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|"how stupid I am"; 5 minutes down-town
Writing Feedbackvafa - Apr 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 9, 2011
|Why are people attracted to dangerous sports, activities? 'to expose themselves'
2 - Great edit, Turbina! I am seeing a lot of helpful advice from you. Please consider joining our contributors (see...
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Apr 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 9, 2011
|IELTS: People are more fashionable now. What factors contribute to this?
4 - Excellent advice here. Kevin, please type the essay again using her corrections. If you have questions, ask us, and...
Writing Feedbackkvnpeng - Apr 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 9, 2011
|Nature or Nuture: the talent is important, but tenacity and perseverance are more.
Writing Feedbackjamliu0229 - Apr 5, 2011 / jamliu0229 - Apr 9, 2011
|IELTS: The Internet has transformed lives and economies but it turning the world ...
9 - Hi there, Borislav was totally right. I'm preparing for IELTS test too. I have found out that,...
Writing Feedbackdaquoc - Mar 2, 2011 / englishlearner1 - Apr 8, 2011
|[IELTS] attitude to Space Research
9 - ^0^ Add some my advices~ I had wrote some similar topic. After reading yours, I found maybe the beginning...
Writing Feedbackkelp0308 - Mar 30, 2011 / ekekek - Apr 8, 2011
|IELTS: How to measure one's experiences and knowledge?
Writing FeedbackReal Fog - Apr 5, 2011 / Real Fog - Apr 8, 2011
|Essay about Prevention and Health Education is better than cure
6 - Thank you all for your support! I will try to correct and take it into consideration when writing!...
Writing FeedbackPanda271 - Apr 3, 2011 / Panda271 - Apr 7, 2011
|Independent life or living with family?
Writing Feedbackganaanaiz - Apr 4, 2011 / ganaanaiz - Apr 7, 2011
|(charts) EDUCATION ACHIEVEMENT IN WOMEN IN 1945-1995.
Writing FeedbackARIA - Mar 31, 2011 / ARIA - Apr 7, 2011
|A Two-page essay discussing how the rest of the world view America.
2 - For many decades, America has been known as the... After the September of 2001 tragedy, the position has...
Writing FeedbackZubaida - Apr 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 7, 2011
|TOEFL: TV has destroyed communication among friends and family?
4 - Annika, you are so great! Let me work on that first paragraph: Some people consider television to be...
Writing Feedbackyecochi - Apr 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 7, 2011
|Children at work: damaging and wrong?
2 - On one hand, some people assert that employing children could be productive and gainful, and those who hold this...
Writing Feedbacksalam237 - Apr 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 7, 2011
|People should place emphasis on improving the skill of working within groups, not independently
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Apr 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 7, 2011
|"Why are groups or organizations important to people?" - my writing practice
3 - Birdman did give some great advice. Birdman, please check out the contributor page! You do great work here. (see...
Writing Feedbackadychang - Apr 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 7, 2011
|Someone is worth us telling the truth, someone isn't.
4 - We all make grammar mistakes. It's okay. The great thing is that you have brilliant philosophical ideas. ...
Writing FeedbackFrank zhao - Apr 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 6, 2011
|Which is more important family or friends?
3 - Wow, very nice... or example, even we were adapted children, we couldn't adopted children cannot stop...
Writing FeedbackMarsha2809 - Apr 4, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 6, 2011
|Toefl: spend leisure time outdoors or indoors?
6 - however, being outdoors seems to allow recreation to happen more easily than being indoors does Thank Kevin and...
Writing Feedbackyecochi - Apr 4, 2011 / yecochi - Apr 6, 2011
|A Good Employee Definition Essay
6 - Great Essay! It really gets the point across. But yes, more details in the last paragraph would be a...
Writing Feedbackmarzyola1 - Apr 4, 2011 / sbhb0831 - Apr 5, 2011
|Has learning about the past been beneficial to our present life? Help me correct it.
3 - Have we even wondered that why we have the subject of history as a pre-requisite course in school. ...
Writing Feedbackngocnam - Apr 4, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 5, 2011
|IELTS - old buildings were rebuilt or redesigned
4 - However, there are increasingly many old buildings are becoming the victims during the process of the city's modernization. ...
Writing Feedbackliang_yielin - Apr 4, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 5, 2011
|Ronnie Coleman; Celebrity question - what would you ask a famous person?
Writing FeedbackBorislav - Mar 31, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 5, 2011
|Our children today spend too much time watching TV _AnhTrung
3 - One word: outdoor ...outdoor activities to make them healthier both mentally and physically. The child must do...
Writing FeedbackAnhTrung - Apr 3, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 5, 2011
|College English Composition 1. Essay over "Personal Identity"
3 - The content requirements for this particular assignment are quite ironic -- ironic in that I was misunderstood even before...
Writing Feedbacknuclear_med23 - Apr 3, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 5, 2011
|Do you argee that playing computer game is a waste of time? Children should not play?
3 - Good essay I should say! I think that somebody should control children. Take for example their parents or elderly...
Writing Feedbackangelinee827 - Mar 30, 2011 / birdman - Apr 5, 2011
|"My cousin is really an emotional person" - A descriptive paragraph
Writing Feedbackvafa - Apr 2, 2011 / butterbescotch - Apr 5, 2011
|"English-Opening to Horror story" - Is my horror story effective?
Writing Feedbackmabcoll - Apr 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 4, 2011
|Parents should give money to their children for their high marks at school.
Writing Feedbackhaley_w - Apr 1, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 4, 2011
|"Arguing A Position Essay" - Against the Death Penalty/Capital Punishment, Revise.
3 - I would change "on the innocent" to "of the innocent"... and in 1.), it's not the reason that...
Writing Feedbackjk17 - Apr 1, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 4, 2011
|[IELTS] letter-writing skills will disapear, agree or not?
Writing Feedbackkelp0308 - Apr 1, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 4, 2011
|The internet gives us a lot of information, someone thinks it might create problems.
4 - If someone asks me what was the most important invention during in recent decades, I will definitely indicate that...
Writing Feedbackangelinee827 - Apr 1, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 4, 2011
|Definition Essay "A Good Mother"
3 - a place where a moment when actually, do this: Every mother has a moment in her life that she...
Writing Feedbacktarjesir - Mar 31, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 3, 2011
|Ielts Graph (mortality and funding on different diseases)
8 - Yes! That's right... The chart shows (present tense) the facts about what happened (past tense). This is...
Writing FeedbackARIA - Mar 25, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 3, 2011
|5 paragraph comparison/contrast essay on Arizona and Pennsylvania
3 - I'll add "had"----> I couldn't give him the answer because I had traveled to... ... 38 different states,...
Writing Feedbackabbys10 - Mar 31, 2011 / EF_Susan - Apr 3, 2011
|Tourism: Type of company would you most like to see built in your hometown or city
Writing FeedbackArdhitya - Mar 30, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 3, 2011
|Some people like to communicate by e-mail and voice mail. Less face-to-face action?
5 - The twentieth century is unique in its extension of communication technology such as email, satellite, mobile phones, and so...
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Mar 30, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 3, 2011
|SAT essay. "Can succes be disastrous?"
Writing FeedbackBiteshock - Apr 3, 2011 / vafa - Apr 3, 2011
|Max Borders: New Threats to Freedom Essay Competition
2 - Regulation is "controlling human or societal behavior by rules or restrictions," and it spreads the span ofspans political, legal,...
Writing Feedbackcaboard493 - Apr 1, 2011 / EF_Susan - Apr 2, 2011
|What role should Australia play in future world affairs?
15 - Thanks Laura :) yeah it is awesome I've got an extension, I've only had a couple weeks of school...
Writing Feedbackgracean - Mar 13, 2011 / Alien - Apr 2, 2011
|Barron's integrated essay 6. The origin of life. Stanley Miller.
Writing FeedbackAzedentist - Mar 29, 2011 / Azedentist - Apr 2, 2011
|"not physically and mentally fit to play" - How I suck at sports
Writing Feedbackbutterbescotch - Mar 29, 2011 / butterbescotch - Apr 2, 2011
|(chart) Leisure activity in different ages, IELTS Task 1
2 - I think you need mention the value of "0" in Group sport as they are minimals. Besides, there...
Writing FeedbackARIA - Apr 1, 2011 / kelp0308 - Apr 2, 2011
|IELTS: the benefits of global cooperation
Writing Feedbackratree - Mar 23, 2011 / ratree - Apr 1, 2011
|What motivates people to change?Any change is accompanied by drawbacks and discomfots
4 - I really like that first sentence. Hey, you should put a space after each comma but not before each...
Writing Feedbackhayooy - Mar 30, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2011
|Article summary about a mother telling a story about her son
3 - Great edit, Aja! Julie, do you understand all the corrections? Try typing it again with the correct spelling, grammar,...
Writing Feedbackjulie_loc - Mar 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2011
|IELTS Grahp (the pattern of smoking of different sexes)
Writing FeedbackARIA - Mar 23, 2011 / ARIA - Mar 31, 2011
|A man / woman will never know what they can do until they first try .
4 - Not knowing one's---apostrophe own strength is a terrible self underestimation and is a common misconception among many people...
Writing Feedbackbahamaessay - Mar 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 31, 2011
|IELTS: some people think building more roads can reduce traffic problems...
4 - I'll give a few more ideas here... I like the "alleviate" suggestion, even though "reduced" was okay: Some...
Writing FeedbackBrookW - Mar 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 31, 2011
|[IELTS] cellphone and Internet are harmful to people health, why we use? how to do?
5 - In the first paragraph, you can improve the clarity of your message by explaining HOW it is "detrimental to...
Writing Feedbackkelp0308 - Mar 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 31, 2011
|A university should invest same money in athletc activities as libraries or not?
2 - the university is a place in which we ... It is sure that there important things or not.---What...
Writing Feedbackcantonistuta - Mar 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 31, 2011
|"TP Club - travelling around the country and abroad"
2 - TP Club was established in 2001 and chaired by Mark Peter. TP club has around one hundred members since...
Writing FeedbackHelpEnglish - Mar 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 31, 2011
|Individual can do nothing to improve environment; only governments and companies can?
3 - Nowadays means now. "Has always been" means "in the past." So... this is contradictory: Nowadays environmental issue has always...
Writing Feedbackfindthetime - Mar 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 31, 2011
|IELTS - humans should be able to use animals for their own benefit?
6 - I suppose your writing is great and it deserves band 7 if considering the suggestions of 'TransferringStu'. BTW,...
Writing Feedbackdranu78 - Mar 13, 2011 / kelp0308 - Mar 31, 2011
|Is the hard drive storage your only concern?
3 - In this essay, I think I have a good idea to improve your straightforward, clear writing style: Add a...
Writing Feedbackkrauser - Mar 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 30, 2011
|Research about Philippines: FILIPINOS ARE A NATURE LOVERS
3 - thank you. I am really flattered from all your comments sir Kevin! You know, your CORRECTIONS serve as my...
Writing Feedbackniesaysi - Mar 25, 2011 / niesaysi - Mar 30, 2011
|It is not only the teacher who teach the student and student's ability is more important to study.
5 - thank you very much for your comment. It was my first experience to put my writing on internet. And...
Writing Feedbackgracejung - Mar 24, 2011 / gracejung - Mar 30, 2011
|Our achievements in the past will motivate us today.
5 - GRE AW? I think should develop the thesis statement, ..sounds like only focus on the point that"yesterday is...
Writing Feedbackvsravan - Mar 28, 2011 / findthetime - Mar 30, 2011
|The Traffic Accident- Free writting- Only Topic.
5 - Thanks dumbdumb; bribe: it was for car accident, after accidents we have 2 choices whether to pay legal money...
Writing FeedbackAhmadmeraj - Mar 29, 2011 / Ahmadmeraj - Mar 30, 2011
|IELTS Essay: About job assignment between men and women
Writing FeedbackBrookW - Mar 26, 2011 / BrookW - Mar 29, 2011
|Behavior of people in the formal organization is influenced by structure, technology
Writing Feedbackatyourservice - Mar 27, 2011 / atyourservice - Mar 29, 2011
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