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|How is the social or sociable constructed at the site of commerce?
2 - "For example" is strange there, at the start. Maybe this is not the beginning of the paper? A...
Writing Feedbackbeau4u1 - Feb 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 14, 2011
|favor food, why it's so special
Writing FeedbackKathyLala - Feb 4, 2011 / KathyLala - Feb 14, 2011
|schools don't prepare young people for life in the real life.
Writing Feedbackploniite - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 14, 2011
|Rising China and its future: planned or liberal economy?
3 - The size of the government, or the capacity of its intervention defines a country's overall economic policies. or you...
Writing Feedbackjamessuh - Feb 6, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 13, 2011
|GRE Issue: On the value of history
Writing Feedbackkitty__lan - Feb 6, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 13, 2011
|Students to study alone or with a group? Which do you prefer? Reasons?
3 - I Mishal, I recommend typing the essay again now that you see the errors. You can also do this...
Writing Feedbackmishal alzaid - Jan 20, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 13, 2011
|"The true function of a university" - IELTS -education approach of universities.
5 - A University university is a place where ... one aggregates knowledge in a specific field , for...
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Jan 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 13, 2011
|if you do not do this, you will not have a successful life?
5 - Thanks John! I don't have an MSN, but you should join our army of writing friends and help us...
Writing Feedbackzxszmls - Jan 16, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 13, 2011
|Why is my MOM my hero -opinion proof paragraph (reasons, examples)
Writing FeedbackParedesME - Jan 18, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 13, 2011
|IELTS-sports professional can earn a great more money than others
12 - Hehe, great quote =) (the one with the ending). Nah, I'm so NOT over the moon with my english...
Writing Feedbacks_maryam - Feb 9, 2011 / m00ny - Feb 13, 2011
|IELTS: Music was, remains and will be vital part of our lives
6 - @ekologic: I'm not sure about "All walks of life" - never saw it in such context. I'm more keen...
Writing Feedbackekologic - Feb 7, 2011 / m00ny - Feb 13, 2011
|The movie "Troy", Achilles - someone you admire. How have they affected your life?
Writing Feedbackhachillies - Feb 3, 2011 / hachillies - Feb 12, 2011
|GRE Issue: Suggestion on improving the quality of instruction at the college
4 - Well, one great way to improve it would be to try to write 1 sentence that expresses the idea...
Writing Feedbackkitty__lan - Jan 27, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 12, 2011
|Advertisements increase sales volume - not wasting of a company's time or money
Writing Feedbacksongyi88 - Feb 4, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 12, 2011
|Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their teenagers
5 - Sometimes a short sentence is better at the beginning of an essay, because it catches the reader's attention:...
Writing Feedbacktleuliyeva - Feb 4, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 12, 2011
|A study: Not being a native English teacher has been reputed as a drawback?
3 - Maybe you can be clearer here at the start: ...native English speaker had been reputed as a drawback for...
Writing Feedbackmor2ela - Feb 4, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 12, 2011
|Toefl - What makes a good parent?
3 - Thanks karinab, I think I should pay more attention on my grammar Really appreciate your corrections, Kak3521...
Writing Feedbacks80776 - Feb 12, 2011 / s80776 - Feb 12, 2011
|Population Growth: WORLD ISSUES PERFECT PARAGRAPH ON EHRLICH THEORY
3 - thanks :) I really appreciate the help and feedback! hahaha its okay it you help late LOL! at least...
Writing FeedbackMajo - Feb 9, 2011 / Majo - Feb 12, 2011
|TOEFL - domestic cars will not be considered as a reasonable way to work commuting
Writing Feedbackzjs92 - Feb 10, 2011 / zjs92 - Feb 11, 2011
|Rituals and ceremonies help define a culture. ---GRE
Writing FeedbackMrTom - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 11, 2011
|TOEFL - What things a movie tells about its country
5 - Let's use words that are specific.. not "things"...it reflects many characteristics of many things about the country that the...
Writing Feedbackjamessuh - Feb 4, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 11, 2011
|"Soon people who cannot work with computers will be disadvantaged" ESSAY
Writing Feedbackm00ny - Feb 3, 2011 / Chim Can Cook - Feb 11, 2011
|"The role of luck in our success" - When people succeed, is it because of hard work?
2 - with hard working-> hard work they have able -> are able having the luck help ->having luck helps is...
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Feb 11, 2011 / Chim Can Cook - Feb 11, 2011
|IELTS-experience or born traits?which is more effective?
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Feb 4, 2011 / ajit88rai - Feb 10, 2011
|Toelf: Never, never give up (to keep trying and never stop working for your goals?)
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Feb 10, 2011 / 2011bss - Feb 10, 2011
|Describe table - companies advertising expediture IELTS task1
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Feb 3, 2011 / sweetheart87 - Feb 10, 2011
|IELTS-competition or co-operation-which is better?
7 - Thnks Susan, U gave a really good suggestion for writing the last line. :) i hope i will remember...
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Feb 2, 2011 / ajit88rai - Feb 10, 2011
|Essay about Scientific Wonderment- feedback
Writing Feedbackbenshen11 - Feb 7, 2011 / benshen11 - Feb 10, 2011
|Toefl - Technology offer a place to involve children to share their unique ideas
Writing Feedbackstudent7 - Jan 20, 2011 / student7 - Feb 10, 2011
|IELTS- creativity-should it be given freedom or restrictions?
4 - Hi Kevin, thanks for the reply... I will try to keep it in mind not to write such contradicting...
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Feb 6, 2011 / ajit88rai - Feb 9, 2011
|Independent scholar seeks journal paper advice
2 - Hi Lance, it usually works like this: People post great essays on EssayForum so a lot of people can...
Writing FeedbackLector - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 9, 2011
|British and Australian laws - to access to the past criminal record of the defendant?
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 9, 2011
|Compare & Contrast "The Two Friends" - feedback.
4 - Thank you ioannidis007 and KathyLala for your feedback, and point out some weaknesses of the essay... I will fix...
Writing Feedbackiamthien - Feb 9, 2011 / iamthien - Feb 9, 2011
|"fixed punishments for each type of crime?" writing about discuss both view
2 - I found one more error: However, there is increasing in crime rate, this problem does not only in specific...
Writing Feedbackmemory - Feb 2, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 9, 2011
|IELTS-Happiness- factors,definition and importance - Prosperity makes individuals complete
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Feb 2, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 9, 2011
|(flexibility / tactfulness / fairness) important qualities of a good supervisor
Writing Feedbackzaid_86 - Feb 1, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 9, 2011
|'all men are equal before the law' - fixed punishments for each type of crime?
10 - I'm glad you are doing stuff like this, William, because I saw some valuable reviews you have given people....
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Jan 27, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 9, 2011
|"Haruki Murakami: Share with us a few of your favorite books" short answer
Writing Feedbackwendywhy - Jan 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 9, 2011
|Discuss the roles of language and reason in history.
3 - Yes,it makes sense! You write very well, too. Is this a research assignment? Are you supposed to use books...
Writing Feedbacktanyasilva11 - Jan 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 9, 2011
|Life is contain ups an downs. Some people get success in their life but some are unlucky
8 - Sorry for the offense, Alexandra. We are all foreign relative to everywhere except where we are from! I didn't...
Writing FeedbackkhushiGul - Jan 18, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 8, 2011
|'People's jealousy, greed, and supremacy' - People always want something more?
5 - thanks...
Writing Feedbackniki - Jan 31, 2011 / niki - Feb 8, 2011
|Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence
2 - Today , some researchers according their researches believe that the genetic factors are much more influences influential on...
Writing Feedbackhrbagheri - Jan 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 8, 2011
|Ways to spend less money - essay
Writing Feedbacklwshing - Feb 1, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 7, 2011
|"Liber's company mission and financial problems" GRE argument analysis.
4 - Well, ordinarily in academic writing you would be responding to an actual person, and you would know whether it...
Writing Feedbacksaloca7 - Jan 8, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 7, 2011
|Living style, foods, jobs, relations: changes required by our life
4 - Oh, it's so confusing! I cannot easily explain it. I'll write some sentences to help you. These sentences...
Writing FeedbackkhushiGul - Jan 24, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 7, 2011
|Inventive essay about shopping malls.
Writing Feedbackcaf68 - Jan 31, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 7, 2011
|Why go to university? (gaining and gathering knowledge)
4 - After graduating from a high school, many students prefer to continue their study at college or university because of...
Writing Feedbacknabilkhan - Jan 31, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 6, 2011
|An associate system Engineer and BizTalk developer introduction in MBA Interview
5 - I see that you did not capitalize your name or the name of the district. Be sure to capitalize...
Writing Feedbackneophyte - Jan 31, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 6, 2011
|a new holiday on honor of Savitribai Phule
Writing FeedbackkhushiGul - Jan 31, 2011 / khushiGul - Feb 6, 2011
|People who cannot work with computers will be soon disadvantaged.
3 - April and Junwoo Suh, thank you from the deepest of my heart!!! Hope your suggestions and examples will help...
Writing Feedbacktleuliyeva - Feb 6, 2011 / tleuliyeva - Feb 6, 2011
|Essay - Observing & reflecting upon gallery teaching
4 - Great comparison and contrast, great topic sentences... the only thing I don't like is all that info in the...
Writing Feedbackmintchoco - Jan 30, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 5, 2011
|IELTS- capital punishment..necessary or not?
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Jan 30, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 5, 2011
|Toefl essay: Modern technology; single world culture will not be created
2 - Especially, ancient cultural people, they will conserve their civilization to distinguish themselves from others. Loose sentence. The...
Writing Feedbacklittle_wingg - Feb 5, 2011 / shelok - Feb 5, 2011
|Personal essay about myself - my identity
2 - I want to find places to shorten sentence and build intensity in the writing: To many high school students,...
Writing Feedbackwemm3 - Feb 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 5, 2011
|"you can see the wonders" - Season of change
3 - Probably the reason no one helped you is that the help you gave others was like this: "Thats nice....
Writing Feedbackajoye - Feb 1, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 5, 2011
|Don't Judge---Story from my life that teaches a moral (for english class)
Writing Feedbackem2always - Jan 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 4, 2011
|Center Stage; The music has begun
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Jan 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 4, 2011
|IELTS-most effective media for communication
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Jan 31, 2011 / ajit88rai - Feb 3, 2011
|A good son or daughter has a responsibility to obey parents and keep communication with them
2 - I try to give some suggestions for the first 2 paraghaps => Parents sacrifice for their children from...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Feb 3, 2011 / KathyLala - Feb 3, 2011
|"Moving into the land of dream" how to improve my narrative essay
8 - Here are some edits => It was time to say goodbye! => When the airplane arrived in Detroit, we...
Writing Feedback8jhoi8 - Feb 1, 2011 / KathyLala - Feb 3, 2011
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