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|IELTS: some people think building more roads can reduce traffic problems...
4 - I'll give a few more ideas here... I like the "alleviate" suggestion, even though "reduced" was okay: Some...
Writing FeedbackBrookW - Mar 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 31, 2011
|[IELTS] cellphone and Internet are harmful to people health, why we use? how to do?
5 - In the first paragraph, you can improve the clarity of your message by explaining HOW it is "detrimental to...
Writing Feedbackkelp0308 - Mar 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 31, 2011
|A university should invest same money in athletc activities as libraries or not?
2 - the university is a place in which we ... It is sure that there important things or not.---What...
Writing Feedbackcantonistuta - Mar 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 31, 2011
|"TP Club - travelling around the country and abroad"
2 - TP Club was established in 2001 and chaired by Mark Peter. TP club has around one hundred members since...
Writing FeedbackHelpEnglish - Mar 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 31, 2011
|Individual can do nothing to improve environment; only governments and companies can?
3 - Nowadays means now. "Has always been" means "in the past." So... this is contradictory: Nowadays environmental issue has always...
Writing Feedbackfindthetime - Mar 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 31, 2011
|IELTS - humans should be able to use animals for their own benefit?
6 - I suppose your writing is great and it deserves band 7 if considering the suggestions of 'TransferringStu'. BTW,...
Writing Feedbackdranu78 - Mar 13, 2011 / kelp0308 - Mar 31, 2011
|Is the hard drive storage your only concern?
3 - In this essay, I think I have a good idea to improve your straightforward, clear writing style: Add a...
Writing Feedbackkrauser - Mar 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 30, 2011
|Research about Philippines: FILIPINOS ARE A NATURE LOVERS
3 - thank you. I am really flattered from all your comments sir Kevin! You know, your CORRECTIONS serve as my...
Writing Feedbackniesaysi - Mar 25, 2011 / niesaysi - Mar 30, 2011
|It is not only the teacher who teach the student and student's ability is more important to study.
5 - thank you very much for your comment. It was my first experience to put my writing on internet. And...
Writing Feedbackgracejung - Mar 24, 2011 / gracejung - Mar 30, 2011
|Our achievements in the past will motivate us today.
5 - GRE AW? I think should develop the thesis statement, ..sounds like only focus on the point that"yesterday is...
Writing Feedbackvsravan - Mar 28, 2011 / findthetime - Mar 30, 2011
|The Traffic Accident- Free writting- Only Topic.
5 - Thanks dumbdumb; bribe: it was for car accident, after accidents we have 2 choices whether to pay legal money...
Writing FeedbackAhmadmeraj - Mar 29, 2011 / Ahmadmeraj - Mar 30, 2011
|IELTS Essay: About job assignment between men and women
Writing FeedbackBrookW - Mar 26, 2011 / BrookW - Mar 29, 2011
|Behavior of people in the formal organization is influenced by structure, technology
Writing Feedbackatyourservice - Mar 27, 2011 / atyourservice - Mar 29, 2011
|(Internet service and public transportation) - change would make to your home town?
Writing FeedbackY529 - Mar 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2011
|[TOEFL]Daily homework is necessary or not
3 - Yeah, that first sentence has a problem: The topic of whether teachers should give homework to students every day...
Writing Feedbackbluesnow - Mar 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2011
|IELTS Graph: Contribution of selected sectors to the UK economy in the 20th century
3 - This is a very difficult kind of essay to write! I'll offer some ideas: The graph shows changes in...
Writing Feedbacknamleung - Mar 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2011
|TOEFL:Should parents make important decisions for their older children or not?
3 - I think you can strengthen the intro by naming the two things: There are 2 reasons why I disagree...
Writing Feedbacktlnrstw - Mar 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2011
|People are more independent in the modern world? - IELTS
4 - People have different views regarding dependence and independence in the modern world. ----I changed this first sentence so that...
Writing Feedbackfdrik - Mar 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2011
|School board to increase the physical education requirement to three years - CBEST
Writing FeedbackKarla - Mar 8, 2011 / adam20 - Mar 29, 2011
|IELTS TASK 2: Government should build more nuclear power plant as it is eco friendly.
6 - Use a hyphen: well-known Some people assert that atomic power has ... Use "while" in the middle...
Writing Feedbackratree - Mar 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2011
|IELTS about if creative artists can express their ideas in any way they like
4 - Wow, thank you for makingme smarter. This is a very wise observation. I often think about where the...
Writing FeedbackBrookW - Mar 26, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2011
|"Who gives society something of lasting value" - student's response on GRE, ABOUT ART
4 - which otherwise would be too infinitesimal to be described by the public. but meanwhile keeping it in mind...
Writing Feedbacksolitaryreaper - Mar 26, 2011 / butterbescotch - Mar 29, 2011
|position on Arizona Law: support and opposition( one body paragraph for each side).
Writing Feedbackbarabashka - Mar 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2011
|toefl - It is the truth that not all people can do the things they like all the time.
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Mar 26, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 28, 2011
|Need help in writing a better eassy on how to solve gang violence in school
4 - Great corrections here: Violence has increased in our schools within the past four years; more than thirty teachers and...
Writing Feedbackchampion - Mar 26, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 28, 2011
|"The subject of possession and happines" - Toefl writing
3 - The subjects of money and happiness are interesting subjects because there seem to be many contradictory ideas around them....
Writing FeedbackKaixi - Mar 25, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 28, 2011
|it is more important to spend money on art and music
Writing Feedbackz19b89 - Mar 25, 2011 / z19b89 - Mar 28, 2011
|[IELTS] Select students with academic ablity or teach them together?
Writing Feedbackkelp0308 - Mar 25, 2011 / kelp0308 - Mar 28, 2011
|IELTS Task 2: Modern world make us more dependant or independent
4 - Keep that first part simple and clear: In this modernized era, it is unclear whether contemporary circumstances make us...
Writing Feedbackgodhuli - Mar 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 27, 2011
|To read books and to watch TV can help develp imagination and language skills
3 - When different ways forms of entertainment become prevalent, such as book reading and TV watching, people try ......
Writing FeedbackJingf - Mar 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 27, 2011
|the culture of Thailand and China: Compare and contrast
4 - Colander Calander No, it does not seem childish. It seems like the writing of a bilingual person....
Writing Feedbackbenzhu1985 - Mar 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 27, 2011
|"Parents = best teachers; we Human's are also bound by the same Law of Nature" -TOEFL
2 - Don't capitalize animal. Don't capitalize human. These are common nouns, not proper nouns. Stop saying "as per that."...
Writing Feedbacktamalroy1979 - Mar 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 27, 2011
|[TOEFL] A question about teacher`s remuneration
5 - Essay examples in books are written in the same manner, and it is even considered a disadvantage to use...
Writing FeedbackBorislav - Mar 20, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 26, 2011
|"Important truths begin as outrageous, or at least uncomfortable..."
2 - Yes, you should use a spell checker. Google this: online spellchecker. I'll add an apostrophe here: The nature...
Writing Feedbackirs055 - Mar 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 26, 2011
|"My fortunate life" - childhood experience affects to people's life
4 - Sabrina and Kevin, I got you. Thanks for your nice and encouraged comments and your help. Meeting those people...
Writing FeedbackKathyLala - Mar 23, 2011 / KathyLala - Mar 26, 2011
|"For eyes, loser"; Introduction to bullying essay
3 - Yes, four is the number. "For" is a different word. Use a hyphen: "Four-eyes! Loser!" Those are a couple...
Writing Feedbackmiranda14 - Mar 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 26, 2011
|O level: The importance of sports event in Singpapore school
5 - The problem with this sentence is that it should say "succeed in teaching." It is not good to...
Writing FeedbackChim Can Cook - Mar 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 26, 2011
|TEACHER or SELF? I would prefer to learn by myself
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Mar 18, 2011 / sabrinayaa - Mar 26, 2011
|"Keep Yourself a Lifelong Promise - Say "No" to Drugs - an essay on drug abuse
Writing Feedbackzailn - Mar 23, 2011 / zailn - Mar 26, 2011
|"Never, never give up" - Your favorite saying
9 - uh huh. I do understand. I have searched Winston Churchill has said "Never, never, never give up"...
Writing Feedbackprettybear94 - Mar 22, 2011 / prettybear94 - Mar 25, 2011
|IELTS Whether country needs to develop its traditional skills, arts and way of life?
Writing Feedbackjomse - Mar 19, 2011 / jomse - Mar 25, 2011
|I like to study with my teacher rather than studying alone.
3 - Great corrections here. JuimpingJack, please type it again and try to use the corrections. Do you have any questions...
Writing Feedbackjumpingjack - Mar 18, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 25, 2011
|Young people should prefer living in the city.
4 - Great thread, everyone. Thanks! I'll do some grammar corrections. ...because of the many reasons. Plenty of...
Writing Feedbackgowerdhan786 - Mar 18, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 25, 2011
|"Parents are first" - narrative essay
12 - I am asma fiqi, and I have worked with various companies throughout my life. They include St. Jude...
Writing Feedbacklittle sun - Mar 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 25, 2011
|O level: Children today have no proper childhood
Writing FeedbackChim Can Cook - Mar 17, 2011 / Chim Can Cook - Mar 25, 2011
|What is your favorite food to eat? how do you prepare it?
4 - Thanks, everyone. I think future visitors to this thread can learn a lot from you! When we eat...
Writing Feedbackxcom30 - Mar 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 25, 2011
|[Toefl] Some students like classes where teachers lecture
4 - Given the choice between listening to the lecturing done by teachers in class or being in a class where...
Writing Feedbackwreckday - Mar 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 24, 2011
|Persuasive Essay - "Examine what is said, not him who speaks." ~Arab Proverb
3 - Thanks for the feedback! I agree with your statement that the topic was poorly chosen. That is definitely...
Writing FeedbackMiiSTiiCZ - Mar 17, 2011 / MiiSTiiCZ - Mar 24, 2011
|students' competence at all levels of the Malaysian education
6 - Conclusion: My suggestion. Improve teaching method, better trained teachers. Implement workplace experience by students doing certain hours of...
Writing Feedbackno183 - Mar 1, 2011 / Guest - Mar 24, 2011
|Should we give our suggestions regarding to the mistakes our friends made? Toefl IBT
Writing Feedbacksakurasho - Mar 16, 2011 / sakurasho - Mar 24, 2011
|'entering society' - Work/travel between high school and study at university
Writing Feedbackqingsong - Mar 20, 2011 / qingsong - Mar 24, 2011
|Who is responsible for motivating students to learn? TEACHERS?
2 - Hi Inchima the very first thing is to clear up what this essay is for? second, whatever you are...
Writing FeedbackInchima - Mar 23, 2011 / ARIA - Mar 23, 2011
|IELTS Task 2 - Compulsory military service for all countries
4 - hi suyper, here i would like to add that,question is very important.from one of my IELTS teacher i heard...
Writing FeedbackSuYper - Mar 21, 2011 / ratree - Mar 23, 2011
|SAT ESSAY - Underrated vs Underrated
5 - I agree with Kevin, simplify the introduction will make it clearer. Nevertheless, this is simply such a great essay....
Writing Feedbackyolven_lu - Mar 17, 2011 / cathchen - Mar 23, 2011
|Essay about happiness definition and it's effects - 'a kind of emotional feeling'
5 - Hi Kevin, Many thanks to your encouragement, I am a beginner in writing english essay, but with all...
Writing FeedbackBrookW - Mar 19, 2011 / BrookW - Mar 23, 2011
|An IELTS task 2 essay about whether studying history is important
4 - History to some people could be not very interesting, and they believe that studying the subject will not help...
Writing Feedbackenglishlearner1 - Mar 19, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 22, 2011
|'Disease prevention is better than cure' Do you agree or disagree?
5 - Do you understand the corrections dumi made? There is no doubt that taking preventative measures against illness is important.......
Writing Feedbackmouxing - Mar 19, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 22, 2011
|Several short breaks v.s long break in schools
2 - Not so many parents can afford several vacations throughout the year because of the high costs of air fare,...
Writing FeedbackKathyLala - Mar 18, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 22, 2011
|TOEFL: Does Television destroy our bonds with friends and family?
6 - That's always great advice. When you argue, show the opponent and audience that you do understand their reasoning and...
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Mar 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 22, 2011
|Harmful telephones and email? Human's progress is favorable. It's society that causes the problems.
4 - Thank both of you for the constructive criticism. I'll have in mind all your suggestions. By the way, English...
Writing Feedbackxchrisxcore - Mar 16, 2011 / xchrisxcore - Mar 22, 2011
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