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|The Effect of Global Warming, is it changing our life?
Writing Feedbackarashvet - Feb 20, 2011 / arashvet - Feb 28, 2011
|It's better to have peace than prevailing war
4 - Long sentences are long. Try breaking down your ideas into more swallowable bits. Once you broach the 20 word...
Writing Feedbackniesaysi - Feb 28, 2011 / kgw - Feb 28, 2011
|From Russia To America (a narrative essay)
8 - Well, you have to take the best from each and condense it, refine it. That is how the process...
Writing FeedbackVictoria - Jan 18, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 28, 2011
|The mass media: TV, radio and newspapers, have great influence on people's ideas
5 - Thanks Susan...
Writing FeedbackChinh - Feb 21, 2011 / Chinh - Feb 28, 2011
|Olevel: Internet/Computer harm or not?
Writing FeedbackChim Can Cook - Feb 6, 2011 / Chim Can Cook - Feb 28, 2011
|Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study.
4 - Use "parallel structure" Is it better for students to question what they are taught than accepting to accept...
Writing FeedbackSDtoto - Feb 21, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 28, 2011
|"Dominican Republic and grades" - descriptive essay about a personal experience
Writing Feedbackeve13 - Feb 23, 2011 / eve13 - Feb 27, 2011
|Comic / book / film / theater / radio / TV - the most effective media communication?
2 - This is hard to read, because you did not always capitalize the first word of sentences. From the...
Writing Feedbackosveh - Feb 25, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 27, 2011
|IELTS-should teenagers learn all school subjects/focus on one subject
4 - Yep, Dumi is great. Hey, do you have questions about the corrections? Are you able to type the essay...
Writing Feedbackkikotan - Feb 20, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 27, 2011
|Tuition's hike shouldn't be implemented in some state universities.
3 - I'm not sure what the beginning of this is supposed to say... Low of tuition! Should it say ......
Writing Feedbackniesaysi - Feb 20, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 27, 2011
|To better the society off, people need to watch over the decisions that their leaders are making.
3 - However, it is always important for people to point out the misleading because sometimes society progresses when things are...
Writing FeedbackLauratwilight - Feb 20, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 27, 2011
|Students usually love a teacher with humor - he is closer to his students and teaches better
4 - Great suggestions here. You should challenge yourself! Try to type the essay and use Kathy's corrections. If you make...
Writing Feedbackeating105 - Feb 19, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 27, 2011
|'young have longer lifetime left' - young people or old people enjoy life better
3 - Yes, put a space after periods, commas, and all other punctuation. Good question! Here is a quick lesson...
Writing Feedbackdodoboy0324 - Feb 19, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 27, 2011
|Schools should fund the classes and extracurricular activities with the same money
Writing FeedbackEmilyLee - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 27, 2011
|"Information described as 'factual' - skepticism" - GRE Analytical Writing
Writing Feedbacksilentwf - Feb 19, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 27, 2011
|TOEFL: Why do you think people attend college or university? 'It opens the door'
5 - Hi Sabrina, I'm practicing with the CDs from the TOEFL-Textbooks. I am not sure if it is okay...
Writing FeedbackJonity - Feb 24, 2011 / Jonity - Feb 27, 2011
|THE CAVE- Creative Writing
2 - The only sound to be heard was the constant and monotonous dripping of the wet patch on the roof....
Writing FeedbackEdzo - Feb 25, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 26, 2011
|"Be Weary of their Expectations" - a draft, persuasive essay about expectations
4 - This seems like a terrible thing to say after Kathy probably spent 20 minutes helping you. And your comment...
Writing FeedbackSunRa93 - Feb 19, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 26, 2011
|Undergraduates should have part-time jobs
3 - ...students surveyed working part-time jobs. Some people oppose to letting undergraduates' have part-time jobs, since they... ...
Writing Feedbackanhducht_o0o - Feb 19, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 26, 2011
|Universities are centers of growing scientists and produce the science
5 - thank you:)...
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Feb 18, 2011 / mahrou - Feb 26, 2011
|Different choices - Working in group or Working independently ?
Writing Feedbackanhducht_o0o - Feb 18, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 26, 2011
|SPECIALISTIC SUBJECTS v A RANGE OF SUBJECTS IN UNIVERSITY
Writing Feedbackswallow512 - Feb 18, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 26, 2011
|"wisdom" that old people have - Knowledge gained from books or from experience?
Writing Feedbackkarinab - Feb 9, 2011 / Zakia15 - Feb 26, 2011
|Important skill a person should learn in order to successful in the world today?
Writing FeedbackKeng - Feb 17, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 26, 2011
|'Important from medical point of view' - Pets should be treated like family members
3 - Notice the two sentences you put together as one run-on sentence: They have their own way to express their...
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 21, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 26, 2011
|Seek the Truth; do not believe in something simply because an authority says so
3 - Comma: Hitler believed his people were the superior race, that the Aryans were the best, and told his countrymen...
Writing Feedbackishigaki - Feb 17, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 26, 2011
|Toefl essay- It's better to marry someone who is similar to you or different from you
Writing Feedbackidrofrance - Feb 15, 2011 / idrofrance - Feb 26, 2011
|Better documentary tool: Video camera vs written docs
3 - Hi, I will look into the corrections that you have suggested. Thank you so much for your suggestions. :)...
Writing FeedbackVVR - Feb 23, 2011 / VVR - Feb 25, 2011
|Daydreaming Experience Paper
4 - Rottencandy, what a great username! Well, I think you should change all the "you" to "I" It's manipulating things...
Writing Feedbackrottencandy - Feb 17, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 25, 2011
|Whom in your country would you choose to build a statue for?
3 - Use rightly to modify a verb, not a noun. ...as a righteous candidate, because she is good-hearted, modest, and...
Writing Feedbacks033591 - Feb 17, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 25, 2011
|Television promotes propaganda and it destroyed the communication among friends and family?
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Feb 9, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 25, 2011
|Some people believe that a college or university education should be available to all
2 - I like the "first, second, third" structure you used for the essay. That keeps the reader focused on the...
Writing FeedbackKeng - Feb 16, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 25, 2011
|Parents can give everything to their children. They understand them more than anyone else does.
5 - Hey, it is true that there are some small errors, but you have to also remember that writing is...
Writing Feedbackthaitornadoes - Feb 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 25, 2011
|toelf essay- Reading fiction (such as novels and short stories) is more enjoyable
NEW - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Reading fiction (such as novels and short stories) is more...
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Feb 25, 2011 / — -
|toelf-A transportation vehicle that has changed people's lives.
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Feb 14, 2011 / sabrinayaa - Feb 25, 2011
|Museums are the buildings that preserve objects of importance
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 14, 2011 / iamthien - Feb 25, 2011
|Descriptive Essay: Description of a Flood
6 - Thesis statment: The college Presidents ar talking about making the lowering the drinking age 18 years old.Everbody know that...
Writing FeedbackEdzo - Feb 4, 2011 / kastro28 - Feb 25, 2011
|Every generation of people is different in important ways. How about your generation?
7 - Thank you so much...just do not restrict your ideas...let them follow..Thats what i have learned.Keep reading and writing, that...
Writing Feedbackjoseph240 - Feb 24, 2011 / dolly - Feb 24, 2011
|Women Should not Choose Abortion Persuasive Paragraph
3 - Wow did not know about that last statement pretty harsh. Thanks for the feedback it's appreciated....
Writing Feedbackironhawk893 - Feb 21, 2011 / ironhawk893 - Feb 24, 2011
|Competitive children admire the sense of fulfillment therefore they are always trying to be better.
6 - ...childrens' characters and future lives . Besides, they will hold future responsibilities for a country. ( I changed...
Writing Feedbacks_maryam - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 24, 2011
|The socialization of children determines the way of society development
4 - What do you mean? It's a sentence you copied from another essay? You should change some words to...
Writing Feedbacklcnk - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 24, 2011
|Role of biomedical research play in your future.
2 - "Take an aspirin to alleviate your fever," said my worried mother after she felt my forehead with her palm....
Writing FeedbackKennyD - Feb 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 24, 2011
|IELTS-visitor/host? who should adapt for cultural differences
10 - Hi Kevin, actually i did write a thread about what i wrote...but i dont know why/how, it was removed...will...
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Jan 25, 2011 / ajit88rai - Feb 24, 2011
|GRE AW issue "Student should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study"
NEW - Thanks in advance about any suggestions! 153"Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should...
Writing Feedbacktonia - Feb 24, 2011 / — -
|Toefl : Teachers should not make their social or political view known to students..
6 - Hello Rich, what are you doing here? I thought I suspended your membership several months ago when you made...
Writing Feedbacks033591 - Feb 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 23, 2011
|people with original ideas are of much greater respect than followers?
NEW - People who have original ideas are of much greater value to society than those who are simply able to...
Writing FeedbackChinh - Feb 23, 2011 / — -
|equal importance; Better to have broad knowledge or specialize in one subject?
Writing Feedbacklatechoco - Feb 15, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 23, 2011
|IELTS:companies rather than government pay for and conduct most scientific research
3 - Use a spell checker: In contemprory sciety society, the issue... that private corporations invest in and administer the...
Writing Feedbackguokaifu - Feb 15, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 22, 2011
|a society's ideas and values revealed by observation of its people---GRE
4 - Well, that much is obvious. Kevin made a correction that turned an incomplete sentence into a complete one....
Writing FeedbackMrTom - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 22, 2011
|About me: Sri Lankan but was born in Australia - my first paragraph
5 - Ethan, I'm so glad you are participating here. You are correct to try to catch the reader's attention. But...
Writing Feedbacksupunja - Feb 14, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 22, 2011
|large amount of money or earn comfortable living
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 21, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 22, 2011
|Follow the customs of the new country you are in, or keep your own customs?
4 - niesaysi I think transitional devices is a good point. I will take it into consideration nook Your...
Writing Feedbacks033591 - Feb 20, 2011 / s033591 - Feb 22, 2011
|modern technology; everyone follows the culture of his own
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 14, 2011 / dolly - Feb 22, 2011
|GRE AW issue 131 The arts reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society
3 - thx very much for your suggestions, and I feel flattered about it, still, there is so much for me...
Writing Feedbacktonia - Feb 19, 2011 / tonia - Feb 22, 2011
|The invention of microwave has brought dramatic changes in the cooking process
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 14, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 21, 2011
|toefl topic: take one additional thing for a trip
Writing Feedbackchocomilk - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 21, 2011
|O level: cloning is a science disaster to come. DYA?
Writing FeedbackChim Can Cook - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 21, 2011
|IELTS - pros and cons; working or traveling before starting university studies
Writing Feedbacks_maryam - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 21, 2011
|GRE-AW-Argument-Secondary infections and muscle strain
4 - Hey, you did a great job with this. Another point that might be important enough to write about is...
Writing Feedbackjackrw - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 21, 2011
|A university education should be provided free of charge to all the interested
3 - You wrote "should be" 2 times in that first sentence. It can be more efficient, like... Oh! I see...
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 21, 2011
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