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|Ban for fast food adverts? [WRITING TASK 2]The best way to prevent obesity in children!
4 - @minhphuccttv I suggest you should exploit your points deeper and make your argument clearer. Here are my suggestions...
Writing Feedbackminhphuccttv - Aug 15, 2017 / Mimi123 - Aug 15, 2017
|How many tonnes of goods were transported in the UK over a 28-year period
2 - Anh, the presentation has a number of minor problems that need to be addressed. For the summary overview, you...
Writing Feedbacktienanh - Aug 15, 2017 / Holt - Aug 15, 2017
|Chinese Civil War. Major historical events have powerful impact to people.
Writing Feedbacktoseanliu - Aug 15, 2017 / Holt - Aug 15, 2017
|Working while studying pfenomenon.
3 - Liu, it would be in your best interest to always post the complete prompt and not just the discussion...
Writing Feedbacktoseanliu - Aug 15, 2017 / Holt - Aug 15, 2017
|Leadership skills: Some people could be naturally good leaders. Or people just can learn leadership?
2 - Vu, when you are given a "2 points of view plus personal opinion" instruction, you must never combine your...
Writing FeedbackVu Thanh - Aug 15, 2017 / Holt - Aug 15, 2017
|Travel during Public Holidays - Problems & Solutions
4 - Holt, I'm sorry if the request mentioned above is offensive to you. I didn't mean any kind of privilege...
Writing Feedbackearlnguyen - Aug 13, 2017 / earlnguyen - Aug 15, 2017
|[Toefl] It is crucial for youngsters to have the planning and organizing skills.
4 - @Katthew Kim These are a few comments for you and I hope it is helpful. Firstly, the opening paragraph...
Writing FeedbackKatthew Kim - Aug 14, 2017 / Mimi123 - Aug 15, 2017
|IT IS BETTER TO SPEAK WELL RATHER THAN TO WRITE WELL IN OUR WORK/LIFE
Writing FeedbackMimi123 - Aug 14, 2017 / Mimi123 - Aug 15, 2017
|Foods preparation methods. I really appreciate if you can help me out with my essay
Writing Feedbackchocuatt - Aug 14, 2017 / Mimi123 - Aug 15, 2017
|Modern Technology brought more comforts than simple Technology
Writing Feedbackwaseem110 - Aug 13, 2017 / waseem110 - Aug 14, 2017
|[IELTS Task 1] contribution of three sectors < > to the UK economy in the twentieth century
4 - Hi Mao, I read your task 1 essay. I really appreciate some of your expressions but I have two...
Writing Feedbackzeal - Aug 12, 2017 / alishiraz - Aug 14, 2017
|[IELTS TASK 2] _Viability of GM foods to meet demand of growing population
4 - Hi @Holt, thanks a lot I really appreciate your comments. I will give foremost consideration to what you recommended....
Writing Feedbackalishiraz - Aug 11, 2017 / alishiraz - Aug 14, 2017
|IELTS Task 1 - Write a report for a university lecture describing the information shown in diagram
3 - @Echu You will not get a passing score for this essay. Even without the chart, I can see that...
Writing FeedbackEchu - Aug 3, 2017 / Holt - Aug 14, 2017
|Public transportation service - the role in contributing to the development of a smart city. Ielts 2
Writing FeedbackThuhuong - Aug 13, 2017 / Thuhuong - Aug 14, 2017
|Global firms should take responsible for local communities
2 - Linh, when you write the opening statement, you need to make sure that you accurately reconstruct the original prompt...
Writing Feedbacktunglinh0907 - Aug 14, 2017 / Holt - Aug 14, 2017
|Some people think that the government have the duty to ensure its citizens have a healthy diet...
Writing Feedbacksinh - Aug 13, 2017 / chocuatt - Aug 14, 2017
|[IELTS] - Larger shopping areas or corner shops?
2 - Cu, your essay is not clearly focused on the discussion. The location being discussed is a shopping mall, not...
Writing Feedbackcuthilananh2000 - Aug 13, 2017 / Holt - Aug 13, 2017
|Different attributes of men and women at work
Writing Feedbackchocuatt - Aug 13, 2017 / chocuatt - Aug 13, 2017
|The proportion of active Australian citizens in different age groups and sex. [IELTS]
Writing FeedbackAkairoi0213 - Aug 13, 2017 / Holt - Aug 13, 2017
|[IELTS Task 2] ...reward members of staff...by giving them extra money...
Writing FeedbackAudrey01 - Aug 12, 2017 / Audrey01 - Aug 13, 2017
|[TOEFL]Some people consider that our life is more complex than it was in the past
3 - @Holt Happy to see you again, I say this because after the first you read my article titled as...
Writing FeedbackRoman123 - Aug 12, 2017 / Roman123 - Aug 13, 2017
|Ielts task 2 | Health (The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems)
4 - Ngan, your essay presentation needs work. The opening paragraph does not provide an accurate outline as required for the...
Writing FeedbackDinaDinh - Aug 12, 2017 / Holt - Aug 12, 2017
|[Toefl] an effective leader should try to make others part of the decision making process
Writing FeedbackRoman123 - Aug 9, 2017 / Roman123 - Aug 12, 2017
|[IELTS Task 1] the trends of the accessibility of current technology in homes in the U.K.
Writing Feedbackzeal - Aug 11, 2017 / zeal - Aug 12, 2017
|Idolization and its effects
3 - Linh, this is not a comparison essay. This is a singular opinion essay as indicated by the prompt instruction...
Writing Feedbacktunglinh0907 - Aug 12, 2017 / Holt - Aug 12, 2017
|The pie chart compares the proportion of energy production in four different energy sources
3 - Abu, when you write the summary overview, always make sure that you do it as a complete paragraph that...
Writing Feedbackabubakar07 - Aug 11, 2017 / Holt - Aug 12, 2017
|Task 1 Ielts: Bar graphs about the sales of music albums
4 - I can only suggest you to improve visuals of statistical graphs by creating them in microsoft/en-gb/store/b/office because they looks...
Writing Feedbacktran14 - Aug 11, 2017 / ulanter - Aug 11, 2017
|Should a city try to preserve its old buildings or replace them with modern buildings?
4 - Here are a number of errors made in the essay. 1) Incomplete sentences. 2) Too simple overview....
Writing Feedbackminhphuccttv - Aug 11, 2017 / tran14 - Aug 11, 2017
|Everyone should become vegetarian
Writing FeedbackAndreiWindy - Aug 11, 2017 / tran14 - Aug 11, 2017
|The emissions of carbon dioxide (CO2) in metric tonnes per person [Ielts]
4 - @wuchunhung0927 Hi. You should have given your essay a second look when you succeeded in posting your thread. Images...
Writing Feedbackwuchunhung0927 - Aug 11, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Aug 11, 2017
|Essay about the punishment for children
3 - Chan, your essay is not very understandable. The English sentences that you developed are not coherent and lack a...
Writing Feedbackvincent0801 - Aug 11, 2017 / Holt - Aug 11, 2017
|[IELTS TAKS 2] CAMBRIDGE 12 TEST 5 - INFORMATION SHARING
4 - It is considered by some that accessing to scientific research, business and academic world should be free while there...
Writing Feedbackhailung - Aug 8, 2017 / hailung - Aug 11, 2017
|Do you agree or disagree with the following comment? Sometimes it is better not to tell the truth.
3 - Thao, grammar issues, which are minimal in consideration, aside, this is a very well thought out and defended essay....
Writing Feedbackitsjjj16 - Aug 11, 2017 / Holt - Aug 11, 2017
|[IELTS Task 2]Should museums charge for admission
2 - Jiawen, your paraphrasing of the prompt requirements is misrepresenting the original intent of the writer and also, incomplete in...
Writing Feedbackmtnnnntm - Aug 10, 2017 / Holt - Aug 11, 2017
|IELTS Essay task 2: Food can be produced cheaper if we use...
2 - Thu, in an IELTS Task 2 Essay, your personal opinion, though required by the prompt, is not to be...
Writing Feedbacknamchun99 - Aug 10, 2017 / Holt - Aug 11, 2017
|Early cultivation of children's interest in learning second language
2 - Lucy, this essay is very confusing to read. You failed to properly paraphrase the prompt requirements in the opening...
Writing FeedbackLucy Kao - Aug 10, 2017 / Holt - Aug 11, 2017
|Causes of land degradation and deforestation in 1990's - IELTS1
6 - Thank for your comment! this is my first presentation with fast writing, so i will other with more effort...
Writing Feedbackkjra178 - Aug 9, 2017 / kjra178 - Aug 10, 2017
|[Toefl] Compared to when our grandparents were young, life is more comfortable and easier these days
3 - Matthew, first of all, please make sure that you post the essay for review in the correct forum. You...
Writing FeedbackKatthew Kim - Aug 10, 2017 / Holt - Aug 10, 2017
|Purchasing other countries' products in the same place
Writing FeedbackWendy0604 - Aug 10, 2017 / Holt - Aug 10, 2017
|[IELTS TASK 1] CAMBRIDGE 12 - BAR CHART - PHYSICAL ACTIVITIES
Writing Feedbackhailung - Aug 7, 2017 / hailung - Aug 10, 2017
|IELTS task1 Ages of the populations in Yemen and Italy
4 - @Holt Thank you for all advice. I appreciate and will keep practicing my writing. Also, thank you for pointing...
Writing FeedbackWendy0604 - Aug 7, 2017 / Wendy0604 - Aug 10, 2017
|Toefl Essay- Which of the following is the kind of friend you would prefer to have?
Writing FeedbackKatthew Kim - Aug 8, 2017 / Katthew Kim - Aug 10, 2017
|(IELTS Task 1) The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled..
Writing Feedbackvansonfan321 - Aug 9, 2017 / vansonfan321 - Aug 10, 2017
|The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world
3 - @Holt Thank for point out my mistake, I will improve my skill by using your advise and present it...
Writing Feedbackwuchunhung0927 - Aug 9, 2017 / wuchunhung0927 - Aug 9, 2017
|Change is an integral part of every existence, should we avoid it?
Writing FeedbackNghi Huynh - Aug 9, 2017 / Holt - Aug 9, 2017
|Discuss about the government should put money on medical care and education or theatres and sports
3 - Nguyen, a well developed essay that properly discusses the required information as required by the prompt will total 5...
Writing Feedbackhanguyen2211 - Aug 9, 2017 / Holt - Aug 9, 2017
|[IELTS TASK 1]The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Aug 8, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Aug 9, 2017
|Patience. What is your approach to problem-solving? TOEFL Independent Essay
3 - Majd, you are writing an academic essay. Therefore, the response needs to be direct and informative. You need not...
Writing FeedbackSFTBNWH11 - Aug 8, 2017 / Holt - Aug 9, 2017
|Study and other activities in student life
3 - Dear Holt, many thanks for your useful advice, it helps me a lot. I re-wrote the essay and hope...
Writing Feedbacknguyenquan - Aug 8, 2017 / nguyenquan - Aug 9, 2017
|Ielts task 2 : technology provides opportunities as much as damages
4 - Susan, you have not approached this task 2 essay in the proper manner. From the very start, you have...
Writing Feedbacksmvicp - Aug 8, 2017 / Holt - Aug 8, 2017
|Money as the reward for good grades in school
2 - Cindy, it is difficult for me to assess the impressive work that you have presented here. You did not...
Writing Feedbacknameaname - Aug 8, 2017 / Holt - Aug 8, 2017
|Children should be taught to collaborate rather than trying to show who's better - IELTS writing
4 - @Shirely Fu Hello, miss Fu. Holt is a contributor, who is not allowed to review your essay twice or...
Writing FeedbackShirely Fu - Aug 7, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Aug 8, 2017
|Is it better to enjoy your money when you earn it (just spend or invest in business, save)
2 - Nayaz, I would really appreciate it if you would include the actual prompt instructions for your essay practice test...
Writing FeedbackNayazah - Aug 7, 2017 / Holt - Aug 7, 2017
|Children' better chance for development - in a rural place or in a big city?
2 - Majd, you have not properly formatted this essay to the required outline for a TOEFL test. The opening paragraph...
Writing FeedbackSFTBNWH11 - Aug 7, 2017 / Holt - Aug 7, 2017
|IELTS writing task 1 - The two pie charts about the types of communication.
3 - Yang, your essay does not follow the correct structure and form presentation for a Task 1 essay. Your first...
Writing Feedbackbachyangha - Aug 6, 2017 / Holt - Aug 7, 2017
|IELTS Task 1: Graph of employment rates in three sectors of UK economy
8 - I think your second body paragraph is too short and you need to make more comparisons ( You can...
Writing Feedbacktommyph - Jul 10, 2017 / Red Moon - Aug 6, 2017
|IELTS Writing task 1 : The three companies' waste
9 - Thanks for your advices. I will try to write a better essay next time. Hope that you can also...
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - May 20, 2017 / Red Moon - Aug 6, 2017
|Robots will become smarter than humans and will take control of their society
2 - Cao, in my opinion, I believe that your essay will score between a 4-5 at best. Your essay has...
Writing Feedbackmathboy - Aug 6, 2017 / Holt - Aug 6, 2017
|Preservation of land for natural existence or human intervention
2 - Williams, the first thing that I notice about this essay is that you did not remember to post the...
Writing Feedbackliam_obdk - Aug 5, 2017 / Holt - Aug 6, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 1: the rate of smoking men declined gradually in Someland
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