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|Toefl essay: Playing computer games is a waste of time
NEW - it is no longer notorious as people think Because of the quick progress of computer science, subsequently coming...
Writing Feedbackyvonne2930 - Sep 9, 2011 / — -
|Children burden the hope of families and countries - be a good member of society
5 - don't give examples in brackets....write for instance in place of e.g and continue without brackets. >> From winchesters's...
Writing Feedbackjamliu0229 - Sep 9, 2011 / BarbieTsu - Sep 9, 2011
|TOEFL-Work with a group of people on a team or to work independently
6 - Dear Asmita, I appreciate your valuable comment. Your revision clearly illustrates why cooperation is inevitable. Also, your word...
Writing Feedbackbasawang - Sep 8, 2011 / basawang - Sep 9, 2011
|IELTS Topic: Impact of International Tourism
4 - The essay has gracefully presented the social impacts of International Tourism which is true in most cases of developing...
Writing Feedbackthread_a - Sep 8, 2011 / Asmita_ - Sep 9, 2011
|TOEFL-Face-to-face communication is of great importance
Writing Feedbackbasawang - Sep 8, 2011 / winchesters - Sep 9, 2011
|Authority, professionalism, and preplanning -an important skill a person should learn
4 - Dear Winchesters, I look up in the dictionary and some Internet resources. I believe the correct spelling...
Writing Feedbackwinchesters - Sep 8, 2011 / basawang - Sep 9, 2011
|Definition paper - we have to explain a party through denotation and connotation
NEW - Prompt - to define a party by playing between the denotative and connotative meanings without using the words beer,...
Writing Feedbackjleu - Sep 8, 2011 / — -
|Technology makes our life to be more convenient and colorful, brings lots of benefits to children
4 - Practice makes perfect. I think you should do some grammar exercises and practice writing skills more. You can rewrite...
Writing Feedbackcarolyn1219 - Sep 1, 2011 / beepro21 - Sep 8, 2011
|"my first flight lesson" - Writing a memoir for my composition class
5 - This is where I really struggle because I find it hard to have a true emotional attachment to things...
Writing FeedbackKaramKozim - Sep 7, 2011 / KaramKozim - Sep 8, 2011
|Happiness-is it difficult to define? ielts task2
5 - Thank you so much for your ideas. Maybe, we have different viewpoints of the topic. I get your points...
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Sep 8, 2011 / beepro21 - Sep 8, 2011
|Statement of purpose for PHD in Mechanical eng - US
NEW - Hi guys, i have written a statement of purpose which needs grammatical and structure correction , can you...
Writing Feedbacksrd4ban - Sep 8, 2011 / — -
|Toefl essay-I prefer the movies are designed primarily to amuse and entertain.
5 - it is depended....it depends which type of movies...which type of movie no need to write A before tremendous don't...
Writing Feedbackloveoaple - Sep 2, 2011 / winchesters - Sep 8, 2011
|Traditional skills and lifestyles-ielts test 2
NEW - Please check my writing and help me improve it! I highly appreciate your help! When a country develops its...
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Sep 8, 2011 / — -
|TOEFL- What subject is the most important for students?
3 - Dear abc1400, Thanks for your comment. I agree with you that the topic sentence is not clear enough....
Writing Feedbackbasawang - Sep 7, 2011 / basawang - Sep 7, 2011
|[IBT Toefl] Businesses should do anything they can make a profit. (Agree/Disagree)
NEW - PLZ Can anyone revise my essay?....:) ---------------------------------------------------------------------- ------------------------------------------------- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?...
Writing FeedbackBME Jung - Sep 7, 2011 / — -
|The demands of society spur the high sales of popular consumer goods.
2 - Yes, and the idea is expressed in the PARAGRAPH TOPIC SENTENCE. Great stuff here. Thanks, Turbina. :-) I...
Writing Feedbacksouthsealxb - Sep 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Sep 7, 2011
|My Puffin Rescue ( recent trip to Iceland)
3 - I agree with laurasanchez52. Although it has 'you' in it, the essay doesn't reveal a lot about YOU (character-wise)....
Writing Feedbacklynnesidell - Sep 7, 2011 / dreamingsnow - Sep 7, 2011
|Short Essay: "Stereotypes result in self-fulfilling prophesies"
3 - This is a really great start. You may want to consider coming up with more of a grabber, something...
Writing FeedbackPowerfuldog - Sep 3, 2011 / lywillis - Sep 7, 2011
|Urbanization provides good platform for business, but isn't free of negativities
2 - AsSome people believe that, ---No comma here.--- this leads to an infrastructural inequality among different regions of a country,...
Writing Feedbackzunayed1983 - Sep 7, 2011 / EF_Susan - Sep 7, 2011
|Growing up just outside of Detroit with an unconventional upbringing.
NEW - To me its like a dream; growing up just outside of Detroit with an unconventional upbringing. Looking back now...
Writing FeedbackLDeSloovere - Sep 7, 2011 / — -
|Public transportation system - hometown, what would you change?
NEW - TOEFL - If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and...
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Sep 7, 2011 / — -
|IELTS Topic: Should Immigrants adapt to adopted country?
NEW - Nowadays, more people are migrating to other countries than ever before. In order to become integrated into society in...
Writing Feedbackjuliet0611 - Sep 7, 2011 / — -
|Writing ielts task 1_ Diagram: The water cycle
4 - yes i also agree that you should use the diagram below or above or whatever since in your answer,...
Writing Feedbacklylong - Aug 11, 2011 / bangshws - Sep 6, 2011
|Sports and social activities can offer the same significant things that classes and libraries offer
5 - Yes, I aware of that~~but could you please tell me how to write a good conclusion to this essay....
Writing Feedbackchxz1020 - Sep 4, 2011 / chxz1020 - Sep 6, 2011
|How I Learned My Strength-Personal Essay about something that impacted thinking
NEW - Topic: An incident or experience that impacted your thinking or development. Please let me know if I answered...
Writing Feedbackblynnleon - Sep 6, 2011 / — -
|"create a positive movement in my city first" -A company to build a large factory
NEW - A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and...
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Sep 6, 2011 / — -
|How important is sports in your country?
2 - I agree with what they said before me because they caught most of the errors and I also don't...
Writing Feedbackisabellaclaudia - Sep 6, 2011 / blynnleon - Sep 6, 2011
|"an unforgettable 3-day trip to the countryside" - Your last summer holiday.
NEW - It was an unforgettable 3-day trip to the countryside to visit my grandparents last summer holiday. My family decided...
Writing Feedbackviolonc_21 - Sep 6, 2011 / — -
|technology will completely replace the traditional teacher in classroom. Do you agree
Writing Feedbackmehdi0912 - Aug 25, 2011 / isabellaclaudia - Sep 6, 2011
|Family life these days has been affected by the hectic lives people lead.
2 - Your essay is excellent. There are only a few mistakes. From the time immemorial, parents hold the role...
Writing Feedbackisabellaclaudia - Sep 6, 2011 / Scientiana - Sep 6, 2011
|Space travel in the moon is a big step for mankind, but didn't contribute to our life
3 - Thanks Isabella for you valuable advise.I also noticed that.I dont know why my brain always get frozen if I...
Writing FeedbackRini - Sep 5, 2011 / Rini - Sep 6, 2011
|children engagement in paid work-ielts task 2
2 - i like your essay,it was succinct throughout. the ideas are clearly elaborated with some examples but it would be...
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Sep 5, 2011 / isabellaclaudia - Sep 6, 2011
|Is the effort involving inpursuing nay goal valuable, even if the goal is not reached
2 - prompt: Is the effort involving inpursuing nay goal valuable, even if the goal is not reached? Life is...
Writing Feedbackanangelaa - Sep 5, 2011 / Dhillon - Sep 6, 2011
|"Money should be spend to resolve global issues first, not wasted on space" - ielts
NEW - Topic: Should governments spend money on space exploration, or should they spend the money on problems here first? ...
Writing Feedbackritu_168 - Sep 5, 2011 / — -
|Should or not restrict on artists? ---Ielts Test
2 - Artists, who bring us creativitiesto the world of imagination , always desire to show all their imaginationcreativeness. But someone...
Writing FeedbackMai Chu - Sep 3, 2011 / Denice - Sep 5, 2011
|IELTS- Advertising and its impact on high sales and real needs of people
2 - I must say that your writing is not successful. Three reasons given are not convincing and logical. There are...
Writing Feedbackmkm123 - Sep 3, 2011 / beepro21 - Sep 5, 2011
|Is television a dangerous influence on teenagers behavior? (Argumentative Essay)
2 - Television is one of the greatest inventions ever. Over the past few decades it has evolved a lot from...
Writing Feedbackpulkit9999 - Sep 5, 2011 / Bobur - Sep 5, 2011
|people who go outside are more successful and happier than people who stay in village
2 - Should people stay in the village or go outside of it? ---I added some words to improve the grammar....
Writing Feedbackyc9055 - Aug 31, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Sep 4, 2011
|The importance of natural resources (forests, animals and clean water)
16 - Ana Maria, ARness and EF_Kevin. I would like to answer to your replies in order of their appearance....
Writing Feedbackbirdman - Aug 19, 2011 / birdman - Sep 4, 2011
|Improving the quality of education by not increasing teacher's salary.
2 - Higher salary does not necessarily mean teaching improvement. Whether a teacher is willing to or has the ability to...
Writing FeedbackHua0755 - Sep 4, 2011 / Icecreamquest - Sep 4, 2011
|the proportion of older people，postive and negative effects.-----IELTS
Writing FeedbackIcecreamquest - Sep 3, 2011 / Icecreamquest - Sep 4, 2011
|IELTS:some people think change is always a good thing but,some others don't
NEW - Task-1:- he charts give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000,and the marital status of...
Writing Feedbacksobin - Sep 4, 2011 / — -
|"Mazes, Jigsaw puzzles.." - is this type of essay usable?
2 - It's a very creative start!! I like the idea and can see your voice through the piece, but for...
Writing Feedbackcornonthecobb - Sep 3, 2011 / niclarson - Sep 3, 2011
|The media should consider famous people's lives
7 - Since the teenagers' body is not strong, they would face a number of physical difficulties. ----I made a small...
Writing Feedbacksoshianet - Aug 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Sep 3, 2011
|IELTS2; Old, historic buildings need to be preserved or destroyed and replaced?
Writing Feedbackgsmaan - Aug 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Sep 3, 2011
|The reasons of increasing divorce rate (in Bushehr)
NEW - Woman shouts at the man "How dare you annoy and torture my poor daughter? I'm wiped out." and man...
Writing Feedbacksasan1358 - Sep 3, 2011 / — -
|All university students should take at least one class that teaches the other culture
Writing Feedbacksuperkorean - Sep 3, 2011 / superkorean - Sep 3, 2011
|IELTS Topic: Should Smoking and tobacco products be banned?
4 - deniable1982 Furthermore, smoking runs a high risk of miscarriage for pregnant women. And there are plenty evidences indicate that...
Writing Feedbackdeniable1982 - Sep 2, 2011 / Icecreamquest - Sep 3, 2011
|"population aged 65 and over" - writing graph
Writing Feedbacksuheyla - Sep 2, 2011 / suheyla - Sep 3, 2011
|Developing and industrialised countries in science and education - Chart description
7 - the chart provides information about the involvement of developing and industrialised countries in science and education in 1980 and...
Writing Feedbackkainam - Aug 28, 2011 / sobin - Sep 3, 2011
|TOEFL - Technology inspires children's creativity instead of weakening it.
Writing Feedbackchxz1020 - Aug 30, 2011 / chxz1020 - Sep 2, 2011
|What are the most important characteristics a public figure should possess?
2 - Hei Claudia! :D I really liked the essay, there are however two things I'd change about it. First...
Writing Feedbackisabellaclaudia - Sep 2, 2011 / amrosca - Sep 2, 2011
|Knowledge gained from real life?; Books are better resource for gain knowledge
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Sep 2, 2011 / abc1400 - Sep 2, 2011
|IELTS - topics on the contributions of technology to human life
3 - Yes , this question should be adopted from an August exam . Shouldn't the conclusion be short enough...
Writing Feedbackmonkey_forever - Sep 2, 2011 / monkey_forever - Sep 2, 2011
|[IELTS]a police force carrying guns will increase the crime rate
4 - I am not a expert but for IELTS they look very closely on your structure,maybe you better epand your...
Writing Feedbackjamliu0229 - Aug 31, 2011 / shahdad - Sep 2, 2011
|"Important milestone" - TOEFL- Why do you think people attend college or university?
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Sep 1, 2011 / Mai Chu - Sep 2, 2011
|An essay on teaching someone to ride a tricyle
NEW - For most children, a tricycle is a first step in learning to ride. I still remember those days where...
Writing FeedbackParimala - Sep 2, 2011 / — -
|IELTS: disruptive kids should be taught separately
6 - Coupled with a good guidances from their teachers , these students are (would tend to be ) more likely...
Writing FeedbackEagerlearner - Aug 28, 2011 / jamliu0229 - Sep 1, 2011
|[TOEFL] government budget focus, young children or university?
5 - Your essay is prefect but you didn't indent your paragraphs so it it is very hard to read your...
Writing Feedbackphilossophia - Aug 16, 2011 / abc1400 - Sep 1, 2011
|There is little doubt that more cars will in use than today, in twenty years.
NEW - There are lots of fancy about our future life. What our life will be? What changes will appear in...
Writing Feedbackyinyinfriends - Sep 1, 2011 / — -
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