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|fun and entertainment; "Playing games is important for both adults and children"
4 - Look at the advice that I just gave here: essayforum.com/writing-3/think-skill-person-order-succeed-modern-world-10049/ You write very well in English, and...
Writing FeedbackPoojasugandhi - Nov 6, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 8, 2009
|Think of a skill that a person should have in order to succeed in modern world.
3 - In my opinion, the most important skill to be successful in today's world is the ability to keep oneself...
Writing FeedbackPoojasugandhi - Nov 7, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 8, 2009
|Can happiness be defined? What factors are important in achieving happiness?
5 - Thanks a lot Kelvin for taking time out to read my essay and i greatly appreciate your comments. ...
Writing Feedbackwest - Nov 3, 2009 / west - Nov 8, 2009
|Reflection - a brief summary of high school life
Writing Feedbackjdesharnais - Nov 7, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 8, 2009
|Should higher education be available to all students?
3 - Nowadays, education is socialized largely, so everyone has many opportunities for learning. People discuss whether high education should be...
Writing Feedbackhtd2410 - Nov 7, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 8, 2009
|Higher education should open free to all students or only excellent students?
6 - This is some great collaboration, here, everyone! Here is some more help: Nowadays, education is one of most...
Writing Feedbackvothiha - Nov 6, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 8, 2009
|Jobs for teenagers is one of the most discussed topics in our society'
6 - I think your essay is too simple you should choose more complex and valuable words, and, as you say,...
Writing FeedbackJanhavi - Nov 6, 2009 / silver_bullet - Nov 8, 2009
|SAT; Competition let people to be successful?
Writing FeedbackHarmonSa - Nov 5, 2009 / HarmonSa - Nov 7, 2009
|[TOEFL]Renewable resources of energy or traditional resources of energy
8 - When people ask whether or not renewable resources of energy will soon replace the traditional resources ofsuch as fossil...
Writing Feedbackidvision - Oct 31, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Nov 7, 2009
|happiness definition and factors influence in achieving happiness - consensus of opinions
6 - thanks poojasugandhi. as i said my english is bad and i cannot point out my own mistakes, could u...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Sep 30, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Nov 7, 2009
|the teacher are responsible for motivating students to learn
3 - Thanks Christina! Those are good corrections. Here are some more: Self-motivated students may be more effective and...
Writing Feedbackltb12356 - Nov 6, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 7, 2009
|endangered animals - toefl 48
4 - Claire C Winston Churchill once said:Never,never,never,never give up. I think he only said : 'Never,never,never give up.' ('never'.3)...
Writing FeedbackClaire C - Nov 4, 2009 / sung_tung - Nov 7, 2009
|My favorite English teacher in my life
Writing Feedbackwww6798 - Nov 4, 2009 / www6798 - Nov 7, 2009
|[TOEFL] 'unforgettable time' - Childhood is the happiest time of people's life
4 - @orlando: thank you so much. your feedback is very useful to me. To answer your question, in my native...
Writing Feedbackyin - Nov 6, 2009 / yin - Nov 6, 2009
|TOEFL essay large firm and small company - higher income in a large one
8 - Lots of students will face such a dilemma -- the decision to work either in a large company or...
Writing Feedbackrmli - Nov 3, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 6, 2009
|The Influence of Natural Magic to Modern Science - Concise? Sentence Flow?
2 - Well, the first sentence is in rough shape. How about this: Natural magic had an impact on science, and...
Writing FeedbackShellburger - Nov 5, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 6, 2009
|SHOPPING OBSESSION; Have we become addicted to shopping?
Writing FeedbackKalindNP - Nov 5, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 6, 2009
|What person from the past would you like to meet?
Writing FeedbackPoojasugandhi - Nov 4, 2009 / Poojasugandhi - Nov 6, 2009
|Beowulf, the theme of mortality
2 - It looks like you need to do a paragraph break, perhaps just before "In this story"...that will give closure...
Writing Feedbackflyingseahors3 - Nov 5, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 6, 2009
|Subjects such as art, music, and drama should be a part of every child's basic education
4 - In your essay, Although both groups think they are right? There should not be question mark. They both are...
Writing Feedbackamir6584 - Nov 4, 2009 / Poojasugandhi - Nov 6, 2009
|[TOEFL] Reasons to attend university or college; 'higher hierarchy in society'
Writing Feedbackyin - Oct 30, 2009 / yin - Nov 6, 2009
|newspaper is going to die in the near future due to popularity of the internet?
3 - Thanks Darius, that is some great work! This essay is good! It does not have many mistakes... ...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Nov 4, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 5, 2009
|Toefl writing about "agree or disagree"
Writing Feedbacksusan323 - Nov 3, 2009 / susan323 - Nov 5, 2009
|Should people let their feelings guid them?
4 - Yes, that's right. The thesis should go right at the end of that short first paragraph you have. Now,...
Writing FeedbackHarmonSa - Nov 4, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 5, 2009
|'Financially a better choice' - Rogerian Argumental essay On Wal-Mart
2 - Like for any big corporation, Wal-Mart often faces lawsuits and accusations ; for... Wow, many people would disagree...
Writing Feedbackdjon_md - Nov 3, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 5, 2009
|Not Easily Broken: An Examination of Friendships(english essay)
2 - ...That is what Amir is thinking before he commits the sins against his friend... I really like how...
Writing Feedbackdbom17 - Nov 3, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 5, 2009
|"People just keep changing"; What motivates people to change? For SAT
5 - Your first sentence is great!! Ha ha, your cool personality is reflected in your comments before the essay....
Writing FeedbackHarmonSa - Nov 3, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 5, 2009
|"a helpless laboratory mouse in the US schools" - College Essay
6 - haha, you are welcome. I'm also new to this forum, registered only 2 days earlier than you. I think...
Writing Feedbackgcsm04523 - Nov 4, 2009 / HarmonSa - Nov 5, 2009
|45 min CLEP essay: "Should acts of hate be criminalized?"
Writing Feedbackcelesteshimizu - Oct 31, 2009 / celesteshimizu - Nov 4, 2009
|TOEFL ESSAY--- The most important characteristic a friend should have
2 - I think you should tell the reader that your friend enabled you to complete the problems by teaching you....
Writing FeedbackHellgreeting - Nov 2, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 4, 2009
|Arguementative/Persuasive essay on camping
2 - How about "camping can take many forms" instead of "definitions?" Camping to one person can mean seclusion in...
Writing Feedbackbrianw - Nov 1, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 4, 2009
|Non-academic subjects should be removed from school. Agree or not?
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Nov 3, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Nov 4, 2009
|The View out my Widndow and what it means
2 - If you want to talk about meandering, use commas: As I meander into the kitchen, I glance through...
Writing Feedbackperejdam - Nov 1, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 3, 2009
|My friend recommended me to read "The Great Blue Yonder"
2 - This is so good! However, you seem to be using yonder incorrectly. Google it. I think it refers to...
Writing Feedbackcryingpiggy - Nov 1, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 3, 2009
|Does music pay a important role in people's life?
2 - I particularly enjoyed reading this essay because I myself am a musician and understand where you're coming from :)...
Writing Feedbackmandyhhhhhhhh - Nov 3, 2009 / rechungp - Nov 3, 2009
|sending criminals in jail or offering them education & job training
3 - Thank you Kevin. I deeply appreciate your modification and advice.The next article, I will try my best to avoid...
Writing Feedbackmandyhhhhhhhh - Oct 31, 2009 / mandyhhhhhhhh - Nov 3, 2009
|argumentative journal : "Being a Victim of American Popular Culture" -feedback
Writing Feedbackdinda - Oct 30, 2009 / dinda - Nov 2, 2009
|'demand for comprehensive talents' - People attend college or univ. for a reason
2 - I'd like to say that, you organize this essay very well and the 1st and 2nd paragraphs of the...
Writing Feedbackfuhuanluck - Nov 2, 2009 / Hellgreeting - Nov 2, 2009
|TOEFL: doing a part time job?(agree or disagree)
Writing Feedbackfuhuanluck - Oct 30, 2009 / fuhuanluck - Nov 2, 2009
|Ode to a nightingale by John Keats
2 - ...and thoughts by using multiple techniques different ways . It looks like you need one more sentence in...
Writing Feedbacklazord - Oct 30, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 1, 2009
|Poetry Analysis Essay: Dylan Thomas- "Do Not Go Gently into That Good Night"
Writing FeedbackRod_Farva - Oct 30, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 1, 2009
|"Human needs..": Disagree or agree.
Writing FeedbackFloria_ran - Oct 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 1, 2009
|The knowledge from books and knowledge from experience are, in fact, two diffrent stages of learning
Writing Feedbacklucidmanner - Oct 29, 2009 / lucidmanner - Nov 1, 2009
|Should Euthanasia be legalized?
16 - There are simple MLA formats that you can google online it helped me a whole lot when writing my...
Writing Feedbackjohnnylin_24 - Oct 20, 2009 / jaimeealexis - Oct 31, 2009
|A licence to Write ?
12 - I lived some years in Bethesda, near Washington DC. My neighbor had a very cynical attitude towards Indians and...
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Sep 19, 2009 / Rajiv - Oct 31, 2009
|Changes in the world in the coming century?
Writing Feedbackvothiha - Oct 27, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Oct 30, 2009
|[TOEFL]Parents are the best teachers? Yes, they know their children better
2 - This is not really a mistake, but I'll just make a suggestion: From my point of view, I agree...
Writing Feedbackyin - Oct 30, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Oct 30, 2009
|Food preparation became more convenient than it used to be
Writing FeedbackMNA - Oct 29, 2009 / MNA - Oct 30, 2009
|TOEFL - prefer large or small company? Large - stable jobs and fine salaries
5 - it is a contrast essay, so your structure is wrong. mention both merits and demerits , besides what overweighs...
Writing FeedbackAnly - Oct 16, 2009 / fuhuanluck - Oct 30, 2009
|"television programme production essay" Introduction feedback.
2 - And that's the problem, right there. Your essay so far is vague and wordy, instead of specific and...
Writing Feedbackkors88 - Oct 28, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 29, 2009
|take up the endangered animals' habitat - toefl essay
Writing FeedbackLapland - Oct 27, 2009 / brood910 - Oct 29, 2009
|How to give a presentation with ease and confidence?
3 - Thank you for your praise. I know the language is my largest barrier that prevents me from stating my...
Writing Feedbackvothiha - Oct 26, 2009 / vothiha - Oct 29, 2009
|Contrast viewpoints of the author and the lecturer about using cell phone
5 - tuanlnc have a hard look the reasons cause accidents and should not focus only on using cell phone. >>>...
Writing Feedbacktuanlnc - Oct 21, 2009 / vothiha - Oct 29, 2009
|I have to write an essay on both "The Storm" & The Story of an Hour"
3 - hardwork...
Writing FeedbackmrsArias - Oct 28, 2009 / killerwind - Oct 29, 2009
|Personal Essay- A leader is who I became
2 - Nice logical flow. That's good. In the first sentence--I don't think countries are serviced, but served. Also, 911...
Writing Feedbackvbdesichick - Oct 28, 2009 / EF_Stephen - Oct 28, 2009
|TOEFL IBT: SCHOOL EDUCATION OR SELF STUDY (CONTRAST)
4 - It's better. The idea is clearer this time. Admittedly independent study is more convenient. However, principles, communication and cooperation...
Writing Feedbackfuhuanluck - Oct 26, 2009 / litingjiao - Oct 28, 2009
|Rice contribution essay - 'my experience and ability to seek solutions'
2 - Here is the good way to use a colon: ...lived in three different countries: China, New Zealand and...
Writing Feedbackblubunny5 - Oct 26, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Oct 28, 2009
|Eating at Home or at a Restaurant? I prefer HOME
8 - Try rereading your essay and fixing some of your spelling mistakes. It looks to me like you kind of...
Writing Feedbacksaadatyar - Oct 11, 2009 / juliat cung - Oct 27, 2009
|"TV is a such idiot box."; INFLUENCE of TV and MOVIES on people's behavior
9 - you can use the good dictionary to check grammar errors by yourseft and the option of Word Window by...
Writing Feedbackalina967 - Oct 22, 2009 / vothiha - Oct 27, 2009
|Brave New World and Today's Societal Parallels
5 - @mattsaysfierce- I would certainly hope you turned yours in! I am in your class and I stayed home today...
Writing Feedbackdonfilipe - Oct 27, 2009 / donfilipe - Oct 27, 2009
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