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|IELTS- The freedom of expression, no government restrictions
5 - Here is a run on sentence. It needs a conjunction: This is because human rights are acknowledged by society,...
Writing Feedbackriny - Oct 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 9, 2010
|What do people do and think when they decide to do shopping? (Essay for LLI class)
2 - === Nobody can deny the importance of shopping's effect on people's daily lives . Although shopping has become...
Writing Feedbackdmonkey - Nov 2, 2010 / EF_Susan - Nov 7, 2010
|Educational Success - view on single-sex education essay
Writing Feedbacksheikh_mohamed - Oct 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 7, 2010
|SAT essay: Can success be disastrous?
2 - 1)When one becomes successful,he or she becomes haughty and arrogant 2)Success is about setting your goals,making life what you...
Writing FeedbackMLE27 - Nov 4, 2010 / Kimayu - Nov 7, 2010
|Help-is-needed-Essay about Traffic jams- Causes and Solutions
5 - Although there are some causes leading to aggravating traffic congestion, but effective solutions to alleviate the crowd are still...
Writing Feedbackshaaw - Oct 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 7, 2010
|The Passage - "don't know if it's fluent and adhesive"
3 - hey kev! thanks for ur comment...sorry i took so long to reply. thank you for the suggestion. i...
Writing Feedbackjcan - Oct 15, 2010 / jcan - Nov 6, 2010
|City or village - what is better?
3 - This style of writing has something special about it. It really carries my attention along. In my view,...
Writing FeedbackTaniad - Oct 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 6, 2010
|IELTS: Paying more money is the only motivation to make employees work harder...
Writing Feedbackadriennelin - Oct 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 6, 2010
|Human needs for farmland, housing and industry are more than saving land
4 - Dumi made a good correction here, especially at the beginning. Here is a way you could use "contemporary if...
Writing Feedbackwkp - Oct 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 5, 2010
|"percentage change in average house prices + no job, no life" - IELTS essay
Writing Feedbackanarkia - Nov 5, 2010 / bemytthm - Nov 5, 2010
|Topic: In your opinion what factors contribute a good employee.
2 - first of all, i don't like the introduction "nowadays, most of people are working for a company" i think...
Writing Feedbacktoteri - Nov 5, 2010 / danado0ona - Nov 5, 2010
|"Nurture strongly influences early human development". Discuss.
4 - The innate factor might hashave been determined The newborn have the more sensitive senses the newborn's...
Writing FeedbackVivian ice - Oct 19, 2010 / riny - Nov 5, 2010
|Laws should not be rigid. Instead, they should be flexible enough .......
3 - Laws are formed for the benefit of the people living in the country. It is therefore t heir responsibility...
Writing Feedbackpcube - Oct 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 4, 2010
|Education: compare and contrast state-run and privately-owned
NEW - Hi everyone please help me improving my IELTS writing. Having a good education is one of the most important...
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|Responsibility for the products safety: CLEP English composition practice essay
3 - Super! Thank you, this is really helping me to formulate a plan for tackling the actual essay prompt. The...
Writing Feedbackleahh - Oct 24, 2010 / leahh - Nov 4, 2010
|Checkmate, pawns, troops, bishop, queen, strategy - essay
Writing Feedbackcamucros - Oct 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 3, 2010
|Maintaining Individualism - Informal Essay
2 - Hi Tyler, I think you meant to use "conforming" here: Therefore, it is possible to gain success without...
Writing Feedbackyumyum242 - Oct 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 3, 2010
|Identifying with the villain, a figure who wasn't a hero
3 - Can ----> will or Could ---> would but not can---> would If people are prohibited from exploring for that...
Writing Feedbacknavalava - Oct 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 2, 2010
|Hawaii and Georgia - life comparison. Idea about conclusion?
2 - Be careful... it seems like you are calling Georgia and Hawaii cities when they are states. Later on in...
Writing Feedbackvsam - Oct 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 2, 2010
|IELTS: Benefits of students doing extra jobs
4 - Your vocabulary is great, but your writing would be stronger if you eliminated unnecessary qualifiers/adjectives. I also noticed some...
Writing Feedbackbemytthm - Nov 1, 2010 / gracedrift - Nov 2, 2010
|IELTS: The increasing business and culture contact between countries.
6 - You did! That is correct. But it could be much better. You could spend a whole paragraph expressing...
Writing Feedbackadriennelin - Oct 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 2, 2010
|What in our life does have more relevance: the experience or some characteristics we are born with?
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Oct 26, 2010 / sweetheart87 - Nov 2, 2010
|Internet censorship + Mandatory college curriculum - essays for CLEP english comp
2 - Capitalize Internet. Censorship pertaining to the internet is an extremely volatile topic. --- don't begin with a statement...
Writing Feedbackleahh - Oct 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 2, 2010
|Careers, living costs, jobs - life in a city vs. a countryside
Writing FeedbackSharonSian - Oct 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 1, 2010
|What is the best way to pursue happiness? In class essay assignment
Writing Feedbackkiller12125 - Oct 26, 2010 / killer12125 - Nov 1, 2010
|Isuues: Student behaviour at school
NEW - Q:In many countries, schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the cause of this?...
Writing Feedbackriny - Nov 1, 2010 / — -
|"Choosing a house pet and pet responsibilities" - this is a classification essay
Writing Feedbackkrystidavis - Oct 27, 2010 / EF_Susan - Oct 31, 2010
|Vietnamese iconic festival dish
NEW - I would like to introduce with you about New year rice cake (bánh Tét) as Vietnamese iconic festival dish....
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|"News Editors decide what to broadcast on Television" - IELTS writing
5 - These days, news papers has been considered rich form of mass communication. Now News are casted with...
Writing Feedbackhethot - Oct 20, 2010 / riny - Oct 31, 2010
|Government is a necessary evil - Can success be disastrous? - essay help
2 - Undoubtedly, human ought to be success.---a generalzation & change success to successful your intro leaves a lot to...
Writing Feedbackoeglairt - Oct 30, 2010 / em2always - Oct 30, 2010
|media is responsible to create violence in young are u agree or disagree?
Writing Feedbackshakila - Oct 22, 2010 / oeglairt - Oct 30, 2010
|The effect of advertising is limited and not strong enough to influence people's eating habits.
NEW - The effect of advertising is limited to unhealthy eating habits Currently, the trend of advertising explosion seems more...
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|Essay:education, meet the needs of individuals and societies
3 - All in all, education should contain a variety of contents to produce educated people such as... then restate your...
Writing Feedbackqsy - Oct 28, 2010 / adriennelin - Oct 29, 2010
|Smog: causes and solutions
5 - EF KEVIN thank you very much for your comments. as you said there was a word missing there when...
Writing FeedbackThmn - Oct 23, 2010 / Thmn - Oct 29, 2010
|"brutal force by the army and police service" - Essay about Christmas
2 - Use a comma instead of a semi-colon: refurnishing of one's home, while the ... I feel like that...
Writing Feedbackchrometom - Oct 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 28, 2010
|"About my flight and hijackers" - Improving on my narrative essay for O levels
3 - Well you did indeed show good use of language... very impressive. You write very well. I guess...
Writing FeedbackShane Valesquez - Oct 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 28, 2010
|Regret (the graffiti walls in the cell) - manslaughter essay
4 - WOW, is all I can say. The real, raw emotions that come with such a powerful essay was overwhelming...
Writing FeedbackShane Valesquez - Oct 24, 2010 / donkeykong98732 - Oct 28, 2010
|"encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school" - agree?
NEW - In some countries people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting...
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|Should people never be satisfied with what they have? Jane Austine's pride
Writing Feedbackrenyu199014 - Oct 27, 2010 / renyu199014 - Oct 28, 2010
|Dou agree with keeping traditional skills alive?
Writing Feedbackriny - Oct 22, 2010 / riny - Oct 27, 2010
|Innovation and technology" report on advertisement essay
2 - number agree =ment: Innovation and technology; these are the cornerstones of our modern... ...with the associated attributes of...
Writing Feedbackhannahkim91 - Oct 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 27, 2010
|Is the Internet itself bad for students?
2 - First of all, I believe all of you here are quite familiar with the internet.that sounds really awkward what...
Writing Feedbacknhilun - Oct 27, 2010 / midnight - Oct 27, 2010
|Chinese Music, Language and Literature
Writing Feedbackyin - Oct 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 27, 2010
|TOEFL; Judging a person is not an easy task because the human nature is so complicated
4 - This needs a comma: To begin with, the external appearance does not reveal one's exact character and personality, although...
Writing Feedbacklabroy - Oct 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 27, 2010
|"Honoring your parents" - my unexamined belief essay?
9 - You can do it easily, William. I'll tell you the secret: Instead of trying to think of something...
Writing Feedbackkawsneffect - Oct 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 27, 2010
|"heart-ache and identity transformation" - Cbest, negative experience essay
Writing Feedbackbobo4398 - Oct 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 27, 2010
|"a room in the Woodbridge Mental Institute" - The most enjoyable moment
Writing Feedbackmin - Oct 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 26, 2010
|International effort in solving Enviromental problems - My final try before IELTS
2 - Let's put that first sentence together with the paragraph that follows it so that it all becomes one paragraph....
Writing Feedbackzchen1987 - Oct 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 26, 2010
|"Problems with AIDS in poorer countries" - TOEFL Integrated Essay
Writing FeedbackIrrational - Oct 20, 2010 / Irrational - Oct 26, 2010
|Fixed Punishment Vs Discretionary Punishment - Discuss
NEW - Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the...
Writing Feedbacksimi - Oct 26, 2010 / — -
|IELTS Compare the pros and cons of following as media for communicating information
NEW - Q: Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you...
Writing Feedbackriny - Oct 26, 2010 / — -
|"It's more than a cup of coffee" - ENG grammar
5 - since I have first experienced the tasty of coffee. it should be ''since i first hd my taste of...
Writing FeedbackTapple20 - Oct 20, 2010 / doyin1 - Oct 26, 2010
|Nature and nurture - are people born for certain talents?
NEW - It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents for instance for sport or music and...
Writing Feedbacksimi - Oct 25, 2010 / — -
|Movies industry has greatly soared up for the recent decades
4 - Think you should change "firstly, secondly..." to "first, second". Secondly, movies can entirely satisfy human being 's desires. ("Human...
Writing Feedbackbemytthm - Oct 18, 2010 / ayida365 - Oct 24, 2010
|Creative Essay of Death Row -- Mice Don't Talk
Writing Feedbackjghobrial - Oct 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 24, 2010
|This is my part of my essay about patriotism and fighting for what you believe in.
Writing Feedbackbarkabarx - Oct 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 24, 2010
|My Struggle to Achieve Greatness: Law School Personal Essay-Looking for feedback
Writing Feedbackcubina - Oct 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 24, 2010
|TOEFL Essay "What single item would you take on a one year trip?"
3 - To start with the reasonsFor some reason , I believe my personal item should be something that can intrigue...
Writing FeedbackIrrational - Oct 23, 2010 / jazzmeen - Oct 24, 2010
|MY ROOM ESSAY (to carry out various leisure activities)
3 - Keep all the verbs in the same "form" in that list of activities: studying, watching, listening, talking, surfing ...
Writing Feedbackmichy81508 - Oct 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 23, 2010
|Is there anything we can do to stop crime?
3 - Education is an essential element in reducing the crime rate in the long run. According to the recent...
Writing Feedbackzchen1987 - Oct 22, 2010 / bakamanju - Oct 23, 2010
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