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|A teacher is the one who guides the child how to live a successful life; Parents
Writing FeedbackGeorgesebastian - Sep 21, 2010 / dil - Sep 21, 2010
|"I am a loaf of bread" - Unique Personal Essay: Wanted
5 - Yep, great job here... great variation of sentence length, and it is just such a cool metaphor. The word...
Writing Feedbackmneale324 - Sep 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 21, 2010
|Memorable people that influenced you (my grandmother) - Cbest writing
3 - During our life time we all have encountered some memorable people that influenced .In fact,I grew up in a...
Writing Feedbackconcord123 - Sep 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 20, 2010
|The co-workers should believe in fellowship. Some important characteristics of a co-worker - Toefl
5 - Therefore he always left office sharp on time without giving any consideration to whether the work had been finished...
Writing Feedbacksuve - Sep 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 20, 2010
|Isn't it worth to try to find out what more things wait for us on the other side
4 - Thanks, Shannon Martin & Kevin. I made careless mistakes. Thank you for your advice. It has been great...
Writing Feedbackbrlee82 - Sep 18, 2010 / brlee82 - Sep 20, 2010
|Illustration Essay - "A Look Into My Life Through Obstacles" - feedback
4 - Thank you Susan and Kevin for your suggestions! Your help and input are very much appreciated :)...
Writing FeedbackLaramie - Sep 17, 2010 / Laramie - Sep 20, 2010
|My Favorite Holiday is Eid Al-Fitr
4 - Yes, in that case, you are correct. It should read: my twenty-one-day-old baby. Again, your essay was very...
Writing FeedbackZubaida - Sep 19, 2010 / mea505 - Sep 20, 2010
|university students required to attend classes?; it should be their decision
6 - Hello. Here's my two-cents. =) In order to have a substantial essay, you need to have balance and...
Writing Feedbacksoccon36 - Sep 17, 2010 / idasuhaila - Sep 20, 2010
|In my view studying in a group is a better method than studying on your own.
Writing Feedbackdil - Sep 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 19, 2010
|"addicted to something addictive" - It is just a Daily Journal
4 - You certainly are right. Your journaling is as meaningful and significant as anyone's writing about anything. I'm glad...
Writing Feedbackeastspringkim - Sep 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 19, 2010
|"brave heroes", English GCSE Creative Writing about Anything
3 - i like the concept behind you essay. i feel like susan as also made the necessary corrections...
Writing FeedbackMerkeysa - Sep 16, 2010 / ginny2345 - Sep 19, 2010
|My shoulder and my friend - journal writing
3 - Since yesterday my shoulder has been appropriately operating, which means that whenever I try to use my shoulder to...
Writing Feedbackeastspringkim - Sep 17, 2010 / susu - Sep 18, 2010
|Happiness is a state of mind; Realizing Happiness
2 - Various would be a good word here: People from all walks of life try to achieve happiness through various...
Writing Feedbackasokapalama - Sep 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 18, 2010
|Advertising encourages people to buy things or not
3 - I suggest rewriting this sentence. It does not take a stance on the issue. Saying it is subject...
Writing Feedbackkal - Sep 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 17, 2010
|A narrative essay -First time I experienced an earthquake- Feedback
9 - Ana, Now that you have a number of critiques and suggestions concerning your essay, why don't you take...
Writing Feedbackarubi - Sep 3, 2010 / mea505 - Sep 17, 2010
|TOEFL---Parents should help determining the future
12 - I wish to appreciate you for sharing this essay because I am also preparing for TOEFL and the writing...
Writing Feedbackryutei133 - Sep 7, 2010 / eastspringkim - Sep 17, 2010
|(SAT essay)ARE there heroes who will be remembered forever?
Writing Feedbackstranger4ever - Sep 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 17, 2010
|Doing the same things or change? is change always good? - DISCUSSION
4 - Dear Raksmeymony and Kevin, I greatly appreciate your kindness. Thanks for correcting my mistakes and also recommending different ways...
Writing Feedbacklktramanh - Sep 14, 2010 / lktramanh - Sep 17, 2010
|vocational training:essays for those in their secondary school and high school finals
3 - This is the wrong way to use versatile: A versatile number of graduates are being Do this: versatile ...
Writing Feedbackelfranchise - Sep 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 16, 2010
|Writing about Heuristics that relates to your life
Writing Feedbackcomet2000 - Sep 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 16, 2010
|Why did Kimveer Gill murder? - Paragraph for Psychology class
3 - Cool! I am going to steal this "without further ado-plus-colon" form of introducing things. Kimveer Gill was...
Writing Feedbacknortherlywind - Sep 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 16, 2010
|Studying at home by using technology or studying at home.
Writing FeedbackErica Kim - Sep 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 16, 2010
|We can now buy more things but lost our traditional values and customs -IELTS writing
Writing FeedbackVeronika - Sep 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 16, 2010
|"We are changing the world with technology." (Bill Gates) Is this true?
Writing Feedbackidasuhaila - Sep 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 15, 2010
|"The Truth about the Tiananmen Square Incident (massacre)" - Academic history essay
Writing Feedbackkin0504 - Sep 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 15, 2010
|There are many pros and cons toward communicating ways; different options
3 - Look at this part where you need "AND" I think books, radio, and television are the most effective ways....
Writing Feedbackthaitam - Sep 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 15, 2010
|"the doctor announced that I was pregnant" - Courageous action
5 - Maybe it was because of the anticipation of becoming a mother that made me so much stronger. Oh,...
Writing FeedbackKathyLala - Sep 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 15, 2010
|Generation gap: your generation is different from your parents' generation?
5 - Yes, I'm sorry for not explaining well. The thesis statement is confusing! ---> However these vast differences...
Writing Feedbacksuve - Sep 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 15, 2010
|IELTS ; Is it unfair to pay such high salaries to Football players?
2 - ...than a normal person will do in all her or his its life. Great corrections and guidance here!...
Writing Feedbackjcmorais - Sep 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 15, 2010
|Data commentary about the growth of 3G phones and total phones
4 - Apostrophes are used in contractions, and that makes the writing informal. He can't win the game because he...
Writing Feedbacksonofgod229 - Sep 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 14, 2010
|THE CAY, story about one trip in the in Caribbean Sea
Writing Feedbackzeed - Sep 2, 2010 / zeed - Sep 14, 2010
|Learning from books or from experience ? What is your opinion?
9 - Im assuming the promt for this essay is something like: Is more knowledge gained from reading books or from...
Writing FeedbackTomomi - Aug 25, 2010 / keberg1 - Sep 14, 2010
|TOEFL - 'Meng Zi Story'; Classmates are a more important influence
4 - Some great corrections have been made here. For example, now you know that the common expression is: In addition...
Writing Feedbackrmli - Sep 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 13, 2010
|GRE essay: Laws restrict but not eradicate wrongdoings.
3 - Actually i wrote this essay for the following prompt: It is possible to pass laws that control or...
Writing FeedbackKapayapaanify1 - Sep 11, 2010 / Kapayapaanify1 - Sep 13, 2010
|sense of humor, honesty, willingness - QUALITIES OF A GOOD NEIGHBOR - TOEFL
Writing Feedbacksoccon36 - Aug 29, 2010 / mea505 - Sep 13, 2010
|What are some important characteristics of a co-worker?-Toefl
Writing Feedbacksoccon36 - Sep 9, 2010 / soccon36 - Sep 13, 2010
|Should employers allow employees to use machine and equipment for their personal need
3 - ※ Thank you, Minh Tam and Luu Dang. Thank you for your best ideas. I will consider those ideas for...
Writing FeedbackTomomi - Sep 9, 2010 / Tomomi - Sep 13, 2010
|'destroyed pleasures'; Childhood is the happiest time of a person's life
8 - thanks...
Writing Feedbackkal - Sep 9, 2010 / kal - Sep 12, 2010
|It is better to take a job with a low pay but safe than to take a job with a high pay
5 - ...and a job is a man person's most precious possession resource. That is why chinese young people like...
Writing Feedbackquzheng - Sep 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 12, 2010
|"the National Police Cadet Corps" - about a competition you entered.
2 - I agree. Here is an example: Although the trainings we had were tedious and tough, I enjoy competing...
Writing Feedbackjiajun95 - Sep 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 12, 2010
|TOEFL TOPIC:Newspaper is the best way of learning about a foreign country.
Writing Feedbacktshml1990 - Sep 8, 2010 / tshml1990 - Sep 12, 2010
|Essay- Fatigue (after a full marathon)
Writing FeedbackPurpleBook - Sep 6, 2010 / PurpleBook - Sep 12, 2010
|GRE issue essay (45min) It is always an individual who is the impetus for innovation
4 - Though Edison's contributions, we are able to plan for tomorrow's delights late into the evening. This is an...
Writing Feedbackkgb66 - Sep 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 11, 2010
|What can we learn from sports?
2 - Let's say in instead of under: In such situation, those who are actively committed would be squeezing out their...
Writing Feedbackjiajun95 - Sep 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 11, 2010
|I disagree that television has destroyed communication between friends and family.
10 - It's funny that you mention that, because my sister watches Discovery more than anyone I know, and her...
Writing Feedbackjay4TOEFL - Aug 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 11, 2010
|The Time Machine - if i had the opportunity to do something again, what would it be.
3 - Everyone wishes to have a time machine which can be used to correct a past occurrences. It will...
Writing FeedbackOlaoluwa - Sep 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 11, 2010
|Comprehensive Note on; A Civil servant is a Public servant
2 - Don't sever the public! Sever means something different! :-) This way is good: To sum up, the...
Writing Feedbackasad - Sep 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 11, 2010
|"Five years ago, we residents of Morganton..." - GRE Task
Writing FeedbackMaxim - Sep 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 11, 2010
|"The diagram related how are lead pencils made.", IELTS: writing part 1
7 - Dear Altraga, About your band score, I guess it is around 5.5. It would be raised if you could...
Writing FeedbackAltraga - Aug 31, 2010 / sharkondiet - Sep 11, 2010
|GRE - essay Laws should not be rigid or fixed; flexibility - 'hurricane Katrina'
4 - The first paragraph is excellent, but you should use the word should in there somewhere to show that you...
Writing Feedbackkgb66 - Sep 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 10, 2010
|some people say TV has left family members unable to communicate with one another.
4 - Yeah, I don't understand this sentence either. End the first paragraph with a sentence that tells the main...
Writing Feedbacksandeepkale - Sep 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 10, 2010
|essay/ IELTS Animal testing is the only way to guarantee the safety of new products?
Writing Feedbacksunshinebank - Aug 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 10, 2010
|"Riding a motorcycle in Vietnam" - Risk you have taken, why and was it worth it?
4 - hahaha you have nothing to worry about! The process of translation is common to all bilingual people, but...
Writing FeedbackKathyLala - Sep 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 10, 2010
|Why do we need music? The traditinal music of a country is more important than other?
3 - Below I'll give you some correct sentences to practice. Please type each sentence the correct way 10 times, and...
Writing Feedbackhedi_65 - Sep 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 10, 2010
|informative essay; human trafficking
3 - If it comes in second, it is not fastest. Human trafficking is one of the fastest increasing criminal industry...
Writing Feedbackxoxsandrina - Sep 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 10, 2010
|The Will of the Butterflies - An essay on any observation.
3 - I am impressed from the start. Here is how I would write this sentence: Somewhere amongst all in...
Writing Feedbackkame - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 10, 2010
|"we must live in big city" -which is best palce to live small town or city?
6 - May be you can change it to, ''advanced tecnology which are used today enables people to live on...
Writing Feedbackjayeshjvm0805 - Aug 24, 2010 / jiajun95 - Sep 10, 2010
|Does everyone see everything from the same perspective- SAT essay
Writing Feedbackstranger4ever - Sep 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 9, 2010
|GRE Argument Essay "People should not a misled by the advertising competition...
5 - It's important to refer correctly to the conclusion that belongs to the author. Use an apostrophe, but do...
Writing Feedbackabcdef123 - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 9, 2010
|GRE Issue Essay "Colleges and universities should offer more contemporary culture"
Writing Feedbackabcdef123 - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 9, 2010
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