Unanswered [0] / Urgent [0] / SERVICES
 DrAfT!
Home / Writing Feedback [20,711] - page 342 of 346

Writing Feedback

Research advice on TOEFL, SAT, IELTS, GRE and other academic essays (page 342)

sort by: Replies | sort by: Threads
Consoles - comparing and contrasting essay

2 - Greetings! It's a good essay, it just needs a little polishing! One thing you need to watch is...

Writing Feedbacksamuraitom - Oct 23, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 23, 2007
"The people we admire most shape who we become" - analogy essay

2 - Greetings! I think you're selling yourself short--it's very good so far! The painting metaphor is a good one,...

Writing Feedbackkarmabelle - Oct 20, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 20, 2007
New Imperialism in Asia and Africa

2 - Greetings! As usual, another well-written and thought-provoking essay! I have just a few editing suggestions: Although we...

Writing FeedbackFredParisFrance - Oct 18, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 19, 2007
Scientific Revolution & Christianity Essay

1 - Hello, Could you please read my essay and give me some feedback? The prompt is: In...

Writing FeedbackFredParisFrance - Oct 12, 2007 / — -
Argumentative Essay - Welfare Programs

6 - You're quite welcome, and, once again, good job! Sarah, EssayForum.com...

Writing Feedbackss03 - Oct 7, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 9, 2007
Samuel P. Huntington - The Clash of Civilizations

1 - Hello, Could you please read my essay and give me some feedback? The prompt is: Samuel...

Writing FeedbackFredParisFrance - Oct 9, 2007 / — -
Billy Budd Essay Final (AP English)

2 - Greetings! I think you've done a marvelous job with the essay, and have followed the prompt very well!...

Writing Feedbackbizkitgirlzc - Oct 8, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 9, 2007
How to use QTFairUse - process essay

2 - Greetings! I think your essay is easy to read and the directions sound simple to follow. I'd have...

Writing Feedbacksamuraitom - Oct 8, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 9, 2007
New freedom and Nationalism - expositive essay

3 - Thank you....

Writing Feedbacksamuraitom - Oct 7, 2007 / samuraitom - Oct 8, 2007
Tokugawa & sakoku - essay

2 - Greetings! A well-written and interesting essay! I have just a few editing tips: The raison d'Ítre of...

Writing FeedbackFredParisFrance - Oct 4, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 5, 2007
The Otaku - Explaining with examples essay

5 - Greetings! I would guess that "cosplay" is short for "costume play"? If so, you could say: He regularly...

Writing Feedbacksamuraitom - Sep 30, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 1, 2007
Sports Memorabilia: Ebay VS. Field Of Dreams

1 - Sports Memorabilia: Ebay VS. Field Of Dreams Sports: Fun to watch, exciting, and most of all competitive. These...

Writing FeedbackCNKPRODUCTIONS - Sep 30, 2007 / — -
I like to see super heroes as a mock to society; Superhero Essay

2 - Greetings! You've given your response to the question an interesting twist--very good! There is little I would...

Writing Feedbackbizkitgirlzc - Sep 30, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 30, 2007
Defining Classic (Extended Definition Essay)

4 - Greetings! I think you've done a masterful job of fine-tuning your essay! And you're quite right about "it's"...

Writing Feedbacksilverystars - Sep 19, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 28, 2007
Reed Essay (interest in a liberal arts and science education)

3 - Greetings! I like what you've done with the ending! Very nice! If the word limit is 500,...

Writing Feedbackbizkitgirlzc - Sep 24, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 25, 2007
Have you ever done something to make others happy? Peer Pressure Paper

5 - Hmmm. I due until Thursday, so tomorrow I'm gonna take some time before class and ask one of the...

Writing Feedbackusanchezfe - Sep 21, 2007 / usanchezfe - Sep 24, 2007
A scary house - descriptive essay

1 - Prompt was to describe a place. I think I did a good job with that. I tried not...

Writing Feedbacksamuraitom - Sep 23, 2007 / — -
How my favorite Hobby/Pastime refelcts my personality

2 - Greetings! I think you've done an excellent job of demonstrating the characteristics you listed! The only suggestions I...

Writing Feedbackbdoan - Sep 21, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 21, 2007
U.S. economy - expository essay

2 - Greetings! I think you did a great job in such a short time span! I have some editing...

Writing Feedbacksamuraitom - Sep 17, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 17, 2007
Nora becomes prepared to fullfil Pleny's request

6 - thank you...

Writing Feedbacktsj456 - Sep 16, 2007 / tsj456 - Sep 17, 2007
Stereotypes on the music side - Division And Classification

4 - Greetings! Your essay has some interesting information! I have some editing suggestions for you: these Metalheads are...

Writing FeedbackReinhardt - Sep 13, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 17, 2007
Is imagination more important than knowledge - SAT essay

1 - "Is imagination more important than knowledge for human developement?" Even though my siblings were much more creative than...

Writing Feedbackmodi - Sep 16, 2007 / — -
Memory is an attachment to our physical selves; Reincarnation / Process of memory

4 - Greetings, Rajiv! Thank you for the clarification! I do have a question regarding word choice, though. In this...

Writing FeedbackRajiv - Sep 11, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 13, 2007
I want to be able to get as much help as possible in my English class.

1 - Writing Problem #1 Since I was a child, I have always loved the sound of music. When I...

Writing FeedbackTimparham - Sep 9, 2007 / — -
The organizational behavior in the Army - help with thesis statement

2 - Greetings! I think you've crafted a very good thesis statement! I have just a few small editing suggestions:...

Writing Feedbackmonifah - Sep 8, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 8, 2007
Teenage violence in schools

2 - Greetings! You give some good reasons for teen violence. Be careful, though, about making statements which are inaccurate...

Writing Feedbackangeltetra - Sep 4, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 5, 2007
"Computer or book"? Computer

2 - Greetings! I agree, I think this one is better than the other. You make some good points! One...

Writing Feedbackangeltetra - Sep 4, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 5, 2007
Reading response to "Talking Up Close"

3 - Greetings! I do, indeed, have "a few editing suggestions" for your interesting essay! :-)) Reading Response to...

Writing Feedbackcolla26 - Sep 3, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 3, 2007
In Response To "Why Don't We Complain?"

4 - Greetings! Yes, you definitely cleared up the confusion! Making the distinction clear not only makes it read better,...

Writing Feedbacksilverystars - Aug 30, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 1, 2007
Essay on how well reasoned was an argument - scale of 0-5

2 - Greetings! While some of the points you made are true, for example, that it would be helpful to...

Writing Feedbackmukmuk - Aug 30, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Aug 31, 2007
Employers should observe employees - Analysis essay

2 - Greetings! I think you make some excellent points in your essay! Your reasons why interviews are a good...

Writing Feedbackmukmuk - Aug 30, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Aug 30, 2007
My essay on analysis of Commercialism. Scale of 0-5.

2 - Greetings! My first response on reading this was that you had not really addressed the question asked; upon...

Writing Feedbackmukmuk - Aug 30, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Aug 30, 2007
Essay on September 11, 2001

4 - Greetings! It really depends on what the assignment instructions were, as to whether it is appropriate to include...

Writing Feedbacksarahmk - Aug 24, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Aug 29, 2007
Stress - cause and effect paper

3 - I would also recommend you to use "How to stop worrying and start living" book by Dale Carnegie. A...

Writing Feedbackcasey2264 - Jul 24, 2007 / Andreyknure - Aug 28, 2007
my writing rituals when I begin working on writing assignments

2 - Greetings! I'd be happy to give you some feedback on your excellent essay! When I come home,...

Writing Feedbackcolla26 - Aug 27, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Aug 27, 2007
"Same-sex Marriages in Canada and America"

2 - Greetings! You've written a good essay. However, I do think you need to be a bit more careful...

Writing Feedbacksarahmk - Aug 26, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Aug 27, 2007
Smoking by-laws

1 - 12 marks for a summary that includes two conditions that led to the change in policy-where appropriate, agreements are...

Writing Feedbacksarahmk - Aug 26, 2007 / — -
When it comes to writing, my attitude is instinctual negative/Attitude toward writing

3 - Thanks a lot Sarah. I really appreciate your feedback, but also your time and effort. I am glad I...

Writing Feedbackcolla26 - Aug 25, 2007 / colla26 - Aug 26, 2007
In Response To "Too Much Pressure"

3 - Greetings! I think you have written a very well-reasoned argument! You make an interesting point with regard to...

Writing Feedbacksilverystars - Aug 24, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Aug 24, 2007
200 students from Waymarsh State College - rate my essay

1 - Kindly rate my essay(0-5) and provide feedback The following appeared in the editorial section of a local newspaper....

Writing Feedbackmukmuk - Aug 24, 2007 / — -
ENC1101 success

3 - thanks for the suggestions......

Writing Feedbacknickerz - Aug 20, 2007 / nickerz - Aug 21, 2007
I Stand Here Ironing (literature using historical Context)

1 - Family The Great Depression is an era that will always be remembered as a triumph. Many people were...

Writing Feedbackpiimm_18 - Aug 20, 2007 / — -
Neolithic Agricultural Revolution

2 - Greetings! I'd be glad to give you some editing suggestions for your excellent essay! hat period of...

Writing FeedbackFredParisFrance - Aug 12, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Aug 13, 2007
having a birthmother is a good opportunity (is it a good essay?)

1 - please help me! topic: having a birthmother is a good opportunity for the ones who can not have...

Writing Feedbacknelit - Aug 1, 2007 / — -
Pre-agricultural and modern diets

2 - Greetings! Great job, as usual! Here are some editing tips for you: "Mummy, what do we eat?"...

Writing FeedbackFredParisFrance - Jul 26, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Jul 27, 2007
Haemoglobin & natural selection in areas plagued by malaria

2 - Greetings! You manage to make this subject comprehensible even to those of us who know nothing about the...

Writing FeedbackFredParisFrance - Jul 26, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Jul 27, 2007
Inaccurate depiction of Neanderthals in the popular media

2 - Greetings! I'd be glad to help with some editing: The Neanderthals' anatomy and culture highlight their kind...

Writing FeedbackFredParisFrance - Jul 25, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Jul 26, 2007
Hominid species during the Pleistocene

2 - Greetings! Another fine essay! Here are some editing tips for you: So astonishing a conclusion leads us...

Writing FeedbackFredParisFrance - Jul 25, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Jul 26, 2007
Sociobiology - theory and practical application

2 - Greetings! Merci beaucoup! Bien que je ne puisse pas personnellement recevoir votre aide, I am sure that if...

Writing FeedbackFredParisFrance - Jul 24, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Jul 25, 2007
Time of origin of modern human language

2 - Greetings! You're welcome, Frederic, we're glad to help! Here are some editing suggestions: As a French student...

Writing FeedbackFredParisFrance - Jul 24, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Jul 25, 2007
Archaeology, material artefacts, and cultural systems

2 - Greetings! Great essay! Here are a few editing tips: They dig to find antique items then expose...

Writing FeedbackFredParisFrance - Jul 23, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Jul 24, 2007
Importance of hunting vs. gathering in foraging societies

2 - Greetings! An excellent essay! I have just a few editing suggestions: in the first place, the comparison...

Writing FeedbackFredParisFrance - Jul 23, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Jul 24, 2007
The human species' impact on the earth

2 - Greetings! Another excellent essay! I have just a few grammatical suggestions for you: when the extinction of...

Writing FeedbackFredParisFrance - Jul 22, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Jul 23, 2007
the effect of Global warming- thesis statement and topic sentence

2 - Greetings! I think you have a good start with your paragraph! It appears that the first sentence is...

Writing Feedbackfuieik - Jul 22, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Jul 23, 2007
"The Jilting of Granny Weatherall" essay

2 - Greetings! You've written a good essay, but a few of your sentence constructions are a little awkward. Here...

Writing Feedbackcat08 - Jul 22, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Jul 23, 2007
Essay proofread on Jealousy

3 - Greetings! I think the words in bold are fine. I would rewrite this sentence like this: Ed...

Writing Feedbackcat08 - Jul 20, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Jul 22, 2007
Essay on Deception, The Sparkling Bitch

3 - Greetings! It can be tempting, sometimes, to overexplain things in an essay, especially if you are having trouble...

Writing Feedbackcat08 - Jul 17, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Jul 18, 2007
Culture change vs. biological evolution essay

2 - Greetings! I'd be happy to help with some editing: On the one hand, the factors of biological...

Writing FeedbackFredParisFrance - Jul 16, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Jul 17, 2007
America today is a nation of people with different ethnicities; Cultures Conflict

4 - Greetings! I think your essay is greatly improved! Here are just a few more suggestions: She feels...

Writing Feedbackcat08 - Jul 11, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Jul 15, 2007
Earliest stone tools - short anthropology essay

2 - Greetings! I'm learning a lot about archaelology from your essays! Very interesting! Here are a few editing pointers:...

Writing FeedbackFredParisFrance - Jul 13, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Jul 14, 2007

Home / Writing Feedback