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|TOEFL: Artists have the capability of soothing the minds of the people.
3 - Humankind is usually a better word than mankind. It is encouraging to acknowledge that the people of our...
Writing Feedbackdil - Sep 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 3, 2010
|Strong morality and good familial background of a political leader?
Writing Feedbackshofa_nefertete - Sep 30, 2010 / alexngyz - Oct 3, 2010
|Toefl essay : The most important leader in your country.
5 - Hi Wupi, I think your essay is good. I'm very happy because I've already known about a perfect King...
Writing Feedbackscarecrowd - Oct 1, 2010 / dtth - Oct 3, 2010
|School Uniforms would decrease the violence in schools: GRE Perspective Essay
Writing Feedbackradwa - Sep 30, 2010 / radwa - Oct 2, 2010
|TOEFL Essay - food (stand/restaurant or home)
5 - alahakon, roshan and priyanka thank for your suggestions! i need to practise more and more to improve my vocabulary......
Writing Feedbackecmagalhaes - Oct 1, 2010 / ecmagalhaes - Oct 2, 2010
|Advantages and disadvantages of the Internet for an average person?
5 - This last sentence needs to be managed a little better. It is awkward and unwieldy, like a large box...
Writing Feedbackshofa_nefertete - Sep 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 2, 2010
|Characteristics of caring people. How did they influence you?
5 - ...my best friends, mentors and role models.---- Right after this sentence I think you should add a thesis statement...
Writing Feedbackcarlynnross - Sep 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 2, 2010
|Having two children VS. Having More than two children in every family
6 - Do you know this? It has been found that child's great part of the mental development is completed...
Writing Feedbackophogh - Sep 25, 2010 / asokapalama - Oct 2, 2010
|Essay about what is science 250-300 words
3 - Is it everything (a noun) or is it "to discover" (a verb)? I think you should revise that intro...
Writing Feedbackruiz09 - Sep 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 2, 2010
|Compulsory education for children between the ages of 5 and 15
6 - Hi, I guess one of the few obvious problems would be that education is expensive. Not all countries...
Writing Feedbackdtth - Oct 1, 2010 / singcarcom - Oct 2, 2010
|TOEFL; Objective of attending school
4 - Thanks Mark and Do. It was my first attempt. However it took 39 minutes altogether. (Writing and refining) I...
Writing Feedbackrosh - Oct 1, 2010 / rosh - Oct 1, 2010
|The Holy Mosque in Mecca, Saudi Arabia - essay describing a place you like to visit.
5 - Other than the corrections other people have previously pointed out, I don't see any. I loved the way your...
Writing FeedbackZubaida - Sep 27, 2010 / aaliyah613 - Oct 1, 2010
|"If I cannot have freedom, I'd rather not be alive": GRE issue essay
3 - It is one of the essential rights all human beings are entitled to, apart from the infernal ones that...
Writing Feedbackradwa - Sep 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 1, 2010
|IELTS - large financial benefits for successful sports professionals
2 - Hi Do Ray! Let's start with the second paragraph -- the first couple of sentences: As I mentioned...
Writing Feedbackfordragon - Oct 1, 2010 / mea505 - Oct 1, 2010
|Toefl essay: the contents of TV, movies, games influence young people's behavior.
Writing Feedbackscarecrowd - Oct 1, 2010 / mea505 - Oct 1, 2010
|Essay to describe your brother (Marcos)
Writing Feedbackecmagalhaes - Sep 30, 2010 / ecmagalhaes - Sep 30, 2010
|V-chip to block TV channels by parents - agree or disagree?
5 - Thanks for all the ideas that helping me on my essay, especially Mark, you have helped me with my...
Writing FeedbackKathyLala - Sep 29, 2010 / KathyLala - Sep 30, 2010
|toefl; Internet had negative effects on civilization
5 - "Escalate" usually refers to something that is "going" or "moving" or "happening" so it is not the best word...
Writing Feedbackjag - Sep 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 30, 2010
|Saudi Arabia - one important thing about your country that you would change?
4 - This is a great thread! Thanks everyone. I'll offer some advice below. Zainab, I'm glad you joined, and...
Writing Feedbackzooba - Sep 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 30, 2010
|Toefl essay : "Good teachers set challenging tasks for their students?"
Writing Feedbackscarecrowd - Sep 30, 2010 / mea505 - Sep 30, 2010
|Parents? It depends on the circumstances of the child, to determine who is the best teacher
Writing FeedbackGeorgesebastian - Sep 26, 2010 / mea505 - Sep 30, 2010
|Is studying HISTORY important in the modern world?
2 - Our modern world has placed lesser emphasis on learning the history of our existence which has been creating bigger(GREATER)...
Writing Feedbackshofa_nefertete - Sep 30, 2010 / kaityh - Sep 30, 2010
|Is it important to maintain the extended relative relationship?
2 - Hi! I read through your essay, then I read through some of Kwang's corrections that were made in...
Writing Feedbackfucenying435503 - Sep 30, 2010 / mea505 - Sep 30, 2010
|Modern environmental issues cannot be tackled by one person - Essay for TOEFL
4 - Hi, I like your essay. It has good points. However, since you practise for toefl, it is better that...
Writing Feedbackaltus - Sep 19, 2010 / dil - Sep 30, 2010
|Choice, privacy, and books: The influence of literature on modern society
2 - Hi Edward! I made a few corrections to your short essay. There are some sentences that, perhaps, need...
Writing Feedbackeddiev - Sep 30, 2010 / mea505 - Sep 30, 2010
|Toefl; History/Literature vs Maths/ Science
3 - Hi! Sure, we can offer a different perspective on your essay, but it would be far better (first) if...
Writing Feedbackdil - Sep 27, 2010 / mea505 - Sep 30, 2010
|IELTS -Weather it is pointless to keep the traditional skills and ways of life alive
Writing Feedbackfordragon - Sep 18, 2010 / fordragon - Sep 30, 2010
|The question is "How have you changed in the last five years?"
6 - Oh, really? Actually, I don't really know how to express that. I always type "hihi..."to my friends. Thank you...
Writing FeedbackTomomi - Sep 20, 2010 / Tomomi - Sep 29, 2010
|People are materialistic and work-oriented: PERCEIVED HARDSHIPS
Writing Feedbackshofa_nefertete - Sep 22, 2010 / shofa_nefertete - Sep 29, 2010
|TRANSITIONS IN LIFE - taking them with optimism or hatred
5 - thank u so much. I have some problems during revision stage of my essays. I think I need your...
Writing Feedbackshofa_nefertete - Sep 22, 2010 / shofa_nefertete - Sep 29, 2010
|We face lot of global problems. Good relations b/w nations is important. Agree or not
2 - Today,we face problems like global warming and terrorism which are having a deterring effect on our society progress.--- you...
Writing Feedbackvarun87 - Sep 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 29, 2010
|Task 1: (Australian and British cinema Markets and cinema admissions)
2 - Overall, the U.S. films were the most popular shown by both Australian and British people, and it is clear...
Writing Feedbackjeemi - Sep 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 29, 2010
|NARRATIVE ESSAY ON :LEAVING HOME
2 - We always want them in our every moment of our life, whether a t our dejection or exhilaration, but...
Writing Feedbackktmrocker - Sep 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 29, 2010
|machines are really useful if you get them rightly; but simple work by hand
Writing Feedbackbuzzlightyer - Sep 22, 2010 / buzzlightyer - Sep 29, 2010
|What's in it for the World - Persuasive Essay
Writing FeedbackSWNP - Sep 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 29, 2010
|trying new things or doing the same?
Writing Feedbackrosh - Sep 25, 2010 / carlynnross - Sep 29, 2010
|Knowledge of book is mandatory to learning new things as well as to continue old incomplete research
3 - Despite theory gives deep knowledge about particular subject, there is no use of that theory if it is not...
Writing Feedbackjems007 - Sep 28, 2010 / jems007 - Sep 29, 2010
|TOEFL: Luck Vs Hard work; Which is better? luck may disappoint you easly
5 - Thanks Tomomi...
Writing Feedbacksuve - Sep 28, 2010 / suve - Sep 29, 2010
|Spending money on people's basic requirements or travelling to space
3 - Keep it consistent like this: I support the idea of investing money on uplifting the living standards rather than...
Writing Feedbackophogh - Sep 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 29, 2010
|Younger school children should be required to study art and music in addition to math
4 - I think you should check to make sure the quote at the beginning is accurate. I think it seems...
Writing Feedbacktshml1990 - Sep 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 29, 2010
|I prefer to let children go for a paid work especially for those who need to earn a living
3 - You mean I should support the second view with more sentences and evidences? I'll try. But the biggest...
Writing Feedbackfordragon - Sep 28, 2010 / fordragon - Sep 28, 2010
|IELTS: what sort of knowledge should universities provide to graduates?
8 - I still think that the student should re-work the essay and make it on point, so that it better...
Writing FeedbackVeruska - Sep 23, 2010 / mea505 - Sep 28, 2010
|Cars should not be allowed to enter the city center do you agree or disagree?
Writing Feedbackn_tina59 - Sep 28, 2010 / mea505 - Sep 28, 2010
|TOEFL:Pets should be treated like family & Reasons for why it is so
2 - pets have become people's favorite. People will take care of animals if they are interested in adopting...
Writing Feedbackjems007 - Sep 28, 2010 / fordragon - Sep 28, 2010
|Communicating information has been a primary and constant necessity for people
Writing Feedbackfordragon - Sep 7, 2010 / fordragon - Sep 28, 2010
|The importance of a computer to college students
NEW - Technology has been dramatically developed worldwide so far in most of social life aspects, especially Internet and telecommunication. In...
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|The employees would not stay in one job for various reasons. It's inappropriate.
4 - I also found that if the word "overhead" were to be changed with "liability," the sentence(s) might sound better....
Writing Feedbackjag - Sep 28, 2010 / mea505 - Sep 28, 2010
|TOEFL: good qualities of a good neighbor; enthusiastic, easy-going, reliable
4 - Mark, thank you soooooo much! your opinions help a lot. Yeah, you are right. I do lose control of...
Writing Feedbackchristie111 - Sep 26, 2010 / christie111 - Sep 28, 2010
|The importance of vocational guide in secondary school
Writing FeedbackAlamanda Bud - Sep 18, 2010 / Alamanda Bud - Sep 28, 2010
|My Morning Cup of Coffee essay - check for grammar, and spelling!
Writing Feedbackhannah16 - Sep 27, 2010 / Tomomi - Sep 28, 2010
|Narrative: an exciting protagonist in Toy Story 2.
2 - The story is built around the protagonist in that the protagonist is always taking the initiative. ------This is a...
Writing Feedbacksoul9 - Sep 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 27, 2010
|TOEFL; Decisions should be made alone or not
Writing Feedbackjag - Sep 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 27, 2010
|a one-page essay (how you relax after getting home from school or work.)
Writing FeedbackZubaida - Sep 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 27, 2010
|Malaysia, Philippines, USA - Biography essay... am I on the right track?
Writing Feedbackkmango - Sep 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 27, 2010
|UNEDUCATED Vs EDUCATED (WHO TEACHES WHO?)
7 - I agree...people learn from experience as well as education, so obviously uneducated people CAN teach educated people. Google...
Writing Feedbackupul - Sep 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 27, 2010
|Luxury goods market is on the decline: GRE argument essay
2 - The argument argues...this doesn't sound right. How about 'The argument is that...? that due to the declining state...
Writing Feedbackradwa - Sep 24, 2010 / EF_Susan - Sep 26, 2010
|Creative Writing Narrative - Academic Decathlon
2 - I'm in the virtual presence of greatness. Here are some ideas for you: Neither one of us paid...
Writing Feedbackaremmegs - Sep 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 26, 2010
|A broad essay assignment called "Who Are We?" (antidepressant medication, depression)
3 - "Who are we, as patients or participants in our medical communities?--- for this, you would write a report about...
Writing Feedbackdropbows90 - Sep 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 26, 2010
|IELTS essay/ describing the information in the two graphs below
2 - Maria, thanks for doing this! Ana, I think this is the kind of essay that should help you improve...
Writing Feedbackpendar - Sep 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 26, 2010
|compare team sports and individual sports
2 - "Let" is okay. "Enable" is better. In addition,team sports make enable us to know lots of abilities. --- actually...
Writing Feedbackdaini219 - Sep 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 26, 2010
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