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|His name represents the basketball. Michael Jordan was a legend.
Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - Jun 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 24, 2010
|"Eyes On the Road" - Writing task for Emotional and physical journey
Writing Feedbackalekahraiki - Jun 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 24, 2010
|TOEFL: Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human
3 - Even though I have experience in only IELTS essays, I will give some general advice. You should not...
Writing Feedbackwraith - Jun 23, 2010 / ershad193 - Jun 24, 2010
|ILETS: The affects of smoking upon health and the benefits gained from stopping
4 - Hi Just a simple grammar advice. Whenever you use a singular noun which represents a class or group...
Writing FeedbackTetanya - Jun 23, 2010 / ershad193 - Jun 24, 2010
|Do changes that make our lives easier not neccessarily make them better?
4 - Technology may sometimes be helpful, but causes a lack of communication for those who live in this generation ....
Writing Feedbackredtoenails - Jun 22, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jun 23, 2010
|pleasure and satisfaction: the pursuit of our desires or the attainment of them?
4 - You can't go from third person, (one's lifetime) to second person, (your desires) in the same sentence. Actually, it...
Writing FeedbackLauratwilight - Jun 22, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jun 23, 2010
|It is a paragraph, Are Zoos morally wrong?
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Jun 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 23, 2010
|IELTS immigrants should adopt to local culture or establish a minority community
3 - sorry , it is "approaches". Thank you for your generous help! your positive comments inspire me a lot....
Writing Feedbackshaieli - Jun 20, 2010 / shaieli - Jun 23, 2010
|Bar Graph description (coffee and meat consumed in selected countries)
2 - It will be clearer this way: The bar graph compares the amounts of coffee and... Let's add one...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Jun 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 22, 2010
|To what extent do you agree or disagree?---modern & traditional building
6 - accompany = "go with" so do this: accompanying the population exploration explosion... :-) The Governor was accompanied...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Jun 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 22, 2010
|Learning about the past has many benefit for us; experience, virtues, wisdom
3 - HI~~ thank you for correction. You are great!! You always give me a good advice. Thanks a lot!...
Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - Jun 20, 2010 / kevinhsin1124 - Jun 20, 2010
|TOEFL: Important to be able to work with a group of people or independently?
Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - Jun 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 20, 2010
|Traffic congestion and ways to reduce it - Compare paragraph - What's better?
5 - In my country, people often struggle for position while driving and don't stay in their lanes so that everything...
Writing Feedbackmabu9669 - Jun 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 20, 2010
|NARRATIVE PAPER: on a lesson learned (sports). Question on comma placement.
2 - You can always make writing more powerful if you express the same size idea in fewer words: Many of...
Writing Feedbackrod606 - Jun 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 20, 2010
|GRE AW ISSUE hunger, unemployment vs art
2 - The speaker asserts that using public resources to support the arts is unjustifiable when starvation and unemployment exist in...
Writing Feedbackjadetang - Jun 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 19, 2010
|TOEFL: WHICH KIND OF WORKER WOULD YOU HIRE?
Writing Feedbackmayenlu - Jun 15, 2010 / mayenlu - Jun 18, 2010
|TV & Movies have many good influences on peoples' behavior
4 - Thanks silkesha Might be I am incorporate with my native language marathi. thanks for suggestion. I will...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jun 17, 2010 / vaishali1980 - Jun 18, 2010
|Valuing of past is a must; shorten getting knowledge time, avoiding mistakes
Writing Feedbackwraith - Jun 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 17, 2010
|Positive and negative aspects of globalization - two-edged sword
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Jun 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 17, 2010
|TOEFL:I strongly agree that government should improve public transportation
Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - Jun 15, 2010 / kevinhsin1124 - Jun 17, 2010
|ielts "When people break the traditions of their predecessors they advance more"
3 - Making Taking the next step of development creates a need to put aside traditional culture and experience. Cross-cultural...
Writing Feedbacklorena - Jun 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 16, 2010
|As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work (job satisfaction)
2 - Name_Here did a great thing here, like usual. I know how tedious it is to make those corrections, so......
Writing Feedbackinderjeet - Jun 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 16, 2010
|TOEFL- Violent Media
6 - Hi Nesreen, Sorry for upseting you. I just thought to correct your essay first. As you have written...
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Jun 14, 2010 / renga78 - Jun 15, 2010
|Leisure time: spend it outdoors or indoors?
8 - I think adding their is better because there are too much or in the sentence. Everyone has his...
Writing FeedbackNesreen - May 28, 2010 / jjinko - Jun 15, 2010
|The amount of money per week spend on fast foods in Britain - IELTS Task 1 essay
3 - The graph shows the expense per week on junk food in Britain. The graph shows the amount of money...
Writing Feedbackanggra_88 - Jun 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 15, 2010
|"There are no challenges so difficult, no goals so impossibe" - the english comp
3 - You should use the word "often," because obviously some people do set high goals. I feel that people...
Writing Feedbackrachel d - Jun 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 15, 2010
|Using machines is very helpful because you can save time and effort
Writing Feedbackmayenlu - Jun 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 15, 2010
|What must we do to truly understand ourselves?
Writing FeedbackLauratwilight - Jun 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 15, 2010
|First of all, a healthy mental and body is prerequisite to succeed - TOEFL
Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - Jun 13, 2010 / kevinhsin1124 - Jun 15, 2010
|"I bet she's a tramp" - my English FINAL.
Writing Feedbackclarerawr - Jun 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 14, 2010
|Classmates vs parents; 'Teaching is the exalted duty than anyone could take'
2 - Hi, The topic is about child's success in school. When you focus on children and school, you can...
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Jun 13, 2010 / renga78 - Jun 13, 2010
|History leads us to the bright destination in the ocean of social development and revolution
Writing Feedbackjadetang - Jun 9, 2010 / jadetang - Jun 13, 2010
|Required attendance in college or university classes.
6 - I reccomend you change up the transitions between paragraphs. "First ... Second ... Finally ..." Is so .. boring....
Writing Feedbackbabyevy - May 27, 2010 / LehFoxeh - Jun 12, 2010
|Okay, "Karate Kid" is one more film that confirms my hunch -- movies suck nowadays
2 - Thank you!! I can't believe there is another karate kid movie. I love Jackie Chan, though, and I love...
Writing FeedbackMustafa1991 - Jun 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 12, 2010
|IELTS ESSAY: Internet and communication
3 - I would like to state the benefits of the internet in communication and the difference between the internet and...
Writing Feedbacklin54390 - Jun 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 12, 2010
|History -- A waste of time? 'meaning of a Microprocessor'
2 - You can say this in a way that does not involve mentioning evolution. Evolutionary Theory teaches us what...
Writing Feedbacksilkesha - Jun 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 12, 2010
|How successfully does the writer of "Climate Change: The facts"...
3 - Today global warming has become a political hot... When wrting about a reading, use the present verb tense...
Writing FeedbackSunazero - Jun 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 11, 2010
|TOEFL: Living in a big city has many merit and some disadvantages!
Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - Jun 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 11, 2010
|gaining knowledge/ More job opportunities; Reasons behind attending universities
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Jun 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 11, 2010
|Ungraded classrooms, which consist of students grouped by level of achievement
2 - In the second paragraph, the following statement doesn't go well... Although age matter for the development of the brain,...
Writing Feedbackshalini singh - Jun 10, 2010 / silkesha - Jun 11, 2010
|the internet is contributing to the breakdown of family relationship
5 - Make the introduction part a bit interesting! Use some catchy statements and also a few thoughts or phrases...i feel,...
Writing FeedbackALICE K - Jun 6, 2010 / silkesha - Jun 11, 2010
|Short Essay on High School Scholarship Program
5 - That's funny... yeah, when you have big success with a brilliant online business, you'll have 50K to donate. ...
Writing Feedbacknorthernlight - Jun 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|Treatment of Illegal Immagrants - U.S. versus Mexico
Writing FeedbackPaula6 - Jun 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|BARRON'S TOEFL "Advances in transportation and communication"
2 - You need a comma here: acquired to human beings society all over the globe, and that... Capitalize Internet....
Writing FeedbackNohna - Jun 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|GRE: "All nations should help support the development of a global university"
2 - Here is another idea: In Today, a global university seems to be another Tower of Babel, because...
Writing Feedbackjadetang - Jun 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|"An experience you have had that involves controversy" - Narrative Argument
3 - This is such a powerful sentence. Also, the notion of untouchables at the school is powerful. You are...
Writing FeedbackEcho1334 - Jun 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|BARRON'S TOEFL IBT BOOK "learning a foreign language"
4 - Yep, at this point in your practice, Nohna, I think you should use sentences that are not too long...
Writing FeedbackNohna - Jun 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|Government should not limit scientific studies and growth
Writing FeedbackLew chuang - Jun 7, 2010 / Lew chuang - Jun 10, 2010
|TOEFL essay -Monumental Gifts
Writing Feedbackkovcastle - Jun 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 8, 2010
|Term paper about Christ Figure in literature
Writing FeedbackKingdom10 - Jun 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 8, 2010
|I think there is too much violence in movies.
6 - Thanks for comments, Yonman. Regarding your question, I do not need to support the reason with a realible...
Writing FeedbackAzeri - Jun 6, 2010 / Azeri - Jun 8, 2010
|Some students prefer to study alone - TOEFL Question
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Jun 2, 2010 / yonman - Jun 7, 2010
|three battles significant in evoving canada as an independant country
6 - Thank you sooooooooooo much Kevin that was SOOOOOO much help im finished my conclusion now all thanks to you...
Writing Feedbackosma - Jun 5, 2010 / osma - Jun 7, 2010
|Do-Gooders need to let us decide (the three risky behaviors), rough draft
Writing Feedbackreeseinskool - Jun 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 7, 2010
|How should I describe all types of graphs,diagrams or charts?
8 - Now that I am looking at my description, I can see that I've made some spelling errors. The point...
Writing FeedbackMarutza - May 28, 2010 / Marutza - Jun 7, 2010
|IELTS Writing-Topic about TV, book, radio
4 - Hi Jet, In my openion, starting with the word civilization is compatable with mentioning some historical facts about...
Writing Feedbackjetzhu - Jun 6, 2010 / Nohna - Jun 7, 2010
|The College Experience: Exemplification Essay On College Life
2 - Some believe a 5 hour energy will do-- this will confuse some people. It is a proper noun, so...
Writing Feedbackamc2286 - Jun 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 6, 2010
|"global warming will result to numerous changes" - essay needs editing
Writing Feedbacksothenkikisaid - Jun 6, 2010 / sothenkikisaid - Jun 6, 2010
|IELTS task 2 : Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood.
9 - my suggest is that you can write about 3 sentences in first paragraph to support both sides. Make your...
Writing Feedbackwilly0123 - May 20, 2010 / mabu9669 - Jun 6, 2010
|childrens eating habits nowadays are different from previous generation
2 - Nowadays, children's eating habits lead them to heath deterioration.I entirely agree with this view and believe that this alarming...
Writing Feedbacksheina - Jun 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 5, 2010
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