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|TOEFL> moving to different countries is not good because of losing old friends
10 - There are some words as well as structure you should make change. I do not mean it is meaningless...
Writing Feedbackddpddpzzz - May 15, 2011 / mywill - May 19, 2011
|"Ignorance is bliss". Agree or disagree? - my essay for CBEST
4 - I'll fix the grammar and punctuation. Practice typing it this way: "As hunger is cured by food, so...
Writing Feedbackfridaeman - May 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 19, 2011
|(LMU) (KCL) (ICL) - Compare and contrast three British Universities.
4 - Great job! The only thing that might need more details is the third one" library". I think there should...
Writing Feedbacklovelysmile - May 17, 2011 / bahareh - May 19, 2011
|TOEFL> government should spend more money in university than children
3 - mywill's suggestion is so good. maybe u can see some samples written by natives. it would help u a...
Writing Feedbackddpddpzzz - May 17, 2011 / SamuelWei - May 19, 2011
|children working at the early ages
8 - @Scientiana What's wrong with They're? ---- @Topic. Don't be anti-climatic. Don't use words like "To...
Writing Feedbacktrang_bee - May 8, 2011 / butterbescotch - May 19, 2011
|"It is an individual who is the impetus for innovation; the details may be teamwork"
3 - Do not start a sentence with the word World. It needs THE. The world has witnessed a notable... ...
Writing Feedbackirs055 - May 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 18, 2011
|TOEFL: best way to improve the quality of education is to increase teachers' salaries
5 - I'm surprised you failed. You write so well! I don't see many errors... I think you should add a...
Writing FeedbackSamuelWei - May 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 18, 2011
|'equality, responsibility and oneness' - dress code should be implemented
4 - Thanks Arveen! I'll give some more corrections: A dress code is designed to maintain uniformity in dress. ...
Writing Feedbackheena33 - May 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 18, 2011
|Pets are part of family? Yes ; IELTS
5 - Thankyou Kevin. I got your idea about my first sentence and it was right.I should not translate my own...
Writing Feedbackbahareh - May 15, 2011 / bahareh - May 18, 2011
|IELTS: Should we ban all forms of advertising?
Writing Feedbackbetsy1122 - May 16, 2011 / Neeta - May 18, 2011
|"Memorandum to Managers" - GMAT essay - Analysis of an Argument
4 - Hi Kevin, you're right, I capitalize all the words related to "Money/Career/Jobs" on purpose :-). I'm pleasantly surprised that...
Writing Feedbacksubhash_ghosh - May 14, 2011 / subhash_ghosh - May 17, 2011
|Law need a flexiblity in approach considering the situation, place and time
Writing Feedbackirs055 - May 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 17, 2011
|Undoubtedly, every mind has many senses, some use it in positive and some in negative way
Writing Feedbackm_imran_khar - May 12, 2011 / m_imran_khar - May 17, 2011
|TOEFL:Art museums or recreational facilities?
7 - Surprised to have so much advice! Thank you all! Frank, I'll remenber to add the question in front...
Writing Feedbackjunephysics - May 12, 2011 / junephysics - May 16, 2011
|TOEFL: Follow the New Customs of the New Country or Not?
2 - I'd like to make a small change to one of the sentences here: ...while some insist the latter one...
Writing FeedbackFrank zhao - May 14, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 16, 2011
|Seek Independence or Live with Parents
3 - Hi Frank, you have some good corrections here. I'll build on them and add new ideas: For m Most...
Writing FeedbackFrank zhao - May 14, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 16, 2011
|"Monetary System in Electronic Accounts" - GMAT essay - Analysis of an Issue
2 - The observation mentioned in the statement seems to be quite thought provoking and interesting, and while analyzing the same...
Writing Feedbacksubhash_ghosh - May 14, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 16, 2011
|'impulse buyer' Do advertisements improve our lives ?
8 - I think AD has already affected our life, just like me. I usually buy thing according to the different...
Writing Feedbackaliwu - May 12, 2011 / Danicalele - May 16, 2011
|DIFFERENT SOURCES OF NOISE; IELTS
2 - Greetings ! In a nut shell=In a nutshell (one word) - Few mistakes in grammar, Mistakes arise...
Writing Feedbacksobin - May 15, 2011 / isai - May 16, 2011
|Essay - is education very important for a country to be well developed - feedback
4 - I think you should add one sentence to the end of the first paragraph. Make it a thesis statement...
Writing Feedbacksalman - May 14, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 15, 2011
|Every individual, regardless of his gender should get a chance to study at university level.
2 - Hi, It is necassary that people get themselves educated to build individual capacity (space) that could make their...
Writing Feedbackmithsal - May 13, 2011 / dumi - May 15, 2011
|Do young people today make good use of their leisure time?
Writing Feedbacksppanda - May 4, 2011 / sppanda - May 15, 2011
|Internet... a blessing or a bane?
Writing Feedbackfaisal - May 12, 2011 / Mahrooo - May 15, 2011
|IELTS writing - Academic study vs pratical matters learning
7 - It's really helpful. now it's clear to me. Use "the" means more detailed and more specified thing. So in...
Writing Feedbackextrafresh - May 11, 2011 / extrafresh - May 15, 2011
|Sport events in countries / economy - Argument: the logical fallacy of the proposal
Writing Feedbackstudent7 - May 12, 2011 / student7 - May 15, 2011
|The Reasons and Results of Pollution
2 - Greetings ! (hardly can be seen ..using because in the beginning of the sentence. You may say "This...
Writing Feedbackwhitney - May 14, 2011 / isai - May 14, 2011
|Should Music Piracy Remain Illegal? SENIOR PROJECT
3 - Music piracy is one of the most frequently committed crimes in the world and happens every day. After...
Writing Feedbacklovetowrite - May 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 14, 2011
|Give reasons - The power of advertising influence the purchase decisions
6 - Yes, and it's nice. One reason people love Hemingway is that his sentences are simple and powerful. Simple...
Writing Feedbackextrafresh - May 8, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 14, 2011
|When flatters get together, the devil goes to dinner
5 - Yep, I like this intriguing approach, too... Flattery is a social evil. ---Very poignant and interesting. It serves...
Writing FeedbackUltimate csp - May 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 14, 2011
|These days everyone seems to have more and more possessions. Our strong desire to own
4 - Hi Turbina, I'm so glad to help with your essays because I'm grateful for all the help you've given...
Writing FeedbackReal Fog - May 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 14, 2011
|Resilient nature of life is quite due to hope.
3 - People who have a resilient nature enjoy this beneficial trait due to hope. Hope enables us to find bright...
Writing Feedbackfaisal - May 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 14, 2011
|Change is always good. Discuss. (how to continue)
4 - I would add to your argument how people are affected by even bad change. Even when things are bad,...
Writing Feedbackkong - Apr 25, 2011 / luv2write - May 14, 2011
|Government should be responsible for education and health care or not?--IELTS
NEW - Some people say the government should pay for the health care and education, but others say that it is...
Writing FeedbackJennifer Zhang - May 14, 2011 / — -
|Traditional games or modern games in developing children's skills?--IELTS
Writing FeedbackJennifer Zhang - May 10, 2011 / Jennifer Zhang - May 14, 2011
|Help to writing an argumentative essay on globalization (beneficial or not)
Writing Feedbackcaroltb - May 11, 2011 / caroltb - May 13, 2011
|Life succeeds in that, it seems to fail
4 - Life has resilient nature, and it never lets hope get cut off, even in the lurch.--I changed this a...
Writing FeedbackUltimate csp - May 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 13, 2011
|TOEFL iBT-Inventing something new (machine to read people's thought)
Writing Feedbackmahrou - May 7, 2011 / mahrou - May 13, 2011
|TOEFL>Increased teacher's salary will improve the quality of education in a country
Writing Feedbackddpddpzzz - May 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 13, 2011
|Do traditional skills and way of life die out when a country develops with technology
7 - Hi Trangbee, I'll check out that other essay. :-) Thanks for your kind words. Writetip, thanks for joining...
Writing Feedbacktrang_bee - May 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 13, 2011
|Questioning authority to advance and understand the world -GRE topic
Writing Feedbackmsroger - May 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 13, 2011
|Toefl: In order to be well-informed, a person must get information from many sources
4 - Hi EF_Kevin，thanks for your replying, and I like the way you describe the competition by using '"rigorous"~~ thank...
Writing Feedbackmcshang - May 11, 2011 / mcshang - May 12, 2011
|Relationship - why some people don't tell the truth or hide the truth?
5 - Hi weiwei, I'll try to give some more ideas... To have good structure, make a full, complete introduction....
Writing Feedbackweiwei - May 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 12, 2011
|"Only the good die young" - personal essay
Writing FeedbackNLessard711 - May 10, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 12, 2011
|Why English is the Most Important Class in Any Curriculum?
4 - I'll try to find places to make improvements... Out of all the classes that a student will take...
Writing Feedback1995supra - May 10, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 12, 2011
|Why English is the most important in today's era.
2 - The English language has become an international language, and people gather in many forums to improve their understanding of...
Writing FeedbackAFZAL WARIS - May 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 12, 2011
|Toefl- For future career success, relating well to other people is more important
6 - i think that your example is not persuadable...just my thought.. i think that the biggest differences between 'normal...
Writing Feedbacks033591 - May 7, 2011 / ddpddpzzz - May 12, 2011
|IELTS practice----Long distance flight should be banned or not?
15 - m_imran_khar Hi! Thanks for your advice. Could you explain it more clearly? what structure do you think this essay...
Writing FeedbackJennifer Zhang - May 6, 2011 / Jennifer Zhang - May 12, 2011
|"Anyone who watched her films" - my essay about Marilyn Monroe
5 - Let me try to clarify this sentence a little: ...look at her photos until quite recent years. ---Oh, actually......
Writing FeedbackO_Riley - May 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 11, 2011
|IELTS - government shouldn't put money on building theaters or sports stadiums
Writing Feedbackdaniluk - May 8, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 11, 2011
|Classes where teachers lecture (do all of the talking) in class.
4 - Yep, I am not surprised. Your written English is very good! Please check out the EssayForum Contributor Page....
Writing Feedbackannieb - Apr 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 11, 2011
|CLEP - "I don't care how poor a person is; if he has family, he's rich."
4 - Person = singular they = plural so... let's change this sentence: For this reason, any person, regardless of...
Writing FeedbackMiiSTiiCZ - May 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 11, 2011
|I think it is quite normal that the ratio of men to women varies from subject to subject in schools
7 - I see the errors.Thanks agian.Kevin,you are really a good teacher.:-) And it's a great activity to become a...
Writing FeedbackCharlie Chen - May 5, 2011 / Charlie Chen - May 11, 2011
|TOEFL 'first instinct'; Are the decisions that people make quickly always wrong?
6 - Well, every person has a different idea about what is unhealthy. I did mean to refer to things...
Writing FeedbackFrank zhao - May 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 10, 2011
|Technology keeps traditional skills and ways of life alive or not?--IELTS Practice
5 - EF_Kevin Hi!kevin. Lucky to meet you here.Thank you so much that you hepled comment on two of my writings....
Writing FeedbackJennifer Zhang - May 8, 2011 / Jennifer Zhang - May 10, 2011
|Follow local traditions or welcome cultural differences?
Writing Feedbackextrafresh - May 6, 2011 / extrafresh - May 10, 2011
|Should school reduce the time of teaching the arts and humanities?
3 - Good idea! Can you think of examples from recent/current events? should not reduce the time on ...
Writing Feedbackstudent7 - May 8, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 9, 2011
|Stratergic PR - Vietnam - The Genki Festival
Writing FeedbackAnh_Thu1905 - May 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 9, 2011
|SAT Writing Practice: Do we benefit from learning about the flaws of people we admire
Writing FeedbackRaInBoWn92 - May 3, 2011 / RaInBoWn92 - May 9, 2011
|'less personal privacy'; The extended family is less important today
Writing Feedbacksola_nana - May 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 9, 2011
|Air travel only benefits the richest people; airplane development - IELTS
4 - That's because people ask for help more than they give help. I wish all the essayists would go...
Writing Feedbackimnotjolin - May 4, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 9, 2011
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