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|Getting advice from friends who are older than you is more valuable
4 - Use the word standpoint, not standing point. From my standpoint, I prone to regard senior friends' advices more...
Writing Feedbackchris0203 - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 19, 2011
|GRE-AW-Issue-Faculty, practical experiences, working outside the academic world
2 - Faculty members can have first-hand perception and unverstanding understanding of the demand from the industry through their participation in...
Writing Feedbackjackrw - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 19, 2011
|"Children to bring about a better society" - ISSUE 130
Writing FeedbackMary861003 - Feb 12, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 19, 2011
|Exploring outer space, governments should spend as much money as possible?
4 - In addition to the very thorough feedback from Chi-han Huang, I want to add a point that might improve...
Writing Feedbacks033591 - Feb 11, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 19, 2011
|The causes of IMMIGRATION: social reasons, politic reasons and economic reasons.
4 - Another great point to think about is that you do not usually need to use "the" when you talk...
Writing Feedbacknabilkhan - Jan 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 19, 2011
|Students have to study a wide range of subjects, even the ones they don't like.
3 - Here is a great way to improve the first part. Students are going to school to gain knowledge, and...
Writing Feedbackrenga78 - Jan 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 19, 2011
|sacrificial love - I was contented, relieved and in peace.
Writing Feedbackamelia95 - Feb 8, 2011 / amelia95 - Feb 19, 2011
|O level: teenage love with study and emotional development
3 - As the society progresses, a variety of social issues also arises to be faced by... Among those, adolescent...
Writing FeedbackChim Can Cook - Feb 11, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 18, 2011
|Essay IELTS: How can the use of private motor vehicles be reduced?
4 - Thank you so much Jennifer. The corrections you have made are genuine. I am going to type it again...
Writing FeedbackVidyadhar - Feb 16, 2011 / Vidyadhar - Feb 18, 2011
|TOEFL-iBT Giving money as praise for children's high marks, good or bad?
3 - Here is a quick lesson about singular and plural. It's easy. Every parent always wants... All parents want... One...
Writing Feedbackabao1123 - Feb 11, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 18, 2011
|Quest in IELTS: Information provided in the internet can be reliable or trusted?
Writing Feedbackjomse - Feb 9, 2011 / jomse - Feb 18, 2011
|"Although my daughters are twins" - Contrast/Comparison Paragraphs
4 - Pre media.. that seems wrong. You should check to make sure you do not need a hyphen or something....
Writing Feedbackironhawk893 - Feb 10, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 18, 2011
|task 2 ESSAY ABOUT TRADITIONAL FOOD AND FAST FOOD-(IELTS)
NEW - Topic six: In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast food. This is having a negative...
Writing Feedbackswallow512 - Feb 18, 2011 / — -
|I and my sister went to the supermarket together
Writing FeedbackThuHien - Feb 10, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 17, 2011
|Ielts Task2: The problems and Solutions of Using the Internet
2 - I don't think "behind" is the right word to use here: However, there are still many drawbacks behind ...
Writing Feedbackshane - Feb 10, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 17, 2011
|IELTS ESSAY The importance of robots and their influences
3 - Thanks, Sarah and Moon, you are great! Assel, I think you should type the essay again and try...
Writing Feedbacktleuliyeva - Feb 9, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 17, 2011
|GRE_AW issue 131"The arts reveal the hidden ideas of a society"
4 - People say, "In terms of..." In terms of individual, art, not only representing truth, genuineness and beauty, but...
Writing Feedbackgintoki - Feb 9, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 16, 2011
|Well-being of pets (Quest in IELTS)
4 - You need THEM. ... trained animals and kept them as... Do not capitalize there words: ... are Dogs,...
Writing Feedbackjomse - Feb 9, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 16, 2011
|A persuasive essay: 'Death penalty should be abolished' for or against
6 - Why capitalize here? ---> severe Punishment if a Person disobeyed... When you include a little extra phrase in...
Writing FeedbackJovine - Feb 8, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 16, 2011
|"What is Happiness?" - A short essay about Hapiness
Writing FeedbackRamy Amjad - Jan 31, 2011 / Ramy Amjad - Feb 16, 2011
|IELTS-following host country's culture or not?
3 - really? I checked somewhere that there are more than 20 issues with my essay:( but tnx anyway....
Writing Feedbacks_maryam - Feb 15, 2011 / s_maryam - Feb 16, 2011
|Nursing, My First Job Experience (narrative essay)
Writing Feedbackmdipeolu - Feb 8, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 15, 2011
|TOEFL-Internet, good or bad?Each coin has both sides
2 - Internet is one of the most significant achievements of mankind. This facility has transformed the life style in a...
Writing Feedbacklatechoco - Feb 15, 2011 / dolly - Feb 15, 2011
|"Evaluating the teaching effectiveness of the professors" - GRE, Omega
Writing Feedbackshubhi - Feb 6, 2011 / shubhi - Feb 15, 2011
|IELTS: Influence of English - advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
2 - It's okay to say this, but then you need to add one more sentence before ending the paragraph....
Writing Feedbacklippea - Feb 8, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 15, 2011
|IELTS- student behaviour- causes and solutions
7 - I see your question. I don't know much about the scoring for ielts, but maybe Kevin or someone...
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Feb 8, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 15, 2011
|Travel broaden the horizon and knowledge; communications between countries
Writing Feedbackkate36 - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 15, 2011
|"What is Success": LUCK OR HARD WORK?
6 - Dolly I mean writing style is too casual. In other words, the structure isn't clear enough. It's better to...
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 13, 2011 / chris0203 - Feb 15, 2011
|TOEFL - Parents have many useful ways to help their children to prepare their adult life
3 - There are not many grammar errors in this article actually, but there is a repeated sentence"prepare their adult...
Writing Feedbackqqcandra - Feb 11, 2011 / s033591 - Feb 15, 2011
|Some practices harmed Chinese people's interests and damaged their emotions - GRE
Writing FeedbackXiaowang - Feb 10, 2011 / Xiaowang - Feb 15, 2011
|Tv and Its drawbacks (spreading violence, changing social relations)
2 - Great edit, Kim! Now, Hamid, it is your turn to work some more. Please type the essay again, and...
Writing Feedbacknabilkhan - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 15, 2011
|The Jealous reactions of one person to the success of a friend.
3 - Jealousy can lead you to do something which you yourself would not even have expected. This was what happened...
Writing Feedbackjiajun95 - Feb 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 14, 2011
|Movies are popular all over the world. Explain why movies are so popular.
2 - The first sentence does not carry a lot of meaning. It will be a stronger start if you revise...
Writing FeedbackCHEN LU - Feb 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 14, 2011
|"Who are you?" Lucy asked; Dystopian Short Story
Writing FeedbackSifan - Feb 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 14, 2011
|How is the social or sociable constructed at the site of commerce?
2 - "For example" is strange there, at the start. Maybe this is not the beginning of the paper? A...
Writing Feedbackbeau4u1 - Feb 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 14, 2011
|favor food, why it's so special
Writing FeedbackKathyLala - Feb 4, 2011 / KathyLala - Feb 14, 2011
|schools don't prepare young people for life in the real life.
Writing Feedbackploniite - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 14, 2011
|Rising China and its future: planned or liberal economy?
3 - The size of the government, or the capacity of its intervention defines a country's overall economic policies. or you...
Writing Feedbackjamessuh - Feb 6, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 13, 2011
|GRE Issue: On the value of history
Writing Feedbackkitty__lan - Feb 6, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 13, 2011
|Students to study alone or with a group? Which do you prefer? Reasons?
3 - I Mishal, I recommend typing the essay again now that you see the errors. You can also do this...
Writing Feedbackmishal alzaid - Jan 20, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 13, 2011
|"The true function of a university" - IELTS -education approach of universities.
5 - A University university is a place where ... one aggregates knowledge in a specific field , for...
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Jan 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 13, 2011
|if you do not do this, you will not have a successful life?
5 - Thanks John! I don't have an MSN, but you should join our army of writing friends and help us...
Writing Feedbackzxszmls - Jan 16, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 13, 2011
|Why is my MOM my hero -opinion proof paragraph (reasons, examples)
Writing FeedbackParedesME - Jan 18, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 13, 2011
|IELTS-sports professional can earn a great more money than others
12 - Hehe, great quote =) (the one with the ending). Nah, I'm so NOT over the moon with my english...
Writing Feedbacks_maryam - Feb 9, 2011 / m00ny - Feb 13, 2011
|IELTS: Music was, remains and will be vital part of our lives
6 - @ekologic: I'm not sure about "All walks of life" - never saw it in such context. I'm more keen...
Writing Feedbackekologic - Feb 7, 2011 / m00ny - Feb 13, 2011
|The movie "Troy", Achilles - someone you admire. How have they affected your life?
Writing Feedbackhachillies - Feb 3, 2011 / hachillies - Feb 12, 2011
|GRE Issue: Suggestion on improving the quality of instruction at the college
4 - Well, one great way to improve it would be to try to write 1 sentence that expresses the idea...
Writing Feedbackkitty__lan - Jan 27, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 12, 2011
|Advertisements increase sales volume - not wasting of a company's time or money
Writing Feedbacksongyi88 - Feb 4, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 12, 2011
|Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their teenagers
5 - Sometimes a short sentence is better at the beginning of an essay, because it catches the reader's attention:...
Writing Feedbacktleuliyeva - Feb 4, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 12, 2011
|A study: Not being a native English teacher has been reputed as a drawback?
3 - Maybe you can be clearer here at the start: ...native English speaker had been reputed as a drawback for...
Writing Feedbackmor2ela - Feb 4, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 12, 2011
|Toefl - What makes a good parent?
3 - Thanks karinab, I think I should pay more attention on my grammar Really appreciate your corrections, Kak3521...
Writing Feedbacks80776 - Feb 12, 2011 / s80776 - Feb 12, 2011
|Population Growth: WORLD ISSUES PERFECT PARAGRAPH ON EHRLICH THEORY
3 - thanks :) I really appreciate the help and feedback! hahaha its okay it you help late LOL! at least...
Writing FeedbackMajo - Feb 9, 2011 / Majo - Feb 12, 2011
|TOEFL - domestic cars will not be considered as a reasonable way to work commuting
Writing Feedbackzjs92 - Feb 10, 2011 / zjs92 - Feb 11, 2011
|Rituals and ceremonies help define a culture. ---GRE
Writing FeedbackMrTom - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 11, 2011
|TOEFL - What things a movie tells about its country
5 - Let's use words that are specific.. not "things"...it reflects many characteristics of many things about the country that the...
Writing Feedbackjamessuh - Feb 4, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 11, 2011
|"Soon people who cannot work with computers will be disadvantaged" ESSAY
Writing Feedbackm00ny - Feb 3, 2011 / Chim Can Cook - Feb 11, 2011
|"The role of luck in our success" - When people succeed, is it because of hard work?
2 - with hard working-> hard work they have able -> are able having the luck help ->having luck helps is...
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Feb 11, 2011 / Chim Can Cook - Feb 11, 2011
|IELTS-experience or born traits?which is more effective?
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Feb 4, 2011 / ajit88rai - Feb 10, 2011
|Toelf: Never, never give up (to keep trying and never stop working for your goals?)
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Feb 10, 2011 / 2011bss - Feb 10, 2011
|Describe table - companies advertising expediture IELTS task1
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