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|Persuasive essay: it's okay to strive for perfection. 3 claims + intro and conc
3 - its not a quote it was written in a discussion about perfection by someone anonymous. I just want to...
Writing Feedbackfoo488 - May 11, 2012 / foo488 - May 12, 2012
|'4 ways of life goals' - personal story essay
Writing Feedbackstorygirl18 - May 11, 2012 / An312406 - May 12, 2012
|'long term investing vs. short term investing' - Clep Exam Composition
Writing FeedbackCajamez - May 5, 2012 / Cajamez - May 11, 2012
|'exposed to the ever-accelerated technology' - ielts : an essay written by myself
10 - dear xiang wei, a good essay with newly learnt words/phrases. but i'd love to suggest you to improve your...
Writing Feedbackzhangxiangwei - Apr 15, 2012 / phyu - May 11, 2012
|GMAT AWA Essay (Falling Revenues and Manufacturing delays)
Writing Feedbackredpearl - May 8, 2012 / redpearl - May 11, 2012
|TOEFL: selecting / processing information- very important skill a person should learn
Writing Feedbacktommyzhu - May 9, 2012 / tommyzhu - May 11, 2012
|SAT ESSAY：ease does not challenge us?
3 - Thank you. Because the time in the test is limited, i want to abridge some part. Casn you give...
Writing Feedbackkimuratakuya - May 11, 2012 / kimuratakuya - May 11, 2012
|Regular and Acceleration - Two Programs in The Learning Process
2 - Well I think your interpretation of the subject matter is quite accurate and nicely demonstrated. Your grammar is a...
Writing Feedbackcikucika - May 10, 2012 / EF_Susan - May 10, 2012
|IELTS: Difference between social behavior of children and adults.
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - May 8, 2012 / ah_zafari - May 10, 2012
|Essay on social networking services
Writing Feedbackbek23 - May 9, 2012 / bek23 - May 10, 2012
|'the world will never stop developing' - doing the same things and avoiding change.
Writing FeedbackCherry Dang - May 9, 2012 / Cherry Dang - May 10, 2012
|'female dominance' - IELTS-post-school qualifications by gender in Australia 1999
3 - Thank you very much. I had doubts about the language of "comparison" and all these things related to proportions,...
Writing Feedbackansergeyg - May 9, 2012 / ansergeyg - May 10, 2012
|'people who give their opinion for justified purpose are heroes' - sat essay
2 - A simple, more refined opening statement is necessary, for starters such as: "There are many actions and factors that...
Writing Feedbackkimuratakuya - May 8, 2012 / EF_Susan - May 9, 2012
|IELTS: Funding artists or spending money on other important subjects?
2 - I think a more simple introductory statement would fit better such as "In my opinion, there should absolutely be...
Writing FeedbackScientiana - May 8, 2012 / EF_Susan - May 9, 2012
|Essay on "We don't see, though we look! We don't hear, though we listen! ............
3 - Dear leah. Thanks for your comments and appreciation. But, have to tell you frankly that I'm not perfect in...
Writing FeedbackSharavi - May 8, 2012 / Sharavi - May 9, 2012
|TOEFL ESSAY: Living with a roommate is better than Living alone
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|"Worthy subjects" - News editors decide what to broadcast on television
3 - спосибо! (I read in the other post that you're from Russia, right? I studied journalism too, I'm from Brazil)....
Writing FeedbackClarissaMach - May 7, 2012 / ClarissaMach - May 9, 2012
|'Work carefully' - Advantages and disadvantages of studying overseas
2 - Many students in countries which are not very developed, especially in the age group between eleven and fifteen tends...
Writing FeedbackMJBSENU - May 9, 2012 / dumi - May 9, 2012
|Gay marriage should not be legalized because it destroys the meaning of family
3 - Well,I am of the view that there should be freedom and liberty for everybody.It will be like depriving people...
Writing Feedbackbansmart06 - May 8, 2012 / tormented chap - May 9, 2012
|My research paper about a Movie Theater I would like to open one day.
Writing Feedbacksweetdisaster06 - May 7, 2012 / jishollywood - May 8, 2012
|Is it important to go to college ? What do you think ? Give reasons for the same .
4 - I strongly believe that people should go to college. Entering university is a very much promising step into worldwide...
Writing Feedbackdpka21 - May 8, 2012 / westway50 - May 8, 2012
|TOEFL Essay " Transportation vehicles: Automobiles, Bicycles OR Airplane"
Writing Feedbackana_p - May 8, 2012 / ana_p - May 8, 2012
|'False awareness' - Dieting can better or ruin one's health completely
2 - Hi, Your opinion is expected in first para. After that you can explain other details. Otherwise your essay...
Writing Feedbackloandinh - May 7, 2012 / ana_p - May 8, 2012
|Students study a wide range of subjects or a few subjects. Discuss both pros and cons
NEW - Title: Some people say students should focus on a few subjects while other argue that they should study a...
Writing Feedbackzhonghua2412 - May 8, 2012 / — -
|leisure time essay; spending time equally useful for resting and for activities
Writing Feedbackaidossodia - May 7, 2012 / aidossodia - May 8, 2012
|The study of history and knowing how to appreciate the value of history
2 - While history serves valuable function to the extent that beyond to daily lives as well -->On the other...
Writing Feedbackvintagefluid - May 4, 2012 / zhonghua2412 - May 8, 2012
|"As you sow so shall you reap" - children as members of society (parents role)
Writing Feedbackkapilsatija - May 7, 2012 / ana_p - May 8, 2012
|IELTS task2: Sould government allocate more budget to some special subjects?
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Apr 25, 2012 / ah_zafari - May 8, 2012
|IELTS-'Some people have benefited from modern communication technology'
NEW - I am have to tested on 12th, May please help me.. TOPIC Some people have benefited from modern...
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|To work and learn at the same time. Advantages and disadvantages.
Writing FeedbackCherry88 - May 5, 2012 / Cherry88 - May 7, 2012
|A rich person must be happier than a poor person
4 - Hi, I have same confusion about such types of essays. I didn't get any satisfied answer for that....
Writing Feedbackmeonhi266 - May 5, 2012 / ana_p - May 7, 2012
|"There is nothing that young people can teach older people"
3 - Hi, OMG!!! mistakes, mistakes n mistakes...:( I never knew but thank you so much. You have cleared my...
Writing Feedbackana_p - May 4, 2012 / ana_p - May 7, 2012
|IELTS essay: advantages and disadvantages of getting married at young age
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|TOEFL: Study in home country or study abroad, which choice is the best?
Writing Feedbackhywb2 - May 7, 2012 / hywb2 - May 7, 2012
|'he must not cheat..' -Write a paragraph about qualities you want from your ideal man
3 - No man in this world is perfect.Every person is born with some defect and shortcoming.Shortcomings which none of us...
Writing Feedbacktrang - May 7, 2012 / tormented chap - May 7, 2012
|IELTS: "Prevention is better than cure" public health
NEW - Topic "Prevention is better than cure." Out of a country's health budget, a large proportion should be diverted...
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|IELTS: Advantages and disadvantages of staying away from families.
15 - Your task is to discuss both adv and disadv for both situations. Your passage seems to be focus mostly...
Writing Feedbackalirulez - Apr 16, 2012 / trang - May 7, 2012
|'This camp opened my eyes' - essay on what I learned from a camp
Writing Feedbackdofayyad - May 6, 2012 / westway50 - May 6, 2012
|TOEFL: It is better to work slower to avoid mistakes - iPhone example
3 - Hi Wang, Thanks for your corrections and reminding! I'll try to paraphrase the original sentence next time. Best...
Writing Feedbackarleneintw - May 6, 2012 / arleneintw - May 6, 2012
|Ielts: Funding education for students who cannot afford it?
3 - Thank you very much. Your comment did not upset me.I will take into account your recommendation and work on...
Writing Feedbackaidossodia - May 5, 2012 / aidossodia - May 5, 2012
|ielts-scientific research done by companies
NEW - Any one can offer some suggestions? I have problem with the Task Achievement part, i often feel my essays...
Writing Feedbacklynnyang - May 5, 2012 / — -
|IELTS: Nuclear technology: Advantages and its risk
2 - I am a bit confused for your 2nd and 3rd paragraphs based on your conclusion, "nuclear are very powerful...
Writing Feedbackdiksu - May 2, 2012 / lynnyang - May 5, 2012
|TOEFL Essay "It's better to find information in a library than on internet"
3 - Hi, I like your alternative sentences. You have explained same ideas in a better words or sentences. I...
Writing Feedbackana_p - May 3, 2012 / ana_p - May 4, 2012
|Ielts Task 2: parental discipine is necessary to bring up well-adjusted kids?
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|education system to the development of a country
3 - First of all, policies of development and management of the government critically affect to the prosperity of a country...
Writing Feedbackloandinh - Apr 27, 2012 / sushiking - May 4, 2012
|Does the Crazy Horse Memorial Exploit or Preserve History - Feedback
3 - Dear Felicite, I too agree with Melissa... good job and really interesting piece of writing !!!!!!!...
Writing Feedbackhardyjoe - May 2, 2012 / dumi - May 4, 2012
|When in Rome do as Romans Do. To what extent you agree or disagree?
2 - Some proverbs have roots in our childhood.In other words,people grow with them.When in Rome do as Romans do is...
Writing Feedbackparulsinha008 - Apr 30, 2012 / moravej44 - May 4, 2012
|People at work; job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing
5 - Hi, The question has two parts: As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work,...
Writing Feedbacksharadarige - May 1, 2012 / ah_zafari - May 4, 2012
|IELTS Topic: urban higher standards of living good or bad? solutions?
3 - There is no denying that a high urban life criterion exerts a series of negative influences on society. ...
Writing Feedbackxyx0905 - Apr 21, 2012 / EF_Susan - May 3, 2012
|Technology has several positive and negative effects on today's world; solution
6 - Technology has become more and more important to human's lives . Therefore, advances in technology has tremendous effects...
Writing Feedbacktram - Apr 14, 2012 / EF_Susan - May 3, 2012
|IELTS,ESSAYSome people think that museums should entertain people
2 - They hide many important things and these are invaluable information should be cater tofor the general public. --------------- the...
Writing Feedbackjaijagadeesh - May 3, 2012 / dumi - May 3, 2012
|TOEFL essay - Banning smoking in public areas and office buildings is good or bad?
3 - Thanks for your comments :) Certainly, I still face problems in choosing the appropriate expression in my essay. Perhaps...
Writing Feedbackll931110 - May 3, 2012 / ll931110 - May 3, 2012
|'There is no best teacher, only the best lesson' - parents the best teachers?
3 - My? Parents are the personspeople who have great affecteffcectto shape myon my characteristics andmy thinking. They teach me a...
Writing FeedbackKaitou - Apr 26, 2012 / mwskwong - May 3, 2012
|The Dangers of Obesity in the United States
2 - Mainly throughout your essay, you just wrote facts about obesity rates in America. I think you need to include...
Writing Feedbackbrown159 - May 2, 2012 / PandaGirl - May 3, 2012
|Essay on how to be culturally competent (applies to nurses too)
2 - Hi, your writing is quite good.It is imperative to understand background of patient before commencing treatment.However first we should...
Writing Feedbackjb3896 - May 3, 2012 / jaijagadeesh - May 3, 2012
|IELTS TOPIC: Technology Vs Relationships ; Is this positive or negative?
NEW - IELTS TOPIC: In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? has this become a positive...
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|I prefer moving in search of a better place, rather than staying in one place
NEW - Question: Some people spend their entire lives in one place. Others move a number of times throughout their lives,...
Writing Feedbacksushiking - May 3, 2012 / — -
|IELTS topic: Increase in retiring age-agree or disagree
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Apr 26, 2012 / ah_zafari - May 3, 2012
|Ielts Task 2-should government spend money on saving languages
2 - Nowadays,nearly no country is immune fromto the problem of the extinction of some languages.--------------- immune means "protected by inoculation"...
Writing Feedbacklynnyang - May 3, 2012 / dumi - May 3, 2012
|The use of internet should be institutionalized in a community
Writing FeedbackRosylife - May 2, 2012 / lynnyang - May 3, 2012
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