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|'A girl living with four younger siblings' - Who Am I
2 - A couple grammatical changes: I enjoy draw and mingle (drawing and mingling ) with new people. I do not...
Writing FeedbackDiamond2012 - Nov 20, 2011 / denofthieves - Nov 20, 2011
|'the Internet is an adequate source of academic information' - Ielts essay
NEW - University lecturers are now able to put their lectures on the internet for students to read and so the...
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|Groups or organizations are an important part of some people's lives?
NEW - Groups or organizations are an important part of some people's lives. Why are groups or organizations important to people?...
Writing Feedbackrajankumarkhare - Nov 20, 2011 / — -
|'My parents are Chinese' - English 101 - Lesson Essay
3 - Currently, I am taking expository writing and reading. I'm meeting with another faculty reader to help me with grammar...
Writing FeedbackkLPantera - Nov 17, 2011 / kLPantera - Nov 20, 2011
|'dominance of one sex over another on different faculties' Cambridge Task
Writing FeedbackAnuar KZ - Nov 11, 2011 / Anuar KZ - Nov 19, 2011
4 - The story tells about a mountain climber,who wanted to climb the highest mountain. He began his adventure after many...
Writing Feedbackfabaca - Nov 13, 2011 / s_saber - Nov 18, 2011
|Successfull person = money? 'comfortable with itself and with the others'
2 - In the modern society,the money has becomes increasingly important. Everyone wants to lead/have a wealthy life and everyone tries...
Writing Feedbackhyperione - Nov 18, 2011 / Nikki_Phenomena - Nov 18, 2011
|【IELTS】Childcare is an important task for nations.
3 - Nowadays, childcare plays a significant role in our families and evenespecially in our country. How to become knowledgeable mothers...
Writing Feedbackjamliu0229 - Nov 18, 2011 / dumi - Nov 18, 2011
|The Power of Psychology - mandatory course at your college?
3 - As a fifteen year old boy,I experience feeling of despair, anxiety and fear. (Due to a congenital condition called...
Writing Feedbackcon0r - Nov 15, 2011 / iii_atsied - Nov 18, 2011
|(new recovery drink) one part of my essay: conclusion and remmendation
3 - Hi Zhang Jie Are you writing an essay or a marketing report? If it's an academic essay it has...
Writing Feedbackiamzj - Nov 6, 2011 / Roger Bishop - Nov 17, 2011
|Should GPA be a factor for school sports?
2 - You have a very straight forward introduction. I like how you spend no time at all providing filler, and...
Writing FeedbackSkarl - Nov 16, 2011 / Captainasian167 - Nov 17, 2011
|Daydreamer -- poetry-like
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Nov 12, 2011 / rajp98 - Nov 17, 2011
|TOEFL- People recognize a difference between children and adults.
NEW - The whole topic is : People recognize a difference between children and adults. What events (experiences or ceremonies) make...
Writing Feedbacksteakwulikire - Nov 17, 2011 / — -
|'crime is not an exception' - Essay - IELTS
NEW - Hi, I am preparing for the IELTS and practicing some essays, here is one of them. Topic: Some...
Writing Feedbackfelippe404 - Nov 17, 2011 / — -
|Should children taught to be co-operative rather than compete?
Writing Feedbackshandy133 - Nov 13, 2011 / stellastella - Nov 17, 2011
|IELTS writing test-equal gender in university
2 - ... And now, another question appeared, is it necessary to provide equal access to male and female to every...
Writing FeedbackCatherine Xu - Nov 16, 2011 / lavender_pham - Nov 16, 2011
|The collage years are best time in personal life - Agree/ disagree
Writing Feedbackdeepa21 - Nov 15, 2011 / ssc8701 - Nov 16, 2011
|if you could make one important change in a school (Toefl)
3 - There are a lot of things, which could be changed in our university: classrooms, libraries, labs, and so on....
Writing Feedbacksoshianet - Nov 16, 2011 / ssc8701 - Nov 16, 2011
|'Nothing Without Great effort'
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|Measures to promote understanding towards volunteerism
2 - Nowadays, volunteerism can be found everywhere. Re- word this sentence Maybe: Volunteerism is a growing trend in many communities....
Writing Feedbacknoobeng - Nov 15, 2011 / Jennyflower81 - Nov 16, 2011
|more and more people start to pay attention to education
2 - A few things... With the rapid development of economy, more and more people start to pay attention to...
Writing Feedbackchealse - Nov 13, 2011 / Jennyflower81 - Nov 16, 2011
|TOEFL - It's good idea to hire employee for long time
2 - Some people believe that hiring employees for a long time does not allow companies to grow very fast and...
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Nov 16, 2011 / Jennyflower81 - Nov 16, 2011
|Incredible me essay (what makes me incredible for my language art essay)
2 - Is it the ultimate goal of happiness that, all individuals are searching for? You should re-word this sentence. An...
Writing FeedbackMklina - Nov 12, 2011 / Jennyflower81 - Nov 16, 2011
|IELTS Essay - do you think clothes communicate about culture and weather?
Writing FeedbackMohini - Nov 7, 2011 / abc1400 - Nov 16, 2011
|It is not right to say we can not learn from the past
2 - Your essay is 244 words! congratulations! Many events have took part throughout history. Although some of them were...
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Nov 16, 2011 / abc1400 - Nov 16, 2011
|People have different ways of escaping the stress and difficulties of modern life
2 - Hi In truly speaking I read your essay completely, and with my knowledge I could not find any problem...
Writing Feedbacksoshianet - Nov 15, 2011 / stellastella - Nov 16, 2011
|People can solve important problems by themselves
Writing Feedbackcherry199371 - Nov 15, 2011 / cherry199371 - Nov 16, 2011
|'Color, size, use and category'
2 - Except for the spelling of first, the essay is perfect. I love the small sentences you have put between...
Writing Feedbacklovedarling - Nov 15, 2011 / menukagrg - Nov 16, 2011
|'Christmas Eve in Denmark' - a descriptive story (five-paragraph)
Writing Feedbackadamduun - Nov 6, 2011 / adamduun - Nov 16, 2011
|(Nodame Cantabile) - My movie presentation exercise
Writing Feedbackdoris lee - Oct 8, 2011 / doris lee - Nov 16, 2011
|'running track and field' - The ability to learn from one's disappointments
NEW - The ability to learn from one's disappointments is key to personal growth and success. Tell us about what you...
Writing Feedbacksaidasine - Nov 15, 2011 / — -
|'I first met shir'- help in Describing a person ..
Writing Feedbackhodaya20151 - Nov 15, 2011 / BrandyFlorida - Nov 15, 2011
|TOEFL - people believe about the human activity effects on the Earth
2 - Humankind only liveS in Earth for about five thousand years, People are divided into two camps according to human...
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Nov 15, 2011 / soshianet - Nov 15, 2011
|Toefl: active class or inactive one
3 - some irrelative issues. --> some irrelevant issues. to be prepared in the class --> to be prepared for the...
Writing Feedbacksoshianet - Nov 11, 2011 / abc1400 - Nov 15, 2011
|TOEFL_Do you agree or disagree that progress is always good; human's tendency
NEW - Do you agree or disagree that progress is always good? There is no doubt that every one like progression,...
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Nov 15, 2011 / — -
|'malicious yet popular food items' - Persuasive Essay- AP Language and Composition
5 - "These malicious yet popular food items overwhelmingly occupy the cafeteria." I would change that.. it's the right idea, but...
Writing FeedbackM_Marie - Nov 13, 2011 / morr_j23 - Nov 14, 2011
|Facebook & www requires english; learning a foreign language early at school.
NEW - It is strongly believed that the role of language in our life is taken for granted. Can you speak...
Writing FeedbackAMiNENGiNE - Nov 14, 2011 / — -
|Should governments spend more money on improving roads, or public transportation ?
2 - Yea.... I find some grammer issues but I dont say you really should worry too much because with little...
Writing FeedbackAMiNENGiNE - Nov 13, 2011 / dumi - Nov 14, 2011
|SAT essay: Should people always be loyal?
Writing FeedbackLily Rose - Nov 12, 2011 / Lily Rose - Nov 13, 2011
|Is pollution a concern of the government, the society or the individual?
2 - Besides the almost rhythmic pattern of your sentences, everything looks good. Your content is great. Personally I would mix...
Writing Feedbackyanigarcia - Nov 11, 2011 / M_Marie - Nov 13, 2011
|Write an essay about weather technology makes out lives easier.
3 - pretty good, a little more explanation Although technology has made some aspects of life easier, it has not...
Writing Feedbacknicodorable - Nov 12, 2011 / danny411 - Nov 13, 2011
|'Knockout' My mid- term essay on my autobiographical incident.
Writing Feedbackjobo - Nov 12, 2011 / jobo - Nov 13, 2011
|The role of parents is significant. They teach their children how to live and face problems.
4 - Each (plays) major (role), but among them parents have the most strongest(or profound ,or noticeable) impact on their future....
Writing Feedbackabedkh - Nov 10, 2011 / fabaca - Nov 13, 2011
|(History books) what kind of reading do you prefer?
3 - Well I think you did a good job, especially describing your favourite subject and you gave strong points. Although...
Writing Feedbackmojde - Nov 12, 2011 / nicodorable - Nov 12, 2011
|Addiction of computer leads to ignorence of family
Writing Feedbackyunus - Nov 6, 2011 / yunus - Nov 12, 2011
|One man's terrorist is another's freedom fighter
3 - Thanks for the response, I ended up doing well on the overall exam. This was 1 of 4 questions....
Writing Feedbackbrohammer26 - Oct 31, 2011 / brohammer26 - Nov 12, 2011
|Are people overly influenced by misleading images? Score my SAT essay:
3 - The question is more about intentional deception, which is why the examples of business leaders and advertisers were used....
Writing FeedbackDanny154 - Oct 26, 2011 / fiametta00 - Nov 12, 2011
|IELTS- TWO VIEWS ESSAY ABOUT TECHNOLOGY
2 - To begin with, it cannot be denied that technology may have negative effects on human health. Use the computer...
Writing FeedbackK88 - Nov 11, 2011 / soshianet - Nov 12, 2011
|'television is nothing more than entertainment' - SAMPLE QUESTION FROM IELTS
NEW - Some people believe that television is a powerful educational tool. Other people believe that television is nothing more than...
Writing Feedbackiii_atsied - Nov 11, 2011 / — -
|'Life without such little creatures as pets' - IELTS
Writing FeedbackAnuar KZ - Nov 10, 2011 / Anuar KZ - Nov 11, 2011
|IELTS Essay about British and Australian laws re criminal records
Writing Feedbacktsaida - Nov 7, 2011 / tsaida - Nov 10, 2011
|TOEFL-Schools should teach students about specific jobs or general subjects
Writing Feedbackmelody_2204 - Nov 10, 2011 / melody_2204 - Nov 10, 2011
|English 107 - money can't buy long-term happiness
3 - Doctors and lawyers are people, while "jobs" are not, making this part of the sentence incorrect. You could...
Writing FeedbackAddow - Nov 10, 2011 / Guest - Nov 10, 2011
|Factors that influence the decisions of news editors who control news on TV & papers
2 - News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What ---It's important to remember...
Writing Feedbacktintukuriakose - Nov 7, 2011 / EF_Susan - Nov 10, 2011
|Promoting Firearm Safety in Children, A personal essay about a "Radical Act"
2 - In my opinion I feel that gun safety should be taught to all people, especially to families and homes...
Writing Feedbackjohnnymayer - Nov 6, 2011 / EF_Susan - Nov 10, 2011
|Should we increase punishments for youth's crime?
3 - you need to explain more on what u mean when u say prevention is more effective than increasing punishment...
Writing Feedbackvangphu - Nov 9, 2011 / Addow - Nov 10, 2011
|'A small truck ran over a two-year-old girl' - This is argument essay
Writing Feedbackthaolam77 - Nov 5, 2011 / Jhangir - Nov 9, 2011
|TOEFL - Teenagers have jobs while they are students? UNICEF discourages states
NEW - TOEFL - In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a...
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Nov 9, 2011 / — -
|Universities should teach students about their chosen degree subject
NEW - I will appreciate your advices. thank u in advance! Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?...
Writing Feedbackamanda guo - Nov 9, 2011 / — -
|employees for entire live? I completely disagree; people get old during time
3 - Each company, business and enterprise uses their own method and strategy to make progress. One of the most important...
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Nov 9, 2011 / abc1400 - Nov 9, 2011
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