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|IELTS: Benefits of students doing extra jobs
4 - Your vocabulary is great, but your writing would be stronger if you eliminated unnecessary qualifiers/adjectives. I also noticed some...
Writing Feedbackbemytthm - Nov 1, 2010 / gracedrift - Nov 2, 2010
|IELTS: The increasing business and culture contact between countries.
6 - You did! That is correct. But it could be much better. You could spend a whole paragraph expressing...
Writing Feedbackadriennelin - Oct 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 2, 2010
|What in our life does have more relevance: the experience or some characteristics we are born with?
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Oct 26, 2010 / sweetheart87 - Nov 2, 2010
|Internet censorship + Mandatory college curriculum - essays for CLEP english comp
2 - Capitalize Internet. Censorship pertaining to the internet is an extremely volatile topic. --- don't begin with a statement...
Writing Feedbackleahh - Oct 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 2, 2010
|Careers, living costs, jobs - life in a city vs. a countryside
Writing FeedbackSharonSian - Oct 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 1, 2010
|What is the best way to pursue happiness? In class essay assignment
Writing Feedbackkiller12125 - Oct 26, 2010 / killer12125 - Nov 1, 2010
|Isuues: Student behaviour at school
NEW - Q:In many countries, schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the cause of this?...
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|"Choosing a house pet and pet responsibilities" - this is a classification essay
Writing Feedbackkrystidavis - Oct 27, 2010 / EF_Susan - Oct 31, 2010
|Vietnamese iconic festival dish
NEW - I would like to introduce with you about New year rice cake (bánh Tét) as Vietnamese iconic festival dish....
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|"News Editors decide what to broadcast on Television" - IELTS writing
5 - These days, news papers has been considered rich form of mass communication. Now News are casted with...
Writing Feedbackhethot - Oct 20, 2010 / riny - Oct 31, 2010
|Government is a necessary evil - Can success be disastrous? - essay help
2 - Undoubtedly, human ought to be success.---a generalzation & change success to successful your intro leaves a lot to...
Writing Feedbackoeglairt - Oct 30, 2010 / em2always - Oct 30, 2010
|media is responsible to create violence in young are u agree or disagree?
Writing Feedbackshakila - Oct 22, 2010 / oeglairt - Oct 30, 2010
|The effect of advertising is limited and not strong enough to influence people's eating habits.
NEW - The effect of advertising is limited to unhealthy eating habits Currently, the trend of advertising explosion seems more...
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|Essay:education, meet the needs of individuals and societies
3 - All in all, education should contain a variety of contents to produce educated people such as... then restate your...
Writing Feedbackqsy - Oct 28, 2010 / adriennelin - Oct 29, 2010
|Smog: causes and solutions
5 - EF KEVIN thank you very much for your comments. as you said there was a word missing there when...
Writing FeedbackThmn - Oct 23, 2010 / Thmn - Oct 29, 2010
|"brutal force by the army and police service" - Essay about Christmas
2 - Use a comma instead of a semi-colon: refurnishing of one's home, while the ... I feel like that...
Writing Feedbackchrometom - Oct 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 28, 2010
|"About my flight and hijackers" - Improving on my narrative essay for O levels
3 - Well you did indeed show good use of language... very impressive. You write very well. I guess...
Writing FeedbackShane Valesquez - Oct 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 28, 2010
|Regret (the graffiti walls in the cell) - manslaughter essay
4 - WOW, is all I can say. The real, raw emotions that come with such a powerful essay was overwhelming...
Writing FeedbackShane Valesquez - Oct 24, 2010 / donkeykong98732 - Oct 28, 2010
|"encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school" - agree?
NEW - In some countries people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting...
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|Should people never be satisfied with what they have? Jane Austine's pride
Writing Feedbackrenyu199014 - Oct 27, 2010 / renyu199014 - Oct 28, 2010
|Dou agree with keeping traditional skills alive?
Writing Feedbackriny - Oct 22, 2010 / riny - Oct 27, 2010
|Innovation and technology" report on advertisement essay
2 - number agree =ment: Innovation and technology; these are the cornerstones of our modern... ...with the associated attributes of...
Writing Feedbackhannahkim91 - Oct 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 27, 2010
|Is the Internet itself bad for students?
2 - First of all, I believe all of you here are quite familiar with the internet.that sounds really awkward what...
Writing Feedbacknhilun - Oct 27, 2010 / midnight - Oct 27, 2010
|Chinese Music, Language and Literature
Writing Feedbackyin - Oct 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 27, 2010
|TOEFL; Judging a person is not an easy task because the human nature is so complicated
4 - This needs a comma: To begin with, the external appearance does not reveal one's exact character and personality, although...
Writing Feedbacklabroy - Oct 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 27, 2010
|"Honoring your parents" - my unexamined belief essay?
9 - You can do it easily, William. I'll tell you the secret: Instead of trying to think of something...
Writing Feedbackkawsneffect - Oct 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 27, 2010
|"heart-ache and identity transformation" - Cbest, negative experience essay
Writing Feedbackbobo4398 - Oct 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 27, 2010
|"a room in the Woodbridge Mental Institute" - The most enjoyable moment
Writing Feedbackmin - Oct 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 26, 2010
|International effort in solving Enviromental problems - My final try before IELTS
2 - Let's put that first sentence together with the paragraph that follows it so that it all becomes one paragraph....
Writing Feedbackzchen1987 - Oct 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 26, 2010
|"Problems with AIDS in poorer countries" - TOEFL Integrated Essay
Writing FeedbackIrrational - Oct 20, 2010 / Irrational - Oct 26, 2010
|Fixed Punishment Vs Discretionary Punishment - Discuss
NEW - Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the...
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|IELTS Compare the pros and cons of following as media for communicating information
NEW - Q: Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you...
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|"It's more than a cup of coffee" - ENG grammar
5 - since I have first experienced the tasty of coffee. it should be ''since i first hd my taste of...
Writing FeedbackTapple20 - Oct 20, 2010 / doyin1 - Oct 26, 2010
|Nature and nurture - are people born for certain talents?
NEW - It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents for instance for sport or music and...
Writing Feedbacksimi - Oct 25, 2010 / — -
|Movies industry has greatly soared up for the recent decades
4 - Think you should change "firstly, secondly..." to "first, second". Secondly, movies can entirely satisfy human being 's desires. ("Human...
Writing Feedbackbemytthm - Oct 18, 2010 / ayida365 - Oct 24, 2010
|Creative Essay of Death Row -- Mice Don't Talk
Writing Feedbackjghobrial - Oct 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 24, 2010
|This is my part of my essay about patriotism and fighting for what you believe in.
Writing Feedbackbarkabarx - Oct 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 24, 2010
|My Struggle to Achieve Greatness: Law School Personal Essay-Looking for feedback
Writing Feedbackcubina - Oct 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 24, 2010
|TOEFL Essay "What single item would you take on a one year trip?"
3 - To start with the reasonsFor some reason , I believe my personal item should be something that can intrigue...
Writing FeedbackIrrational - Oct 23, 2010 / jazzmeen - Oct 24, 2010
|MY ROOM ESSAY (to carry out various leisure activities)
3 - Keep all the verbs in the same "form" in that list of activities: studying, watching, listening, talking, surfing ...
Writing Feedbackmichy81508 - Oct 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 23, 2010
|Is there anything we can do to stop crime?
3 - Education is an essential element in reducing the crime rate in the long run. According to the recent...
Writing Feedbackzchen1987 - Oct 22, 2010 / bakamanju - Oct 23, 2010
|Why You Shouldn't Get Excited on the Golf Course
5 - you should try to catch the readers attention without asking a question in the beginning. maybe at the end...
Writing Feedbackmegasoccer4 - Oct 14, 2010 / hannahkim91 - Oct 23, 2010
|IELTS - Sporting events easing international tensions, releasing patriotic feelings
Writing Feedbackpierre11 - Oct 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 23, 2010
|IELTS writing: should Art be ignored by the government?
4 - I think your essay structure is good enough, you discussed good point of art. 'I would like to...
Writing Feedbackeaglet008 - Oct 21, 2010 / riny - Oct 22, 2010
|TOEFL Essay "Should students be required to attend classes?"
Writing FeedbackIrrational - Oct 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 21, 2010
|ielts essay: what is happiness? I still do not find the answer
2 - I think this essay answers the question, but it seems to lack depth. You address the issue that happiness...
Writing Feedbackiishine - Oct 20, 2010 / akshays1993 - Oct 21, 2010
|Extinct Animals - Essay
2 - In fact, I disagree with idea that animals have been created to serve human beings so that we have...
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Oct 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 20, 2010
|"Christians should be more active" - Does this essay fit the toulmin model?
Writing Feedbackgamhazell - Oct 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 20, 2010
|Essay on Margaret Mead - looking at other cultures to better understand the complexities of human
2 - Paper on Margeret Mead, need sources information Hi, Sarah I am doing my paper on Margeret Mead as...
Writing Feedbacksarahmk - Sep 3, 2007 / sadaf - Oct 20, 2010
|Job with more vacation time but less salary?
4 - Here is some more help: Although the first reason I mentioned above is probably the most important reason,...
Writing FeedbackNUMJMM - Oct 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 19, 2010
|IELTS: giving financial aids to the poor countries is not the way to go
6 - Thanks linying and Irrational for correcting my grammar! Kevin, Thank you for your suggestions! One issue that has...
Writing Feedbackadriennelin - Oct 14, 2010 / adriennelin - Oct 19, 2010
|Topic: watching tv is bad for kids
Writing Feedbackjwoo1111 - Oct 16, 2010 / YPan - Oct 18, 2010
|Be very careful if you are driving in the winter...
Writing Feedbackpompom098 - Oct 17, 2010 / yojo1 - Oct 18, 2010
|'from the top of a skyscraper' - Small town or big city - TOEFL
4 - Hi I think you right about the plural experiences . I misread your sentence and I thought you talking...
Writing FeedbackIrrational - Oct 16, 2010 / RyanVi16 - Oct 18, 2010
|PAPER ABOUT HALLOWEEN (A RITUAL in a SOCIAL-CULTURAL KEY)
Writing Feedbackalicepozzi - Oct 14, 2010 / alicepozzi - Oct 18, 2010
|TOELF Essay "Is it better for children to participate in team sports?"
Writing FeedbackIrrational - Oct 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 18, 2010
|What's important: get up early and programm your works and you will never let yourself to be lazy
Writing Feedbacksolmaz - Oct 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 18, 2010
|IELTS - Globalisation and its effect on world's economy
Writing Feedbackpierre11 - Oct 18, 2010 / Irrational - Oct 18, 2010
|TOEFL-Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are?
5 - Hi, What's more, the most influential advertisements are dependeddependent on famous people (you can even use the word...
Writing Feedbacklinying - Oct 14, 2010 / dumi - Oct 18, 2010
|Important as classes and libraries are for students, health and social skills are also the keys
5 - You've write 335 words. According to the experience of my friends and I, a passage of 400+ words may...
Writing Feedbacklinying - Oct 14, 2010 / jinyangxue - Oct 18, 2010
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