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|Toefl Essay Topic: Telecommuting, working in an office?
4 - Hi! The word-structure I uesed last day to you essay is not proper. The structure of your essay is...
Writing Feedbackmuge - Sep 26, 2011 / okme_2008 - Sep 27, 2011
|Good healt care - honours college UH write a research paper with a central thesis
2 - I come from a developing country in Africa, and every day I see people die.---I added the conjunction AND....
Writing Feedbackchigirl - Sep 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Sep 27, 2011
|Toefl----moving to a new place can lose old friends
Writing Feedbackmhh2531 - Sep 27, 2011 / basawang - Sep 27, 2011
|'stricter gun control laws equals more safety?' - G.E.D. Test Essay.
3 - How's this? ... ... Decreasing the availability of firearms will do very little, if anything, to make America...
Writing FeedbackSara_sheppard - Sep 26, 2011 / Sara_sheppard - Sep 27, 2011
|'people have to work and experience new things' - When people succeed
4 - I think the essay is not clear enough to deliver the intended view. As well, it lacks strong reasoning....
Writing Feedbackmonamona - Sep 26, 2011 / Asmita_ - Sep 26, 2011
|A successful person must be something specially, otherwise the fate would not smile at him.
2 - I read first paragraph of your essay, and did some re-wording. I hope you don't mind. I'm not professional,...
Writing FeedbackEminent - Sep 26, 2011 / koei1982 - Sep 26, 2011
|IELTS -- Modern shopping habits change
3 - marucat you wrote 368 words, that's too much, apart from that, it's better than the last one you worte....
Writing Feedbackmarucat - Sep 19, 2011 / wjxjj123 - Sep 26, 2011
|the recipe to success is in fact failure.
NEW - There is perhaps no greater pursuit in life than that of success. Our endeavour, either it be at school...
Writing Feedbackisabellaclaudia - Sep 26, 2011 / — -
|Mistake I Ever Made - suggestions
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|[graph] 'the number of international students in the USA'
2 - The first graphicgraph gives (information about) the quantities of abroad students in the USA between 2000 and 2004 yearswhile...
Writing FeedbackGangster777 - Sep 24, 2011 / MisterWandering - Sep 25, 2011
|THE PUBLIC TRANSPORTATION IS AWFUL IN TOWN
Writing FeedbackSaray007 - Sep 24, 2011 / Zeinab1383 - Sep 25, 2011
|compare the advantages of living in dormitories with living in an apartment
NEW - Choosing a place to live often confuses students at universities. Most of them think living in university or living...
Writing FeedbackHoai Thu - Sep 24, 2011 / — -
|Should English be the official language in Asia?
3 - Ditto what the above said, I think you using different sentence structures would help you the most. Try different...
Writing FeedbackDande - Sep 23, 2011 / Calmador - Sep 24, 2011
|To solve the problems of the present and future,people should review the past.TOEFL
NEW - Do you agree or disagree, in order to solve the problems of the present and the future, people should...
Writing Feedbackpepsi - Sep 24, 2011 / — -
|Key Issues to Make City Better to Live in for The Future
5 - Basically, SAT essay ask your own opinion on certain issue or idea, and therefore it's very important to...
Writing Feedbackmuizzupr - Sep 23, 2011 / Paul Jo - Sep 24, 2011
|Teofl - I support that businesses hire somebody as their employees or workers.
3 - Hi, Some people agree with this statement that businesses should hire employees, but some people disagree with that...
Writing Feedbacksoshianet - Sep 24, 2011 / dumi - Sep 24, 2011
|Children compitition or co-operation?
Writing Feedbackisqun1 - Sep 23, 2011 / isqun1 - Sep 24, 2011
|Toefl - 'the Earth is being damaged through human activities?'
NEW - Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes...
Writing Feedbacksoshianet - Sep 24, 2011 / — -
|"Sunday's meal a delectable delight"
3 - Sunday meals are the best! Yum! In my household Sunday is that long day from church and you come...
Writing Feedbacklevin11 - Sep 22, 2011 / rayganwebster94 - Sep 23, 2011
|"Enjoyment" - The College Years are the Best Time in a Person's Life.
4 - I really like this essay. I think it's helpful to me because, I'm a senior in high school right...
Writing Feedbackbahareh - Sep 21, 2011 / rayganwebster94 - Sep 23, 2011
|O level (Some people say that the Internet does more harm than good.)
Writing Feedbackwraithseeker - Sep 21, 2011 / rayganwebster94 - Sep 23, 2011
|"advantages in groupthink" - Toefl
2 - Dear Mostafa, drawing out its intellectual resources for arriving at a better decision. will not be worry...for making a...
Writing Feedbacksoshianet - Sep 23, 2011 / Dande - Sep 23, 2011
|The young slave boy - Freedom (narrative)
3 - Thanks for the comments! I can see i still have a huge problem with my commas...sobs...(sorry for the parts...
Writing Feedbackclaralw - Sep 22, 2011 / claralw - Sep 23, 2011
|"a holiday overseas" - Letter to your friends - IELTS
Writing FeedbackiCan - Sep 23, 2011 / basawang - Sep 23, 2011
|IELTS- : favorite pastime of people in different countries
Writing Feedbacknguyenminh - Jul 30, 2011 / nguyenminh - Sep 23, 2011
|Should universities accept the equal men and women? -- Ielts Test
Writing FeedbackMai Chu - Sep 16, 2011 / isqun1 - Sep 23, 2011
|'A Lesson I'll Never Forget' - Narrative Essay
2 - I found myself staring at the ceiling; every time I closed my eyes the flashbacks would come back began...
Writing Feedbackmtruninger - Sep 22, 2011 / dumi - Sep 23, 2011
|TOEFL-study history and literature or science and mathematics
4 - Dear Dumi, I searched on the Internet. Some references suggest that "cannot" and "can not" are both...
Writing Feedbacktrochanter - Sep 20, 2011 / basawang - Sep 22, 2011
|Keep analyzing the decisions of the authority to prevent fraud and promote democracy
Writing Feedbacktanvik - Sep 21, 2011 / tanvik - Sep 22, 2011
|IELTS - positive aspects and drawbacks when children engage themselves in work
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Sep 21, 2011 / Geenesh - Sep 22, 2011
|TOEFL- love marriage versus arranged marriage.
Writing FeedbackDande - Sep 21, 2011 / Dande - Sep 22, 2011
|TOEFL - working at home V.S. working in the office
Writing Feedbackfreekyidea - Sep 21, 2011 / soshianet - Sep 21, 2011
|'born in Ikoyi, Lagos Island, Nigeria" - childhood memories
3 - adegbola88 Thanks for the comment Am trying to make a topic outline for my essay, how do i go...
Writing Feedbackadegbola88 - Sep 20, 2011 / adegbola88 - Sep 21, 2011
|IELTS TASK1: Avg daily milk consumption
3 - Dear...I believe your original intention is good, but there are so many gramma errors in your post. And, I...
Writing Feedbackthehot - Sep 21, 2011 / thehot - Sep 21, 2011
|'writing complains" - When people need to complain about a product or poor service
Writing FeedbackIeltsDeamon - Sep 16, 2011 / IeltsDeamon - Sep 20, 2011
|'Even video conference won't help' -TOEFL- Face- to- face communication
3 - Thank Ican and Basawang for your response! I rewrite "Although e-mail is convenient, it often leaves us with...
Writing Feedbacktrochanter - Sep 20, 2011 / trochanter - Sep 20, 2011
|'Thinking like a Gastronomist' - Writing about eating...
2 - Every Saturday of the week my immediate family, which comprises of about ten people, depending on whom is in...
Writing Feedbackarmaanbindra93 - Sep 19, 2011 / l_borras - Sep 20, 2011
|"Cowboys on Ice" - Descriptive/Narrative essay
NEW - Cowboys on Ice As our U-haul crawled down the southern freeway of Minnesota I remember saying to Cowboy,...
Writing FeedbackNMU11 - Sep 20, 2011 / — -
|"Telepathy" - short story for dystopia
2 - Wow! Telepathy, that got me hooked.(I get fascinated about anything that has to do with the human mind) Although,...
Writing Feedbackyulwan - Sep 20, 2011 / Rechy - Sep 20, 2011
|"The Mind Wondering Fields." descriptive essay about a place.
2 - Roe02, I have no experience in any writing competitions, thus I am not qualified to assess your essay....
Writing FeedbackRoe02 - Sep 17, 2011 / basawang - Sep 20, 2011
|IELTS-what factors determine one's value to the society? is it wages?
4 - One of the reasons for my belief is that a high pay does not necessarily generate a positive value...
Writing Feedbackwjxjj123 - Sep 19, 2011 / isqun1 - Sep 20, 2011
|Space travel is important or not -----IELTS
Writing FeedbackIcecreamquest - Sep 16, 2011 / trochanter - Sep 20, 2011
|Restraint in the use of Power impresses people most
3 - @ Justine Syms "There are several examples that construe how the decision to discard the use of power...
Writing FeedbackAsmita_ - Sep 19, 2011 / Asmita_ - Sep 20, 2011
|'Technology and working in front of a computer is a fantastic idea' - IELTS essay
2 - Nowadays, communication has become less difficult because ofdue to technological developmentadvancement. Furthermore, these people canmay lose personal attachment...
Writing FeedbackiCan - Sep 20, 2011 / dumi - Sep 20, 2011
|'evaluate the teachers' performance instead of improving the salary of teachers
Writing Feedbackbasawang - Sep 19, 2011 / basawang - Sep 20, 2011
|ielts - pointless to keep traditional skills alive ?
2 - It is certainly irrefutable that today there has beenare numerous advancements in technology.This includesThese include progress in agriculture,...
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Sep 19, 2011 / dumi - Sep 19, 2011
|The Mosquito: A look into the Teacher's responsibility in a student's everyday life.
2 - While I pondered which teacher had a definite impact on my outlook on education, it would be Mrs. Stidham,...
Writing Feedbackbigmatt267 - Sep 19, 2011 / EF_Susan - Sep 19, 2011
|Reading fiction is more enjoyable than watching movies?
2 - Dear Tank, please take into consideration the other elements in an IELTS test. You have 20 minutes for a...
Writing FeedbackTank - Sep 18, 2011 / peiman - Sep 19, 2011
|IELTS :How fast foods impact on people?
4 - Furthermore, by comparing to (by comparison with ?) traditional meal which was usually need extra efforts on buying ingredients,...
Writing Feedbackthread_c - Sep 14, 2011 / marucat - Sep 19, 2011
|Essay about the government decision on where put money - feedback
6 - EF_Kevin Hi Kevin, really appreciate it that you made useful comments on my writing. As for the below...
Writing Feedbackmarucat - Aug 21, 2011 / marucat - Sep 19, 2011
|[Toefl] essays are better to test students than the objective tests - writing task
Writing Feedbackcombatant - Sep 18, 2011 / combatant - Sep 18, 2011
|Why do you think cross cultural romantic relationship face difficulties?
3 - much better! acutally, i can tell u r adept at varying sentence lengths and patterns. my another sugesstion is...
Writing Feedbacknnene - Sep 17, 2011 / inaustin - Sep 18, 2011
|IELTS-schools should only teach students skill not ethical value?
Writing Feedbackwjxjj123 - Sep 17, 2011 / wjxjj123 - Sep 18, 2011
|Modern Day Serial Killer (descriptive essay -material thing that has changed my life)
2 - Imagine if you could picture each and every person on earth who has died a slow, painful death due...
Writing Feedbackjameszimm1 - Sep 16, 2011 / EF_Susan - Sep 17, 2011
|Music and Arts plays an essential role - discuss
Writing Feedbacksaddam1990 - Sep 16, 2011 / saddam1990 - Sep 17, 2011
|my GRE argument of "Jazz club loan, city of Monroe"--feedback
NEW - This is the first article of GRE argument written by myself, I'm quite at a loss how to develop...
Writing FeedbackKlose_Jun - Sep 17, 2011 / — -
|Essay about learning about past is valuable or not..
4 - However, in my view the past is ...----I added "the" ...valuable, and learning about it helps us in...
Writing Feedbackwinchesters - Sep 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Sep 16, 2011
|Most of the students who take advantage of a good sense of humor are much happier in their life
3 - Hi Mahsa; I found some errors in your essay like; Besides, it shows that this kind of people has...
Writing Feedbackghafarimahsa - Sep 15, 2011 / bahareh - Sep 16, 2011
|OPINION ESSAY - The Usage of Internet = individual paper
NEW - Nowadays, the usage of internet is rapidly spreading. Highly technologies that growing very fast in new generations drive us...
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|Punishment should be fixed or circumstantial ?
2 - Given that the criminal rate increasing considerably in the recent years, Firstly, along with the disappearence of vegue...
Writing Feedbackerica yu - Sep 16, 2011 / Icecreamquest - Sep 16, 2011
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