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|TOEFL Essay: Raise children in City or Suburbs?
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Apr 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 20, 2011
|I strongly believe that pets must be part from every family
Writing Feedbacktdamqnova - Apr 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 20, 2011
|[IELTS]should children be made to obey the rules?
4 - I think you should add another sentence to that first paragraph. The thesis statement is missing! Add a sentence...
Writing Feedbackfindthetime - Apr 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 20, 2011
|TOEFL - Basic economic class can help the students touch the surface of this field
4 - This is a great thread! Do you have questions about any of the corrections? I don't think anyone noticed...
Writing Feedbackdaliqin - Apr 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 20, 2011
|Television has brought positive or negative effects on children behavior.
4 - I see where dumi corrected "argue" and added "d." argued. It is argued that... Do you know why that...
Writing Feedbackroaa - Apr 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 20, 2011
|'traditional life styles have to be changed' - opinion essay
2 - Oh... I see... at the beginning, you meant to type "pace." Nowadays, the pace of development is faster...
Writing Feedbackcharlotte_macyc - Apr 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 20, 2011
|IELTS (task 2) A year break for traveling or work before joining university.
10 - Dear All, Thank you for providing feedback. I hope you will continue to give you guidances in future...
Writing FeedbackNeeta - Apr 15, 2011 / Neeta - Apr 20, 2011
|GRE issue topic---faculty should spend time working outside the academic world
Writing FeedbackZhongwen Xu - Apr 15, 2011 / Zhongwen Xu - Apr 20, 2011
|Media should always show positive people and blame bad charachters
5 - Thanks^^...
Writing Feedbackyoyofuny - Mar 23, 2011 / yoyofuny - Apr 20, 2011
|Toefl - high school should open basic economic course to the their students
4 - Hi there, I see some great help being given in this thread. Thanks, everyone! I'll give a few...
Writing Feedbackjennyxff - Apr 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 19, 2011
|Work or travel during gap year - Discuss!
3 - Working and traveling before the start of university studies is common in many countries. Most students are enthusiastic about...
Writing Feedbackcharlotte_macyc - Apr 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 19, 2011
|IETLS - advertising and consumer goods. What are the real needs of customers?
Writing FeedbackNeeta - Apr 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 19, 2011
|Write a paragraph about the differences between the city in the past and now.
3 - No need to capitalize "technology" in that first sentence. With Technology technology advancements and the increasing numbers...
Writing Feedbackmrxkms - Apr 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 19, 2011
|Different Forms of Entertainment ( Bar Graph) Task 1
Writing Feedbackturalfh - Apr 16, 2011 / turalfh - Apr 19, 2011
|Spending life time in a changing manner. IELTS Task 2
Writing FeedbackARIA - Apr 15, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 19, 2011
|TOEFL -the way a person dressed is a good indication of personality?
4 - Yeah, maybe it is poor, but you are smart! Lots of people in the 21st century are bilingual, and...
Writing Feedbackdannier - Apr 15, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 19, 2011
|Both movies and television has great influence on people.
3 - I agree with engwriting101 Maybe you could use "people" or" individual" to replace your own experiences. because it should...
Writing Feedbackcutie - Apr 15, 2011 / findthetime - Apr 19, 2011
|The main causes of divorce
2 - Usually, you want to end your paper with a question but I don't think there's anything wrong with...
Writing Feedbackalemsada - Apr 18, 2011 / engwriting101 - Apr 18, 2011
|Celebrities who committed crimes should be allowed to come back ?
2 - For several years, it has been one of the most controversial issues has been whether or not we should...
Writing Feedbackkoreanguy1 - Apr 18, 2011 / EF_Susan - Apr 18, 2011
|We all want to make big diffirences in our life, -Education
Writing FeedbackSICHENGLI - Apr 15, 2011 / SICHENGLI - Apr 17, 2011
|Write a two paragraphs, each describing a city in Syria. Then compare them.
3 - I don't know if "eating-lover" would be right. I don't really like it. Actually, I like that sentence...
Writing Feedbackmrxkms - Apr 15, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 17, 2011
|Elderly people alone or with their family (TOEFL Essay)
Writing Feedbacktdamqnova - Apr 13, 2011 / daliqin - Apr 17, 2011
|TOEFL essay--In a team, those who do not accept others' criticism can not succeed
Writing Feedbackdaliqin - Apr 16, 2011 / daliqin - Apr 17, 2011
|IELTS: Is environmental damage evitable if a country is developing?
7 - Hi Ting, thank you for your suggestion. However, in my third paragraph, I wrote all about solutions because I...
Writing FeedbackScientiana - Apr 13, 2011 / Scientiana - Apr 17, 2011
|In some countries the youth have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure
Writing FeedbackReal Fog - Apr 13, 2011 / Neeta - Apr 16, 2011
|Educational institutions do not mean we can be deprived of what we insist
Writing Feedbackguoxuyang - Apr 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 16, 2011
|What was your biggest challenge adjusting to college like as a freshman?
3 - Well, I certainly do! We need lots of help to make sure everyone improves their skill! :-) As...
Writing FeedbackJd87rh - Apr 14, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 16, 2011
|'cocoon to become a silk' - The life cycle of silkworm. IELTS chart
5 - ...part of the silkworm life cycle.----I think this is okay, because you are using "silkworm" as an adjective, just...
Writing FeedbackARIA - Apr 14, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 16, 2011
|(IELTS) pressure on students good or not?
5 - It is easy to hear that students tend Simplify: Students complain that the excessive pressure they need to...
Writing Feedbackekekek - Apr 14, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 16, 2011
|How can we control traffic jams? Flying cars?
3 - Flying cars, good idea! How can we control traffic jams in today's over populated cities? Sometimes it can...
Writing Feedbackralph01 - Apr 14, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 16, 2011
|Planning all works alone or in group? - iBT
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Apr 13, 2011 / mahrou - Apr 16, 2011
|Morality of Vegetarianism Persuasive Essay
4 - engwriting101 -- it was just a persuasive essay. Kevin -- thank you! really helpful advice, I'll be sure...
Writing FeedbackAmyCarol - Apr 14, 2011 / AmyCarol - Apr 16, 2011
|The Internet has transformed lives and economies_Essay
8 - Excellent, it sounds funny to say that! Some people say, "Let's meet here at eight o'clock. In the meantime,...
Writing FeedbackPanda271 - Apr 8, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 16, 2011
|GETTING GOOD GRADES and achieving success in school
3 - Achieving success in school takes more than just intelligence, getting good grates grades, working hard, and following strict...
Writing Feedbackdelia - Apr 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 16, 2011
|In a cooperation of team, the people who cannot accept criticize - success
Writing Feedbackarashisho - Apr 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 15, 2011
|In-class practice - cheating in college should be punished with expulsion
Writing FeedbackMiiSTiiCZ - Apr 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 15, 2011
|The important memorable day in my life - descriptive narrative essay
3 - When you use "although," you do not need to use "but"... Although it was my first day in high...
Writing Feedbackfat - Apr 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 15, 2011
|Creating an ideal society. If it's possible, how can we do it?
Writing FeedbackARIA - Apr 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 15, 2011
|IELTS: Prize money and fame as motivation to sporting champions
5 - You don't have to use "whom" in that first paragraph. Just use "who." Also... By introducing prize money...
Writing Feedbackwaterolily - Apr 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 15, 2011
|how would you describe yourself as a human being?
Writing Feedbacknicod - Apr 9, 2011 / nicod - Apr 15, 2011
|TOEFL eassy- it is easier to succeed nowadays than in the past. agree or not?
4 - Dear Daliqin Lets start with your forum type which is "Essaya, Term Papers" which I am not sure...
Writing Feedbackdaliqin - Apr 15, 2011 / ARIA - Apr 15, 2011
|STUDYING ABROAD IS NOT JUST STUDYING ABOUT EDUCATION
Writing FeedbackQuiAnLe - Apr 3, 2011 / QuiAnLe - Apr 15, 2011
|Group-studying couldn't be ignored - it still plays an essential part for us
5 - thx~kevin~^0^...
Writing Feedbackekekek - Apr 11, 2011 / ekekek - Apr 15, 2011
|"a merchant in the year 1000 CE" - a diary on the silk road
Writing Feedbackmrxkms - Apr 12, 2011 / mrxkms - Apr 15, 2011
|"One should never judge a person by external appearances" - TOEFL iBT- subject
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Apr 12, 2011 / mahrou - Apr 15, 2011
|[Anne Boleyn] - Famous person I want to meet
6 - I don't have enough information about Anna Boleyn. I only knew from the movie. The movie told that Anna...
Writing Feedbacktdamqnova - Apr 7, 2011 / fm_rainbow - Apr 15, 2011
|[IELTS TASK 2] environment problem, is it an international problem?
Writing Feedbackthe leaf ninja - Apr 12, 2011 / the leaf ninja - Apr 14, 2011
|[IELTS] increasing business and culture contact would lose cultural identities?
2 - ...and they enable the globalization to make an advantageous impact on us in several respects. Besides ,the advantages...
Writing Feedbackfindthetime - Apr 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 14, 2011
|GRE Essay on working in professions for faculty
Writing Feedbackmealsome - Apr 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 14, 2011
|"New Orleans Holiday" - A Holiday Memory -high school English essay
4 - Good make me want to go to Mardi Gras, include the history from the beginning till now, how it...
Writing FeedbackVivbuie - Apr 11, 2011 / hopeless - Apr 14, 2011
|<Ielts> traditonal skills should be protected?
5 - Here are some ways to write that sentence: When people are confronted by the situation in which our traditional...
Writing Feedbackekekek - Apr 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 14, 2011
|Sports professionals are able to make more money than other occupations
3 - Hello, Baxil! Nice to see you, too. :-) ... it is an unfair distribution of human welfare wealth....
Writing FeedbackBaxil - Apr 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 14, 2011
|Access to defendants' past criminal record - helpful and fair or not?
Writing Feedbackwaterolily - Apr 10, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 14, 2011
|When does someone become an adult? Responsibility of an adult.
2 - Great idea. This is the age of COLLABORATION, and it is great to get a diversity of ideas. Posting...
Writing Feedbackxuelai - Apr 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 14, 2011
|[GRE] I-3-AW-NO.1 - Salt - Education
2 - Several tips from aosi 1.The structure and template of the essay is so good, your core idea is...
Writing Feedbackxyzyanxue - Apr 13, 2011 / aosi111 - Apr 14, 2011
|[IELTS] fixed punishment or take into account circumstances
Writing Feedbackjamliu0229 - Apr 10, 2011 / Panda271 - Apr 13, 2011
|The best way to learn English
Writing Feedbackmoonlighting - Mar 25, 2011 / moonlighting - Apr 13, 2011
|TOEFL writing: A new university will be established in the community. Agree or not?
Writing Feedbackjennyelbow - Apr 5, 2011 / jennyelbow - Apr 12, 2011
|Similar or different friends? What do you want most in a friend?
4 - ...and stress from living in the concrete jungle, my sporty friend can encourage me to go camping or... ...
Writing Feedbackadychang - Apr 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 12, 2011
|Cultural, economical, and political globalisation - is it worth it?
3 - Yep, this is a strong essay, for sure. I like that intro paragraph a lot. I wish, though, that...
Writing Feedbackbenzhu1985 - Apr 10, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 12, 2011
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