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|"There are times when lying is acceptable"--TOEFL essay
2 - Lying is acceptable depended depending on what are The right time and good purpose for lying may...
Writing Feedbackkittensu - May 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 24, 2011
|Success is the definition based on persistence as well as the desire of people
Writing Feedbackiluvbee - May 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 24, 2011
|Numerous positive effects of the new technology on our daily life.
Writing Feedbackstart208 - May 7, 2011 / start208 - May 24, 2011
|TOEFL - I follow two steps; My approach to problem-solving?
Writing Feedbackzailn - May 21, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 23, 2011
|Should violent video games be banned?
5 - Thank you Kevin for you comments. I need to learn how to get my essays out sooner, because my...
Writing Feedbackralph01 - May 12, 2011 / ralph01 - May 23, 2011
|Important factors to consider when choosing a university/college.
3 - Also students learn to be flexible, because they have to learn about different ways of living. In addition,...
Writing Feedbackdandlelion - May 21, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 23, 2011
|"The function of science is to reassure; the purpose of art is to upset. Therein lies
Writing Feedbackirs055 - May 18, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 23, 2011
|My mother; she was a teacher: an important person
4 - The first sentence is not very effective. You should change it! What is the best sentence you can write...
Writing Feedbackbechir3 - May 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 23, 2011
|America is so vast that almost everything said about it is likely to be true...
3 - America suffers from an epidemic of obesity, but the slim foods and diet industry is one of are among...
Writing Feedbackharu_no_natsu - May 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 23, 2011
|IELTS--politicians and scientists, who are more important to the society
5 - You did such a great job here! Without their endeavor in experiments and explorations, we are still would still...
Writing Feedbackimnotjolin - May 14, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 23, 2011
|TOEFL:Government should spend more on early education than on college education
4 - You don't have to worry about the toefl. The English is nearly perfect. Even people who grew up in...
Writing FeedbackSamuelWei - May 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 23, 2011
|Research essay:The necessity of supernatural figures in society today
Writing Feedbackmpatel24 - May 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 23, 2011
|Final Honors English Paper- Why do I deserve to pass this class?
6 - Yes! Silverystars has great advice for the structure of the paper. There are A LOT of grammatical errors...
Writing FeedbackKingFrizzy - May 19, 2011 / Notoman - May 23, 2011
|Description of tea manufacturing process
2 - There are numerous steps in the manufacturing of tea. Firstly, the top of two leaves and bud are...
Writing Feedbacklovelysmile - May 22, 2011 / EF_Susan - May 22, 2011
|IELTS- Resist making changes-problem and solution associated with it.
9 - It's probably because you have such high standards for yourself. Keep it up until you reach the GOAL!...
Writing FeedbackNeeta - May 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 22, 2011
|"It is better to be safe than sorry" - TOEFL ibt
4 - Here is an example of "redundancy." Google that word if you don't know it. :-) In our life, safety...
Writing Feedbackmywill - May 20, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 22, 2011
|TOEFL essay - Stay in one place or move around?
Writing Feedbackzailn - May 8, 2011 / SamuelWei - May 22, 2011
|Good news vs bad news; What factors influence this trend? IELTS
5 - Hello! To begin with linking words are also known as organising words and if you succeed in understanding...
Writing Feedbacklastielts - May 20, 2011 / Neeta - May 22, 2011
|TOEFL:It is only worth watching movies that can teach us something about real life
Writing FeedbackSamuelWei - May 19, 2011 / SamuelWei - May 21, 2011
|Should Guns be Allowed on College Campus? - my finals essay
6 - I have the utmost respect for the average, gun-wielding citizen, but let's face it: they a certain percentage...
Writing Feedbackmaggierose1978 - May 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 21, 2011
|No-doubt, children learn much more both sense of competition and co-operation.
Writing Feedbackmohsiniiii - May 17, 2011 / icy ciel - May 21, 2011
|Global warming; Climate change research paper.
Writing FeedbackToeiizZ00 - May 20, 2011 / icy ciel - May 21, 2011
|Toefl ibt: Zoos are useful or not?zoos are advantageous to both human and animals
Writing FeedbackCoolmam9x - May 19, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 20, 2011
|Stay-at-home parents should be paid by the government?
5 - I think that the first paragraph should talk about the problems or difficulties stay-at-home parents are facing, and then...
Writing FeedbackScientiana - May 15, 2011 / whitney - May 20, 2011
|What are the purposes of places such as museums and how should they be funded?--IELTS
4 - Hi Jennifer, I don't know how tough the ietls is, but I am pretty confident that you'll do well....
Writing FeedbackJennifer Zhang - May 18, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 20, 2011
|IETLS-Importance of history and effects if not taught to children
Writing FeedbackNeeta - May 18, 2011 / Neeta - May 20, 2011
|"practical skills for the well-being of society" - IELTS Band 7 essays
4 - Some small mistakes. You capitalized Academic at the beginning, and it should not be capitalized. You wrote i instead...
Writing Feedbacklastielts - May 18, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 20, 2011
|Actions speak louder than words. TOEFL ibt writing
4 - In our daily life, actions and words are both reactions to any situation. Sometimes it is better to act...
Writing Feedbackmywill - May 18, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 20, 2011
|"What famous place would you you like to visit?" - TOEFL ibt writing
Writing Feedbackmywill - May 17, 2011 / heena33 - May 20, 2011
|Environmental pollution is becoming an international issue - IELTS
Writing Feedbackglory215 - May 14, 2011 / glory215 - May 19, 2011
|IELTS - mobile phones and youngstars-a necessary evil
Writing Feedbackheena33 - May 16, 2011 / mywill - May 19, 2011
|TOEFL> moving to different countries is not good because of losing old friends
10 - There are some words as well as structure you should make change. I do not mean it is meaningless...
Writing Feedbackddpddpzzz - May 15, 2011 / mywill - May 19, 2011
|"Ignorance is bliss". Agree or disagree? - my essay for CBEST
4 - I'll fix the grammar and punctuation. Practice typing it this way: "As hunger is cured by food, so...
Writing Feedbackfridaeman - May 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 19, 2011
|(LMU) (KCL) (ICL) - Compare and contrast three British Universities.
4 - Great job! The only thing that might need more details is the third one" library". I think there should...
Writing Feedbacklovelysmile - May 17, 2011 / bahareh - May 19, 2011
|TOEFL> government should spend more money in university than children
3 - mywill's suggestion is so good. maybe u can see some samples written by natives. it would help u a...
Writing Feedbackddpddpzzz - May 17, 2011 / SamuelWei - May 19, 2011
|children working at the early ages
8 - @Scientiana What's wrong with They're? ---- @Topic. Don't be anti-climatic. Don't use words like "To...
Writing Feedbacktrang_bee - May 8, 2011 / butterbescotch - May 19, 2011
|"It is an individual who is the impetus for innovation; the details may be teamwork"
3 - Do not start a sentence with the word World. It needs THE. The world has witnessed a notable... ...
Writing Feedbackirs055 - May 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 18, 2011
|TOEFL: best way to improve the quality of education is to increase teachers' salaries
5 - I'm surprised you failed. You write so well! I don't see many errors... I think you should add a...
Writing FeedbackSamuelWei - May 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 18, 2011
|'equality, responsibility and oneness' - dress code should be implemented
4 - Thanks Arveen! I'll give some more corrections: A dress code is designed to maintain uniformity in dress. ...
Writing Feedbackheena33 - May 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 18, 2011
|Pets are part of family? Yes ; IELTS
5 - Thankyou Kevin. I got your idea about my first sentence and it was right.I should not translate my own...
Writing Feedbackbahareh - May 15, 2011 / bahareh - May 18, 2011
|IELTS: Should we ban all forms of advertising?
Writing Feedbackbetsy1122 - May 16, 2011 / Neeta - May 18, 2011
|"Memorandum to Managers" - GMAT essay - Analysis of an Argument
4 - Hi Kevin, you're right, I capitalize all the words related to "Money/Career/Jobs" on purpose :-). I'm pleasantly surprised that...
Writing Feedbacksubhash_ghosh - May 14, 2011 / subhash_ghosh - May 17, 2011
|Law need a flexiblity in approach considering the situation, place and time
Writing Feedbackirs055 - May 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 17, 2011
|Undoubtedly, every mind has many senses, some use it in positive and some in negative way
Writing Feedbackm_imran_khar - May 12, 2011 / m_imran_khar - May 17, 2011
|TOEFL:Art museums or recreational facilities?
7 - Surprised to have so much advice! Thank you all! Frank, I'll remenber to add the question in front...
Writing Feedbackjunephysics - May 12, 2011 / junephysics - May 16, 2011
|TOEFL: Follow the New Customs of the New Country or Not?
2 - I'd like to make a small change to one of the sentences here: ...while some insist the latter one...
Writing FeedbackFrank zhao - May 14, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 16, 2011
|Seek Independence or Live with Parents
3 - Hi Frank, you have some good corrections here. I'll build on them and add new ideas: For m Most...
Writing FeedbackFrank zhao - May 14, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 16, 2011
|"Monetary System in Electronic Accounts" - GMAT essay - Analysis of an Issue
2 - The observation mentioned in the statement seems to be quite thought provoking and interesting, and while analyzing the same...
Writing Feedbacksubhash_ghosh - May 14, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 16, 2011
|'impulse buyer' Do advertisements improve our lives ?
8 - I think AD has already affected our life, just like me. I usually buy thing according to the different...
Writing Feedbackaliwu - May 12, 2011 / Danicalele - May 16, 2011
|DIFFERENT SOURCES OF NOISE; IELTS
2 - Greetings ! In a nut shell=In a nutshell (one word) - Few mistakes in grammar, Mistakes arise...
Writing Feedbacksobin - May 15, 2011 / isai - May 16, 2011
|Essay - is education very important for a country to be well developed - feedback
4 - I think you should add one sentence to the end of the first paragraph. Make it a thesis statement...
Writing Feedbacksalman - May 14, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 15, 2011
|Every individual, regardless of his gender should get a chance to study at university level.
2 - Hi, It is necassary that people get themselves educated to build individual capacity (space) that could make their...
Writing Feedbackmithsal - May 13, 2011 / dumi - May 15, 2011
|Do young people today make good use of their leisure time?
Writing Feedbacksppanda - May 4, 2011 / sppanda - May 15, 2011
|Internet... a blessing or a bane?
Writing Feedbackfaisal - May 12, 2011 / Mahrooo - May 15, 2011
|IELTS writing - Academic study vs pratical matters learning
7 - It's really helpful. now it's clear to me. Use "the" means more detailed and more specified thing. So in...
Writing Feedbackextrafresh - May 11, 2011 / extrafresh - May 15, 2011
|Sport events in countries / economy - Argument: the logical fallacy of the proposal
Writing Feedbackstudent7 - May 12, 2011 / student7 - May 15, 2011
|The Reasons and Results of Pollution
2 - Greetings ! (hardly can be seen ..using because in the beginning of the sentence. You may say "This...
Writing Feedbackwhitney - May 14, 2011 / isai - May 14, 2011
|Should Music Piracy Remain Illegal? SENIOR PROJECT
3 - Music piracy is one of the most frequently committed crimes in the world and happens every day. After...
Writing Feedbacklovetowrite - May 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 14, 2011
|Give reasons - The power of advertising influence the purchase decisions
6 - Yes, and it's nice. One reason people love Hemingway is that his sentences are simple and powerful. Simple...
Writing Feedbackextrafresh - May 8, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 14, 2011
|When flatters get together, the devil goes to dinner
5 - Yep, I like this intriguing approach, too... Flattery is a social evil. ---Very poignant and interesting. It serves...
Writing FeedbackUltimate csp - May 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 14, 2011
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