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|[IELTS]a police force carrying guns will increase the crime rate
4 - I am not a expert but for IELTS they look very closely on your structure,maybe you better epand your...
Writing Feedbackjamliu0229 - Aug 31, 2011 / shahdad - Sep 2, 2011
|"Important milestone" - TOEFL- Why do you think people attend college or university?
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Sep 1, 2011 / Mai Chu - Sep 2, 2011
|An essay on teaching someone to ride a tricyle
NEW - For most children, a tricycle is a first step in learning to ride. I still remember those days where...
Writing FeedbackParimala - Sep 2, 2011 / — -
|IELTS: disruptive kids should be taught separately
6 - Coupled with a good guidances from their teachers , these students are (would tend to be ) more likely...
Writing FeedbackEagerlearner - Aug 28, 2011 / jamliu0229 - Sep 1, 2011
|[TOEFL] government budget focus, young children or university?
5 - Your essay is prefect but you didn't indent your paragraphs so it it is very hard to read your...
Writing Feedbackphilossophia - Aug 16, 2011 / abc1400 - Sep 1, 2011
|There is little doubt that more cars will in use than today, in twenty years.
NEW - There are lots of fancy about our future life. What our life will be? What changes will appear in...
Writing Feedbackyinyinfriends - Sep 1, 2011 / — -
|"independence from their parents" - Should people live with parents ?
4 - This sentenceis eloquent but inefficient!It takes too many words to express the thought. But it is so powerful...
Writing Feedbacksubhash_ghosh - Aug 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Sep 1, 2011
|Advertising industry has laid an adverse impact on real basic needs of consumer
2 - In the recent times, advertising has emerged as an unbreakable tool for marketing and promoting products. In my...
Writing Feedbacksmokinbomberz - Aug 31, 2011 / EF_Susan - Aug 31, 2011
|Whether save endangered species is a waste of valuable resources
NEW - Topic: Trying to save endangered animal species from extinction is a waste of valuable resources. Do you agree or...
Writing Feedbackkoei1982 - Aug 31, 2011 / — -
|Roles of international sports events -ielts task 2
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Aug 31, 2011 / beepro21 - Aug 31, 2011
|IELTS CAM 7 T4 TASK 1-----electricity production indicated in pie chart
Writing FeedbackIcecreamquest - Aug 30, 2011 / Icecreamquest - Aug 31, 2011
|Juvenile delinquency and mothers'care-ielts task 2
2 - First of all, the problems of the youth results(result ) from their ebullient nature. They are curious about new...
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Aug 29, 2011 / jamliu0229 - Aug 31, 2011
|Books have a greater impact on society than TV ( Toefl essay)
2 - I think TV has some advantages over books as well. In TOEFL, it is better to reason both sides....
Writing Feedbackcarolyn1219 - Aug 28, 2011 / chxz1020 - Aug 30, 2011
|IELTS -- Government wants people to move To Big Cities
4 - Again, thank you so much for your time and comments. They are really helpful. I really need to...
Writing Feedbackmarucat - Aug 28, 2011 / marucat - Aug 30, 2011
|TOEFL - Parents (those who pay attention) are the best teachers. Agree or disagree?
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Aug 30, 2011 / jamliu0229 - Aug 30, 2011
|A single career (old-fashion) OR several careers to earn more money
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Aug 25, 2011 / beepro21 - Aug 30, 2011
|Toefl - Television & Movies have a huge impact on our social behavior.
Writing Feedbacksab - Aug 26, 2011 / abc1400 - Aug 30, 2011
|Toefl :Advance in transportation and communication like the airplane and the phone
Writing Feedbackghafarimahsa - Aug 27, 2011 / abc1400 - Aug 30, 2011
|What kind of writing have you done at work and in school?
4 - These experiences have changed my perception on writing and now is an enjoyable part of English class I look...
Writing Feedbacksyed199343 - Aug 18, 2011 / Lindabrown - Aug 30, 2011
|Movies or television influence people's behavior badly.
Writing FeedbackMai Chu - Aug 29, 2011 / Mai Chu - Aug 29, 2011
|GRE: As technology becomes more and more advanced.. people rely on technology
5 - @Susan & Fang Yu Thanks for picking out my errors. I think i need to proofread my essays more...
Writing Feedbacksilentwf - Aug 26, 2011 / silentwf - Aug 29, 2011
|Ielts: Telecommuting and working at home
2 - Actually, i think there is a fault in your first paragraph. You can start with a fact, not necessarily...
Writing FeedbackEagerlearner - Aug 29, 2011 / skayode - Aug 29, 2011
|IELTS-Do university graduates deserve higher salary than those who have not?
2 - In detail,in the beginning of 1970's Mitchford city was producing around half a million of dollar worth wheat.during this...
Writing Feedbacksobin - Aug 20, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Aug 29, 2011
|"the unemployment crisis" - issue of local, national, or international significance.
3 - I agree with EF susan, this is an excellent essay! My biggest concern is that it does not quite...
Writing Feedbackjtorres89 - Aug 27, 2011 / namato - Aug 29, 2011
|Childhood is the happiest time of a person's life, but it cannot be generalized.
3 - Below please find some corrections. Some people believe that the childhood is the happiest time of a person's...
Writing Feedbackghafarimahsa - Aug 29, 2011 / mohamed nawaz - Aug 29, 2011
|'hard work works always' - When people succeed, it is because of hard work
Writing FeedbackMai Chu - Aug 28, 2011 / Mai Chu - Aug 29, 2011
|What will happen in twenty years? Number of cars are more likely to reduce
NEW - Agree or disagree:In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today. In modern...
Writing Feedbackchxz1020 - Aug 29, 2011 / — -
|[IELTS]schools should provide courses to train students how to manage money
2 - hello there, i didn't find much problems in your essay but i am having problem with your second sentence...
Writing Feedbackjamliu0229 - Aug 29, 2011 / Malaysian - Aug 29, 2011
|We should listen international music but we should not forget about traditional
NEW - i have exam of ielts in future..plz mark my eassy and give possible band score. thnx in advance subject:-...
Writing Feedbackbhatti00007 - Aug 29, 2011 / — -
|IELTS ESSAY- JURY MUST HAVE ACCESS TO CRIMINALS PAST RECORDS
NEW - Under British and Australian laws, a jury in a criminal case has no access to information about the defendant's...
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Aug 29, 2011 / — -
|Training, essential skills, friendships: Why people go to universities and colleges?
NEW - People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, and increased knowledge). Why...
Writing FeedbackMai Chu - Aug 29, 2011 / — -
|TOEFL-The best way to learn about a foreign country......
Writing Feedbackchxz1020 - Aug 28, 2011 / chxz1020 - Aug 29, 2011
|The possible effects of living long on an individual and on the whole society?
4 - I have some ideas for improving this. It is already very good, though! There are some social, financial...
Writing FeedbackOovi - Aug 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Aug 29, 2011
|"All group & organization should function as teams" - Essay Evaluation
3 - Team work is the ability to work towards common vision even if the vision gets blurry.----Great sentence!! By the...
Writing FeedbackSumGMAT - Aug 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Aug 29, 2011
|GREED, one of the most detrimental human foibles
2 - An economics professor at George Mason University, maintains that without greed, our current economic and social structures would implode....
Writing Feedbackisabellaclaudia - Aug 28, 2011 / isabellaclaudia - Aug 28, 2011
|"Family's annual Christmas tree" - narrative or descriptive essay
Writing FeedbackCaboose - Aug 28, 2011 / Caboose - Aug 28, 2011
|Agree or disagree :People will spend less time on cooking in the future.(for TOEFL)
4 - Thank you soooooooooooooo much!!!I always can't identify grammar mistakes,so I really appreciate your help!!!Thanks!!!...
Writing Feedbackchxz1020 - Aug 28, 2011 / chxz1020 - Aug 28, 2011
|ielts: life cycle of the silkworm / visitors vs local customs & behaviours
NEW - Hi, First of all thanks a lot for your time and patience.I would like to receive any kind of...
Writing Feedbacksobin - Aug 28, 2011 / — -
|Books have more influence on society than television.
4 - hi, i read your essay n i would like to tell you that you haven't mentioned anything about the...
Writing Feedbackmcshang - Aug 26, 2011 / sobin - Aug 28, 2011
|It is sometimes believed that the computer is more a hindrance than a help.Agree?
NEW - In this last three decade the biggest human invention without any doubt is computers. Although this significant invention make...
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Aug 28, 2011 / — -
|Ielts Topic: The popularity of news media
Writing Feedbackhvthoteen - Aug 27, 2011 / hvthoteen - Aug 28, 2011
|Study foreign language at overseas is beneficial or not agree or disagree with extent
Writing Feedbackgsmaan - Aug 28, 2011 / amrosca - Aug 28, 2011
|IELTS task2 Can computer replace a human teacher?
3 - You have a strong point of view. Amiable attitudes are the other main difference between these two ...
Writing FeedbackTomLin - Aug 24, 2011 / Mai Chu - Aug 28, 2011
|There's no evidence to prove that computer will do a job of a teacher better
Writing FeedbackMai Chu - Aug 28, 2011 / — -
|"Mr. Charles Schade has been the music director" - GRE argument essay
NEW - Help me to improve my writing skill, Thanks in advance for any post. The following appeared in a...
Writing Feedbackghafarimahsa - Aug 28, 2011 / — -
|Capital punishment should be combined with other activities -ielts task 2
NEW - Without capital punishment (death penalty) our lives will be less secure and crime of violence will increase. Capital punishment...
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Aug 28, 2011 / — -
|"He who hesitates is lost" + "modern technological world" - short compositions
Writing Feedbackapieceof - Aug 27, 2011 / ghafarimahsa - Aug 28, 2011
|ielts:people often decide to work for a time before they start their university
2 - In conclusion, it is clear that dedicatededicating a period to personal achievement is very popular among youngsters especially in...
Writing Feedbackmrscatoni - Aug 27, 2011 / marucat - Aug 28, 2011
|Fatherhood vs Motherhood-ielts task 2
3 - Firstly, only women can not decide whether or not to have a baby because this decision depends on their...
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Aug 27, 2011 / Eagerlearner - Aug 28, 2011
|Neolithical Agricultural Revolution (change to society)
Writing Feedbackotacbateman - Aug 26, 2011 / otacbateman - Aug 27, 2011
|(the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s) IELTS writing
2 - "there is not a great deal of differences in pattern of two decades." --> personally, I think this sentence...
Writing Feedbackhamid2495 - Aug 27, 2011 / mcshang - Aug 27, 2011
|GMAT "Corporations should try to eliminate the ranks and salary grades"
NEW - "Corporations and other businesses should try to eliminate the many ranks and salary grades that classify employees according to...
Writing FeedbackAsmita_ - Aug 26, 2011 / — -
|'lifestyle and eating habit' - The causes of increasing average weight of people
2 - "entertainment industry" I think it is better in pl. form --> industries ummmm, you did a very good...
Writing Feedbackyh1990227 - Aug 26, 2011 / mcshang - Aug 26, 2011
|IELTS: Focus on health education and preventative measures rather than treatment
2 - "thanks to a full health education from their childhoods" -- Do you mean "due to"? If yes, it is"thanks...
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Aug 26, 2011 / mcshang - Aug 26, 2011
|Parents or school,which would be the one teach children in social skills
2 - Hei Zhang! :D Below are some corrections. Perhaps you can retype the essay to get more familiar with...
Writing Feedbackzjn212 - Aug 25, 2011 / amrosca - Aug 26, 2011
|Memo: title change of laborers in network maintenance section
Writing Feedbackmohamed nawaz - Aug 25, 2011 / amrosca - Aug 25, 2011
|Enhancing general public health cannot be achieved by unilateral measure (sports)
3 - I think it is better for your essay to take a clear possition in your first paraghraph. For example...
Writing Feedbackbigbanglov - Aug 25, 2011 / ghafarimahsa - Aug 25, 2011
|Books or personal experience? Education should not have come from books solely
2 - this is really good and i agree with your argument! few grammar fixes though "Therefore, drowning themselves in...
Writing Feedbackisabellaclaudia - Aug 25, 2011 / trishhha - Aug 25, 2011
|Do you think it is better to send criminals to jail or let them receive education or
2 - great essay! you made clear elaboration of your point and justify your point of view. however i notice sometimes...
Writing Feedbackpikadali - Aug 25, 2011 / isabellaclaudia - Aug 25, 2011
|Review the Past to solve the problems of the present and the future.
NEW - In order to solve the problems of the present and the future, people should review the past. In...
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