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|Miranda Rights are Important? - a persuasive essay
4 - The topic of Miranda rights in this essay may not be fully developed. First, these rights are when the...
Writing Feedbackhabibu79 - Oct 7, 2010 / writerblock - Dec 24, 2010
|"I am a Proud African" VCU write about you and why you choose VCU.
3 - I think you don't really need your second paragraph since your first paragraph already strong about your identity. In...
Writing Feedbackrisingfame - Dec 23, 2010 / basketball - Dec 24, 2010
|Improvised essay. "Fiddler on the Roof"
2 - i think its a good essay and most importantly it ends with a positive note. Besides that, I think...
Writing Feedbackshu - Dec 24, 2010 / pagall - Dec 24, 2010
|ielts essay: distance-learning vs. attending school in person
2 - Dear Ruan, I think you can try to restructure your sentence like this because the second idea flows...
Writing Feedbackstarwish - Dec 22, 2010 / rajeshaaidu - Dec 22, 2010
|Young people should try different jobs before sticking to one in long-term.
Writing FeedbackYuking - Dec 9, 2010 / moretolearn - Dec 22, 2010
|My political essay on the corrupt release of government information.
Writing FeedbackGreg555x - Dec 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 22, 2010
|Ielts: Charleen's talent and parent's perspectives
NEW - Q) It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports and music,...
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|IELTS the advantages and disadvantages of the prevalent of English
2 - With the development of globalization, English has becomethea dominated language in inter national trades , conferences and many important...
Writing Feedbacksisiyunjao - Dec 12, 2010 / riny - Dec 20, 2010
|Studying literature and history is more important than mathematics and science
3 - You write uniquely in the sense that you use commas to make your sentences more terse yet potent. For...
Writing Feedbackbellatsai1030 - Dec 20, 2010 / kiwi1909 - Dec 20, 2010
|Discuss the effects of advertising on our lives and give your opinion.
Writing FeedbackBobur - Dec 7, 2010 / Bobur - Dec 20, 2010
|It has become easy to prepare food now days but has this improved our lives?
8 - @kevin,thanks for your helpful comments and advices, i forgot to add those points abt chemical pesticides n other stuff....
Writing Feedbacktas - Dec 7, 2010 / tas - Dec 19, 2010
|Living in a big city has various advantages for people
Writing Feedbacktheworm - Dec 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 18, 2010
|China vs USA" - Essay for different cultures
4 - Similarly in the ceremony of the marriage, birthday, and even burial, the entertainment of foods is the theme of...
Writing Feedbackliqunqing - Dec 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 18, 2010
|China essay city and country children , discuss
3 - She always tells me about her hometown Please follow me! these differences are as follows i'm chinese, so...
Writing Feedbackcherrysong - Dec 15, 2010 / starwish - Dec 18, 2010
|Ielts : Young people's awareness of global issues
4 - i think your essay should focus on young people, for example, they live in a highly polluted environment compared...
Writing Feedbackriny - Dec 2, 2010 / starwish - Dec 18, 2010
|Why do we need to study history?
Writing Feedbackriny - Dec 2, 2010 / starwish - Dec 18, 2010
|People today are not as friendly as people were in the past.
Writing FeedbackXUHAN - Dec 2, 2010 / starwish - Dec 18, 2010
|Improving public health: sport places and importance of health
Writing Feedbackvanliuwei - Nov 30, 2010 / vanliuwei - Dec 17, 2010
|Describing my partner, Khalid (my best classmate)
Writing Feedbackweezy - Dec 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2010
|Technology, the social life killer or saviour?
3 - They are not destroying a social network. They are improving the communication capabilities in our social networks. But I...
Writing FeedbackRobD - Dec 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2010
|SAT essay! Where do I see myself when I am 22. Need grammar help.
Writing FeedbackMLE27 - Dec 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2010
|The meaning of success is complex and individuals define it to suit their personal achievements
6 - ...give meanings that suit their personal achievements. to it This is very good, but you do not need these...
Writing Feedbackmdipeolu - Nov 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2010
|Importance of working conditions? Focus on products or working conditions?
3 - In the first paragraph, the words "benefit" and "product" should both probably have an s at the end. However,...
Writing Feedbackhoangdaochu - Nov 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2010
|It takes a village to raise a child; children education for the community
Writing Feedbacksubhash_ghosh - Dec 13, 2010 / subhash_ghosh - Dec 16, 2010
|Toefl essay:Parents are the best teachers.
2 - the first sentence could be " Parent are best teachers to person instead of people, parent are best teachers...
Writing Feedbackpk1726 - Dec 16, 2010 / tunguoge - Dec 16, 2010
|I will be someone someday as my father wanted me to!
NEW - Tut Gai 11/22/1980 Essays Topic B Under tree classroom My parents were cattle headers and farmers neither of...
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|The thriving Cold Cone Creamery Franchise in California
2 - The speaker avers that Cold Cone Creamery Business will... Also, the statement further prompts people to avail themselves...
Writing Feedbacksubhash_ghosh - Dec 13, 2010 / EF_Susan - Dec 15, 2010
|"the weather seemed more predictable from year to year" - Global Warming Essay
2 - The occurrence of natural disasters has increased, and seasonal weather has become irregular. There are two sides to...
Writing Feedbackdanielle94534 - Dec 13, 2010 / EF_Susan - Dec 15, 2010
|India's Possible Rise in the 21st Century above the West - Globalization Paper
2 - Like the former globalization, it also depends on the cheap labor of Indians, and like it, there is still...
Writing Feedbackjyu104 - Dec 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 14, 2010
|Compare the advantages and disadvantages of media for communicating information
2 - Media per se is a powerful communicating tool for human beings. ---This sentence is obvious, and obvious things are...
Writing Feedbackpsebastian56 - Dec 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 14, 2010
|"Undecided girl can dream" - College essay
NEW - Every seven-year-old girl has a dream. Some want to be princesses, a few may want to be cowgirls or...
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|ILLEGAL ENTRANCE - An Incident From my Life
Writing Feedbackmertak - Nov 25, 2010 / mertak - Dec 13, 2010
|The knowledge we acquire outside of school is the most important.
3 - ...acquirement of knowledge, people acquire the most important knowledge from their social experiences because (can you sum up the...
Writing Feedbackwhitney - Nov 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 13, 2010
|"Does a zoo have any useful purpose?"
5 - azaaza is a good writer, haaa Beside a zoo has educational benefit also it has amusing and entertaining...
Writing Feedbackabdrabou - Dec 4, 2010 / andygu - Dec 13, 2010
|TOEFL: Boys and girls should attend separate schools
Writing FeedbackSiva071 - Dec 1, 2010 / NIBEK - Dec 12, 2010
|"work nowadays is more stressful and less leisurely than in the past" IELTS essay two
10 - psebastian56 However, it does not relive the current stressful working situation that may change the attitude of the people...
Writing Feedbacksisiyunjao - Dec 6, 2010 / sisiyunjao - Dec 11, 2010
|Essay about children's changes in eating habits
Writing Feedbackmelita - Nov 23, 2010 / jennay99 - Dec 10, 2010
|The importance of students' sports activities
3 - However, universities should give more money to students' sports activities than they give to their university libraries. Students will...
Writing Feedbackwhitney - Nov 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 10, 2010
|My Little 'Buddha'
6 - Like Buddha who even didn't speak a word against the pundit,mM y player did not respondkept calm in response...
Writing Feedbackdhunjunikesh - Dec 7, 2010 / dumi - Dec 9, 2010
|"the obesity epidemic in America" - Anthropology Essay
NEW - "I couldn't open up a magazine, you couldn't read a newspaper, you couldn't turn on the TV without hearing...
Writing Feedbackalswn95 - Dec 9, 2010 / — -
|"Where is the Line Defined?" - Argumentative Essay-no OUTSIDE SOURCES!
Writing Feedbackericao2010 - Nov 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 9, 2010
|Reiterate: this is the utopia.
NEW - The concept of an utopia that embedded in my heart is a place that is repleted with the collaboration...
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|"The attraction of New York City" - A meaningful Place
Writing FeedbackKathyLala - Nov 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 7, 2010
|It's neither possible nor desirable to do the same job throughout work lives - IELTS
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Nov 23, 2010 / sweetheart87 - Dec 7, 2010
|what causes students to cheat on the tests?
3 - Hi again...i think, while using the word 'Consequently', you'd better aviod asking questions. In conclusion part you should give...
Writing Feedbackazaaza - Dec 6, 2010 / Bobur - Dec 7, 2010
|People are starving, but money is spent on pets
Writing Feedbacktuanphong892009 - Nov 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 5, 2010
|9/11 and Art Essay: Revise/Edit what i have so far.
2 - Songs were written. Paintings were painted. Poems were recited. Photos and videos were taken. This whole sentence has...
Writing Feedbackcaudet89 - Nov 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 5, 2010
|Importance of One Parent Stay Home with Their Young Children For The First Few Years
2 - Today, young people in every part of the world hope to have successful success in their jobs ....
Writing Feedbackthunguyen88 - Nov 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 5, 2010
|"the percentage of each source of energy used in America" IELTS Writing task 1
NEW - The given two graphs illustrate the percentage of each source of energy used in America during the period of...
Writing Feedbackmoondikasina - Dec 5, 2010 / — -
|About "climate change and Fossil fuels" - what is causing climate change, human role
NEW - Examine the role of one human activity in causing climate change, and discuss how further deterioration may be prevented...
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|Essay about concerns with education; students not learning helpful material- feedback
2 - Education is one of my personal concerns. ----boring first sentence... not much meaning. It is just informative. "I...
Writing Feedbackleesharshukov - Nov 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 4, 2010
|Essay about proving that experience is greater than books. - Feedback
2 - We try to use gender-inclusive sentences, here, so if you are going to address sirs address madams, too!...
Writing FeedbackEssayfreak - Nov 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 3, 2010
|"Forget How to Remember" - College Essay Idea Rough Draft
Writing FeedbackD Kneco - Nov 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 3, 2010
|Some want independence and some prefer to live with thier families ,which you prefer?
2 - You should practice typinf each of these sentences 10 times so that you remember the correct grammar: Nowadays...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Nov 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 3, 2010
|In Barnaul youth will be interested in theatre
2 - Creative group "Project-41", working on base of «Regional palace of youth", has begun preparation of socially significant PR-project "Theatrical...
Writing Feedbacknathalie1912 - Nov 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 3, 2010
|"there is more to life than just reality TV shows" -Argumentative Paper on Television
Writing Feedbackkangi - Dec 3, 2010 / Cloud_Tek9 - Dec 3, 2010
|Drawbacks of unpaid work and recommendations to improve it.
2 - Along with the enthusiasm that a person gets, there may also be existing unfavorable conditions. in line with this,...
Writing Feedbackbrenda - Nov 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 2, 2010
|The advantages of pursuing dreams rather than giving up on them - TEOFL
Writing Feedbackjasminebi - Dec 1, 2010 / vaishali1980 - Dec 2, 2010
|Classify TV programs - classification essay type
2 - 'Entertainment is the most favorite for many people' you can use this sentence as ' Many people watch TV...
Writing Feedbackthaitam - Dec 1, 2010 / vaishali1980 - Dec 2, 2010
|Ielts essay; I believe that companies' changing employees is acceptable.
3 - The fourth paragraph is similar to second one. My suggestion is that you can conbine both in one paragragh....
Writing Feedbackphuocqui - Nov 27, 2010 / riny - Dec 2, 2010
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