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|Daydreaming Experience Paper
4 - Rottencandy, what a great username! Well, I think you should change all the "you" to "I" It's manipulating things...
Writing Feedbackrottencandy - Feb 17, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 25, 2011
|Whom in your country would you choose to build a statue for?
3 - Use rightly to modify a verb, not a noun. ...as a righteous candidate, because she is good-hearted, modest, and...
Writing Feedbacks033591 - Feb 17, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 25, 2011
|Television promotes propaganda and it destroyed the communication among friends and family?
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Feb 9, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 25, 2011
|Some people believe that a college or university education should be available to all
2 - I like the "first, second, third" structure you used for the essay. That keeps the reader focused on the...
Writing FeedbackKeng - Feb 16, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 25, 2011
|Parents can give everything to their children. They understand them more than anyone else does.
5 - Hey, it is true that there are some small errors, but you have to also remember that writing is...
Writing Feedbackthaitornadoes - Feb 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 25, 2011
|toelf essay- Reading fiction (such as novels and short stories) is more enjoyable
NEW - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Reading fiction (such as novels and short stories) is more...
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Feb 25, 2011 / — -
|toelf-A transportation vehicle that has changed people's lives.
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Feb 14, 2011 / sabrinayaa - Feb 25, 2011
|Museums are the buildings that preserve objects of importance
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 14, 2011 / iamthien - Feb 25, 2011
|Descriptive Essay: Description of a Flood
6 - Thesis statment: The college Presidents ar talking about making the lowering the drinking age 18 years old.Everbody know that...
Writing FeedbackEdzo - Feb 4, 2011 / kastro28 - Feb 25, 2011
|Every generation of people is different in important ways. How about your generation?
7 - Thank you so much...just do not restrict your ideas...let them follow..Thats what i have learned.Keep reading and writing, that...
Writing Feedbackjoseph240 - Feb 24, 2011 / dolly - Feb 24, 2011
|Women Should not Choose Abortion Persuasive Paragraph
3 - Wow did not know about that last statement pretty harsh. Thanks for the feedback it's appreciated....
Writing Feedbackironhawk893 - Feb 21, 2011 / ironhawk893 - Feb 24, 2011
|Competitive children admire the sense of fulfillment therefore they are always trying to be better.
6 - ...childrens' characters and future lives . Besides, they will hold future responsibilities for a country. ( I changed...
Writing Feedbacks_maryam - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 24, 2011
|The socialization of children determines the way of society development
4 - What do you mean? It's a sentence you copied from another essay? You should change some words to...
Writing Feedbacklcnk - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 24, 2011
|Role of biomedical research play in your future.
2 - "Take an aspirin to alleviate your fever," said my worried mother after she felt my forehead with her palm....
Writing FeedbackKennyD - Feb 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 24, 2011
|IELTS-visitor/host? who should adapt for cultural differences
10 - Hi Kevin, actually i did write a thread about what i wrote...but i dont know why/how, it was removed...will...
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Jan 25, 2011 / ajit88rai - Feb 24, 2011
|GRE AW issue "Student should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study"
NEW - Thanks in advance about any suggestions! 153"Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should...
Writing Feedbacktonia - Feb 24, 2011 / — -
|Toefl : Teachers should not make their social or political view known to students..
6 - Hello Rich, what are you doing here? I thought I suspended your membership several months ago when you made...
Writing Feedbacks033591 - Feb 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 23, 2011
|people with original ideas are of much greater respect than followers?
NEW - People who have original ideas are of much greater value to society than those who are simply able to...
Writing FeedbackChinh - Feb 23, 2011 / — -
|equal importance; Better to have broad knowledge or specialize in one subject?
Writing Feedbacklatechoco - Feb 15, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 23, 2011
|IELTS:companies rather than government pay for and conduct most scientific research
3 - Use a spell checker: In contemprory sciety society, the issue... that private corporations invest in and administer the...
Writing Feedbackguokaifu - Feb 15, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 22, 2011
|a society's ideas and values revealed by observation of its people---GRE
4 - Well, that much is obvious. Kevin made a correction that turned an incomplete sentence into a complete one....
Writing FeedbackMrTom - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 22, 2011
|About me: Sri Lankan but was born in Australia - my first paragraph
5 - Ethan, I'm so glad you are participating here. You are correct to try to catch the reader's attention. But...
Writing Feedbacksupunja - Feb 14, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 22, 2011
|large amount of money or earn comfortable living
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 21, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 22, 2011
|Follow the customs of the new country you are in, or keep your own customs?
4 - niesaysi I think transitional devices is a good point. I will take it into consideration nook Your...
Writing Feedbacks033591 - Feb 20, 2011 / s033591 - Feb 22, 2011
|modern technology; everyone follows the culture of his own
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 14, 2011 / dolly - Feb 22, 2011
|GRE AW issue 131 The arts reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society
3 - thx very much for your suggestions, and I feel flattered about it, still, there is so much for me...
Writing Feedbacktonia - Feb 19, 2011 / tonia - Feb 22, 2011
|The invention of microwave has brought dramatic changes in the cooking process
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 14, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 21, 2011
|toefl topic: take one additional thing for a trip
Writing Feedbackchocomilk - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 21, 2011
|O level: cloning is a science disaster to come. DYA?
Writing FeedbackChim Can Cook - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 21, 2011
|IELTS - pros and cons; working or traveling before starting university studies
Writing Feedbacks_maryam - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 21, 2011
|GRE-AW-Argument-Secondary infections and muscle strain
4 - Hey, you did a great job with this. Another point that might be important enough to write about is...
Writing Feedbackjackrw - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 21, 2011
|A university education should be provided free of charge to all the interested
3 - You wrote "should be" 2 times in that first sentence. It can be more efficient, like... Oh! I see...
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 21, 2011
|GOOD NEIGHBOR (reliable, trustworthy, with a sense of humor)
3 - Some are vey very positive, while there are others who can really make your life miserable.---That is so true!...
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 21, 2011
|Toefl IBT: "attending college or university is required in our life"
Writing FeedbackJanet0928 - Feb 10, 2011 / Janet0928 - Feb 21, 2011
|We have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society.
4 - Education from family also promote the balance of socialization of children. Parents tell bedtime stories to their children, which...
Writing FeedbackSDtoto - Feb 18, 2011 / pistachiolios - Feb 20, 2011
|IELTS-should universities accept equal number of males/females or not?
4 - Hi, thanks Kevin. I didnt know this fact about my writing skills, but I refrain from copying other people's...
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Jan 28, 2011 / ajit88rai - Feb 20, 2011
|Getting advice from friends who are older than you is more valuable
4 - Use the word standpoint, not standing point. From my standpoint, I prone to regard senior friends' advices more...
Writing Feedbackchris0203 - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 19, 2011
|GRE-AW-Issue-Faculty, practical experiences, working outside the academic world
2 - Faculty members can have first-hand perception and unverstanding understanding of the demand from the industry through their participation in...
Writing Feedbackjackrw - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 19, 2011
|"Children to bring about a better society" - ISSUE 130
Writing FeedbackMary861003 - Feb 12, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 19, 2011
|Exploring outer space, governments should spend as much money as possible?
4 - In addition to the very thorough feedback from Chi-han Huang, I want to add a point that might improve...
Writing Feedbacks033591 - Feb 11, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 19, 2011
|The causes of IMMIGRATION: social reasons, politic reasons and economic reasons.
4 - Another great point to think about is that you do not usually need to use "the" when you talk...
Writing Feedbacknabilkhan - Jan 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 19, 2011
|Students have to study a wide range of subjects, even the ones they don't like.
3 - Here is a great way to improve the first part. Students are going to school to gain knowledge, and...
Writing Feedbackrenga78 - Jan 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 19, 2011
|sacrificial love - I was contented, relieved and in peace.
Writing Feedbackamelia95 - Feb 8, 2011 / amelia95 - Feb 19, 2011
|O level: teenage love with study and emotional development
3 - As the society progresses, a variety of social issues also arises to be faced by... Among those, adolescent...
Writing FeedbackChim Can Cook - Feb 11, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 18, 2011
|Essay IELTS: How can the use of private motor vehicles be reduced?
4 - Thank you so much Jennifer. The corrections you have made are genuine. I am going to type it again...
Writing FeedbackVidyadhar - Feb 16, 2011 / Vidyadhar - Feb 18, 2011
|TOEFL-iBT Giving money as praise for children's high marks, good or bad?
3 - Here is a quick lesson about singular and plural. It's easy. Every parent always wants... All parents want... One...
Writing Feedbackabao1123 - Feb 11, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 18, 2011
|Quest in IELTS: Information provided in the internet can be reliable or trusted?
Writing Feedbackjomse - Feb 9, 2011 / jomse - Feb 18, 2011
|"Although my daughters are twins" - Contrast/Comparison Paragraphs
4 - Pre media.. that seems wrong. You should check to make sure you do not need a hyphen or something....
Writing Feedbackironhawk893 - Feb 10, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 18, 2011
|task 2 ESSAY ABOUT TRADITIONAL FOOD AND FAST FOOD-(IELTS)
NEW - Topic six: In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast food. This is having a negative...
Writing Feedbackswallow512 - Feb 18, 2011 / — -
|I and my sister went to the supermarket together
Writing FeedbackThuHien - Feb 10, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 17, 2011
|Ielts Task2: The problems and Solutions of Using the Internet
2 - I don't think "behind" is the right word to use here: However, there are still many drawbacks behind ...
Writing Feedbackshane - Feb 10, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 17, 2011
|IELTS ESSAY The importance of robots and their influences
3 - Thanks, Sarah and Moon, you are great! Assel, I think you should type the essay again and try...
Writing Feedbacktleuliyeva - Feb 9, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 17, 2011
|GRE_AW issue 131"The arts reveal the hidden ideas of a society"
4 - People say, "In terms of..." In terms of individual, art, not only representing truth, genuineness and beauty, but...
Writing Feedbackgintoki - Feb 9, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 16, 2011
|Well-being of pets (Quest in IELTS)
4 - You need THEM. ... trained animals and kept them as... Do not capitalize there words: ... are Dogs,...
Writing Feedbackjomse - Feb 9, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 16, 2011
|A persuasive essay: 'Death penalty should be abolished' for or against
6 - Why capitalize here? ---> severe Punishment if a Person disobeyed... When you include a little extra phrase in...
Writing FeedbackJovine - Feb 8, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 16, 2011
|"What is Happiness?" - A short essay about Hapiness
Writing FeedbackRamy Amjad - Jan 31, 2011 / Ramy Amjad - Feb 16, 2011
|IELTS-following host country's culture or not?
3 - really? I checked somewhere that there are more than 20 issues with my essay:( but tnx anyway....
Writing Feedbacks_maryam - Feb 15, 2011 / s_maryam - Feb 16, 2011
|Nursing, My First Job Experience (narrative essay)
Writing Feedbackmdipeolu - Feb 8, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 15, 2011
|TOEFL-Internet, good or bad?Each coin has both sides
2 - Internet is one of the most significant achievements of mankind. This facility has transformed the life style in a...
Writing Feedbacklatechoco - Feb 15, 2011 / dolly - Feb 15, 2011
|"Evaluating the teaching effectiveness of the professors" - GRE, Omega
Writing Feedbackshubhi - Feb 6, 2011 / shubhi - Feb 15, 2011
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