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|About MY, Rahul, brother from PUNE
Writing Feedbackvijay kumar - Jul 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 15, 2011
|The reasons for learning languages of 1000 native and non-native speakers
3 - I have a suggestion for making the beginning clearer: The bar chart presents results of a questionnaire distributed to...
Writing Feedbackoonguyenminh - Jul 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 15, 2011
|SAT - Are people more productive and successful if they ignore opinions of others?
2 - Welcome, Geetanjali! Hey, Mirela, you are doing a lot of great work lately! Thanks, I hope you don't steal...
Writing Feedbackgeetanjali - Jul 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 15, 2011
|TOEFL: do you agree that technology helps students learn more and faster?
4 - Hi. Now a days nowadays it is possible for teachers to provide student with sutable materials in different formats...
Writing Feedbackshanbalook - Jul 14, 2011 / shhzbch - Jul 15, 2011
|TOELF-should children play computer games
5 - Does this first sentence NOT reveal what she will write about and what her feelings on this matter...
Writing Feedbackshhzbch - Jul 13, 2011 / amrosca - Jul 14, 2011
|Multicultural society is much more beneficial?
2 - To begin with, like the magnificent rainbow with seven colors, the variety itself is a priceless gift, and when...
Writing Feedbackmegiacodon - Jul 14, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jul 14, 2011
|Barcelona (where would you like to travel and why)
Writing Feedbackghafarimahsa - Jul 10, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 14, 2011
|Do advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives?
NEW - I wrote a Writing Task 2 example and the task description is "Some people say that advertising encourages us...
Writing Feedbackkimrivera11 - Jul 14, 2011 / — -
|Myself as a teacher: "Never loose your strength and confidence."
Writing Feedbackn8dewangan - Jul 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 13, 2011
|Ships Ahoy -- floundering marriages
Writing FeedbackRajiv - May 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 13, 2011
|It is More Important to Work at a Job that You Enjoy than it's to Earn a Lot of Money
4 - Hey, I don't think there is anything to worry about. I read the essay, and the mistakes are very...
Writing Feedbackbahareh - Jul 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 13, 2011
|TOEFL:Do you agree or disagree with the statement that a zoo has no useful purpose.
4 - Some people may believe that a zoo is futile in the era of globalization, which people can develop their...
Writing FeedbackAMM - Jul 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 13, 2011
|Financial education should be mandatory component of the school program
4 - I think you should type the essay again, and use amrosca's suggestions. That is the only way to improve....
Writing Feedbackshahdad - Jul 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 13, 2011
|Parents are the best teacher. Do you agree or disagree with this. ( TOEFL writing)
3 - Here is another idea: First and foremost, personal enjoyment is where I put my priority. ----This is a simple...
Writing Feedbacktunpip_1994 - Jul 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 13, 2011
|TOEFL - Learning to be independent is essential for young adults
3 - Good support and analysis of your point. I think you could make it stronger by not stating that it's...
Writing Feedbacksandy1210428 - Jul 11, 2011 / s1394 - Jul 12, 2011
|"fulfilled the dreams and aspirations of him and his father" - my personal essay
Writing FeedbackRChodavadia - Jul 12, 2011 / RChodavadia - Jul 12, 2011
|Schoolyard: A good place for socialization.
Writing Feedbackcelu - Jul 11, 2011 / isabellaclaudia - Jul 12, 2011
|What are factors which are related to academic success in high-school students?
NEW - As a high-school student, getting your distinctions is the pinnacle of our tedious academic endeavors. Thus drowning ourselves in...
Writing Feedbackisabellaclaudia - Jul 12, 2011 / — -
|If we choose an animal to like, we should do our best to protect them
Writing Feedbackghafarimahsa - Jul 10, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jul 12, 2011
|TOEFL:Government should regard investing in building roads as the most important
5 - Yes, that is a good idea. However, sometimes you can get the wrong idea easily if you rely on...
Writing Feedbacklinh202 - Jul 8, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jul 12, 2011
|Discuss the causes of this phenomenon: In general, people are living longer now.
2 - hello, I like the elaboration of your essay. its a great essay, but i just note some words that...
Writing Feedbacklinh202 - Jul 11, 2011 / isabellaclaudia - Jul 12, 2011
|one word essay on time & quality of our life.
4 - thankyou so much for the feedbaackkss :)) im so happy with the comments, thanks for helping me improvise. well,...
Writing Feedbackisabellaclaudia - Jul 2, 2011 / isabellaclaudia - Jul 12, 2011
|A beautiful girl at night time
Writing FeedbackJunie Rana - Jun 15, 2011 / Junie Rana - Jul 12, 2011
|Sex education should be a compulsory part of the secondary curriculum
5 - EF_Kevin: you have a great English skill and i am grateful for your feedback!Thanks...I will strive for the best...
Writing Feedbacksamuel11023 - Jul 9, 2011 / samuel11023 - Jul 11, 2011
|IELTS ADVERTISING- POSITIVE OR NEGATIVE PART OF OUR LIVES
7 - Many believe that advertising has brought great benefits to lives. Therefore, it should be considered a positive activity while...
Writing Feedbackthe leaf ninja - Jul 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 11, 2011
|Ielts - use of nuclear technology should be discouraged even for civil purposes
4 - Welcome to EF!! I'm glad you are enjoying the sight. Thanks for posting! Be careful of little...
Writing Feedbackw_even - Jul 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 11, 2011
|TOEFL-people should have hobbies and do physical activities
Writing Feedbacklisette - Jul 7, 2011 / lisette - Jul 10, 2011
|Working moms cause problems in the society - ILETS
7 - Women play a significant role towards the success of any nation. Infact, women are considered to be the backone...
Writing FeedbackAlisha123 - Jul 4, 2011 / w_even - Jul 10, 2011
|TOEFL - the main point is to be sure if we can pay a loan or not
7 - It seems like money can do anything, even can harm friendship!---I corrected the grammar. It's not money...
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Jul 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 9, 2011
|Toefl: Children should learn to handle money - benefits for the whole society.
12 - In conclusion, letting children manage their own money will not only benefit children's lives but also benefit the whole...
Writing Feedbackcongcguoke - Jun 15, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 9, 2011
|IELTS: Space Exploration, money should be spent on? 'few compulsory drawbacks'
2 - As the competition between developed countries has become frequent, they try to build a reputation by means of exploration...
Writing Feedbackwinniesun - Jul 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 9, 2011
|IELTS> "Employees working at home" contribute benefits to employers?
3 - Plural: ...by their beloved family members may... encourage the employees to produce get more work done. ......
Writing Feedbackwinniesun - Jul 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 9, 2011
|Topic: "Why go to university?" - making dreams come true?
2 - GreatdealsLarge number of student go to universities per year in order to have a healthy and active environment,obtainacquire...
Writing Feedbacknguyendinhtuong - Jul 9, 2011 / dumi - Jul 9, 2011
|TOEFL: The best way of learning life (listening to advice or personal experience?)
NEW - TOPIC: Some people believe that the best way of learning life is by listening to the advice of family...
Writing Feedbackleeward - Jul 9, 2011 / — -
|My Grandma, youthful in spirit. Creative writing piece.
NEW - Hi, this is a piece of writing about my grandma, I am strugling with the structure and flow so...
Writing FeedbackGeeRaCeR - Jul 8, 2011 / — -
|Working at home using computers or telephones is better than working in the office?
7 - Are you talking about the topic sentence of the 3rd paragraph? Another equally important factor that that makes...
Writing Feedbackzhonghua2412 - Jul 4, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 8, 2011
|"Brand is Me"--About myself as if I'm a brand
2 - Yes, if the first part would be a complete sentence on it's own, then you separate the 2 halves...
Writing Feedbackleia624 - Jul 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 8, 2011
|[ IELTS ] Children should be encouraged to co-operate or to be competitve?
Writing Feedbackmikneiht - Jun 10, 2011 / mikneiht - Jul 8, 2011
|ILETS Essay. Mass communication and transport continue to grow.
NEW - As mass communication and transport continue to grow, societies are becoming more and more alike leading to a phenomenon...
Writing FeedbackAlisha123 - Jul 8, 2011 / — -
|Dropping out; Encouraging the student to get involved in extracurriculars.
4 - It is clear and easy to understand. The mistakes are small mistakes. I think you will pass, but I...
Writing Feedbackcelu - Jul 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 7, 2011
|Technology or social needs ? Which should get priority over the other?
2 - Every governmental expenditure should be well thought out before being made. This facilitates much of the bureaucratic activity....
Writing Feedbackangellin25 - Jul 7, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jul 7, 2011
|"Weekend will pass as usual" - essay about how i spend my week off.
4 - Look, you capitalized a word after a comma: I always wake up quite late in the morning, After finishing...
Writing Feedbacksooriyan - Jul 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 7, 2011
|TOEFL: Being taught by a teacher is the most suitable and effective way to learn
4 - The verb tense in this paragraph was the PAST TENSE, so keep it in the past tense: Furthermore,...
Writing Feedbacklinh202 - Jul 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 7, 2011
|"CFL lamps make our eyes feel far more comfortable" - TOEFL-Integration
3 - The following paragraph presents three different points of views among the two parties. First of all, the author...
Writing Feedbackjinyan0129 - Jul 4, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 7, 2011
|Promoting healthy life style to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment
2 - With the development of technology, there are plenty of medical efforts have been made, which are more effective and...
Writing FeedbackJames Lin - Jul 6, 2011 / dumi - Jul 7, 2011
|My Family: I'm very proud to be a part
2 - Do not capitalize these words. Only capitalize Honorable, because it is the first word of the sentence! :-)...
Writing Feedbacksarina_19862003 - Jul 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 7, 2011
|"Siblings vs. Friends" (from college English writing class)
NEW - Please proofread this essay. I really want to improve my writing skill. Forever Friend "A sister is...
Writing FeedbackTruong - Jul 6, 2011 / — -
|IELTS Tourism: Advantages outweigh Disadvantages? 'setting restriction areas'
4 - Winnie, this might sound silly, but before you start writing an essay take 5 minutes to put your ideas...
Writing Feedbackwinniesun - Jul 5, 2011 / amrosca - Jul 6, 2011
|Giving mobile phones to the unemployed (IELTS ESSAY)
6 - I am one of the candidate in IELTS exam,too~~ Some people argue that the government should give every...
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Jul 3, 2011 / ekekek - Jul 6, 2011
|USE OF CCTV CAMERAS (IELTS ESSAY)
6 - keep pratice more~~Sangeertha~~It's natural to write overtime~~ Don't be nervous~~just calm down and pratice~~...
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Jun 30, 2011 / ekekek - Jul 6, 2011
|Ielts - it would be unwise to assume a good economy is all that's needed for a country
3 - Hello~~Winnie~~ Economic progress is one way to measure a country's success. Some say that there are other ways...
Writing Feedbackwinniesun - Jul 3, 2011 / ekekek - Jul 6, 2011
|Good and Bad effects of TOURISM
3 - Another high quality edit from Ana... I agree with that advice about using shorter sentences. It is easier...
Writing Feedbacknaseem - Jul 4, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 5, 2011
|"I love you mom and you're the light of my eyes" - My mom essay
Writing Feedbackfofo - Jul 3, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 5, 2011
|"BUY NOTHING DAY" -- More often that once each year.
5 - Buy Nothing Day is observed around the world each November. In honor of the holiday, you will take an...
Writing Feedbackksimms - Jul 3, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 5, 2011
|'Understand others' emotion, attitude and feelings' - face-to-face communication is better
2 - Good points about the use of expression (eyebrows, etc) in face-to-face communication! They all affect the way we...
Writing Feedback123nnt - Jul 3, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 5, 2011
|The ideal teacher: a missionary
4 - You're very much welcome! However, Kevin and Susan are the pros around here, so better wait for a second...
Writing Feedbackcelu - Jul 4, 2011 / amrosca - Jul 5, 2011
|The advantages and disadvantages of 3 media's namely Books,Radio& Television
NEW - Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider...
Writing Feedbackmadinarafi5 - Jul 5, 2011 / — -
|superficial is external human" One should never judge a person by external appearance
4 - oh thank you i really appreciate that, i have serious English writing problem. also thank you inspiring me...
Writing FeedbackDashka - Jun 29, 2011 / Dashka - Jul 5, 2011
|Nowadays, more and more universities ask their students to choose one field the school have
3 - As far as I am concerned, I feel that taking classes in many fields can offer students more opportunities...
Writing Feedbackdellvo - Jul 4, 2011 / linh202 - Jul 5, 2011
|TOEFL: People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment - doing things ......
3 - That first sentence is a difficult one! I tis difficult to refer to a topic this way. I'll give...
Writing FeedbackBuzz8177 - Jul 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 4, 2011
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