS - Natural Talent or Training with Hardwork ? Both Views
Writing Feedbackjayk - Jan 22, 2012 / jayk - Jan 24, 2012
|'joined the band in the fifth grade' -Childhood experiences that improved self esteem
Writing Feedbackmeasinkaren - Jan 23, 2012 / measinkaren - Jan 24, 2012
|'computers have found the diverse use in many fields' - IELTS essay
4 - Invention of computers has changed the way mankind interactsused to interact with themselves and with the environment. Moreover,...
Writing FeedbackMohit1 - Jan 23, 2012 / dumi - Jan 24, 2012
|'catch a train to go to KLCC' - NEW YEAR CELEBRATIONS
2 - It would be easier if you put the prompt up. That way, we would know exactly what to critique....
Writing FeedbackNoorain - Jan 24, 2012 / saurabh93 - Jan 24, 2012
|'more and more exhibitions and sculptures appearing in public' - IELTS Essay
Writing Feedbackcypress - Jan 23, 2012 / cypress - Jan 23, 2012
|'That special someone is my MOM' - THE PERSON I ADMIRE
4 - Every person admires someone. She taught me to keep moving even though I'm close to giving up, she believes...
Writing Feedbacknidshelpinessay - Jan 23, 2012 / beccalevesque - Jan 23, 2012
|'Childhood - being the loved one' - the happiest time
Writing FeedbackParvina - Jan 23, 2012 / Parvina - Jan 23, 2012
|'Doctor is a respectful job in many cultures' - IELTS essay
5 - Hello Elainedlcruz Thanks for your comments.from my understading, the essay topic is asking if environmental issues will be better...
Writing Feedbackcypress - Jan 22, 2012 / cypress - Jan 23, 2012
|Do people accomplish more when they are allowed to do things in their own way? SATs
2 - hey there, your essay is balanced, argumentation is also impressive. You just need to work on minor things:...
Writing Feedbackvonquixotic - Jan 23, 2012 / Mohit1 - Jan 23, 2012
|'because of the Technology and sophisticated products' - IELTS essay
NEW - Tppic : The best way to solve the world's environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel ...
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|'This Little Box of Ours' - essay competition
4 - Thanks everyone, I really appreciate the comments. But do you have any suggestions for improvement? Thanks again. Anyone...
Writing FeedbackP334243 - Dec 30, 2011 / P334243 - Jan 22, 2012
|Govt Should Banned the Smoking?
3 - Well i will admit that if government did banned the smoking then people would be able to walk around...
Writing Feedbackbestdzines - Jan 22, 2012 / kplovesyou95 - Jan 22, 2012
|'advertising is necessary in the free market economies' - NEGATIVE OR POSITIVE
Writing Feedbackjohnsmith111111 - Jan 21, 2012 / jayk - Jan 22, 2012
|IELTS - watching events on television? - 'comfort of home'
3 - Hi, I think you have provided good arguments for and against the idea of watching live musical events....
Writing Feedbackjayk - Jan 15, 2012 / johnsmith111111 - Jan 21, 2012
|Natural Disasters in Pakistan, their Effects and Control.
2 - A little helps... The geographical positioning of Pakistan threatens its own continuation, and by revealing its exposer to natural...
Writing FeedbackUsman Ahamd - Jan 21, 2012 / Thors Hammer - Jan 21, 2012
|'it was a beautiful day' - Descriptive Essay - Lifetime event
2 - Beautiful essay... Couple of suggestions - not that you need them... Sky as blue as a shallow Caribbean ocean......
Writing FeedbackFallen Hoot - Jan 21, 2012 / Thors Hammer - Jan 21, 2012
|'the detrimental influences that TV adverting has' - essay regarding TV advertising
Writing Feedbackcypress - Jan 20, 2012 / cypress - Jan 21, 2012
|Some people could be famous if they try and train
Writing Feedbacksoheilataheri - Jan 18, 2012 / soheilataheri - Jan 20, 2012
|'English classes' - Favorite academic class
3 - Hi Leanne, Thanks you for your suggestions and corrections! The research part is aimed at addressing what English...
Writing Feedbackemanon - Jan 20, 2012 / emanon - Jan 20, 2012
|IELTS: The steep price of petrol is not the best solution for growing traffic
4 - I guess your idea is as follows: Although high oil price can reduce traffic loads and pollution, due...
Writing FeedbackAlexisHuang - Jan 18, 2012 / basawang - Jan 20, 2012
|Self-Identity Paper for Ethnic Minorities Class, I haven't been in college for 15 yrs
4 - I like the subject matter. It grabs the attention and is definitely inspirational. I would definitely say you can...
Writing FeedbackAbbieDietz - Jan 19, 2012 / ggreif - Jan 19, 2012
|An Essay about the "The End of Growth"
2 - . A huge proportion of the current global population would probably starve to death within a short time if...
Writing FeedbackEdy - Jan 18, 2012 / qadirv - Jan 19, 2012
|Toefl: concentrate on the objectives - people attend schools for various reasons
4 - Through-out the centuries, Universities' have been playing an important role in the development of stable societies. Individuals attend this...
Writing Feedbackthaiham95 - Jan 18, 2012 / Thors Hammer - Jan 19, 2012
|'Lack of Respect' - essay edit
3 - Looks great!...
Writing Feedbackxsarabae - Jan 19, 2012 / cabotbp - Jan 19, 2012
|'nurturing an innovative idea' - Essay: A Dreamer!
Writing Feedbackbrizansia - Jan 19, 2012 / mimi305 - Jan 19, 2012
|'computer bring us undeniably convenient environment' - TOEFL writing
NEW - Hi, I'm Aimee from China. I'm going to take TOEFL ibt this March. But I'm really weak in writing....
Writing FeedbackAimee the Crab - Jan 19, 2012 / — -
|People who do not accept criticism from others cannot be successful at working
Writing Feedbacktinker7 - Jan 19, 2012 / mussy - Jan 19, 2012
|...a still life water color; I too would like to live to be 92 years old
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Jan 17, 2012 / bwriter - Jan 19, 2012
|Toefl essay: parents have brought to our lives
3 - thanks a lot. However, can you help me with the opening of an essay, i always get trouble with...
Writing Feedbackthaiham95 - Jan 18, 2012 / thaiham95 - Jan 19, 2012
|'teachers can teach children with love' - computers in education
Writing Feedbacksibicherian101 - Jan 18, 2012 / sibicherian101 - Jan 18, 2012
|The Life Of Living Rich and Poor
2 - Looking around neighborhoods, seeing big nice houses, and shabby houses and neighborhoods, thinking about if it's the rich or...
Writing FeedbackShaPrea Patters - Jan 17, 2012 / EF_Susan - Jan 18, 2012
|IELTS Academic - (more time improving their academic performance)
Writing FeedbackOlgakipan - Jan 16, 2012 / Olgakipan - Jan 18, 2012
|TOEFL_There is something that an uneducated person can teach an educated person.
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Jan 11, 2012 / thaiham95 - Jan 18, 2012
|'My First Cruise Ship Contract' - a narrative essay
Writing FeedbackFlint - Jan 14, 2012 / Flint - Jan 17, 2012
|'factors to get happy and importance of happiness' IELTS Essay
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