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|People have a tendency to think that Art and music are too trivial compared to others subjects
Writing Feedbackyuletide - Mar 30, 2018 / yuletide - Mar 31, 2018
|IELTS Writing Test - Does the coverage of sport on television discourage teenagers from exercise?
3 - This corrections might be useful ; This is suggestions ; discouragement from / to young adults the pressure...
Writing FeedbackNancy Huang - Mar 30, 2018 / abang yoga - Mar 31, 2018
|TOEFL independent writing - a better life with an undergraduate degree or a master degree?
2 - Hi, I think your writing is not too bad, but your essay needs a better introduction and conclusion. You...
Writing Feedbackanchitang0321 - Mar 27, 2018 / TJLuschen - Mar 29, 2018
|IELTS: pollution and traffic growth - higher gas price as the obvious solution?
4 - Hi Amalia Hanifah, it is glad to see your writing here. So, you will get a number of feedbacks...
Writing Feedbackamalianhanifah - Mar 26, 2018 / fadlanmuzakki - Mar 27, 2018
|Colleges and universities have to enroll the same numbers of students in both genders in all subject
Writing Feedbackkikiyiu - Mar 24, 2018 / kikiyiu - Mar 27, 2018
|Sharing information in a variety of fields freely
3 - Thank you so much for your reply!! I think maybe I misunderstood the topic. I will rewrite it...
Writing Feedbackyakoe - Mar 26, 2018 / yakoe - Mar 27, 2018
|Space travel vs environment problems? which one is important? PTE
2 - Hey! You have a good essay. Nice use of vocabulary and your ideas are put well together. There...
Writing FeedbackPeterBrown - Mar 26, 2018 / DoctorWho - Mar 26, 2018
|IELTS writing task 2: In your opinion, what has been the most significant transportation...
Writing FeedbackNKNam123 - Mar 25, 2018 / NKNam123 - Mar 26, 2018
|The average number of Vietnamese students studying in France, Russia and America between 2000
Writing Feedbackhuonggiza - Mar 21, 2018 / huonggiza - Mar 26, 2018
|Technological advances significantly change the way we live, which includes communication
5 - at the beginning I was not very sure whether this instruction "In what ways has technology affected the...
Writing FeedbackPhucnguyen - Mar 22, 2018 / Phucnguyen - Mar 26, 2018
|Higher taxes should be collected from industries causing higher industrial pollution?
3 - Anh, your opening statement is not a paraphrase of the original prompt, this means a failing score in the...
Writing Feedbackanhtho1412 - Mar 23, 2018 / Holt - Mar 26, 2018
|Do the disadvantages of using e-mail surpass the advantages?
4 - Kavan, your response is inaccurate. This is a comparison of opinion discussion. Since you are being asked to weigh...
Writing Feedbackquocviet - Mar 23, 2018 / Holt - Mar 26, 2018
|It is only a matter of time before teachers are replaced by technology in the classroom.
3 - Hoang, while you wrote a pretty good essay here. I am not going to applaud your work for accuracy...
Writing Feedbackharryhoangvn - Mar 22, 2018 / Holt - Mar 26, 2018
|Which type of accomodation is best? Advantages of apartment living overweight house's disadvantages.
3 - spacious any hobby (any + singular) houses are considered as to be more advantageous In conclusion/To conclude, it...
Writing FeedbackSTA - Mar 23, 2018 / sumomoakiko - Mar 25, 2018
|Sharing confidential information for free and for everyone?
3 - this is good introduction paragraph for beginning however it is important to make an interesting introductory paragraph so...
Writing Feedbackdimasnrw - Mar 24, 2018 / fadlanmuzakki - Mar 25, 2018
|Telling the truth is the first thing I would like develop in a good relationship
3 - Thank you so much!!! This is my first exercise. I very appreciate that you help me improve my structure...
Writing FeedbackJessicaLiao - Mar 18, 2018 / JessicaLiao - Mar 24, 2018
|[Ielts task 2] Wealth does not necessarily guarantee happiness.
2 - ... because we cannot live without money in the modern world. - I afraid "survive" implying biological living. We...
Writing Feedbackhappyfunny - Mar 24, 2018 / kikiyiu - Mar 24, 2018
|Teleworking should be adopted ?!?
4 - Hello thanh, Normally in the introduction (ielts) we have two part: paraphrase sentence, answer and introduction to your...
Writing FeedbackBui Thanh - Mar 21, 2018 / happyfunny - Mar 23, 2018
|IELTS writing part 1 - percentage of people aged 65 and over (line graph)
Writing Feedbackkikiyiu - Mar 21, 2018 / kikiyiu - Mar 22, 2018
|Circus Entertainment - IELTS writing task 2 correction
Writing FeedbackNKNam123 - Mar 20, 2018 / NKNam123 - Mar 21, 2018
|Government should invest more money in science education rather than other subjects
2 - Hoa, you opening paraphrase is not an accurate restatement of the original prompt. Your discussion instruction line is also...
Writing FeedbackHoa Tran - Mar 20, 2018 / Holt - Mar 21, 2018
|China-Russia Market research
3 - @Holt Hi Thank you for your response, I am writing this article for marketing research purpose. I am trying...
Writing Feedbackbaqixiaohei - Mar 20, 2018 / baqixiaohei - Mar 20, 2018
|TOEFL independent writing: How does the increasing availability of information influence life?
3 - Li, your essay was going pretty well until you decided to discuss the US elections. Don't delve on discussing...
Writing Feedbackdeniselee - Mar 17, 2018 / Holt - Mar 20, 2018
|Some people believe that taking their children into the boarding school is the best choice
Writing Feedbacktey - Mar 17, 2018 / Holt - Mar 20, 2018
|Ielts writing - Take a gap year between high school and university.
5 - Tranh, in an opinion essay, you should represent only one opinion for discussion. That is, unless the prompt specifically...
Writing Feedbackmanhhackc - Mar 17, 2018 / Holt - Mar 20, 2018
|DREAM BIG FUND essay competition
3 - Putri, your essay is not very academic in presentation and also, requires a more coherent presentation for the essay....
Writing Feedbackflykitten - Mar 17, 2018 / Holt - Mar 20, 2018
|THE BEST WAY TO REDUCE YOUTH CRIMES IS TO EDUCATE THEIR PARENTS WITH PARENTAL SKILLS
4 - Nguyen, the highest score you can get for this essay is a 5 because you did not properly respond...
Writing Feedbackjokyhuy - Mar 17, 2018 / Holt - Mar 20, 2018
|A proper training is very significant to make a fundamental structure of children's mind
3 - @nilfort your essay has a series of problems that needs to be addressed before you can even begin to...
Writing Feedbacknilfort - Mar 11, 2018 / Holt - Mar 18, 2018
|Travel agencies with customized travel program or free backpacking?
4 - really appreciate both of your comments!! may i ask how much score can my writing like this one get...
Writing Feedbackdeniselee - Mar 16, 2018 / deniselee - Mar 17, 2018
|"The Bet" by Anthon Chekov - MY THOUGHTS
3 - @TJLuschen This is not exactly an assignment but just a diary that I would like to keep on practicing...
Writing Feedbackruntothesun1972 - Mar 16, 2018 / runtothesun1972 - Mar 17, 2018
|Academic result in measuring people's intelligence
2 - This is ambiguous writing... to me, you are lacking in nearly all boxes 1. Lexical Resource = repetition...
Writing Feedbackmanhhackc - Mar 16, 2018 / afaquekhan85 - Mar 16, 2018
|There is no place left for teachers in today's world. PTE write essay
2 - This is good writing... to me, you have ticked all boxes 1. Lexical Resource 2. Task Achievement 3....
Writing FeedbackPeterBrown - Mar 16, 2018 / afaquekhan85 - Mar 16, 2018
|IELTS A.W Task 2: people should keep all the money and not pay tax to the state
2 - Dear Polin_Togatorop, There is something you may want to consider further here. "Some people say an ability...
Writing FeedbackPolin_Togatorop - Mar 16, 2018 / hanhndvn - Mar 16, 2018
|IELTS Task 1 GT. Formal letter to an newspaper
NEW - You recently read an article in newspaper about someone you know personally. You found some information is wrong. Write...
Writing Feedbackamal_ahm - Mar 15, 2018 / — -
|IELTS Task 1 Bar graph about percentage of men and women doing exercise systematically
3 - @TJLuschen Thank you for your feedback! I am going to practice again based on this Thank you!...
Writing FeedbackJayKIM - Mar 11, 2018 / JayKIM - Mar 15, 2018
|Check sentences about media topic - newspapers
Writing FeedbackNguyen123 - Mar 11, 2018 / TJLuschen - Mar 14, 2018
|Financial institutions, beside revenue-generating activities, should contribute more to community
NEW - (IELTS) As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. Agree or disagree? businesses - gaining profit...
Writing Feedbacktqhung94 - Mar 14, 2018 / — -
|Evaluate the pros and cons about factory built near the community. [TOEFL]
3 - @kevin86120 You must avoid starting your sentences with the connecting words "And, but, or because". As these are connecting...
Writing Feedbackkevin86120 - Mar 11, 2018 / Holt - Mar 14, 2018
|Death with Dignity Essay - should patient be allowed to end their life on their own terms?
2 - Kyra, you presented a personal opinion at the end of paragraph 2 but did not follow up on the...
Writing Feedbackkyra2114315 - Mar 11, 2018 / Holt - Mar 14, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2: Fashionable clothes, Is this attitude a positive or negative development?
3 - Afaque, this is a direct answer single opinion essay. Therefore, you are supposed to pick only one side of...
Writing Feedbackafaquekhan85 - Mar 9, 2018 / Holt - Mar 13, 2018
|Topic 1: Traditional food is undergoing great changes and being replaced by new diets.
4 - @Oscar Tam Thank you for your advice. It has a good point in your idea that I haven't thought...
Writing FeedbackTamia - Mar 2, 2018 / Tamia - Mar 12, 2018
|The great advertising affects people's willing of purchasing - Ielts work
5 - HI LUCY, Your essay actually seems fine with advanced vocabulary as well as approriate organization that follow Ielts...
Writing FeedbackLUCYLUCY - Mar 10, 2018 / Sophia Yang - Mar 12, 2018
|Evaluate viable solutions to the problem of workplace stress.
NEW - Could anyone give me some feedback about my essay? Thank you and have a good day! reducing stress...
Writing Feedbackfastfood - Mar 12, 2018 / — -
|When people fail at schools, it doesn't mean that they miss a chance to reach success in the future
Writing FeedbackOscar Tam - Mar 10, 2018 / Oscar Tam - Mar 11, 2018
|Raising Successful Children. [IELTS Writing Task2 ] Children are require to help with household task
2 - The given topic shows a statement, (no need ",") that some parents require their children to give a help...
Writing FeedbackBarneywu - Mar 7, 2018 / chiehpower - Mar 10, 2018
|Should we learn a foreign language? Provide your thoughts.
4 - Thanks for your advice. It is very helpful for me, but I think that writing the essay within 40...
Writing Feedbackchiehpower - Mar 7, 2018 / chiehpower - Mar 10, 2018
|In today's society, success is often measured in terms of wealth and possessions. Is it right?
Writing Feedbacklvi - Mar 6, 2018 / chlu - Mar 10, 2018
|Questions about transitions of paragraphs and ideas in personal statement for CDC job
2 - Shristi, your first two paragraphs are irrelevant to the prompt questions. The questions posed before you all require you...
Writing Feedbackshumagai - Mar 6, 2018 / Holt - Mar 10, 2018
|Education should be free for everyone. Do you Agree or disagree? Write an essay to present your idea
4 - Pham, your essay is wrong from the very beginning. The prompt paraphrase is incomplete and / or inaccurate. I...
Writing Feedbackmeocon800 - Mar 4, 2018 / Holt - Mar 10, 2018
|Loan for a music club [GRE Argument] I am new to GRE and need help on AWA writing
Writing Feedbackchlu - Mar 6, 2018 / chlu - Mar 8, 2018
|Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case?
5 - Alex, in a direct question essay, you must always refer to the discussion type when you develop your draft...
Writing Feedbackalecen - Mar 3, 2018 / Holt - Mar 8, 2018
|Studying in foreign countries gradually become an upward trend - a positive one or not?
3 - Ha, a completely accurate discussion review of your essay cannot be completed without the complete prompt requirement. I need...
Writing Feedbackhathubui2001 - Mar 3, 2018 / Holt - Mar 8, 2018
|A recent movement in education has been called "Back to Basics." Current curriculum controversy.
3 - @sungin115 I am going to review this as an actual research paper and not an English grammar exam since...
Writing Feedbacksungin115 - Mar 2, 2018 / Holt - Mar 8, 2018
|Effects of TV on positive or negative culture
3 - Rosita, the choice of discussion comes with the word "or" separating the two opinions. That word indicates that this...
Writing Feedbackrosita12 - Mar 2, 2018 / Holt - Mar 8, 2018
|IELTS | TASK 2 | Full-time education until adulthood/18 years old
2 - The opening paragraph should not present an opinion coming from the writers, as you did, in the topic paragraph.The...
Writing Feedbacksumomoakiko - Mar 1, 2018 / Holt - Mar 7, 2018
|New, modern buildings - is it a good investment?
Writing FeedbackIrisyLuna - Feb 13, 2018 / Ashkan123 - Mar 6, 2018
|Essay: A TRIP TO THE COUNTRYSIDE - the most amazing experience I ever had
Writing FeedbackHappyBoy2003 - Mar 4, 2018 / HappyBoy2003 - Mar 5, 2018
|The internet and its effect on academic learning
3 - Thanks for sending your essay here. Please allow me to give you some valuable feedback towards the essay posted....
Writing Feedbackrosita12 - Mar 3, 2018 / eddies - Mar 5, 2018
|Ielts Essay : Brain drain from poor countries - seeking for solutions
Writing Feedbacksenuthilini - Feb 26, 2018 / senuthilini - Mar 5, 2018
|Should women have the right to join the army? Their motherhood role may be affected. IELTS question
2 - Hey Jawad. You certainly have some interesting ideas for the essay. The errors that I find are mainly...
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