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|High school experience vs. Cat's eye, Elaine Risely - Personal essay on identity
3 - It's nicer if you do not write "the book," but instead just use italics (if possible) to distinguish it:...
Writing FeedbackDude - Apr 26, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 28, 2011
|IELTS ESSAY , WHY DO MANY PEOPLE SUPPORT THE DEVELOPMENT OF AGRICULTURE ?
3 - Great advice, SI lou! Also, use "Investments in..." The Investment in agriculture has become a widely discussed topic...
Writing Feedbackhoanghai549 - Apr 25, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 28, 2011
|Political and Social Philosophy -Is power the driving force behind politics?
Writing Feedbackthehumannn - Apr 25, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 28, 2011
|Coaches are the best teachers. Agree or disagree with this statement?
6 - Maybe it is okay! It might be my error. Where I live, "coach" usually refers to athletics. So... I...
Writing Feedbackhihbari - Apr 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 28, 2011
|Advantages: Teachers should encourage their students to question everything.
4 - Thankyou so much Kevin , and I will try to write more simple sentences rather than writing complex one....
Writing Feedbackbahareh - Apr 24, 2011 / bahareh - Apr 28, 2011
|Machines have many advantages for us; works faster, better and safer
NEW - Some people like doing work by hand. Others prefer using machines. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and...
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|Ielts Essay: Attitude towards 21 century and the world
6 - There is a widespread held perception that we human beings will be better off in the 21st century... ...
Writing Feedbacksissi1987220 - Apr 24, 2011 / cathyliu - Apr 28, 2011
|Suicide Bombings: Cost Effective Terrorism (Final Paper for Sophmore Year PSU)
2 - Hi Jeanie! It's not good to start with a definition unless the message of your essay has something...
Writing FeedbackJeanieM - Apr 25, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 27, 2011
|People can have many benefits by deciding to eat at home
5 - Great thread! In this spot, you used DESPITE when you were supposed to use UNLIKE: Despite Unlike eating at...
Writing Feedbacknadiap - Apr 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 27, 2011
|Air traffic; more secure fuel and housebuilding with sound insulating walls
Writing Feedbackhihbari - Apr 24, 2011 / hihbari - Apr 27, 2011
|The Advantages And Disadvantages Of The Internet. Addiction?
5 - Thank you so much AmyCarol ,Kwonbeast and EF_Kevin for your corrections and advices, I glad to know you in...
Writing Feedbackpari7 - Apr 24, 2011 / pari7 - Apr 26, 2011
|"moving my eyes over African journals" - what are you passionate about and why?
3 - Awesome edit, Ershad... Reading the journals is my way of life; this has formed the basis for my...
Writing FeedbackPromise - Apr 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 26, 2011
|"to reassure his trust in me" - Do you believe you are a leader? Why or why not.
Writing FeedbackPromise - Apr 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 26, 2011
|The new technology killed our traditions.
5 - Very valid points on your argument, I especially like the part where you said the handcrafted rugs are more...
Writing FeedbackARIA - Apr 23, 2011 / Kwonbeast - Apr 26, 2011
|CLEP Argumentative - Uncomfortable truths attack accepted wisdom
Writing Feedbackdcan - Apr 23, 2011 / dcan - Apr 25, 2011
|Journalist quality - should we trust the journalist?
3 - While some people assert that journalists are unworthy to trust.---This is not a complete sentence. I suppose their behavior...
Writing Feedbackekekek - Apr 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 25, 2011
|Map of Garlsdon Town; industrial and residential sectors and facilities; IELTS
3 - For clarity, use "the" each time: According to the map, the S1 site situated in the peripheral rural...
Writing FeedbackARIA - Apr 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 25, 2011
|Topic: Currently, many firms recruit employees with an equal number of men and women.
2 - Hi Doannga, do you have any questions about Annika's corrections? Do you understand them? I want to make...
Writing Feedbacklovelysmile - Apr 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 25, 2011
|[Ielts] effects of living longer for individuals and society.
2 - However,the influences attended by the consequences of increasing life expectancy are becoming hot-bottom issues because both individuals and society...
Writing Feedbackfindthetime - Apr 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 24, 2011
|<IELTS> should goverment control media crime?
3 - Wow, Katie, this is some good writing... This will definitely set a bad example for the immature audiences who,...
Writing Feedbackekekek - Apr 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 24, 2011
|Mahmud Hesabi - building a statue of a famous person in your country
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Apr 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 24, 2011
|St. Edwards Essay, Sibling and birth order influence
5 - Hi Amena, when you write, don't include anything like this: The relationship between siblings is a very important relationship,...
Writing Feedbackamenanoori - Apr 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 24, 2011
|IELTS; average weight of people; 'changing lifestyle'
5 - Hello; honestly i think you should rewrite the essay. what you wrote is ok but it lacks cohison and...
Writing Feedbacksophialee111 - Apr 22, 2011 / start208 - Apr 24, 2011
|Essay for IELTS: The position of women in society
3 - Right after this sentence, before you end the first paragraph, I think you should add one more sentence....
Writing Feedbackdate_doctor - Apr 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 24, 2011
|Universities bear the responsibility of cultivating and developing interests of students.
4 - Bahareh Thank you for your remarks, bahareh! This essay is my first Issue, and I quote many old ideas...
Writing Feedbackaosi111 - Apr 20, 2011 / aosi111 - Apr 24, 2011
|Better to watch a movie in a cinema or at home? an TOEFL
4 - Quanue, do you notice this great idea from Mahrou? It is a simplification: here is the possibility that t...
Writing Feedbacklqy - Mar 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 24, 2011
|A decision should be popular with others
Writing Feedbackbahareh - Apr 21, 2011 / bahareh - Apr 24, 2011
|"the different types of fuels used to power the United States?" -Classification essay
Writing Feedbackmarzyola1 - Apr 19, 2011 / marzyola1 - Apr 23, 2011
|computer in spite of teachers
Writing FeedbackMarsha2809 - Apr 21, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 23, 2011
|Languages That I Know
5 - In the first paragraph, you gave a lot of information, but I was left wondering what the main idea...
Writing Feedbackalemsada - Apr 20, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 23, 2011
|IELTS: Nowadays there are more opportunities for women than there were in the past
6 - Yes, carefulness is okay. Some people just write "care" to mean carefulness, so you could do that, too. ...
Writing Feedbacktoxic110 - Apr 19, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 23, 2011
|new technology school buildings wouldn't be needed in the future
4 - Hello Ismail and Annika, great work here. I'll add something that you may not know... the word Internet...
Writing Feedbackstart208 - Apr 21, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 23, 2011
|IELTS Essay Practice: People spend more and more time at their work place
Writing Feedbackbiangbiang - Apr 21, 2011 / hihbari - Apr 23, 2011
|Students to take a variety of courses? - AW-No.1-随你-Education
3 - Great corrections, nini!! :-) I'll give some other ideas: When choosing what to learn in the university, more...
Writing Feedbacksplendourchen - Apr 21, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 22, 2011
|IELTS TASK-2 (some avoid changes and others believe changes are good)
4 - pretty good. however, from my perspective, dividing the begining setence in second paragraph into several setences, with linking words...
Writing FeedbackNeeta - Apr 20, 2011 / sophialee111 - Apr 22, 2011
|should a government focus its budget more on very young children education?
4 - You do not need to capitalize the word government: The Government government has been more and more... ...
Writing Feedbackyoyofuny - Apr 20, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 22, 2011
|A lower-paying job with shorter hours that would give you more vacation time
4 - Awesome, Jesus! Thanks so much for this work you did... I see one more correction, and it involves...
Writing Feedbacktiantian - Apr 20, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 22, 2011
|IELTS ESSAY: Children work for money varites from country to country.
Writing Feedbackrrivanh - Apr 20, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 22, 2011
|Grading students and test scores - are they benefitial for improving students?
3 - Many people think that getting high grades is not beneficial for improving the students lives because they have a...
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Apr 19, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 22, 2011
|My mother: Although she is not my whole life, she is still a big part in my heart. Important Person
2 - In my mind, one of the most important people is my mother.---Do you see the small change I made?...
Writing FeedbackMargo - Apr 20, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 21, 2011
|IELTS: technology versus traditional skills and life
Writing Feedbackamyllei - Apr 20, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 21, 2011
|Toefl essay-In a team, those who do not accept others' criticism cannot succeed.
2 - Great job here... not many errors! Think of a person who always convinces others that they are wrong...
Writing Feedbackyoyofuny - Apr 20, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 21, 2011
|About sports and international intension. Patriotic emotions?
Writing Feedbackamyllei - Apr 19, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 21, 2011
|"Claudia, my cousin and best friend" - Describe a person you know
Writing Feedbackbrinastar - Apr 18, 2011 / alemsada - Apr 21, 2011
|Should history be taught in academic life of any student?
15 - 7...i am planning to retake. Consider yourself as a lucky candidate if you have Mr Alex as your speaking...
Writing Feedbackbirdman - Apr 4, 2011 / Real Fog - Apr 21, 2011
|"My friend is called Yuri, he is from Riga." - Describe a Person That You Know
Writing Feedbackneoner - Apr 19, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 21, 2011
|IELTS ; Growing traffic & pollution can be controlled by increasing petrol prices
Writing Feedbacksophialee111 - Apr 19, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 21, 2011
|IELTS-the search for alternative energy cause environmental damage.Agree or disagree?
Writing Feedbacksobin - Apr 14, 2011 / sobin - Apr 21, 2011
|IELTS: Formal exams are the only way to assess a students true knowledge. Agree?
2 - I read Task_2 and I think it started with good introduction, but it still needs more senteces to complete...
Writing Feedbacksobin - Apr 21, 2011 / bahareh - Apr 21, 2011
|Students Should not be in Control of their own Education.
Writing Feedbackbahareh - Apr 18, 2011 / bahareh - Apr 21, 2011
|dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely -Education
Writing Feedbacknini1008 - Apr 11, 2011 / nini1008 - Apr 21, 2011
|'Honesty to self and 'Honesty to others' - is it really important?
Writing Feedbackbestgirl - Apr 19, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 20, 2011
|[IELTS]more young people are leaving school and unable to find jobs after graduation
Writing Feedbackjamliu0229 - Apr 17, 2011 / jamliu0229 - Apr 20, 2011
|The world is like a painting, our existence the penciled outlines and our lives..
8 - I really like your ideas! Your ideas are very deep and different from others, which makes your essay stand...
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Mar 28, 2011 / lol_joyce - Apr 20, 2011
|US marriage and divorce in 1970 and 2000. IELTS Task
Writing FeedbackARIA - Apr 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 20, 2011
|People who have different interest are less likely to be an ally
4 - One may prefer to spend weekends sitting in the couch, eating popcorn and watching movies. The other may...
Writing Feedbackbutterbescotch - Apr 18, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 20, 2011
|Face-to-face communication preferable to those who need to know what the interlocutor's feelings are
Writing Feedbackannieb - Apr 18, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 20, 2011
|TOEFL Essay: Raise children in City or Suburbs?
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Apr 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 20, 2011
|I strongly believe that pets must be part from every family
Writing Feedbacktdamqnova - Apr 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 20, 2011
|[IELTS]should children be made to obey the rules?
4 - I think you should add another sentence to that first paragraph. The thesis statement is missing! Add a sentence...
Writing Feedbackfindthetime - Apr 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 20, 2011
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