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|Narrative: an exciting protagonist in Toy Story 2.
2 - The story is built around the protagonist in that the protagonist is always taking the initiative. ------This is a...
Writing Feedbacksoul9 - Sep 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 27, 2010
|TOEFL; Decisions should be made alone or not
Writing Feedbackjag - Sep 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 27, 2010
|a one-page essay (how you relax after getting home from school or work.)
Writing FeedbackZubaida - Sep 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 27, 2010
|Malaysia, Philippines, USA - Biography essay... am I on the right track?
Writing Feedbackkmango - Sep 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 27, 2010
|UNEDUCATED Vs EDUCATED (WHO TEACHES WHO?)
7 - I agree...people learn from experience as well as education, so obviously uneducated people CAN teach educated people. Google...
Writing Feedbackupul - Sep 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 27, 2010
|Luxury goods market is on the decline: GRE argument essay
2 - The argument argues...this doesn't sound right. How about 'The argument is that...? that due to the declining state...
Writing Feedbackradwa - Sep 24, 2010 / EF_Susan - Sep 26, 2010
|Creative Writing Narrative - Academic Decathlon
2 - I'm in the virtual presence of greatness. Here are some ideas for you: Neither one of us paid...
Writing Feedbackaremmegs - Sep 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 26, 2010
|A broad essay assignment called "Who Are We?" (antidepressant medication, depression)
3 - "Who are we, as patients or participants in our medical communities?--- for this, you would write a report about...
Writing Feedbackdropbows90 - Sep 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 26, 2010
|IELTS essay/ describing the information in the two graphs below
2 - Maria, thanks for doing this! Ana, I think this is the kind of essay that should help you improve...
Writing Feedbackpendar - Sep 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 26, 2010
|compare team sports and individual sports
2 - "Let" is okay. "Enable" is better. In addition,team sports make enable us to know lots of abilities. --- actually...
Writing Feedbackdaini219 - Sep 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 26, 2010
|My Writing Soul: Literacy Narrative Assignment First Draft
Writing Feedbackhalogenious7 - Sep 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 26, 2010
|"Success is a journey, not a destination" -extended definition essay
Writing Feedbackgingerbbyluv23 - Sep 24, 2010 / ahchong - Sep 26, 2010
|Students should study alone or in organized groups? IELTS writing task pratice.
Writing Feedbackcicely - Sep 19, 2010 / cicely - Sep 26, 2010
|Home school vs Traditional school. Which would you prefer?
Writing FeedbackKathyLala - Sep 21, 2010 / KathyLala - Sep 25, 2010
|COMMUNICATION TECHNOLOGY AND TRANSPORTATION; sensationalize the gnawing anxiety
2 - The irreversible proliferation of technological advancement in the field of telecommunication and travel paves the way for a modern...
Writing Feedbackshofa_nefertete - Sep 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 25, 2010
|FAILED MARRIAGE AND DIVORCE; What are the causes of such separation?
5 - Aside from that, lust and infidelity bloom on both partners since one cannot or might not fully suffice as...
Writing Feedbackshofa_nefertete - Sep 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 25, 2010
|toefl: the best criterion for selecting a person to train others
4 - Yep, I agree. Move on to your next challenge. You are already prepared for the toefl. If this essay...
Writing Feedbacksuve - Sep 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 25, 2010
|Can computer replace teacher?; IELTS Writing Part 2
8 - I think it is important, though, to practice typing the correct ways. When you practice typing, speak the...
Writing Feedbacktom_shen - Sep 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 25, 2010
|The choice of studying at home by using technology or studying at school?
3 - This issue of selecting the option of studying at home or the option of studying at school is not...
Writing Feedbacksugarycandy - Sep 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 25, 2010
|Working for a large company - training, work exposure & networking opportunities
2 - ...receive better exposure in contrast to the exposure in a small company. When the organization is large, they...
Writing Feedbackjag - Sep 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 25, 2010
|TOEFL;close friends vs casual friends
Writing Feedbackrosh - Sep 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 25, 2010
|EFFECTS OF INDUSTRIALIZATION TO ENVIRONMENT AND ECONOMY
Writing Feedbackshofa_nefertete - Sep 21, 2010 / shofa_nefertete - Sep 25, 2010
|Digital textbooks vs Textbook
12 - Yes, I understand that. I wrote "all messed up" because I did not understand it when you had...
Writing FeedbackKathyLala - Sep 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 24, 2010
|IELTS: CAPITAL PUNISHMENT TO CONTROL VIOLENCE AND CRIMES? Yes, it is important
4 - I strongly affirm with my resounding agreement with the establishment of capital punishment to eradicate the increasing occurrences of...
Writing Feedbackshofa_nefertete - Sep 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 24, 2010
|Veteran of Domestic Wars: I need some critique here.
3 - I think this sentence should be changed so that it specifies the experience and gives a little hint...
Writing FeedbackTizma - Sep 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 24, 2010
|Happy is difficult to define. What factors are important to achieve happiness?
3 - Hi Duy, After looking at what Zubaida has written about what you wrote in your essay, I certainly...
Writing Feedbackanhduy_tran - Sep 24, 2010 / mea505 - Sep 24, 2010
|Essay _ How will Vietnamese diet change in the next 50 years?
4 - Thanks Megan and Kevin for advices. It is quite boring and I am trying to re-phrase to make it...
Writing Feedbackngcanh - Sep 14, 2010 / ngcanh - Sep 24, 2010
|IELTS ESSAY, how three countries (USA, UK and Malaysia) deal with dangerous waste
Writing Feedbackpendar - Sep 24, 2010 / anhduy_tran - Sep 24, 2010
|'no government restrictions'; Creative Artists vs Freedom of Expression
3 - Personally, I think you should reform your essay to be more academic. Your introductory paragraph had better introduce about...
Writing FeedbackVY NGUYEN - Sep 9, 2010 / anhduy_tran - Sep 24, 2010
|IELTS essay, It is unfair to have children engaged in some kind of paid work
5 - One person works on the project. Two people work on the project. When there is only one person/thing, the...
Writing Feedbackpendar - Sep 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 23, 2010
|Students' academic performance strongly reflects their teachers' teaching performance.
8 - Yeah, I think this kid could pass a test with even higher standards. This is solid English writing....
Writing Feedbackpanninggold - Sep 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 23, 2010
|effect of choosing wrong major in owns life
NEW - hi, can you read my topic and send feedback :) Everybody choose something when days come.Especially student must...
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|"a rusty old chain on tree" descriptive essay, help w/ introduction, conclusion,title
3 - Someone who's never lived in my house might think I have an ordinary back yard.--- I fixed the...
Writing Feedbackantitherockstar - Sep 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 23, 2010
|TOEFL: MONEY is not necessarily be the most important aspect of a job always!
2 - Hi Diluni! The best way to lengthen it (and I am assuming you are talking about the conclusion)...
Writing Feedbackupul - Sep 23, 2010 / mea505 - Sep 23, 2010
|"How, parents, talk to novice and expert children, history museum" - article critique
4 - Yes, if you learn anything here let it be the importance of a topic sentence. Actually, when I looked...
Writing Feedbackgreenswing - Sep 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 22, 2010
|IELTS Writing CO2 emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union
2 - There are some errors on punctuations at the same time. This lacks major trending on the bar graph. The...
Writing Feedbackpendar - Sep 22, 2010 / shofa_nefertete - Sep 22, 2010
|Reflection about my 2nd month writing course; I'd like to get support
3 - Dear Pamela I am a student in english and I need more practise too. However, I revised your last...
Writing FeedbackPampieri - Sep 21, 2010 / pendar - Sep 22, 2010
|Factors contributing to job satisfaction of adults at work
Writing Feedbackcarolamores - Sep 19, 2010 / carolamores - Sep 21, 2010
|Education and scientific researches in developing vs. industrialized counties
Writing Feedbackpendar - Sep 20, 2010 / sharkondiet - Sep 21, 2010
|compare the american and somalia wedding edit this essay
NEW - I when to one of my friend wedding and I was see the different American and Somalia wedding. I...
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|Everyone would benefit from taking more exercise do you agree?
Writing Feedbackn_tina59 - Sep 19, 2010 / mea505 - Sep 21, 2010
|The teachers should be adequately compensated for their hard labor, skills, commitment and sacrifice
Writing Feedbackdil - Sep 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 21, 2010
|Friend for Life: writing class
Writing Feedbacktanhung106 - Sep 12, 2010 / KellyBarbirgirl - Sep 21, 2010
|A teacher is the one who guides the child how to live a successful life; Parents
Writing FeedbackGeorgesebastian - Sep 21, 2010 / dil - Sep 21, 2010
|"I am a loaf of bread" - Unique Personal Essay: Wanted
5 - Yep, great job here... great variation of sentence length, and it is just such a cool metaphor. The word...
Writing Feedbackmneale324 - Sep 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 21, 2010
|Memorable people that influenced you (my grandmother) - Cbest writing
3 - During our life time we all have encountered some memorable people that influenced .In fact,I grew up in a...
Writing Feedbackconcord123 - Sep 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 20, 2010
|The co-workers should believe in fellowship. Some important characteristics of a co-worker - Toefl
5 - Therefore he always left office sharp on time without giving any consideration to whether the work had been finished...
Writing Feedbacksuve - Sep 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 20, 2010
|Isn't it worth to try to find out what more things wait for us on the other side
4 - Thanks, Shannon Martin & Kevin. I made careless mistakes. Thank you for your advice. It has been great...
Writing Feedbackbrlee82 - Sep 18, 2010 / brlee82 - Sep 20, 2010
|Illustration Essay - "A Look Into My Life Through Obstacles" - feedback
4 - Thank you Susan and Kevin for your suggestions! Your help and input are very much appreciated :)...
Writing FeedbackLaramie - Sep 17, 2010 / Laramie - Sep 20, 2010
|My Favorite Holiday is Eid Al-Fitr
4 - Yes, in that case, you are correct. It should read: my twenty-one-day-old baby. Again, your essay was very...
Writing FeedbackZubaida - Sep 19, 2010 / mea505 - Sep 20, 2010
|university students required to attend classes?; it should be their decision
6 - Hello. Here's my two-cents. =) In order to have a substantial essay, you need to have balance and...
Writing Feedbacksoccon36 - Sep 17, 2010 / idasuhaila - Sep 20, 2010
|In my view studying in a group is a better method than studying on your own.
Writing Feedbackdil - Sep 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 19, 2010
|"addicted to something addictive" - It is just a Daily Journal
4 - You certainly are right. Your journaling is as meaningful and significant as anyone's writing about anything. I'm glad...
Writing Feedbackeastspringkim - Sep 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 19, 2010
|Happiness is a state of mind; Realizing Happiness
4 - People from all walks of life try to achieve happiness through different methods. Happiness is a state of mind...
Writing Feedbackasokapalama - Sep 15, 2010 / asokapalama - Sep 19, 2010
|"brave heroes", English GCSE Creative Writing about Anything
3 - i like the concept behind you essay. i feel like susan as also made the necessary corrections...
Writing FeedbackMerkeysa - Sep 16, 2010 / ginny2345 - Sep 19, 2010
|My shoulder and my friend - journal writing
3 - Since yesterday my shoulder has been appropriately operating, which means that whenever I try to use my shoulder to...
Writing Feedbackeastspringkim - Sep 17, 2010 / susu - Sep 18, 2010
|Advertising encourages people to buy things or not
3 - I suggest rewriting this sentence. It does not take a stance on the issue. Saying it is subject...
Writing Feedbackkal - Sep 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 17, 2010
|A narrative essay -First time I experienced an earthquake- Feedback
9 - Ana, Now that you have a number of critiques and suggestions concerning your essay, why don't you take...
Writing Feedbackarubi - Sep 3, 2010 / mea505 - Sep 17, 2010
|TOEFL---Parents should help determining the future
12 - I wish to appreciate you for sharing this essay because I am also preparing for TOEFL and the writing...
Writing Feedbackryutei133 - Sep 7, 2010 / eastspringkim - Sep 17, 2010
|(SAT essay)ARE there heroes who will be remembered forever?
Writing Feedbackstranger4ever - Sep 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 17, 2010
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