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|Marine Pollution Introductory paragraph
2 - Source of survival is a strange phrase. It might be better to write: Water is the most crucial factor...
Writing Feedbackeveehp - May 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 20, 2010
|My hero, Terry Fox born in Canada
3 - Yes, that is true. It seems that Namon is struggling to improve her/his English, though, so let's help...
Writing Feedbackthailand - May 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 20, 2010
|Parents should encourage their high school students for part time jobs !
4 - Working twenty years at an inconsequential job may not give as much satisfaction as a highly prolific and demanding...
Writing Feedbackshalini singh - May 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 20, 2010
|SAT: even though having a good leader is important, we should not blindly follow his decision
Writing Feedbackpuroodsy - May 18, 2010 / puroodsy - May 20, 2010
|"True beauty" is the good humanity
6 - I think your grasp of English is really good actually, but it just takes practice Tips on writing:...
Writing Feedbackyangzom - May 14, 2010 / meisj0n - May 20, 2010
|IELTS; MOVIES & TELEVISION CAN POSITIVELY INFLUENCE PEOPLES' BEHAVIOR
2 - try to avoid writing firstly, secondly.. instead use sentences like one of the significant reasons.. over all good ideas,...
Writing Feedbackphuocqui - May 17, 2010 / prince303 - May 19, 2010
|"Failure is necessary for education to take place?" - grade my essay
Writing FeedbackMizo Metallic - May 13, 2010 / Mizo Metallic - May 19, 2010
|ielts essay: Advantages of attending school from a young age
2 - HI..SEPIDEH You have some grammatical errors in your essay.Which i guess, already been corrected by other users. Just remember...
Writing Feedbackgingerpopo - May 17, 2010 / prince303 - May 18, 2010
|'dark metal genre'; About the Music and why it's important to many people?
4 - thanx alot bro for your notes,but unfortunately most of them are typos. i just want you to give...
Writing FeedbackPink1 - May 16, 2010 / Pink1 - May 17, 2010
|Control over happiness - 'people gain happiness differently' (SAT)
5 - The first sentence, which should aptly give the first impression, is quite prolix and obscure. To say that...
Writing FeedbackSA51 - Apr 28, 2010 / triplesmickey - May 17, 2010
|Theatre Under The Stars
NEW - The popular musicals titled Shrek the Musical and West Side Story will be joining another popular musical that had...
Writing Feedbackshane123 - May 17, 2010 / — -
|"Fifty-Four Forty or Fight" History Research Essay
2 - Capitalize "River" because it is part of a proper noun. Columbia River I see a little typo: rejection...
Writing Feedbackicemaster2340 - May 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 16, 2010
|Term Paper: Sailor Mentality
3 - Don't use a semi-colon here: ...when he writes: "With a philosophical flourish... or ...when he writes, "With a philosophical...
Writing Feedbackwilcerf - Jan 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 16, 2010
|The important lesson is life. The best teachers for the life are parents.
4 - Generally, people should count( consider) their parents as their life's teacher.Because they had got more experienced life. They could...
Writing FeedbackShukur - May 7, 2010 / babydoll - May 16, 2010
|Children have trend to be significantly more violent and careless in their study and social life
Writing FeedbackPink1 - May 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 16, 2010
|Text messaging: write about an invention that has changed your life
3 - The invention that made the biggest change in my life was text messaging. This discovery changed my way of...
Writing FeedbackLordBartosz - May 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 15, 2010
|CBEST Writing: My favorite subject/course in school (Korean Literature)
2 - Don't capitalize high: When I was in high school, my favorite... Thanks, Shalini, for the work you did...
Writing Feedbackimhe - May 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 15, 2010
|Questioning authority is important for improvements and innovations in many fields.
Writing Feedbacktyro - May 14, 2010 / — -
|About Malaysia's problems
NEW - Every country has it own problem, for example, Iraq/Iran is facing a terrible war, Africa is facing poverty, and...
Writing Feedbackcelineccky - May 14, 2010 / — -
|My research assignment on binge drinking and the health effects, review request
12 - This is a case where you say 2 things, and each thing should have a whole paragraph written about...
Writing Feedbackbondsemerson - May 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 14, 2010
|School teach for career or general knowledge (IELTS test)
NEW - i'm prepairing for the IELTS test and my teacher give me this topic question. help me to check for...
Writing Feedbackviebboy - May 14, 2010 / — -
|What factors do you think influence news editors' decisions?
4 - THanks so much! i often type wrongly english words but it could be better when i use pencils!:)......
Writing Feedbacktityeu - Apr 21, 2010 / tityeu - May 14, 2010
|fossil fuel energy, "The Power and the Glory"
Writing Feedbackgotten - May 6, 2010 / gotten - May 14, 2010
|"Is personal satisfaction the motivation for people to achieve?", covers point?
Writing Feedbackstephen1341 - May 10, 2010 / stephen1341 - May 12, 2010
|"She pulls the knife out..." - Short Story Help
4 - Don't switch verb tense: She stabbed Liam in the stomach. Liam was yelling... Yes, you certainly seem to...
Writing Feedbackchitown31 - May 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 12, 2010
|Sex Education In Schools and Colleges Is A Must.
2 - Pathetic is a word that seems judgmental, so it is better without it: ...It indeed is the pathetic plight...
Writing Feedbackabhisheksahai - May 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 11, 2010
|"beauty" and "travelling"
Writing Feedbackhallohallo - May 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 11, 2010
|Mrs. More: Describe a person you most admire, and the impact they had on you
2 - Please, check the Tenses you have used in your essay. In several phrases you are mixing them by using...
Writing Feedbackyahyabluecat - May 8, 2010 / milan2003_07 - May 10, 2010
|Toefl ibt writing Q2: University classes attendance, requirement or option ?
3 - Great corrections, "name here" Notice that "name here" added an apostrophe like this ' optional to enhance students'...
Writing Feedbackfrederic80 - May 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 10, 2010
|Childhood Experience-Writing Practice ("my parents are still my best friends")
Writing Feedbackimhe - May 9, 2010 / willy0123 - May 10, 2010
|Does advancement of Technology cause Pollution?
Writing Feedbackkayyao - May 3, 2010 / kayyao - May 8, 2010
|The Internet and Collegian Populace - checking the validity and soundness
6 - Honestly, this sort of paper, for which I have a high level of vested interest, was completed in the...
Writing FeedbackManDan88 - Apr 30, 2010 / ManDan88 - May 8, 2010
|Happiness for my school leaving examination :)
Writing Feedbackvalentina - May 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 8, 2010
|Growing up in a rural area provides an easy-going life pattern to children
3 - Since there are various specialized education systems in the city, it will help the children for education. - Existence...
Writing Feedbackbillryu94 - May 6, 2010 / Azeri - May 8, 2010
3 - Okay, the good news is that this essay is obviously very well researched and informative. However, it seems to...
Writing FeedbackG_D087 - May 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 8, 2010
|"health" again for my school leaving examination :)
Writing Feedbackvalentina - May 8, 2010 / valentina - May 8, 2010
|The Reverse Culture essay
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Mar 19, 2010 / Rajiv - May 7, 2010
|Machines have many great features that are impossible for human to compete it
3 - many thanks for your help. i must work hard. god willing i won't have these kinds of problems in...
Writing Feedbacksina1989 - May 5, 2010 / sina1989 - May 7, 2010
|Difficulties faced today are greater than yesterday - GRE Essay Preparation
NEW - I am a beginner here. I am trying to improve my essay writing skills. Below is my first practice...
Writing Feedbacktyro - May 6, 2010 / — -
|Thesis: "Hybridity and Metamorphosis"
4 - Hi again, so if you didn't entirely toss out "self fashioning" just yet, you can still save it. I...
Writing FeedbackBnoel - May 4, 2010 / meisj0n - May 5, 2010
|magnificent historical buildings should not be destroyed: protection by law
2 - ... while others say that it only consumes the place of new ones and they should immediately be knocked...
Writing Feedbackbaris alibeyogl - May 4, 2010 / EF_Susan - May 5, 2010
|Eating at restaurants or at home? TOEFL essay.
Writing Feedbackvijaya - May 4, 2010 / vijaya - May 5, 2010
|GRE-issue8 political leaders withhold information from public
Writing Feedbackcasablancahp - Apr 26, 2010 / casablancahp - May 5, 2010
|Cbest essay prompt :. Imagine that you could have made one change in the past .
Writing Feedbackshalini singh - Apr 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 4, 2010
|City Managar: What is Your Ideal Career Essay
Writing Feedbacknewmt2008 - Apr 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 4, 2010
|Anti-Bullying Informative Paper (Our Brother's Keeper)
NEW - This is to be a Informative Paper in MLA format. Can someone proof read this? I dont see on...
Writing Feedbackqueenlyblessed - May 3, 2010 / — -
|"always obey your parents" Childhood experience which changed my life completely
NEW - Many childhood experinces leave lifelong impressions on people. Write an essay in which you describe a memorable childhood experience...
Writing Feedbackshalini singh - May 3, 2010 / — -
|Classification essay: Foreign trade university students
5 - essay 2: priciple: major/faculty I am a second-year student at Foreign Trade University. People have diversed views towards...
Writing Feedbackthuong_lethi - Apr 26, 2010 / kayyao - May 3, 2010
|Study abroad should be encouraged when students are eighteen
Writing FeedbackEujin - May 2, 2010 / Eujin - May 3, 2010
|watching TV is an unhealthy pastime. what do you think about this statement?
3 - Great corrections here!! I also have this advice for you: Let this be paragraph 2: The first benefit can...
Writing Feedbackthuong_lethi - May 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 3, 2010
|Writing a Public Health Policy Analysis paper (apa format)
10 - Pharmacists should be trained before administering vaccines to people. This is a tough one. I think you need...
Writing Feedbackcomet2000 - Mar 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 3, 2010
|Single sex education and coed
10 - Compare and contrast essays are difficult. You need to revise the intro paragraph so that you are...
Writing Feedbackazhar - Apr 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 3, 2010
|Jealousy -- a bad human habit!
7 - I think you provide us a very good topic. It's very thought-provoking. Well, maybe you are too young...
Writing Feedbackstranger4ever - Apr 27, 2010 / vivien_wang - May 3, 2010
|"Why people attend to universities or colleges" - Toefl IBT
3 - Hi, good luck on your test!! Generally, people from all nations strive to attend universities. Each individual who wants...
Writing FeedbackShukur - May 2, 2010 / kayyao - May 2, 2010
|Age of the Internet which brings the world so close to each other
2 - Capitalize Internet. capitalize English Use a spell checker. More and more people seem to be interacting with one...
Writing Feedbackbrainlair - Apr 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 1, 2010
|"dedication to mom" - people who influenced my values in my life
4 - I like the first sentence, but I would add a comma: Though there are many people who influenced my...
Writing Feedbackmarkweeta - Apr 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 30, 2010
|"How to Plan a Birthday Party for Adults" - process analysis essay
2 - The next step is to choos e an appropriate place, such as restaurant, history club, hotel's suite or ballroom...
Writing FeedbackTaoTao - Apr 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 30, 2010
|TOEFL: All high school students should be required to study foreign languages
4 - Kevin and Djanat, thank you for your feedbacks. They really helped me. I drew relevant conclusions from your comments...
Writing FeedbackAzeri - Apr 26, 2010 / Azeri - Apr 30, 2010
|Finding an ideal community now a days has become a major problem. Vadalism is the threat.
6 - Thanks kevin!...
Writing Feedbackshalini singh - Apr 27, 2010 / shalini singh - Apr 29, 2010
|Media indeed poses an enormous influence on our opinions as well as attitudes
2 - are actually mastering the thought of individuals and that there are little can be done to eliminate this control....
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Apr 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 29, 2010
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