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|TOEFL-Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their olde
2 - consular? I think you should use "counselor" instead. They cheat young ages because they believe they are immature...
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Jan 1, 2012 / phantuhoang - Jan 1, 2012
|'biggest reward in the class was dissection' - favorite class and why
Writing Feedbacksilentspring - Dec 31, 2011 / TheLeader - Jan 1, 2012
|'helpful exercise'; Games are as important for children as they are for adults.
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Dec 30, 2011 / lzhd1028 - Dec 31, 2011
|Chart - 'average house prices change 1990-1995 and 1996-2002' Ielts task
3 - Thank you Paris. Could you give me some suggestions about how to replace your highlighted sentences? I still don't...
Writing FeedbackRyanIelts - Dec 30, 2011 / RyanIelts - Dec 30, 2011
|IELTS - Local & International news , which is more important ?
5 - ' fastest growing nation in terms of economy' and I would rephrase the sentence 'a lot of countries are...
Writing Feedbacklearner26 - Dec 29, 2011 / amer77 - Dec 30, 2011
|Grandmother taught me to read - the grammar in this short essay?
Writing Feedbacktilasir - Dec 29, 2011 / tilasir - Dec 30, 2011
|Johns Hopkins: Tell us something about yourself that we wouldn't know...
6 - See, but I think I could be hilarious and dramatic on the first topic. The point of the second...
Writing Feedbackmarshizzle1 - Dec 29, 2011 / marshizzle1 - Dec 29, 2011
|IELTS - Prohibit public smoking ? - AGREE or DISAGREE ?
NEW - Some businesses prohibit smoking in any of their offices. Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do...
Writing Feedbacklearner26 - Dec 29, 2011 / — -
|Silent danger - essay
2 - Well,the beginning is pretty captivating. For starters,replace all the 2's with "two". My only question is what point are...
Writing FeedbackIcandoeverythin - Dec 29, 2011 / yusra12 - Dec 29, 2011
|ielts the position of women in society , juvenile delinqeuncy relationship
NEW - TOPIC THE POSITION OF WOMEN IN SOCIETY HAS CHANGED MARKEDLY IN THE LAST TWENTY YEARS .MANY OF THE PROBLEMS...
Writing Feedbackamon2006 - Dec 29, 2011 / — -
|IELTS: International travel and mass media? 'distinctive tradition of tribes'
NEW - Topic: The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world...
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Dec 29, 2011 / — -
|IELTS writing task 1-piechart provide the data of woman education grades in someland.
3 - Maybe it would be better to say "the graphs compare the participation of women in a range of education...
Writing Feedbackphuongthao15389 - Dec 28, 2011 / princedynasty - Dec 29, 2011
|TOEFL See Topic in the thread!!
2 - Hi Genadi, I think you should have 3 reasons to support your idea, because the longer the better,...
Writing Feedbackgenadik - Dec 29, 2011 / linhnguyen2112 - Dec 29, 2011
|'small hand with long tapering fingers' - essay
4 - Hi First, there is no doubt that individuals are not more than six meters. She is small and medium...
Writing Feedbacknathalierousse - Dec 27, 2011 / stellastella - Dec 28, 2011
|Change is inevitable; 'What motivates people to change' - SAT ESSAY
8 - Here's the thing: SAT essays are not scored logically. Do a little research and you will find that the...
Writing Feedbackilovecandy - Dec 27, 2011 / deremifri - Dec 28, 2011
|'where individuals often exist in their own bubbles' - Brown describe the community
Writing Feedbackmusic920 - Dec 28, 2011 / lethalityKD - Dec 28, 2011
|TOEFL; Businesses should be only concerned about making profits.
NEW - Businesses should do anything they can to make a profit. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? ...
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Dec 28, 2011 / — -
|UK has a wider variety of ways of dealing with waste products than the others.
3 - thank you Susan :X:X:X:X:X HOwever, could you help me explain why as regards needs to be replaced by in...
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Dec 27, 2011 / princedynasty - Dec 27, 2011
|'brothers who are already enrolled at NYU' - Why NYU?
Writing Feedbackibeckki - Dec 27, 2011 / silentspring - Dec 27, 2011
|Watching games of sports professionals - sportsmen earning too much money?
Writing FeedbackZhandos - Dec 27, 2011 / lethalityKD - Dec 27, 2011
|Geneva convention between the texts and real application
Writing Feedback3robi_in_Paris - Dec 27, 2011 / 3robi_in_Paris - Dec 27, 2011
|'process of urbanization' - People living in big cities face many problems today
2 - It was only owing to such principles , chasing for greater convenience and more commercial opportunities, that a market...
Writing Feedbacksmilectt - Dec 27, 2011 / EF_Susan - Dec 27, 2011
|'a guideline should be provided to students' - Cambridge 5 task 2
2 - I corrected a few of your grammatical errors. If you don't mind me asking, you're just learning English, right?...
Writing Feedbacksssmr - Dec 27, 2011 / SoTangy - Dec 27, 2011
|Self-Improvement Philosophical Essay on Happiness and Meaning - feedback
2 - This is a great discussion, very clever. I think it could be a lot better if it included some...
Writing FeedbackDanSabin - Dec 21, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2011
|IELTS essay_Should the cost of medicines be reduced?
2 - Hi, I liked that your essay has your effective arguments and I like that you gave your point of...
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Dec 26, 2011 / djpralex - Dec 26, 2011
|IELTS Task 2 : banning smoking in all public areas
2 - Hi Park! I think you give compelling explains for your idea. However, I still feel that your writing...
Writing Feedbackyoni - Dec 26, 2011 / phuongthao15389 - Dec 26, 2011
|competition vs. cooperation - none of them can work in isolation
Writing Feedbacksparwani - Dec 23, 2011 / sparwani - Dec 26, 2011
|TOEFL: Best way to judge about people is to be familiar with their personality - not with their look
3 - IF this is the opening, it would be better if you cut out "some people believes(grammatical mistake)...which someone makes"...
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Dec 23, 2011 / princedynasty - Dec 26, 2011
|Ielts graph_the illiteracy rate in 2000
2 - From this i keep getting the feeling like you are confusing literacy with literacy rate , they are different...
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Dec 25, 2011 / adaswani - Dec 25, 2011
|It's an essay on One minute of that football game.
3 - it's better not use abstract words such as 'nervous', but try to use simile or metaphor to describe the...
Writing FeedbackDevson - Dec 25, 2011 / santoryuu - Dec 25, 2011
|'avoid repeating fault'; A person should never make an important decision alone.
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Dec 24, 2011 / Deniz - Dec 25, 2011
|IELTS graph_crime in the UK in 2002.
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Dec 24, 2011 / phuongthao15389 - Dec 25, 2011
|Cooking essay (advantages of eating healthy and nutrition food)
NEW - I would appreciate it if you could give your comments on this essay. I thank you in advance. ...
Writing Feedbackroshan4 - Dec 24, 2011 / — -
|Toefl: Beethoven - The influential person I would choose to meet in one hour
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Dec 24, 2011 / — -
|'Interpersonal skills' - Self Essay
3 - Hi If you are writing for an academic writing it is better to avoid contraction which I see a...
Writing Feedbackpaulo311 - Dec 11, 2011 / stellastella - Dec 24, 2011
|television's effects to violence
NEW - Nowadays we are using television too much. we can't live without technology. In my country television is the most...
Writing FeedbackDeniz - Dec 24, 2011 / — -
|TOEFL_whether athletes and singers are overpaid?
NEW - Professional athletes (such as football stars) and entertainers (such as singers and actors) are paid too much money for...
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Dec 24, 2011 / — -
|TOPIC:Why do we need to learn english
2 - Hi! kay, so for the beginning sentence why not say: "Today, many people all over the world study and...
Writing Feedbackhungnguyen1998 - Dec 23, 2011 / littleone - Dec 23, 2011
|'People visit museums for many reasons' - visiting museums during travel
Writing Feedbacksoroushx2x - Dec 17, 2011 / soroushx2x - Dec 23, 2011
|Endowed - Prologue
4 - Thank you very much! I'm now working on the next chapters. I hope you would help by commenting and...
Writing FeedbackAeli - Dec 22, 2011 / Aeli - Dec 23, 2011
|TOEFL essay_Should students live in campus or off-campus housing?
4 - Your Welcome! hope everything goes well for you :) if possible can you edit my post as well, it...
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Dec 22, 2011 / dianneraja - Dec 23, 2011
|Short essay about air pollution
4 - Dear Anis, First of all, I am not sure your writing is stick to question's requirement . I think...
Writing Feedbackchlorof4 - Dec 21, 2011 / phuongthao15389 - Dec 23, 2011
|The other family in our house
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Dec 17, 2011 / Rajiv - Dec 22, 2011
|IELTS - we should not let technology and make our lives simple?
5 - both of statement in question is right, one hand, technology has dramatically improved the how we live in you...
Writing Feedbackfarina - Dec 10, 2011 / apidjakfar - Dec 22, 2011
|Ielts graph_how the UK spent their time in the year 1982
3 - Thank you Susan, you're really dedicated to helping other people with writing skills (me involved) :D. Wish you have...
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Dec 21, 2011 / princedynasty - Dec 22, 2011
|"I saw my life flash before my eyes" - PERSONAL
2 - Ok, so I think it's definitely really well written and I love all the figurative language and allusions you...
Writing Feedbacktrgcook - Dec 21, 2011 / Alikap - Dec 21, 2011
|'giving international aid to poor countries' - IELTS
5 - you should avoid repeating the structure "there exist". maybe putting all the benefits into one paragraph and considering more...
Writing Feedbackswami12345 - Dec 18, 2011 / princedynasty - Dec 21, 2011
|Communication save our time without spending a lot of time in long distances or in traffic jams
3 - misinterpret -> misinterpretation These gestures have meaning which are related to the topic of conversation,-> you can use non-verbal...
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Dec 17, 2011 / princedynasty - Dec 21, 2011
|IELTS ESSAY_should children be taught to be co-operative or competitive?
3 - Susan, Thank you for your quick reply, which I have never expected. This English forum is really effective with...
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Dec 20, 2011 / princedynasty - Dec 20, 2011
|TOEFL - People work to earn money to have welfare
3 - To catch the idea why the organization works and how you can use that info to your advantage of...
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Dec 19, 2011 / Smiksha - Dec 20, 2011
|Paragraph Structure - Two Options - what is best or maybe propose a third?
2 - In many languages, the basic unit of cotent is the paragraph. A paragraph includes certain sentences which are arranged...
Writing FeedbackColin_S - Dec 19, 2011 / Smiksha - Dec 20, 2011
|Rising Sun Camp Essay
NEW - The topic of this essay is what position would you see yourself in 50 years if you changed how...
Writing Feedbacksnowfairy10 - Dec 19, 2011 / — -
|'Moin!' - Essay about cultural identity
2 - When you walk on the pier of Hamburg's harbor on a cloudy morning and somebody nods to you, saying...
Writing FeedbackEumi - Dec 19, 2011 / snowfairy10 - Dec 19, 2011
|Listening greater kinds, forms of music than ever; Traditional vs International
6 - whether traditional music outweighs International music ->whether traditional music outweight International music or not First of all, we...
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Dec 14, 2011 / lllpppricky - Dec 19, 2011
|GOVERNMENT SHOULD FOCUSMORE ON PREVENTIVE HEALTH
Writing Feedbackmuktimukti - Dec 18, 2011 / muktimukti - Dec 18, 2011
|IELTS:C7T2: Should there be fixed punishments for each type of crime?
3 - It is a collective noun, so you should use the singular form of the verb. When ever you collect...
Writing Feedbacksmilectt - Dec 16, 2011 / pitt4life01 - Dec 17, 2011
|PARENTS or TEACHERS? Who's responsible for making children good citizens?
2 - Discuss(Disscussions) about how to teach children may involve all the aspects of education.One of the discussion(s) is who have(has)...
Writing Feedbackspiritgg - Dec 17, 2011 / smilectt - Dec 17, 2011
|An essay about Pancreatic cancer
Writing Feedbackdon omar - Dec 17, 2011 / soroushx2x - Dec 17, 2011
|'Work too much?' - Ielts what contribute to job satisfaction?
4 - If you are preparing forIELTS you have to follow this rules: Your essay should have a introduction, at least...
Writing Feedbackhyperione - Nov 30, 2011 / stellastella - Dec 17, 2011
|Ielts 'fast food is becoming more and more popular even though it's junk'
4 - Dear milamiyamiila I completely disagree with the idea of avoid using Firstly, secondly, ... Because I am preparing for...
Writing Feedbackmilamiyamiila - Dec 14, 2011 / stellastella - Dec 17, 2011
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