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|Arguementative/Persuasive essay on camping
2 - How about "camping can take many forms" instead of "definitions?" Camping to one person can mean seclusion in...
Writing Feedbackbrianw - Nov 1, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 4, 2009
|Non-academic subjects should be removed from school. Agree or not?
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Nov 3, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Nov 4, 2009
|The View out my Widndow and what it means
2 - If you want to talk about meandering, use commas: As I meander into the kitchen, I glance through...
Writing Feedbackperejdam - Nov 1, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 3, 2009
|My friend recommended me to read "The Great Blue Yonder"
2 - This is so good! However, you seem to be using yonder incorrectly. Google it. I think it refers to...
Writing Feedbackcryingpiggy - Nov 1, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 3, 2009
|Does music pay a important role in people's life?
2 - I particularly enjoyed reading this essay because I myself am a musician and understand where you're coming from :)...
Writing Feedbackmandyhhhhhhhh - Nov 3, 2009 / rechungp - Nov 3, 2009
|sending criminals in jail or offering them education & job training
3 - Thank you Kevin. I deeply appreciate your modification and advice.The next article, I will try my best to avoid...
Writing Feedbackmandyhhhhhhhh - Oct 31, 2009 / mandyhhhhhhhh - Nov 3, 2009
|argumentative journal : "Being a Victim of American Popular Culture" -feedback
Writing Feedbackdinda - Oct 30, 2009 / dinda - Nov 2, 2009
|'demand for comprehensive talents' - People attend college or univ. for a reason
2 - I'd like to say that, you organize this essay very well and the 1st and 2nd paragraphs of the...
Writing Feedbackfuhuanluck - Nov 2, 2009 / Hellgreeting - Nov 2, 2009
|TOEFL: doing a part time job?(agree or disagree)
Writing Feedbackfuhuanluck - Oct 30, 2009 / fuhuanluck - Nov 2, 2009
|Ode to a nightingale by John Keats
2 - ...and thoughts by using multiple techniques different ways . It looks like you need one more sentence in...
Writing Feedbacklazord - Oct 30, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 1, 2009
|Poetry Analysis Essay: Dylan Thomas- "Do Not Go Gently into That Good Night"
Writing FeedbackRod_Farva - Oct 30, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 1, 2009
|"Human needs..": Disagree or agree.
Writing FeedbackFloria_ran - Oct 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 1, 2009
|The knowledge from books and knowledge from experience are, in fact, two diffrent stages of learning
Writing Feedbacklucidmanner - Oct 29, 2009 / lucidmanner - Nov 1, 2009
|Should Euthanasia be legalized?
16 - There are simple MLA formats that you can google online it helped me a whole lot when writing my...
Writing Feedbackjohnnylin_24 - Oct 20, 2009 / jaimeealexis - Oct 31, 2009
|A licence to Write ?
12 - I lived some years in Bethesda, near Washington DC. My neighbor had a very cynical attitude towards Indians and...
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Sep 19, 2009 / Rajiv - Oct 31, 2009
|Changes in the world in the coming century?
Writing Feedbackvothiha - Oct 27, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Oct 30, 2009
|[TOEFL]Parents are the best teachers? Yes, they know their children better
2 - This is not really a mistake, but I'll just make a suggestion: From my point of view, I agree...
Writing Feedbackyin - Oct 30, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Oct 30, 2009
|Food preparation became more convenient than it used to be
Writing FeedbackMNA - Oct 29, 2009 / MNA - Oct 30, 2009
|TOEFL - prefer large or small company? Large - stable jobs and fine salaries
5 - it is a contrast essay, so your structure is wrong. mention both merits and demerits , besides what overweighs...
Writing FeedbackAnly - Oct 16, 2009 / fuhuanluck - Oct 30, 2009
|"television programme production essay" Introduction feedback.
2 - And that's the problem, right there. Your essay so far is vague and wordy, instead of specific and...
Writing Feedbackkors88 - Oct 28, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 29, 2009
|take up the endangered animals' habitat - toefl essay
Writing FeedbackLapland - Oct 27, 2009 / brood910 - Oct 29, 2009
|How to give a presentation with ease and confidence?
3 - Thank you for your praise. I know the language is my largest barrier that prevents me from stating my...
Writing Feedbackvothiha - Oct 26, 2009 / vothiha - Oct 29, 2009
|Contrast viewpoints of the author and the lecturer about using cell phone
5 - tuanlnc have a hard look the reasons cause accidents and should not focus only on using cell phone. >>>...
Writing Feedbacktuanlnc - Oct 21, 2009 / vothiha - Oct 29, 2009
|I have to write an essay on both "The Storm" & The Story of an Hour"
3 - hardwork...
Writing FeedbackmrsArias - Oct 28, 2009 / killerwind - Oct 29, 2009
|Personal Essay- A leader is who I became
2 - Nice logical flow. That's good. In the first sentence--I don't think countries are serviced, but served. Also, 911...
Writing Feedbackvbdesichick - Oct 28, 2009 / EF_Stephen - Oct 28, 2009
|TOEFL IBT: SCHOOL EDUCATION OR SELF STUDY (CONTRAST)
4 - It's better. The idea is clearer this time. Admittedly independent study is more convenient. However, principles, communication and cooperation...
Writing Feedbackfuhuanluck - Oct 26, 2009 / litingjiao - Oct 28, 2009
|Rice contribution essay - 'my experience and ability to seek solutions'
2 - Here is the good way to use a colon: ...lived in three different countries: China, New Zealand and...
Writing Feedbackblubunny5 - Oct 26, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Oct 28, 2009
|Eating at Home or at a Restaurant? I prefer HOME
8 - Try rereading your essay and fixing some of your spelling mistakes. It looks to me like you kind of...
Writing Feedbacksaadatyar - Oct 11, 2009 / juliat cung - Oct 27, 2009
|"TV is a such idiot box."; INFLUENCE of TV and MOVIES on people's behavior
9 - you can use the good dictionary to check grammar errors by yourseft and the option of Word Window by...
Writing Feedbackalina967 - Oct 22, 2009 / vothiha - Oct 27, 2009
|Brave New World and Today's Societal Parallels
5 - @mattsaysfierce- I would certainly hope you turned yours in! I am in your class and I stayed home today...
Writing Feedbackdonfilipe - Oct 27, 2009 / donfilipe - Oct 27, 2009
|Even though some of the ads are beneficent, we should have discretion for national purchase
Writing Feedbackung0911 - Oct 24, 2009 / litingjiao - Oct 26, 2009
|Why is music important to many people?
4 - Most people would say because the music became popular since it has been used in advertisement business. no...
Writing Feedbackbaitassel - Oct 25, 2009 / fuhuanluck - Oct 26, 2009
|"Gross National Happiness" as a measurement of the success of the country. Maryland Essay #4 review
Writing Feedbackplaya25 - Oct 25, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 26, 2009
|Win is always your if you do fight from your deep heart. A success does not depend from luck.
8 - Your thesis should probably be something along the lines of "Success often requires a combination of good luck and...
Writing Feedbackalina967 - Oct 23, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 26, 2009
|Abortion: Why it should be Illegal.
Writing Feedbackjuliat cung - Oct 25, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 26, 2009
|the time from birth to twelve years is the most important period in life time?
3 - hi Clare Healy, thanks for your comment however, i find that your comment is less useful what i need...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Oct 25, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Oct 25, 2009
|Intrusive, friendly & polite; What are the qualities of a good neighbor.\?
Writing Feedbackbaitassel - Oct 24, 2009 / baitassel - Oct 25, 2009
|Is it better to marry someone who is similiar to you? or different wth you?
Writing Feedbackjimmi - Oct 25, 2009 / jimmi - Oct 25, 2009
|Compare and contrast of my children
Writing Feedbackbrianw - Oct 24, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 24, 2009
Writing FeedbackFloria_ran - Oct 24, 2009 / Floria_ran - Oct 24, 2009
|[TOEFL] All students should be required to study art and music in secondary school.
Writing Feedbackyin - Oct 16, 2009 / EF_Stephen - Oct 24, 2009
|Mobile phone merits and defects.
Writing Feedbackung0911 - Oct 22, 2009 / ung0911 - Oct 23, 2009
|TOEFL: Should parents make an important decision for their children??
5 - Different from opinion above, I think it's nice to write something little bit emotional. It's rare to see someone...
Writing FeedbackRosejoker - Oct 3, 2009 / linhexi - Oct 22, 2009
|studying the past has little value. do u agree or not? why?
2 - Your point is Okay, though I think you could revise some sentences like: First of all, studying the...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Oct 22, 2009 / linhexi - Oct 22, 2009
|life in prison is better punishment than death penalty
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Oct 18, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Oct 22, 2009
|write to thank a local businessman for giving large sum of money to the club....
3 - Noted. Thanks alot. I will try to improve on it. How about the details I have written? Is there...
Writing Feedbackdylantcp - Oct 21, 2009 / dylantcp - Oct 22, 2009
|"Teach for India" why?
3 - Thanks a lot for givining the feedback..i will rewrite and send it again with keeping all the point u...
Writing Feedbackruchika kumari - Oct 21, 2009 / ruchika kumari - Oct 22, 2009
|How people can gain job satisfaction?/ Factors contributing to job satisfaction
5 - to be honest, i am not really comfortable with this essay. i think that it is not convincing enough;...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Oct 21, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Oct 21, 2009
|'an evil demon' - It was only a dream; essay
4 - If you want your writing to really sizzle, use fewer adjectives and more expressive verbs. That will help you...
Writing Feedbackchie - Oct 21, 2009 / EF_Stephen - Oct 21, 2009
|Romanticism - British literature essay. i need a good proofread.
3 - I'm also glad that you made references to the poets. But I think there's some information here that came...
Writing Feedbackehoskin24 - Oct 20, 2009 / EF_Stephen - Oct 21, 2009
|DESTRUCTION OF GREENHOUSE; Earth has loosen his source.
6 - The environmentalist movement is merely a manifestation of the human need to adhere to some sort of religious belief....
Writing Feedbackangeltetra - Sep 3, 2007 / EF_Sean - Oct 21, 2009
|WHAT is the message that advertisement is communicating to the viewer?
2 - You need to greatly tighten up this essay. You might start by looking at how the elements you describe...
Writing Feedbackmtelsayed - Oct 20, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 21, 2009
|Essay about the influence of Parents on Kids
2 - This is great, very engaging. I couldn't stop reading because of the emotion it conveyed. You should go...
Writing Feedbackriaboo46 - Oct 20, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Oct 21, 2009
|Introsuce about college and faculty of pharmacy
3 - I will join in an international lecture on how to develop pharmacists' education in Vietnam and some countries in...
Writing Feedbackvothiha - Oct 20, 2009 / vothiha - Oct 21, 2009
|Food has become easier to prepare now , do you agree or not?
15 - Hi Sean, I've just met a structure that I don't understand. Would you please explain it for me!...
Writing Feedbacktuanlnc - Oct 9, 2009 / tuanlnc - Oct 20, 2009
|'priceless gift of oneself' - People do different things to stay health; IELTS
4 - You say right. I'm a pharmacist. That maybe a reason why my essay like a writing on a newspaper....
Writing Feedbackvothiha - Oct 20, 2009 / vothiha - Oct 20, 2009
|TOEFL:ELECTRIC BOOK OR PAPER BOOK?(contrast)
8 - EF_Stephen：thank you for your advice. but i am confused how to improve my vocabulary problem. how to make words...
Writing Feedbackfuhuanluck - Oct 19, 2009 / fuhuanluck - Oct 20, 2009
|"Luck is very important factor to succeed" - toefl ibt
2 - ainash After reading your essay, I understand why no one has made response. Although my English writing is...
Writing Feedbackainash - Oct 19, 2009 / thanhlh84 - Oct 20, 2009
|Modernization vs Dependency Theory
Writing FeedbackMakeAnImpact97 - Oct 18, 2009 / MakeAnImpact97 - Oct 20, 2009
|Advertisements makes people selfish and greedy for more and more goods
10 - these are some reasons indicate that it is necessary to reduce that show the necessary in reducing advertisements in...
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