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|What environment do you suggest for children to grow? Big City or Countryside?
3 - these are some of my suggestions Currently, living in a big city is dangerous especially for children because...
Writing Feedbackabedkh - Dec 2, 2011 / clin93 - Dec 5, 2011
|Money for students sports vs library activies
5 - You need to review your introduction because it is not clear.For example you can put it this way(this is...
Writing FeedbackHarikumarsharma - Nov 3, 2011 / clin93 - Dec 4, 2011
|boom Internet - people use the Internet more and more
2 - N owdays, as the wolrd becomes more develop the more people use internet. Bom internet rapidly of the people...
Writing Feedbackchickenbaby - Dec 4, 2011 / jasonty9 - Dec 4, 2011
|Reliance on Technology has deteriorated our ability to think
NEW - Man has been continuously inventing ever since he was a nomad. His desire to settle necessitated him to think...
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|'recently moved to new house' - IELTS Letter
NEW - You are recently moved to new house. There has been damage after you move into the house. Write a...
Writing Feedbackroshan4 - Dec 4, 2011 / — -
|The costs of international travel are decreasing and tourism is growing.
3 - Hello jennfer, I really appreciate for your comment I will improve my essay. Could please add more comments...
Writing Feedbackroshan4 - Dec 1, 2011 / roshan4 - Dec 4, 2011
|The time I spent at Jamaica Hospital. Cardiology is something that I have always been zealous about.
NEW - Walking into the beautifully furnished hospital building, I scanned the area. There were hundreds of patients waiting for prescriptions,...
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|What is considered as a "bad behavior" in Morocco?
NEW - HEY ! recently, i have written some essays and poems but i didn't find anyone correct me my mistakes...
Writing Feedbacksniper_moon - Dec 3, 2011 / — -
|In the pages of human history, conflicts are unavoidable; Is conflict helpful? SAT
2 - The helpfulness of conflicts is unlimited. Conflicts can have significant impacts upon society and future generations. One such example...
Writing FeedbackLily Rose - Dec 3, 2011 / kkelsey82 - Dec 3, 2011
|Teachers and issues of marginalization (short essay)
2 - Here are a few things I would change for your introduction Since the beginning of our Western society,...
Writing Feedbackmyinterwebs - Dec 1, 2011 / kkelsey82 - Dec 3, 2011
|The average house prices in New York, Madrid Tokio, Frankfurt and London
2 - I believe that the sentence "In particular Tokio and London are achieved an equal rate of -7%" should be...
Writing Feedbackknip - Nov 24, 2011 / kkelsey82 - Dec 3, 2011
|'The alcohol lovers' - comparing paragraphs
NEW - please help me to editing several paragraphs! ALCOHOL LOVERS The alcohol lovers that love to drink alcohol...
Writing FeedbackVLUR54 - Dec 2, 2011 / — -
|SHOULD EDUCATION BE PLANNED?
3 - i agree with Harikumarsharma. my suggestion to your essay(clin93) to improve it. you should brainstrom and make a list...
Writing Feedbackclin93 - Dec 2, 2011 / Diyorbek - Dec 2, 2011
|'job-hunting' - University should offer students more preparation for the future
Writing Feedbackjohn hans - Nov 29, 2011 / john hans - Dec 2, 2011
|"New Soil" - a college essay about heinies, aliens, and rasberry jam.
3 - Yes I agree that the first paragraph needs some clarifying! I have to say this is so amazing. You...
Writing Feedbackkaunosielu - Nov 7, 2011 / blueshore - Dec 2, 2011
|'to change my current job status' (Career Plan)
NEW - Never been a good writer. I'm very anxious when it comes to writing any paper. Please help me out...
Writing Feedbackjenannebeard - Dec 1, 2011 / — -
|Paper on politcal car with bumper stickers
Writing Feedbackespiritujo - Dec 1, 2011 / — -
|'Do we force students into college?' - English
2 - While some truly don't have the intellectual ability, should we be placing all the blame on college being too...
Writing Feedbackmelissatimms - Nov 29, 2011 / EF_Susan - Dec 1, 2011
|'Starvation' - Discuss some issue of concern
Writing Feedbackmohamed459 - Nov 30, 2011 / mohamed459 - Nov 30, 2011
|(the short jawbones and overcrowded teeth) my article summary
2 - There is a variety of detailed measurements on the skull and jawbone. These measurements are on 11 different cultures...
Writing Feedbacksmya - Nov 29, 2011 / bookerAs1 - Nov 30, 2011
|'How I viewed Islamic missionaries' - personal essay
2 - Upon constant insistence.I set out on a religious journey of 10 days with a team of 12 members. Our...
Writing Feedbackyasirsarosh - Nov 28, 2011 / Jennyflower81 - Nov 30, 2011
|'SECOND SEMESTER RESUMES' - personal essay: Experiencing life
2 - I was constantly bullied by my peers: they mocked at my running style, made fun of my debating and...
Writing Feedbackyasirsarosh - Nov 28, 2011 / EF_Susan - Nov 30, 2011
|Essay about the health and fitness -'People are getting lazier than ever before'
NEW - topic:in some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing....
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|How many of you have experienced the EARTHQUAKE?
NEW - I am writing this essay to tell all of you something. Please give me advices if there is any...
Writing FeedbackTomomi - Nov 30, 2011 / — -
|Toefl Some people prefer to plan activities for their free time very carefully
Writing Feedbacksami talib - Nov 25, 2011 / momid - Nov 29, 2011
|'save money to buy luxury items' - TOEFL Essay
5 - Hi deepa, thanks for your feedback.i checked your essay. custom made is a correct word. we use this word...
Writing Feedbackmomid - Nov 24, 2011 / momid - Nov 29, 2011
|About a Successful College Student
2 - You have a writing style that flows well. You have made many good points in your paper. I can...
Writing Feedbackdamon451 - Nov 28, 2011 / Jennyflower81 - Nov 29, 2011
|Essay on how sugar and alcohol have caused the degeneration of people
4 - Oh wait nevermind, I was confusing this for the other essay I'm working on right now. This one was...
Writing Feedbackyasi95 - Nov 21, 2011 / yasi95 - Nov 28, 2011
|'Daddy can't tugboat our ship much longer' - Ethical Dilemma
3 - Thanks! Could you guys look for grammatical errors that I can't see. I'll be more than happy to look...
Writing Feedbackwpiedr1480 - Nov 28, 2011 / wpiedr1480 - Nov 28, 2011
|Three part theme essay on my Tragic Flaw
2 - Man is destined to face challenges, for life is not a bed of roses. Obstacles and difficulties are...
Writing Feedbacklserilla - Nov 27, 2011 / EF_Susan - Nov 28, 2011
|Unintended Consequences of Nuclear Power Plants
NEW - Prompt: How have attempts to solve Problem X resulted in Problem Y, and what steps should we take to...
Writing Feedbackkwon583 - Nov 28, 2011 / — -
|"Flowers for a 90-year-old Ophelia" --Princeton U prompt
4 - Thank you for your wonderful advice! I took your suggestions, and my essay looks much better than before! I'm...
Writing Feedbackbookbug_xd - Nov 27, 2011 / bookbug_xd - Nov 27, 2011
|Printed books is more affected than TV.
NEW - Pinted books affect more than TV on the society. Agree/ disagree? Although many people believe that printed books affect...
Writing Feedbacksoheil874 - Nov 27, 2011 / — -
|Paper about if public schools should require uniforms
3 - thank you :)...
Writing FeedbackHollister81 - Nov 22, 2011 / Hollister81 - Nov 27, 2011
|Functional electrical stimulation (FES) - An abstract for a paper
3 - Thanks....
Writing Feedbackabedkh - Nov 22, 2011 / abedkh - Nov 27, 2011
|IELTS- High salaries of sportspeople ? How do you justify this?
Writing Feedbackdimash001 - Nov 27, 2011 / — -
|Study abroad Whats will be likes and dislikes
2 - Studying abroad has some pros and cons Just like a coins that has two different sides .However I am...
Writing Feedbackdeepa21 - Nov 27, 2011 / sumersinha - Nov 27, 2011
|Tommy Douglas was Saskatchewan's most notable politician and great Canadian
NEW - Tommy Douglas was Saskatchewan's most notable politician, and one of the Greatest Canadians in history. Douglas took large roles...
Writing Feedbackcoco123 - Nov 26, 2011 / — -
|IELTS --- Should we follow fashion trends or not?
Writing Feedbackxinbada007 - Nov 26, 2011 / xinbada007 - Nov 26, 2011
|SAT Essay About Whether Small Decision Often Have Major Consequence
2 - It's good and interesting. However, in the third sentence of the second paragraph, "However, them can hardly elucidate reasonably...
Writing FeedbackBill Zhang - Nov 25, 2011 / baron_2007 - Nov 25, 2011
|'Giving importance urbanization' - Environment Essay
2 - People have always been in nature and environment. It is like a balance of nature. -i don't get it-...
Writing Feedbackozzge - Nov 25, 2011 / caoyuxi - Nov 25, 2011
|My Tragic Flaw - a three-part theme analogy composition
2 - Amazing essay. Just some little things what think is treasure is their trash - you missed a 'they' there...
Writing FeedbackMiguel11795 - Nov 25, 2011 / karan11295 - Nov 25, 2011
|Learn foreign language In own country or Country where is is spoken Opinion
2 - It would include the cost of airfare , food , accommodation and school and the cost would become really...
Writing Feedbackdeepa21 - Nov 24, 2011 / deepa21 - Nov 24, 2011
|My essay about Mass media have great influence in shaping people's ideas
3 - Thank you Renoir about your suggestion. And I am really keen on your idea about a link to the...
Writing Feedbackhah177 - Nov 23, 2011 / hah177 - Nov 24, 2011
|Students unable to get better jobs though they are getting good grades - GRE
Writing FeedbackDka - Nov 23, 2011 / Dka - Nov 24, 2011
|'man is a social animal' - Toefl spend your time alone of with friends?
Writing Feedbacksami talib - Nov 23, 2011 / sami talib - Nov 24, 2011
|Thesis Paper on how visual media and it's influence on good and bad - Feedback?
Writing FeedbackCeceliailecec - Nov 20, 2011 / bxlnt - Nov 24, 2011
|The right to water and its global implications-- very rough draft-- lacks conclusion
2 - A few suggestions: Withholding water from any human is comparable to murder. This sounds odd, being the reader,...
Writing Feedbacknicole321 - Nov 18, 2011 / Jennyflower81 - Nov 23, 2011
|IELTS ESSAY: Invention of A New International Language. Advantages & Disadvantages.
Writing FeedbackGinwo - Oct 25, 2011 / mursel - Nov 23, 2011
|IELTS should be a law to control violence in tv?
Writing Feedbackhyperione - Nov 20, 2011 / EF_Susan - Nov 23, 2011
|international sport events play a significant role in decreasing tensions..
3 - International sport events play a significant role in decreasing tensions.. FOOTBALL IS THE MOST POPULAR GAME AND PLAYED SIGNIFICANT...
Writing Feedbacksoraya - Nov 1, 2011 / SHAHFAHAD - Nov 23, 2011
|Do women have to serve in the military?...
Writing Feedbacksmya - Nov 9, 2011 / smya - Nov 23, 2011
|'My parents and my teachers were proud' - Shortening Essay?
2 - I was depressed, and I knew thatI needed something to give me new perspective or direction into achieving my...
Writing FeedbackStephenhanrahan - Nov 20, 2011 / EF_Susan - Nov 22, 2011
|the Leptospirosis disease
NEW - I have to tell your guys in advance that my english is poor and my writing is quite bad.So,I...
Writing Feedbacktana - Nov 22, 2011 / — -
|Education is dominant factor for development of country
5 - Your diction is a problem, dont use phrases like it's true, etc. It is suppose to be your opinion,...
Writing Feedbackmursel - Nov 21, 2011 / Elitelee - Nov 22, 2011
|a severe weather experience first paragraph
Writing Feedbackwhiteboy16 - Nov 21, 2011 / Jennyflower81 - Nov 21, 2011
|Computers: another tech innovation that u think in important in international society
NEW - With no doubt computers are have changed the way the nations interact with each other in international society ....
Writing Feedbackdeepa21 - Nov 21, 2011 / — -
|Review: Pets should be treated like family member do u agree or disgree.
3 - Thanks :)...
Writing Feedbackdeepa21 - Nov 18, 2011 / deepa21 - Nov 21, 2011
|'Drawing is my passion' - my sat short essay
2 - Drawing is my passion. I am found of drawing because it helps me forget about all my tension and...
Writing Feedbackxamdate - Nov 19, 2011 / Ceceliailecec - Nov 20, 2011
|'A girl living with four younger siblings' - Who Am I
2 - A couple grammatical changes: I enjoy draw and mingle (drawing and mingling ) with new people. I do not...
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