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|Technology, the social life killer or saviour?
3 - They are not destroying a social network. They are improving the communication capabilities in our social networks. But I...
Writing FeedbackRobD - Dec 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2010
|SAT essay! Where do I see myself when I am 22. Need grammar help.
Writing FeedbackMLE27 - Dec 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2010
|Importance of working conditions? Focus on products or working conditions?
3 - In the first paragraph, the words "benefit" and "product" should both probably have an s at the end. However,...
Writing Feedbackhoangdaochu - Nov 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2010
|It takes a village to raise a child; children education for the community
Writing Feedbacksubhash_ghosh - Dec 13, 2010 / subhash_ghosh - Dec 16, 2010
|Toefl essay:Parents are the best teachers.
2 - the first sentence could be " Parent are best teachers to person instead of people, parent are best teachers...
Writing Feedbackpk1726 - Dec 16, 2010 / tunguoge - Dec 16, 2010
|I will be someone someday as my father wanted me to!
NEW - Tut Gai 11/22/1980 Essays Topic B Under tree classroom My parents were cattle headers and farmers neither of...
Writing Feedbacktunguoge - Dec 16, 2010 / — -
|The thriving Cold Cone Creamery Franchise in California
2 - The speaker avers that Cold Cone Creamery Business will... Also, the statement further prompts people to avail themselves...
Writing Feedbacksubhash_ghosh - Dec 13, 2010 / EF_Susan - Dec 15, 2010
|"the weather seemed more predictable from year to year" - Global Warming Essay
2 - The occurrence of natural disasters has increased, and seasonal weather has become irregular. There are two sides to...
Writing Feedbackdanielle94534 - Dec 13, 2010 / EF_Susan - Dec 15, 2010
|India's Possible Rise in the 21st Century above the West - Globalization Paper
2 - Like the former globalization, it also depends on the cheap labor of Indians, and like it, there is still...
Writing Feedbackjyu104 - Dec 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 14, 2010
|Compare the advantages and disadvantages of media for communicating information
2 - Media per se is a powerful communicating tool for human beings. ---This sentence is obvious, and obvious things are...
Writing Feedbackpsebastian56 - Dec 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 14, 2010
|"Undecided girl can dream" - College essay
NEW - Every seven-year-old girl has a dream. Some want to be princesses, a few may want to be cowgirls or...
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|ILLEGAL ENTRANCE - An Incident From my Life
Writing Feedbackmertak - Nov 25, 2010 / mertak - Dec 13, 2010
|"Does a zoo have any useful purpose?"
5 - azaaza is a good writer, haaa Beside a zoo has educational benefit also it has amusing and entertaining...
Writing Feedbackabdrabou - Dec 4, 2010 / andygu - Dec 13, 2010
|TOEFL: Boys and girls should attend separate schools
Writing FeedbackSiva071 - Dec 1, 2010 / NIBEK - Dec 12, 2010
|"work nowadays is more stressful and less leisurely than in the past" IELTS essay two
10 - psebastian56 However, it does not relive the current stressful working situation that may change the attitude of the people...
Writing Feedbacksisiyunjao - Dec 6, 2010 / sisiyunjao - Dec 11, 2010
|Essay about children's changes in eating habits
Writing Feedbackmelita - Nov 23, 2010 / jennay99 - Dec 10, 2010
|The importance of students' sports activities
3 - However, universities should give more money to students' sports activities than they give to their university libraries. Students will...
Writing Feedbackwhitney - Nov 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 10, 2010
|My Little 'Buddha'
6 - Like Buddha who even didn't speak a word against the pundit,mM y player did not respondkept calm in response...
Writing Feedbackdhunjunikesh - Dec 7, 2010 / dumi - Dec 9, 2010
|"the obesity epidemic in America" - Anthropology Essay
NEW - "I couldn't open up a magazine, you couldn't read a newspaper, you couldn't turn on the TV without hearing...
Writing Feedbackalswn95 - Dec 9, 2010 / — -
|"Where is the Line Defined?" - Argumentative Essay-no OUTSIDE SOURCES!
Writing Feedbackericao2010 - Nov 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 9, 2010
|Reiterate: this is the utopia.
NEW - The concept of an utopia that embedded in my heart is a place that is repleted with the collaboration...
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|"The attraction of New York City" - A meaningful Place
Writing FeedbackKathyLala - Nov 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 7, 2010
|It's neither possible nor desirable to do the same job throughout work lives - IELTS
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Nov 23, 2010 / sweetheart87 - Dec 7, 2010
|what causes students to cheat on the tests?
3 - Hi again...i think, while using the word 'Consequently', you'd better aviod asking questions. In conclusion part you should give...
Writing Feedbackazaaza - Dec 6, 2010 / Bobur - Dec 7, 2010
|People are starving, but money is spent on pets
Writing Feedbacktuanphong892009 - Nov 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 5, 2010
|9/11 and Art Essay: Revise/Edit what i have so far.
2 - Songs were written. Paintings were painted. Poems were recited. Photos and videos were taken. This whole sentence has...
Writing Feedbackcaudet89 - Nov 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 5, 2010
|Importance of One Parent Stay Home with Their Young Children For The First Few Years
2 - Today, young people in every part of the world hope to have successful success in their jobs ....
Writing Feedbackthunguyen88 - Nov 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 5, 2010
|"the percentage of each source of energy used in America" IELTS Writing task 1
NEW - The given two graphs illustrate the percentage of each source of energy used in America during the period of...
Writing Feedbackmoondikasina - Dec 5, 2010 / — -
|About "climate change and Fossil fuels" - what is causing climate change, human role
NEW - Examine the role of one human activity in causing climate change, and discuss how further deterioration may be prevented...
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|Essay about concerns with education; students not learning helpful material- feedback
2 - Education is one of my personal concerns. ----boring first sentence... not much meaning. It is just informative. "I...
Writing Feedbackleesharshukov - Nov 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 4, 2010
|Essay about proving that experience is greater than books. - Feedback
2 - We try to use gender-inclusive sentences, here, so if you are going to address sirs address madams, too!...
Writing FeedbackEssayfreak - Nov 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 3, 2010
|"Forget How to Remember" - College Essay Idea Rough Draft
Writing FeedbackD Kneco - Nov 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 3, 2010
|Some want independence and some prefer to live with thier families ,which you prefer?
2 - You should practice typinf each of these sentences 10 times so that you remember the correct grammar: Nowadays...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Nov 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 3, 2010
|In Barnaul youth will be interested in theatre
2 - Creative group "Project-41", working on base of «Regional palace of youth", has begun preparation of socially significant PR-project "Theatrical...
Writing Feedbacknathalie1912 - Nov 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 3, 2010
|"there is more to life than just reality TV shows" -Argumentative Paper on Television
Writing Feedbackkangi - Dec 3, 2010 / Cloud_Tek9 - Dec 3, 2010
|Drawbacks of unpaid work and recommendations to improve it.
2 - Along with the enthusiasm that a person gets, there may also be existing unfavorable conditions. in line with this,...
Writing Feedbackbrenda - Nov 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 2, 2010
|The advantages of pursuing dreams rather than giving up on them - TEOFL
Writing Feedbackjasminebi - Dec 1, 2010 / vaishali1980 - Dec 2, 2010
|Classify TV programs - classification essay type
2 - 'Entertainment is the most favorite for many people' you can use this sentence as ' Many people watch TV...
Writing Feedbackthaitam - Dec 1, 2010 / vaishali1980 - Dec 2, 2010
|Ielts essay; I believe that companies' changing employees is acceptable.
3 - The fourth paragraph is similar to second one. My suggestion is that you can conbine both in one paragragh....
Writing Feedbackphuocqui - Nov 27, 2010 / riny - Dec 2, 2010
|'younger need thrill in their life' - young people enjoy life more than older
2 - they lost interest in learning new things and experienced about thrill. Older people thinks try to accomplish...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Dec 2, 2010 / riny - Dec 2, 2010
|''The critical analysis of being an international manager'' - compare cultures
4 - The role of an international manager requires involves several requirements. In this essay I will like explain...
Writing FeedbackFaiza79 - Nov 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 1, 2010
|The meaning of success is complex and individuals define it to suit their personal achievements
2 - The genuine meaning of success is complex and individuals define it to suit their personal achievements. Success can simply...
Writing Feedbackmdipeolu - Nov 30, 2010 / kawaiikoinu - Nov 30, 2010
|The knowledge we acquire outside of school is the most important.
2 - Nowadays, there are two opinions concernedconcerning the importance of school. [ Some hold that our most important lessons are...
Writing Feedbackwhitney - Nov 28, 2010 / kawaiikoinu - Nov 30, 2010
|Does the development of technology lead to environmental pollution and energy crisis?
2 - I think your essay is a bit harsh...it sounds like you think science and technology is (maybe a bit...
Writing Feedbackseiya152 - Nov 23, 2010 / elisabeths - Nov 30, 2010
|Filling the Gap: Legalizing Organ Trade (Persuasive Essay)
2 - Only about 20,000 received them that year, while over 7,000 people died when new organs would have saved them....
Writing FeedbackFlying_Pie - Nov 23, 2010 / EF_Susan - Nov 30, 2010
|Déjŕ vu, I did it in reality - boyfriend essay story
5 - okay thanks for your help =D and no thiis wasn't for a collage applicatio it's a personal narrative....
Writing Feedbackbluechick54 - Nov 28, 2010 / bluechick54 - Nov 30, 2010
|Increasing Number of Strays Causes Threat to Shelters and Organizations
3 - Hi Evelyn, you write very well! The solution to your problem is to get more raw material for the...
Writing FeedbackBellaItalia088 - Nov 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 29, 2010
|A new factory will be built in your hometown, do you agree or disagree?
3 - your essay is good but you did not write following a thesis-led. I think you should give more reasons...
Writing Feedbackriny - Nov 29, 2010 / huongvt - Nov 29, 2010
|Raw food vs Cooked food - How's my intro?
13 - That's okay! A lot of people will be able to learn from this thread in the future. Thanks, everyone......
Writing FeedbackA00226270 - Nov 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2010
|"The media has the power to instill ideas" - National/Local Concern Prompt
2 - No need for the comma in the first sentence. The first paragraph is a little off-putting because a...
Writing FeedbackDeadmaster - Nov 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 27, 2010
|Peer pressure - "OUR DESIRE TO CONFIRM IS GREATER THAN OUR RESPECT FOR OTHER OBJECTS"
Writing Feedbacknigeria - Nov 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 27, 2010
|should students have part-time jobs while studying?
3 - This is pretty good! One way to improve your writing is to make a longer intro paragraph and a...
Writing Feedbackcamthangtu - Nov 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 27, 2010
|Getting message from different news resources to understand events under more objective perspective.
10 - Well, it's probably okay. I sometimes say the same things to different people, because sometimes people need the...
Writing FeedbackStridercoo - Nov 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 27, 2010
|'My friend, Park - someone' has taught me more about the importance of life than else
Writing Feedbacktjdduq1213 - Nov 20, 2010 / danado0ona - Nov 27, 2010
|"yeah, i socialize with scum" (anarchic, autistic, messy )
Writing FeedbackHalfred C - Nov 25, 2010 / Halfred C - Nov 27, 2010
|The Effects of Love (A Cause/Effect Paper)
2 - Eighteen years old is not too old for any kind of love, puppy or otherwise. After all, "puppy...
Writing Feedbackcucciola21 - Nov 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 26, 2010
|Government should sponsor to build up museum and theatre .
4 - As to whether government should sponsor on the building of a museum and a theatre, the public holds...
Writing Feedbackwhitney - Nov 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 26, 2010
|Is the ability to tolerate problems as important as the ability to fix them
2 - I'll give some more corrections. Please practice every correction by typing the sentence 10 times. That is the way...
Writing Feedbacksgl - Nov 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 26, 2010
|Alcoholism vs. other addiction - Compare and contrast
5 - I don't think it is helpful to begin the essay with a sentence about addiction types being ample....
Writing Feedbackanb_duck - Nov 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 26, 2010
|Experience of children with divorced parents (proficiency exercise)
NEW - In many years,there has been a growing problem about children with divorced parents experience more difficulties among families not...
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