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|The unsuspecting wayfarer
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Oct 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 16, 2010
|Thesis Statement for essay 'internet has destroyed the ability to communicate'
4 - Thank you so much for your feedback, I'm taking a Toefl course now, I hope, I'll write much better...
Writing Feedbacktoefl - Oct 15, 2010 / toefl - Oct 16, 2010
|Perspective on Team Work - A group working or individual work?
Writing Feedbackradwa - Oct 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 15, 2010
|The mayor views on new automobile manufacturing plant: GRE argument essay
2 - Here is a good place to use a colon: ...and only focused on its most conspicuous negative quality: the...
Writing Feedbackradwa - Oct 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 15, 2010
|The process of researching and writing an essay
3 - I don't like the first sentence, because examinations are PART of life. Can you try a different intro sentence?...
Writing Feedbackanna_ lewin - Oct 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 14, 2010
|Responce towards Iron Dice by John G. Stoessinger (Essay about cause of WW1)
2 - Okay, then I expect to see those factors explained as such in the essay... I'll keep reading... ...
Writing Feedbackicemaster2340 - Oct 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 14, 2010
|There is nothing that an uneducated person can teach an educated person
6 - Even though many people might think that we learn only from educated people, from my point of view we...
Writing Feedbackmehdi1995 - Oct 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 14, 2010
|Narrative essay about how was my feeling about getting money.
3 - Namrata, thanks for the time you invested here... great advice. I agree that Sim's attempt is not bad. It's...
Writing Feedbackhowtowrite - Oct 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 14, 2010
|"Honor towards One's Mother and Father" - I need help summing up my essay on honor.
Writing FeedbackSupernewtJR - Oct 13, 2010 / SupernewtJR - Oct 14, 2010
|Students should go to the army course with 12 months after their graduation?
3 - Politics is always a number one matter in a country. To prepare for war posibility in advance, going to...
Writing Feedbackthaitam - Oct 11, 2010 / thaitam - Oct 14, 2010
|Pers.Essay: A Time When I Encountered Something Greater Than Myself--Poverty in India
5 - Thank you so VERY much for all the feedback. I wasn't expecting any at all; your comments were more...
Writing Feedbacktmiplease - Oct 8, 2010 / tmiplease - Oct 13, 2010
|Compare/Contrast Family Dynamics
Writing Feedbacknn8nk - Oct 7, 2010 / nn8nk - Oct 13, 2010
|A Life Long lesson Learned
Writing FeedbackKathyChen - Oct 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 13, 2010
|"Being Muslim" - UCF Amissions Essay: How my culture has influenced who i am.
3 - Doing...-----> requires However, doing these certain responsibilities requires dedication and commitment. When I decided to wear the head scarf...
Writing FeedbackZunaira94 - Oct 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 13, 2010
|"Human survival will depend on effective measures to cope with ecological problems"
Writing Feedbackqwerty123456789 - Oct 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 13, 2010
|Appearance, work spirit, skills - important characteristics of a co-worker
Writing Feedbackecmagalhaes - Oct 5, 2010 / ecmagalhaes - Oct 13, 2010
|Is the dependence on computers a good thing?
4 - I also have written an essay about computers' importance to students. In my opinion, it's not really great to...
Writing Feedbackdtth - Oct 3, 2010 / candynguyen381 - Oct 13, 2010
|a change of heart and different view on life
5 - Actually, I wonder about the format of your writing. i mean an essay needs three main parts; Introduction, body...
Writing Feedbackunavailableuser - Oct 11, 2010 / candynguyen381 - Oct 13, 2010
|IELTS: Government should make more effort to promote alternative sources of energy.
NEW - Hi all... Could you please assess my writing and help me improving it Topic: Government should make more...
Writing Feedbackielts - Oct 13, 2010 / — -
|Reflective experience to Peck's inspiring article on struggle in life!
Writing FeedbackMoeMoe1 - Oct 9, 2010 / MoeMoe1 - Oct 12, 2010
|"Innocent Manipulation" (Renée Curry's article Construction of Innocence)
Writing Feedbacksfrick - Sep 29, 2010 / sfrick - Oct 12, 2010
|It is a grave mistake to theorize before one has data."
Writing Feedbacksimiha - Oct 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 12, 2010
|does high workplace risk render a higher pay?
2 - McDonald's Improvement of workplace safety does not necessary mean higher ... I don't think you should...
Writing FeedbackSugarJenn - Oct 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 12, 2010
|Immoral Experience: "you should never say swear words"
3 - sorry but I agree with ryanvi16. try focusing more on what this movie did for you if you really...
Writing FeedbackMichael B - Oct 12, 2010 / dfdfdf - Oct 12, 2010
|Individual study helps keep me focused. If I study with my friends I easily get distracted.
5 - thanks kevin...
Writing Feedbackparpari - Oct 8, 2010 / parpari - Oct 12, 2010
|Does air travel creates a great deal of pollution and consumes resources?
4 - Try this one-you can download a lot of free e-books such as Cambridge IELTS Practice tests etc: englishtips.org/exam_materials/ielts/ ...
Writing Feedbackielts - Oct 12, 2010 / scowi - Oct 12, 2010
|IELTS-Should children cooperative spirit and a competitive mind
3 - thaitam, thank you very much for your checking. I agree with most of your modification. It really helps a...
Writing Feedbackzchen1987 - Oct 10, 2010 / zchen1987 - Oct 12, 2010
|Employee Efficiency and Performance Evaluation: GRE argument analysis
4 - In this case, I would recommend putting the first two paragraphs together as one paragraph. Taht will make a...
Writing Feedbackradwa - Oct 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 11, 2010
|Will controling the amount of violence in films and on TV reduce violent crimes?
5 - Kevin,thank you for your comments You have motivated me to write more To improve my English,I will work harder...
Writing Feedbackmaxim john - Oct 8, 2010 / maxim john - Oct 11, 2010
|Are organisations most successful when members pursue individual wishes and goals?
Writing Feedbackgmt_snail - Oct 6, 2010 / gmt_snail - Oct 11, 2010
|Guns Control or Not? - Essay with one body Paragraph
3 - Great job, Tan Vi! I want to improve one of the corrections: Moreover, banning guns in Yemen is going...
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Oct 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 11, 2010
|Capital Punishment in modern society - should be applied or not?
Writing Feedbackrupamgump - Oct 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 11, 2010
|IELTS; "No boundary for art";Why creative artists be given freedom to express ideas!
2 - Here are my suggestions: The subject here is plural: Culture and existence, so use are Culture and existence...
Writing Feedbackpendar - Oct 11, 2010 / Zubaida - Oct 11, 2010
|My journey that led me to pursue physical therapy school
Writing FeedbackPaola54 - Oct 7, 2010 / essays r hard - Oct 10, 2010
|Formal Analysis of Monet's "The Scene at Giverny"
2 - To the viewer hastily taking a glimpse, The Scene at Giverny might look... This is very well-written. If...
Writing Feedbackhiliun - Oct 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 10, 2010
|Buy books or borrowing books?- TOEFL
4 - Because of my desire to save money for ourselves and the resources consumed to manufacture books, I prefer t...
Writing Feedbacksoccon36 - Oct 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 10, 2010
|TOEFL essay about influential people in the world
2 - To begin with,the most important reason is that he gave some rights to women for... Use a spell...
Writing Feedbackkovcastle - Oct 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 10, 2010
|IELTS writing: Commercialization of sports (wrong motivation?)
3 - Cool, and how about adding one more sentence to the end of that first paragraph to tell briefly...
Writing Feedbackcathead_2307 - Oct 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 10, 2010
|Do you agree or disagree:The advertising is the main cause of unhealthy eating habits
Writing FeedbackYuking - Oct 9, 2010 / Yuking - Oct 9, 2010
|Exploiting tourism is more lucrative than ever to nations galore; some concerns
4 - One clearobvious problem is that more and morewhen the numbers of tourists increasetravellers coming to visit means , more...
Writing Feedbackbemytthm - Oct 9, 2010 / dumi - Oct 9, 2010
|IELTS: Discuss TV as educational tool
Writing Feedbackriny - Oct 4, 2010 / riny - Oct 8, 2010
|Food preperation is easier to prepare. Has it improved peoples' lives?
4 - Thanks Kevin. I'll be taking the test tomorrow. I appreciate everybody who helped me with feedbacks, especially Kevin, Mark...
Writing Feedbackupul - Oct 4, 2010 / upul - Oct 8, 2010
|The Dummies of Today's Society.
2 - ... for example, violence manifests as shootings, sexual assault, and war zones. This essay is much better than...
Writing Feedbackalswn95 - Oct 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 7, 2010
|Toefl Essay : Distance learning and online computer classes should replace classroom
2 - Tan Vi did a great job here! Another option for the first sentence would be like this: During this...
Writing Feedbackscarecrowd - Oct 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 7, 2010
|The Value of Kindness in our society and in the world
3 - It is therefore, not appropriate to try and measure kindness at all.----- this is a profound idea; thanks for...
Writing FeedbackAnalucia - Oct 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 7, 2010
|significant advantages to raising children with a stay at home parent
Writing FeedbackLaurel - Sep 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 7, 2010
|Not only belief: Young people are no longer interested in religion
5 - Ahaan. Actually the thing is that our English teacher has been posted to some other city last year and...
Writing FeedbackMilky_Sarisama - Oct 6, 2010 / Milky_Sarisama - Oct 7, 2010
|I'd run my own business" ;To purchase a house or a business - TOEFL
7 - I believe you need to elaborate more on your key points, in order to fully get what your trying...
Writing Feedbackecmagalhaes - Oct 2, 2010 / nn8nk - Oct 7, 2010
|About the invetion of soap in ancient Egypt: edit my paragraph?
5 - Yeah, you're right. But they ask question like such: " Are all important discoveries the results of focusing on...
Writing Feedbacklzhd1028 - Oct 6, 2010 / lzhd1028 - Oct 6, 2010
|"Don't be angry" valuble piece of advice my father once gave me.
7 - hi Zubaida, with many advices above, i have nothing to commend about your essay but that you have written...
Writing FeedbackZubaida - Oct 2, 2010 / anhduy_tran - Oct 6, 2010
|"When and Where"; doing work by hand or using machines?
Writing Feedbackkperera - Oct 5, 2010 / kperera - Oct 6, 2010
|Children should grow in countryside or big city? I am in favor of big city
3 - Almost every parent wishes their children to live in a good environment. Some parents think that the countryside...
Writing Feedbackphuocquivt - Oct 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 5, 2010
|Traffic in Viet Nam: Reasons and Solutions
5 - Kevin, I was under the same impression the other day when I first encountered this essay, although I...
Writing FeedbackAlamanda Bud - Sep 28, 2010 / mea505 - Oct 5, 2010
|"My Dad's Life" - the perfect family I need.
Writing Feedbackkpopgeneration - Oct 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 5, 2010
|Compare and Contrast essay of my parents
Writing FeedbackTeoYenMing - Sep 26, 2010 / TeoYenMing - Oct 5, 2010
|IS WEARING UNIFORM NECESSARY FOR STUDENT?
3 - thinks a lot!..I think I'm lack of vocabulary and viewpoint to support it.,actually it's too short,it's almost one year...
Writing Feedbackalybaba510 - Oct 4, 2010 / alybaba510 - Oct 4, 2010
|Toefl essay : There is nothing that an uneducated person can teach educated person.
2 - That's okay Wipu. You probably can still learn some great things by practicing with Mark's advice. When you...
Writing Feedbackscarecrowd - Sep 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 4, 2010
|TOEFL; Company announces its wish to build to a large factory near your area
2 - Hi, de zilva. well done! its a good essay! thats your first essay? you have a quite good vocabulary...
Writing Feedbacklabroy - Oct 4, 2010 / ecmagalhaes - Oct 4, 2010
|Why do people enagage in dangerous actions? mental and physical characteristics
4 - I am still practicing. I will try to use your technique. I know so many technique but the problem...
Writing Feedbackjag - Oct 2, 2010 / Alfreda99 - Oct 4, 2010
|"Should condom machines be placed in high school bathrooms" essay needs editting
NEW - For my critical reading and writing class I was required to write a 700-710 word essay on whether or...
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