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|Admired characteristic to understand ourselves
6 - Thanks for your help Kevin! @Jhonies Saysi! I have been trying very hard for my writing. I switched my...
Writing FeedbackKathyLala - Mar 5, 2011 / KathyLala - Mar 11, 2011
|"A problem shared is a problem solved" (for TOEFL)
6 - Actually, I think I disagree. I have often been surprised at how much my writing improves when I...
Writing FeedbackBorislav - Feb 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 10, 2011
|Traveling to get job . . Environment is the Victim
5 - This part needs a little change: Firstly, government can provide or increase public transportation and make workers about...
Writing FeedbackMahrooo - Mar 4, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 10, 2011
|"Listening to music and reading" - Things That Inspire Me
2 - Hey, Delilah, this is a very thoughtful critique! Rebenrio, I think you did very well with this! It has...
Writing Feedbackbutterbescotch - Mar 4, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 9, 2011
|Internet is valuable information for everyone, if we know how to use it properly
3 - Nowadays, the Internet plays an... People who have a mobile phone or a computer will be able to...
Writing Feedbackzezaar66 - Mar 4, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 9, 2011
|People in our modern age stay longer than in the past generation
3 - I like the way Keng used the word "stay." It is poetic and cool. But for improving clarity, let's...
Writing FeedbackKeng - Mar 3, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 9, 2011
|Topic: "Is the impact of imported food beneficial or not?"
Writing Feedbackcoronaeffect - Mar 1, 2011 / coronaeffect - Mar 9, 2011
|Contrasting between two jobs (commuting, hours, job type)
3 - In addition, the second job was closer to me. In addition, the second job was closer for me. ...
Writing Feedbackmalakot - Mar 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 8, 2011
|"School Bells " - kindergarten essay
7 - hahahah, you are great. Well, students can do those things, I suppose. However, lately I feel very...
Writing Feedbacktonybtony - Feb 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 8, 2011
|IELTS Whether new buildings should be built in traditional style?
Writing FeedbackShrek Fiona - Mar 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 8, 2011
|(Elephant) the most important animal in your country? Why is the animal important?
Writing FeedbackKeng - Mar 1, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 8, 2011
|Ghost: Is it real?
Writing Feedbackniesaysi - Feb 25, 2011 / bestgirl - Mar 8, 2011
|Narrative Essay: Fun with Elders
4 - => all I could see were the smiling faces (your sentences in past tense, so use "could" instead of...
Writing Feedbackbbish520 - Mar 6, 2011 / KathyLala - Mar 7, 2011
|"to consider the limitation of parents" -Parents are the best teachers?
2 - Others, including me, argue that, although parents could play a key role in children's lives, it's a little hasty...
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Feb 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 7, 2011
|Investing on public transportation is preferable!
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Feb 26, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 7, 2011
|(control / opportunities /compliance) important qualities of a good supervisor (boss)
2 - Try to use those corrections when you type the essay again. Type it again just to practice the correct...
Writing FeedbackKeng - Feb 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 7, 2011
|Understanding, responsible - important qualities of a good supervisor /boss/?
2 - => When a supervisor hires employees, he or she expects from them to do their best at working places....
Writing FeedbackVarbanov - Mar 5, 2011 / KathyLala - Mar 7, 2011
|young people's decision have no influence on the future of the nation
3 - to be much difficult. ---To be very difficult. Well... You work very hard here, so... there is...
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 6, 2011
|Groups or Organizations are an important part of people's lives. Are they important?
5 - Keep it plural: ...new norms and values for a living and apply all of them to the whole community....
Writing Feedbackjoseph240 - Feb 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 6, 2011
|Some people believe in making large amount of money while others don't care about it
3 - Capitalize when you start a sentence. Whereas is one word, no two. Do not capitalize "money" Some people...
Writing Feedbackgeetakaradkhele - Feb 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 6, 2011
|toelf essay- Should going to class at school be optional or required?
4 - Wow, you really got me thinking about this interesting question. It would be kind of interesting to let the...
Writing Feedbackmagicwwh - Feb 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 6, 2011
|Old aged people go to live in homes, who should bear the fee - government or family
2 - You should write small sentences instead of many commas. You should mention clearly introduction and conclusion paragraph about your...
Writing Feedbackmohang - Mar 4, 2011 / vaishali1980 - Mar 6, 2011
|IELTS; Children need to recieve the proper education before engaging in paid work
Writing Feedbackglars908 - Mar 4, 2011 / glars908 - Mar 6, 2011
|Chinas one child policy and the group that is most affected
3 - After the passing of Mao Zedong, the belief of having a large population diminished since China's population had grown...
Writing Feedbackeddiebee323 - Mar 2, 2011 / ukkuma - Mar 6, 2011
|Do you prefer learning by yourself to learning with a teacher?
Writing FeedbackBarrera09 - Feb 22, 2011 / Barrera09 - Mar 5, 2011
|"Technologies not only influence but actually determine social customs and ethics"?
2 - Use "ing"...while overlooking other contributing factors in determining the social customs and ethics, which may play equally, if not...
Writing FeedbackRichardHIT - Mar 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 5, 2011
|Analytical writing: "Education will be truly effective only if individually..."
2 - Well, this is not really about emphasis on quality, is it? It is about specialization. The intro paragraph...
Writing Feedbackkak3521 - Mar 3, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 5, 2011
|Essay about the believe of people on child education - feedback
6 - I see a potential flaw with this essay. You are acting as though one cannot educate the child...
Writing Feedbackalaba2812 - Feb 26, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 5, 2011
|Some people enjoy changes, and they look forward to new experiences. Others not.
6 - After this sentence, do not end the first paragraph right away. Add one more sentence to express what...
Writing FeedbackKeng - Feb 25, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 5, 2011
|(love, care, family) - should pets be treated as family members
4 - From ancient times , human beings have been living in groups because they are social animals. Earlier there...
Writing Feedbackgeetakaradkhele - Feb 26, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 4, 2011
|'money for school tuition'; Teens work while they are still students
4 - In some countries , teenagers have jobs while they are still students. ... obtain from working while studying:...
Writing Feedbackjoseph240 - Feb 25, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 4, 2011
|TOEFL: is it better to take several different kinds of job when you are young?
3 - I, as a young man, agree with the assertion that young people should take several different kinds of job...
Writing Feedbackmercury01 - Feb 25, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 4, 2011
|Is national curriculum best for students?
4 - Thanks, dumi! I'll do the next part: Apparently, national curriculum provides local school students with standard ... ...
Writing FeedbackPsyche1991 - Feb 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 4, 2011
|whether to allocate a huge of money for defense is right policy
4 - Yes, but actually many teachers advise against using words like that in the essay. They say the conclusion...
Writing FeedbackChinh - Feb 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 4, 2011
|the consumption of different product + people are born with certain talents
3 - Yep, this is very strong... only people with excellent command of English can write like this. task 1...
Writing FeedbackIsi Amat - Feb 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 4, 2011
|Hiking safety - exam practice
3 - Thanks, Kelly! Hi Jack, welcome to EF. You have written a great essay. I am going to refer people...
Writing Feedbackjack88 - Feb 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 4, 2011
|teacher should not talk about their own political view , agree or disagree.
3 - Hi Roxina, you have to type it again, and use the corrections dumi provided. They are very good! You...
Writing Feedbackroxina - Feb 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 4, 2011
|"The smell of the library is different" - a descriptive essay (library)
Writing Feedback92angel - Mar 3, 2011 / Mahrooo - Mar 4, 2011
|A Great Nation = the general welfare of all its people
2 - It refers to a notion that what is known as "welfare." For my part, welfare is often indicated by...
Writing Feedbackwujing10 - Feb 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 3, 2011
|What are the causes and solutions of Anti-social actions?
8 - Thanks for your great comment, EF_Kevin! I'm always confused with social topics like this, I should read more and...
Writing Feedbackmegiacodon - Feb 23, 2011 / megiacodon - Mar 3, 2011
|How young people's behaviour is influenced by their peers
5 - I agree with Kevin.You have great idea there, but in my opinion, I find your essay having plenty of...
Writing FeedbackRoma - Feb 22, 2011 / cathchen - Mar 3, 2011
|SAT, example of a realistic person? - Optimism vs Realism
Writing Feedbackcathchen - Feb 22, 2011 / cathchen - Mar 3, 2011
|SAT essay, can we fuse the ideas or just choose one side when offered the choice?
Writing Feedbackcathchen - Feb 22, 2011 / cathchen - Mar 3, 2011
|"Photography and Soccer as My Helpful Hobbies" Write about hobbies something you have
3 - ...aided me in my pursuit of photography and soccer. One of mine my hobbies assisted me in photography....
Writing Feedbackyasinb - Feb 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 2, 2011
|"to increase my levels of physical activities" - behavioral modification paper
2 - Hello! First of all, I feel as though you could make your topic paragraph grab the readers attention...
Writing Feedbackhello12345 - Mar 2, 2011 / EF_Susan - Mar 2, 2011
|"death penalty is applied unfairly and randomly" pros and cons of the death penalty
3 - It deters murderers to do from committing more crimes in the future, because they would lose their lives and...
Writing FeedbackZubaida - Feb 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 2, 2011
|Which kind of roommate would you prefer? (American roommate)
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Feb 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 2, 2011
|O level: Leadership. Necessiity of nurturing leadership in everyone
Writing FeedbackChim Can Cook - Feb 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 2, 2011
|The effectiveness of teachers and classrooms - Urban Prep Fellowship
2 - ...still have the zeal and enthusiasm to press forward and teach!---So far, this has a lot of energy and...
Writing FeedbackSatterfield2006 - Feb 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 2, 2011
|Hero paper.. "Sometimes even our heroes get hurt"
Writing Feedbackashleynicole12 - Feb 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 2, 2011
|TOEFL - owing to the development of technology we live in a better life than out ancestors
5 - Do you know about 'active voice' in writing? Look at the difference: People's lives have been changed in many...
Writing Feedbackaqz951 - Feb 19, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 2, 2011
|PRICELESS MOMENTS - TOEFL Older people enjoy their life more than young people
4 - Few weeks ago, when I took IELTS, we had 60 mins for two tasks. Somehow, I managed to "survive"...
Writing Feedbackmocak - Mar 1, 2011 / m00ny - Mar 2, 2011
|Many students educate themselves abroad - it's parents' decision or enthusiasm over living overseas
Writing Feedbackjoseph240 - Feb 19, 2011 / joseph240 - Mar 2, 2011
|(the social processes) My teaching philosophy of museum teaching
4 - I prefer avoiding phrasal verbs in essays, but surely you can use it. Also, (as you probably noticed) word...
Writing Feedbackmintchoco - Mar 1, 2011 / m00ny - Mar 2, 2011
|corporal punishments to students
Writing Feedbackjomse - Feb 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 1, 2011
|Toefl- Should school buy computers or books? Both are indispensible in our lives
Writing Feedbacks033591 - Feb 15, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 1, 2011
|Essay about the E-learning according to teachers - feedback
Writing Feedbackmani_ok7 - Feb 17, 2011 / mani_ok7 - Mar 1, 2011
|China, TOEFL-iBT integrated writing- Macro Polo
Writing Feedbackminnamiue - Feb 25, 2011 / minnamiue - Mar 1, 2011
|Reflection essay (argument considering the use of the organic foods)
2 - ...are safer and healthier more safety and healthy than conventional foods. It is interesting so far! I...
Writing Feedbacknayayoumi - Feb 26, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 28, 2011
|An education is a life choice - "Educational institutions vs fields of study"
Writing Feedbackkgw - Feb 26, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 28, 2011
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