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|Essay describing how to you were completely misunderstood (becoming pregnant)
NEW - okay i have to write an essay overexperiences. have you ever attempted to change the way people view you?...
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|"Scott Rudin" - identify a producer whose work you admire
NEW - Hi everybody :) i'm applying for a film producing course and i have to write about a producer whose...
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|Is image more powerful than the written word? - ielts
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Jun 13, 2011 / Geenesh - Jun 16, 2011
|Compare and contrast - knowledge gained from personal experience vs. classroom
2 - I think the word "creator" here should be in capital letter like what Ms. Khinie wrote because it...
Writing FeedbackkhinieR - Jun 14, 2011 / badjeje - Jun 16, 2011
|Toefl ibt essay: Work in team or independently (preferable)
4 - Hey, I like that argument! This is a meaningful essay, because not everyone would agree with your argument. Yet,...
Writing FeedbackCoolmam9x - Jun 14, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 15, 2011
|IELS> Creative artists to express their ideas should be restricted by government?
Writing Feedbackwinniesun - Jun 13, 2011 / winniesun - Jun 15, 2011
|Should a prudent person conclude that science and religion are incompatible?
NEW - This is my first post, and my first ever formal writing paper. Feed back would be greatly appreciated. I...
Writing Feedbackcarsonleeallen - Jun 14, 2011 / — -
|IELTS: should teachers be paid according to the quality of their teaching?
Writing Feedbackbadjeje - Jun 10, 2011 / badjeje - Jun 14, 2011
|"main target is education" - attend college or university for many different reasons.
4 - Thank you very much for dumi and EF_Kevin, now I am learning lots of skills from you and your...
Writing Feedbackdhammika1973 - Jun 7, 2011 / dhammika1973 - Jun 14, 2011
|Telling the truth is mandatory in a sound relationship?
7 - hey, EF_Kevin, thx ...i will follow ur advice and try to write more essay ...i will work hard, and...
Writing FeedbackECHOECHO - Jun 11, 2011 / ECHOECHO - Jun 13, 2011
|" Time & Memory" a Narrative for University Fundemental Writing Class
2 - I like that intro!! You write well... I mustered up the lung capacity to murmur "Where's my cell phone?"...
Writing Feedbackmrperez4 - Jun 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 13, 2011
|Universal Primary Education and Free the Children in Kenya (grade 11)
2 - Hi Anne, welcome to EssayForum! I hope you'll have time to help a few other students, because you write...
Writing Feedbackanntc - Jun 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 13, 2011
|toefl writing: people holding different views cannot achieve success?
3 - Here is one more sentence that needs some work: Use this phrase: different ....from People with different views from...
Writing FeedbackJuliezhang9001 - Jun 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 13, 2011
|Goodbye AIDS? HIV-AIDS is an irremediable disease no more.
8 - Yep, that is what I always think people should do. Now we'll look for more mistakes to correct:...
Writing Feedbacklearner2 - Jun 8, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 12, 2011
|Behavior Therapy (Psychology paragraph)
Writing FeedbackRosalin Becky - Jun 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 12, 2011
|The rulers are well-educated; Directors of large companies receive big salaries
3 - Great thread here... thanks everyone! I noticed that realfog fixed an error with a common expression: "As far as...
Writing Feedbackwinniesun - Jun 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 12, 2011
|An Unforgettable Dream (marriage and death)
9 - Well, maybe it meets the requirements for submission, and maybe not. But when I first read this I really...
Writing FeedbackRosalin Becky - Jun 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 12, 2011
|should school child be limited on the hours of watching tv program and movie?
4 - . If the child is addicted to these entertainments and spend at the second paragraph, you can use 'children'...
Writing FeedbackJuliezhang9001 - Jun 7, 2011 / winniesun - Jun 12, 2011
|People, events that change the way you're thinking
Writing FeedbackKathyLala - Jun 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 11, 2011
|Mass media means a bridge between people in different places
6 - I'll fix it by adding WHILE: However, while some of these bring benefits for us, there are also bad...
Writing Feedbackwinniesun - Jun 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 11, 2011
|Life and Art - Art immortalizes life.
3 - Hi Sarita, do you understand all of the corrections Ajit gave here? I like your ideas. It's interesting...
Writing Feedbacksarita Rana - Jun 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 11, 2011
|IELTS: Advantages and disadvantages of wearing uniform
9 - Nowadays, wearing uniforms is an obligation in some companies and organizations. They require their staff to wear uniforms,...
Writing FeedbackScientiana - Apr 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2011
|"Narcissistic Personality Disorder" - "The Search" by Naguib Mahfouz.
2 - Right after this part, I think you should have a sentence that continues the theme you stated with...
Writing Feedbackcorralizas - Jun 8, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2011
|CBEST: Someone unforgettable (Dinesh)
NEW - Write about an unforgettable person whom you have encountered in your life? What made him or her special? How...
Writing Feedbackztoa - Jun 9, 2011 / — -
|Country's technology versus traditional skills - IELTS
Writing Feedbackjennychen - Jun 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 9, 2011
|Essay: Most writers of fiction do not earn enough money to live from their writing.
3 - Reading is the important factor of our knowledge and also it is helpstous conduct our life style. Any reading...
Writing Feedbackdhammika1973 - Jun 6, 2011 / dumi - Jun 8, 2011
|IELTS exam: Should children play or study?
6 - thank you all so much for the suggestions and corrections.. pls keep them coming so the next time i...
Writing Feedbackbadjeje - Jun 8, 2011 / badjeje - Jun 8, 2011
|Essay about love: why love is important in life?
2 - The love is a feeling of completeness that comes from treating others as part of our self, and love...
Writing Feedbackfisal - Jun 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 8, 2011
|IELTS - Several languages are in danger of extinction
Writing Feedbackhaitom - Jun 7, 2011 / haitom - Jun 8, 2011
|IELTS>Safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority?
4 - Due to the developed living standard in the world's richest countries, an enormous amount of products are discarded when...
Writing Feedbackwinniesun - Jun 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 7, 2011
|College/University should be free for ALL determined and qualifying students.
7 - I forgot to answer your question before. The thing is, college is never FREE if people need to get...
Writing Feedbackchocopix - May 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 7, 2011
|How to fund community recreational services (increase taxes?)
Writing Feedbackthrollen - Jun 5, 2011 / throllen - Jun 7, 2011
|Better to be self-employed, work for someone else, or own a business? TOEFL
5 - Usually, if you use IN MY OPINION, you should make a general statement afterwards: In my opinion, it is...
Writing FeedbackFatimaTOEFL - Jun 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 7, 2011
|"The rose of desert" hotel - description of a place I don't recommend
3 - For this part, you can also use a capital T: ...most part: The taxi driver was uncommonly pleasant, and...
Writing Feedbackpiinka - Jun 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 7, 2011
|Laws should be flexible enough to take account of various circumstances
Writing Feedbacksameercool87 - May 15, 2011 / sameercool87 - Jun 7, 2011
|ESSAY:"The arts reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society."
Writing Feedbackgetgetget - Jun 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 7, 2011
|Social contact affecting health status of older people
NEW - could you tell me which one looks better for the name of the paper as following; Named1: The...
Writing Feedbackpondjung - Jun 7, 2011 / — -
|"Grandmother from a small town": Write about an old person in your family
6 - I imagine the four of you sitting across a picnic table one can often see on college campuses in...
Writing Feedbacksejima - Jun 6, 2011 / Rajiv - Jun 7, 2011
|Essay: We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers
Writing Feedbackdhammika1973 - May 31, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 6, 2011
|My Essay on the Advantages and the Disadvantages of Studying Abroad
4 - Thank you very much EF_kevin! I really appreciate your kindness. I like helping others with English as much as...
Writing FeedbackKwSalem - Jun 2, 2011 / kusanagi1981 - Jun 6, 2011
|Ban on Smoking / Advantage and Disadvantage-IELTS
3 - You should start with the history of smokers, take a lot of examples. But the most important thing here...
Writing Feedbacklastielts - May 23, 2011 / maryry - Jun 6, 2011
|About students and the difficulties they face, how to overcome - Cbest Essay
5 - Thanks Guys... I just hope the timing is enough... and praying for spell check!!! hahahha...jk...
Writing FeedbackElsie - Jun 2, 2011 / Elsie - Jun 5, 2011
|Do we value only what we struggle for? - SAT practice
Writing Feedbackpianosaremusic - Jun 3, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 5, 2011
|The external elements have dominated the features of everyone? Characteristics.
5 - Kevin,I appriciate that you pay attention.Thank you so much indeed.I`m more motivated and so amazed aswell that not only...
Writing Feedbackyas rose - May 27, 2011 / yas rose - Jun 5, 2011
|Compare the changes of an area during the years and predicted planning in the future
2 - I'll ad a comma to this compound sentence: According to the first picture, there were only a few...
Writing Feedbackyoyolo - Jun 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 4, 2011
|"Reasons vary for people to attend college" - Practice TOEFL
Writing FeedbackFatimaTOEFL - May 31, 2011 / FatimaTOEFL - Jun 2, 2011
|Essay: Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others.
4 - During the school day, students need to study, which is the main target, but unfortunately there are some students...
Writing Feedbackdhammika1973 - May 30, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 2, 2011
|Essay: Smokers can cause themselves serious health problems.
Writing Feedbackdhammika1973 - Jun 1, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 2, 2011
|America's ignorance towards Pakistan supported terrorism.
7 - My teacher in school told me to become a technocrat- n not an engineer- i always have his description...
Writing Feedbackkshinu - May 29, 2011 / ajit88rai - Jun 2, 2011
|"the Gerald Clayton Trio" - Music Appreciation Essay
7 - Thank you for the pointers! I made the necessary corrections and am ready to print and submit - again,...
Writing FeedbackFayette287 - May 30, 2011 / Fayette287 - Jun 2, 2011
|Toefl intergrated writing task: Experiments on animals
3 - Hey, I like your communication style... very engaging. I don't think this is the place to start...
Writing FeedbackCoolmam9x - May 31, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 2, 2011
|In North Korea it is illegal to question people in authority, thus its most corrupt country in world
4 - This sentence might need some revision: The vast majority of societies around the world is largely dependent upon people...
Writing Feedbackjhyoon430 - May 30, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 1, 2011
|IELTS Writing- technology leads to dying out of traditional skills and ways of life
Writing Feedbackextrafresh - May 12, 2011 / lastielts - Jun 1, 2011
|Toefl: Technological Innovations that are important
6 - Okay, Elmar, practice by typing it again and using the corrections you got here. That way, you can form...
Writing Feedbackelmar - May 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 31, 2011
|IELTS: mixed nationalities and cultures promote countries develop more quickly
Writing Feedbackandrea1122 - May 3, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 30, 2011
|IELTS - do arts and music improve the quality of life?
2 - My view is that the government should give priority to investing more money in the basic social welfares, such...
Writing Feedbackyoyolo - May 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 30, 2011
|An unforgettable survey from my childhood (or "I should be a teacher too")
4 - Welcome to EssayForum, Harun!! I'll make some suggestions below: People have many childhood experiences to enrich their lives....
Writing Feedbackhrnkls - May 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 30, 2011
|computer made life more complex and stressful .
Writing Feedbackbahareh - May 24, 2011 / bahareh - May 30, 2011
|The Devastation of my life - memory, transformation and tons of discretion
3 - Do you mean discretion or digression? People usually capitalize God. Capitalize the first word of the...
Writing Feedbackwaquarali - May 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 30, 2011
|Academic subjects should be useful for future careers of students?
5 - ...Those, who really love art.. Yoyo Lo, your try is very nice. In the 4th paragraph, you can...
Writing Feedbackyoyolo - May 26, 2011 / dhammika1973 - May 30, 2011
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