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|"global warming will result to numerous changes" - essay needs editing
Writing Feedbacksothenkikisaid - Jun 6, 2010 / sothenkikisaid - Jun 6, 2010
|IELTS task 2 : Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood.
9 - my suggest is that you can write about 3 sentences in first paragraph to support both sides. Make your...
Writing Feedbackwilly0123 - May 20, 2010 / mabu9669 - Jun 6, 2010
|childrens eating habits nowadays are different from previous generation
2 - Nowadays, children's eating habits lead them to heath deterioration.I entirely agree with this view and believe that this alarming...
Writing Feedbacksheina - Jun 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 5, 2010
|The main function of university
3 - Use capital letters to start each sentence: Some people think that university should provide graduates with the knowledge...
Writing Feedbacknoorahan - Jun 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 5, 2010
|Focus on creative expression should be given importance or not ?
6 - In academic writing, you never have to say said that ,"blah blah...." William Shakespeare once said, that "An objective...
Writing Feedbackshalini singh - Jun 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 5, 2010
|IELTS taks 2 essay: computer has negative effects to children
6 - Well, the thesis statement should answer in a single sentence the question that the essay is trying to...
Writing Feedbackdungpvt2004 - Jun 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 5, 2010
|Computers affect society - CLEP English Comp Practice
3 - This is a compound sentence that needs a comma: Many things have changed over the years , but one...
Writing Feedbackoperalady - Jun 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 5, 2010
|IELTS writing task two>Compare the advantage vs. disadvantage of three media
3 - In nowadays modern society, there are plenty of different media to spread information and knowledge. Here I am...
Writing Feedbackssachsieh - Jun 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 5, 2010
|What I like apart from having fun.
Writing FeedbackCharz - Jun 2, 2010 / Charz - Jun 4, 2010
|TOEFL: NEWS ABOUT CELEBRITIES
7 - hi~~ Nowadays, it is very easy to hear the news about the personal lives of famous people such as...
Writing Feedbackhatung94 - Jun 1, 2010 / kevinhsin1124 - Jun 4, 2010
|Equal number of students:IETLS essay
4 - the indispensable role of education in a man's life cannot be overlooked: i meant to talk about importance of...
Writing FeedbackaJ_M_65 - May 18, 2010 / aJ_M_65 - Jun 4, 2010
|comparison between 5 countries, asking about Ielts writing task one
Writing Feedbackrashahanna - Jun 1, 2010 / rashahanna - Jun 4, 2010
|SAT essay: Is censorship sometimes justifiable?
10 - Hi Jesslyn, I became a fan of your writing. I read your other posts. It was very interesting...
Writing Feedbackpuroodsy - May 20, 2010 / renga78 - Jun 4, 2010
|In some countries at the age of 18 young people are allowed to drive, vote and mar
5 - In some nations, it is common that, young people at around 18 years are allowed to vote, drive and...
Writing Feedbackrenga78 - Jun 2, 2010 / phuocqui - Jun 3, 2010
|'Imperfection is beauty' - If there has been some obstacle or bump in the road
4 - Imperfections, or bumps in the road are mere fragments that are there for a reason. (I crossed out part...
Writing Feedbackaubrey - Jun 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 3, 2010
|I analyzed the lyric "Temptation Waits" by Garbage
Writing Feedbackghgyfkd1 - May 31, 2010 / ghgyfkd1 - Jun 3, 2010
|Quammen vs. Scully: my Essay that compares and analyses two texts
2 - Hi there, We are lucky to have such an outstanding writer participating in our forum. I see that...
Writing Feedbackmisspellar - Jun 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 2, 2010
|Compare and Contrast Essay- sibling/no sibling
2 - Christian, how weirdly self-effacing it is to combine consonant sounds from your first and last name to produce "Crud"......
Writing Feedbackhaeddleman - May 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 1, 2010
|"I had a blood disorder" - help with Descriptive Personal Essay
15 - Yep, it was interesting to watch you make progress with this one. I hope you stick around and keep...
Writing Feedbackhaeddleman - May 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 1, 2010
|Nowadays young children are using mobile phones
Writing Feedbackrenga78 - May 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 1, 2010
|TOEFL: "couch potato"; How do movies or television influence people's behavior?
NEW - Watching television and movie are become a common entertainment in our daily life. In my opinion, movies and television...
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|Agree or disagree that progress is always good? Yes it is always good!
4 - Thanks a lot Kevin and for homework as well. Your feedback was very encouraging. Will keep writing ......
Writing FeedbackUmeda - May 28, 2010 / Umeda - Jun 1, 2010
|IELTS ESSAY: INFLUENCE OF LARGE FACTORY
3 - The main disadvantage is contamination. It is true that some areas are suffering the dire consequences caused by overdeveloping...
Writing Feedbacksheldon - May 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 31, 2010
|Healthy life style
Writing FeedbackJuliaS - May 27, 2010 / JuliaS - May 31, 2010
|Income gap is necessary to sustain a society to run dynamically; sports professionals earn big money
5 - Hi cathyliu, I have identified the following, hope it would help. All the best. You can probably...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - May 27, 2010 / renga78 - May 30, 2010
|Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and playing
3 - Your comments were absolutely fantastic. Along with your correction you mentioned the reason to emphasis why schools are important...
Writing Feedbackrenga78 - May 29, 2010 / renga78 - May 30, 2010
|IELTS ESSAY : PREPARED FOOD
3 - This is great, thanks for making this an excellent thread. I'll add some ideas: Nowadays, more and more...
Writing Feedbacksheldon - May 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 30, 2010
|Why We Crave Horror Movies
3 - It is great that you do not include lots of unhelpful words and phrases, like some writers do. Yet,...
Writing Feedbackreeseinskool - May 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 30, 2010
|CAPE poetry essay, experiences of trauma in the Caribbean
Writing Feedbackhustlerprince - May 27, 2010 / hustlerprince - May 30, 2010
|TOEFL: What I would change in my hometown if I could
5 - thx~everyone...
Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - May 27, 2010 / kevinhsin1124 - May 30, 2010
|Students should be required to attend classes; may need explanations of teachers
5 - the teachers can find out what the students still do not understand or misunderstand and then explain ... ...
Writing Feedbackphuocqui - May 24, 2010 / sheldon - May 29, 2010
|TOEFL: Improve Roads or Public Transports
3 - I'm so glad Azeri is here helping people. Thanks!! Many people think that governments should spend money on...
Writing Feedbackhatung94 - May 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 27, 2010
|Online Education Myths, peer review assignment
Writing FeedbackHigherEducation - May 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 27, 2010
|Has the Chinese government changed after the Tiananmen Square Massacre?
2 - Hello, I think you need to proofread your essay better. There are quite a few grammatical errors, some...
Writing Feedbackken349137 - May 26, 2010 / puroodsy - May 27, 2010
|SAT Essay: Are our decisions always limited by the rules of society?
Writing Feedbackpuroodsy - May 25, 2010 / puroodsy - May 27, 2010
|PEOPLE SHOULD CHANGE THEIR JOBS ATLEAST ONCE - FEEDBACK
NEW - If we are to compare the job flexibility of today's generation and those of 20 years back. We can...
Writing Feedbackprince303 - May 27, 2010 / — -
|Classification essay- Modern students's learning style
5 - For a long time, studying have has been a significant issue among human beings. That is the only...
Writing FeedbackHUTAllen - May 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2010
|Computer based Instructions ! Good or bad.
4 - Yes, good corrections here. You have some options: Computers represent one of the... or The computer is one of...
Writing Feedbackshalini singh - May 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2010
|ESSAY - READING ENTERTAINMENT BOOKS INSTEAD OF EDUCATIONAL BOOKS - FEEDBACK
2 - Capitalize the titles of books. If we are to compare the difference between the reading habits of today's...
Writing Feedbackprince303 - May 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2010
|IELTS TASK 2 : Study abroad (advantages and disadvantages)
7 - Yep, keep practicing. It'll be perfect soon! Read aloud to activate all the various areas of your brain when...
Writing FeedbackNguyenXuanKien - May 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2010
|IELTS ESSAY : FINANCIAL AID TO DEVELOPING COUNTRIES
Writing Feedbacksheldon - May 24, 2010 / sheldon - May 26, 2010
|Art history paper about looted artwork during WWII
NEW - I just need general feedback like if my sentences and grammar make sense and if I'm answering the question...
Writing Feedbackqueensuri - May 25, 2010 / — -
|Factory is always links to the pollution problem
2 - I'll give some help here, too. I hope you will tell us if you have questions about the changes...
Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - May 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 25, 2010
|TOEFL: THE INTERNET - problems or information? 'most powerful media'
8 - I think like these: To begin with/The first factor(/belief/reason/catalyst...) is that/I believe/.../(TRY NOTHING in replacement, just leave a gap...
Writing Feedbackdjanat - May 4, 2010 / triplesmickey - May 25, 2010
|Should crimes committed many years ago be forgotten? - Essay writing advice
7 - Well, some sentences like the one above are very, very impressive. You write like someone who is...
Writing Feedbacklentan - May 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 24, 2010
|People are moving in to the big cities for more comfortable and convenient life
10 - Mickey, you seem seriously interested in helping people. Everyone participating in this thread made such a unique contribution; I'm...
Writing Feedbackprince303 - May 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 23, 2010
|Art Self-Evaluation piece: the process of creating your art portfolio
Writing FeedbackJd87rh - May 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 22, 2010
|Technology, one offspring of science, is a world of imagination being made true
7 - to some extent* :? Interesting way of approaching the prompt. placing down arguments for the assertive and...
Writing Feedbacktriplesmickey - May 12, 2010 / meisj0n - May 22, 2010
|Today we have a variety of food and we have various choices to prepare food
4 - Today we have variety of food, and we have various choices about how to prepare the food. We can...
Writing FeedbackArshin - May 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 22, 2010
|It is easy to welcome innovation and accept new ideas
Writing FeedbackGary1986 - May 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 22, 2010
|Music and art in school essay
6 - In conclusion, undoubtedly, this is the era of computers and science. Therefore, schools must be flexible enough to...
Writing Feedbackprince303 - May 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 21, 2010
|ESSAY- Comment on freedom on choice of clothing in schools - FEEDBACK
2 - No comma necessary here: School is the place which lays foundation ... progress or their overall personalities ....
Writing Feedbackprince303 - May 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 21, 2010
|Marine Pollution Introductory paragraph
2 - Source of survival is a strange phrase. It might be better to write: Water is the most crucial factor...
Writing Feedbackeveehp - May 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 20, 2010
|My hero, Terry Fox born in Canada
3 - Yes, that is true. It seems that Namon is struggling to improve her/his English, though, so let's help...
Writing Feedbackthailand - May 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 20, 2010
|Parents should encourage their high school students for part time jobs !
4 - Working twenty years at an inconsequential job may not give as much satisfaction as a highly prolific and demanding...
Writing Feedbackshalini singh - May 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 20, 2010
|SAT: even though having a good leader is important, we should not blindly follow his decision
Writing Feedbackpuroodsy - May 18, 2010 / puroodsy - May 20, 2010
|"True beauty" is the good humanity
6 - I think your grasp of English is really good actually, but it just takes practice Tips on writing:...
Writing Feedbackyangzom - May 14, 2010 / meisj0n - May 20, 2010
|IELTS; MOVIES & TELEVISION CAN POSITIVELY INFLUENCE PEOPLES' BEHAVIOR
2 - try to avoid writing firstly, secondly.. instead use sentences like one of the significant reasons.. over all good ideas,...
Writing Feedbackphuocqui - May 17, 2010 / prince303 - May 19, 2010
|"Failure is necessary for education to take place?" - grade my essay
Writing FeedbackMizo Metallic - May 13, 2010 / Mizo Metallic - May 19, 2010
|ielts essay: Advantages of attending school from a young age
2 - HI..SEPIDEH You have some grammatical errors in your essay.Which i guess, already been corrected by other users. Just remember...
Writing Feedbackgingerpopo - May 17, 2010 / prince303 - May 18, 2010
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