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|IELTS Task 2 - Compulsory military service for all countries
4 - hi suyper, here i would like to add that,question is very important.from one of my IELTS teacher i heard...
Writing FeedbackSuYper - Mar 21, 2011 / ratree - Mar 23, 2011
|SAT ESSAY - Underrated vs Underrated
5 - I agree with Kevin, simplify the introduction will make it clearer. Nevertheless, this is simply such a great essay....
Writing Feedbackyolven_lu - Mar 17, 2011 / cathchen - Mar 23, 2011
|Essay about happiness definition and it's effects - 'a kind of emotional feeling'
5 - Hi Kevin, Many thanks to your encouragement, I am a beginner in writing english essay, but with all...
Writing FeedbackBrookW - Mar 19, 2011 / BrookW - Mar 23, 2011
|An IELTS task 2 essay about whether studying history is important
4 - History to some people could be not very interesting, and they believe that studying the subject will not help...
Writing Feedbackenglishlearner1 - Mar 19, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 22, 2011
|'Disease prevention is better than cure' Do you agree or disagree?
5 - Do you understand the corrections dumi made? There is no doubt that taking preventative measures against illness is important.......
Writing Feedbackmouxing - Mar 19, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 22, 2011
|Several short breaks v.s long break in schools
2 - Not so many parents can afford several vacations throughout the year because of the high costs of air fare,...
Writing FeedbackKathyLala - Mar 18, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 22, 2011
|TOEFL: Does Television destroy our bonds with friends and family?
6 - That's always great advice. When you argue, show the opponent and audience that you do understand their reasoning and...
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Mar 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 22, 2011
|Harmful telephones and email? Human's progress is favorable. It's society that causes the problems.
4 - Thank both of you for the constructive criticism. I'll have in mind all your suggestions. By the way, English...
Writing Feedbackxchrisxcore - Mar 16, 2011 / xchrisxcore - Mar 22, 2011
|An essay on 'tiger mom' - what should an ideal education be like?
Writing Feedbackzailn - Mar 12, 2011 / zailn - Mar 22, 2011
|Music is a therapy for better health
Writing Feedbackiloveyou - Mar 20, 2011 / prettybear94 - Mar 22, 2011
|Argument essay on whether students should be required to have physical education
Writing FeedbackDeerHunter - Mar 19, 2011 / DeerHunter - Mar 21, 2011
|"Of all the manifestations* of power, restraint in the use of that power
2 - According to the narrator, restraint in the use of power impresses people more than manifestation of power. I...
Writing Feedbackgowerdhan786 - Mar 18, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 21, 2011
|[toefl] Build art museum or recreational facility
3 - hello, thank you for your advises and i wrote this essay spent almost 40sec. i will revise my essay...
Writing Feedbacktaylor kong - Mar 21, 2011 / taylor kong - Mar 21, 2011
|Art museums and music performance centers or recreational facilities?
5 - i agreed w/ Taylor, you definitely need to provide more examples to support your point. Actually, i think...
Writing Feedbacks033591 - Mar 19, 2011 / mintchoco - Mar 21, 2011
|[TOEFL] The Cost of Human Development
Writing FeedbackBorislav - Mar 16, 2011 / Borislav - Mar 21, 2011
|Essay about independency and a choice between living with family or moving out
6 - hello, i saw your essay, here is some ideas: - you have less evidences to support your essay, and...
Writing Feedbackdodoboy0324 - Feb 17, 2011 / taylor kong - Mar 21, 2011
|"Bus in Hanoi" - Evaluation essay - the role of transportation.
4 - Personally I think this is a good essay. However you have too many simple sentences, I think you should...
Writing Feedbackcarnation249 - Mar 16, 2011 / SuYper - Mar 21, 2011
|Reflection paper-museum tour reflection
2 - With the nurturing perspectives, I designed my tour in a way which would give learners a safety but challenging...
Writing Feedbackmintchoco - Mar 18, 2011 / EF_Susan - Mar 21, 2011
|TOEFL-"forest is disappearing but needs to be saved."
Writing FeedbackY529 - Mar 3, 2011 / Y529 - Mar 21, 2011
|[TOEFL] young people should try different job before taking a career!
2 - Here are some more ideas, Taylor... A public debate on the question of whether young people should try...
Writing Feedbacktaylor kong - Mar 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 20, 2011
|Issue : Should political leaders withhold information from the public?
Writing FeedbackVVR - Mar 17, 2011 / VVR - Mar 20, 2011
|Underrated Vs Overrated by people - what is better?
2 - Great edit here... thanks, Jerber! Yes, 3rd person is better. I like this correction: meet the expected demand...
Writing Feedbackcathchen - Mar 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 20, 2011
|DO WE RELY HEAVILY ON TECHNOLOGY ?
6 - The only thing is if feel like this is awkward: I personally utilize technology in my daily routine whether...
Writing Feedbackstooks - Mar 13, 2011 / bellawings90210 - Mar 18, 2011
|I can't agree fully with the demand of equality of number between genders in the universities
4 - I think we should get rid of "and" here: And According to them the selection occurs so that the...
Writing Feedbackkimo1234 - Mar 14, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 18, 2011
|Cause and Effects Essay: Evolving trends of text messaging
3 - The customer pushes their cart to ...------Their goes with a plural noun. It IS okay to do this, but...
Writing Feedbacknmartin500 - Mar 15, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 18, 2011
|"What is life?" - Senior Paper
3 - I don't think this is a good way to use the word "quoted"----> Tupac Shakur quoted; "Why am ......
Writing FeedbackDimples2011 - Mar 14, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 18, 2011
|'pets have many viruses'; Many people have a close relationship with their pets.
4 - It might be better to say a close connection instead of a close contact. "Close contact" means something that...
Writing Feedbackholic117 - Mar 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 17, 2011
|The advanced technology help students easily learn knowledge. TOEFL essay
Writing Feedbackwindchimethia - Feb 13, 2011 / taylor kong - Mar 17, 2011
|Happiness, tobacco, elderly, child activities, English, population control, immunise
4 - Smoking tobacco like other dangerous drugs should be made illegal. Agree or disagree? The issue of prohibiting cigarette...
Writing Feedbackgeekinthepink - Mar 13, 2011 / dumi - Mar 16, 2011
|Cambridge IELFTS - Prevention is better than cure. Health education.
Writing FeedbackPony - Mar 9, 2011 / Pony - Mar 16, 2011
|Being Perfect not only in school
5 - I take this issue from my own reality, so it's quite interesting and I have enthusiasm to write it....
Writing FeedbackSnowQueen - Mar 12, 2011 / SnowQueen - Mar 16, 2011
|IELTS Taks 2 - Rapid economic development cause some problems
4 - Hi Yen! The arguments are quite clear, your essay is flowed well, but I usually don't merely said "in...
Writing FeedbackSuYper - Mar 15, 2011 / KathyLala - Mar 16, 2011
|"parents can not be termed as the best teachers"
3 - It is quite true that the first lessons of one's life are learned through parents but that does not...
Writing Feedbackrabiamomin - Mar 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 15, 2011
|Both genders go out of their homes to do jobs spending too much time at work
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Feb 25, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 15, 2011
|TV makes children passive. Every image and sound is delivered continually.
3 - Personally I think that you should avoid single sentences and try to put complex sentences. Moreover, you should emphasize...
Writing Feedbackdophuong - Mar 15, 2011 / SuYper - Mar 15, 2011
|IELTS Taks 2 - People meet many obstacles on borrowing money from banks.
4 - hi, Its a real good essay. your points are very clear and quite strong.But you should also be ready...
Writing FeedbackSuYper - Mar 14, 2011 / ajit88rai - Mar 15, 2011
|Keys To College Success Summary Writing Assignment
8 - I like this essay. It is very clear and meaningful. I think the last paragraph could have another 2...
Writing Feedbackironhawk893 - Mar 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 14, 2011
|Study at home using technology or study at traditional schools?
9 - Thank you!...
Writing Feedbackghost1 - Mar 10, 2011 / ghost1 - Mar 14, 2011
|"for a better world to live" - wealthy nations to share their wealth among other
3 - Thanks, Nadine. You are cool! I want to talk about this mistake at the beginning. Here are some...
Writing FeedbackArdhitya - Mar 10, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 14, 2011
|"your claim of being a bona fide student in New Zealand" - GAP YEARS EXPLAINATION
Writing Feedbacktakanguyen - Mar 10, 2011 / takanguyen - Mar 14, 2011
|"increase interest" - Teachers should encourage their students to question everything
3 - As I see, other people checked your essay, I just have some comments : You should avoid the very...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Mar 12, 2011 / SuYper - Mar 14, 2011
|Improving your knowledge and dealing with other people - reasons to attend school
Writing Feedbackg8231226702 - Mar 6, 2011 / g8231226702 - Mar 13, 2011
|TOEFL: Important qualities of a good supervisor (boss)
6 - I'll correct some of the grammar, and I hope you practice each correction 10 times. That will teach you...
Writing Feedbackkarlenin - Mar 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 13, 2011
|IELTS task 2: Noise levels have impact the quality of our life?
Writing Feedbackdevil - Mar 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 13, 2011
|TOEFL: MORE VOCATION TIME Vs HIGHER SALARY
3 - Awesome, Kathy... Ellen, can you easily understand the corrections made here? Some people think money is everything,...
Writing Feedbackeating105 - Mar 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 13, 2011
|Toefl - It would be tragic if we put the wrong metric on judging people (external appearance)
4 - However, other people regard outer appearances as something very important indicators.-----I changed it so that it would make sense...
Writing Feedbackosooo - Mar 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 13, 2011
|[TOEFL] The Deceiving Advertisement
3 - Soleley is an adverb, and sole is an adjective. You should use sole in this case: Because the sole...
Writing FeedbackBorislav - Mar 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 13, 2011
|[TOEFL] The real source of success (courageous and bold people)
6 - Ha ha, okay, I'll check it out. I don't think you used the word resentful correctly here. You...
Writing FeedbackBorislav - Mar 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 13, 2011
|TOEFL - Parents are the best teachers? No, it does not hold for every case!
5 - Impressive! You are ready for the toefl. Just forget about it and move on to other challenges. When you...
Writing Feedbackg8231226702 - Mar 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 13, 2011
|Young people have no influence on the decisions about the society
Writing Feedbacksunnycoastwang - Mar 6, 2011 / sunnycoastwang - Mar 13, 2011
|SAT - Failure is the beginning of education
Writing Feedbackcathchen - Mar 5, 2011 / cathchen - Mar 13, 2011
|Essay: The 'O' levels are redundant
Writing Feedbacktrenkins - Feb 28, 2011 / trenkins - Mar 13, 2011
|The Key Qualities of an Ethical Teacher - What is my stand on this? -Essay paragraph
Writing Feedbackmpvick - Mar 9, 2011 / mpvick - Mar 12, 2011
|Eulogy of Morrie schwartz by Charlotte schwartz.
Writing FeedbackDude - Mar 10, 2011 / Dude - Mar 12, 2011
|New generation no more read books. Is this complaint true?
4 - Let's say "the modern generation" The modern generation does not... have time to visit a public library to...
Writing Feedbackjomse - Mar 8, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 12, 2011
|More and more people claim that modern work patterns are a source of stress.
3 - ...results of temporary work patterns which have formed stressful lifestyles for people of the modern generation. Resolutions can be...
Writing Feedbackmegiacodon - Mar 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 12, 2011
|Some people spend the entire lives in one place. Others move a number of times.
3 - believes Keep it plural: ...new people, new cultures, and new beliefs that are all so amazing to me; I...
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Mar 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 12, 2011
|Describe the "TRAITS OF A LEADER" . Which of those fits you best ?
4 - In academic writing, professors often expect you to use at least 3 or 4 sentences in a paragraph....
Writing Feedbackstooks - Mar 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 12, 2011
|GRE Sample: "Scientific Fact Invariably Proves to be Inaccurate"
3 - Impressive writing! Let me make some suggestions. Almost anything is as much something as it is nothing.---no commas....
Writing Feedbackkgw - Mar 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 12, 2011
|"early childhood teachers and classrooms" - article reflection
5 - Okay Sylvia Brown, let's simplify this intro: To begin with, m My two little critiques are about the vagueness...
Writing Feedbackmintchoco - Mar 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 12, 2011
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