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|Essay about children's changes in eating habits
Writing Feedbackmelita - Nov 23, 2010 / jennay99 - Dec 10, 2010
|The importance of students' sports activities
3 - However, universities should give more money to students' sports activities than they give to their university libraries. Students will...
Writing Feedbackwhitney - Nov 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 10, 2010
|My Little 'Buddha'
6 - Like Buddha who even didn't speak a word against the pundit,mM y player did not respondkept calm in response...
Writing Feedbackdhunjunikesh - Dec 7, 2010 / dumi - Dec 9, 2010
|"the obesity epidemic in America" - Anthropology Essay
NEW - "I couldn't open up a magazine, you couldn't read a newspaper, you couldn't turn on the TV without hearing...
Writing Feedbackalswn95 - Dec 9, 2010 / — -
|"Where is the Line Defined?" - Argumentative Essay-no OUTSIDE SOURCES!
Writing Feedbackericao2010 - Nov 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 9, 2010
|Reiterate: this is the utopia.
NEW - The concept of an utopia that embedded in my heart is a place that is repleted with the collaboration...
Writing FeedbackMobimobipopo - Dec 8, 2010 / — -
|"The attraction of New York City" - A meaningful Place
Writing FeedbackKathyLala - Nov 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 7, 2010
|It's neither possible nor desirable to do the same job throughout work lives - IELTS
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Nov 23, 2010 / sweetheart87 - Dec 7, 2010
|what causes students to cheat on the tests?
3 - Hi again...i think, while using the word 'Consequently', you'd better aviod asking questions. In conclusion part you should give...
Writing Feedbackazaaza - Dec 6, 2010 / Bobur - Dec 7, 2010
|People are starving, but money is spent on pets
Writing Feedbacktuanphong892009 - Nov 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 5, 2010
|9/11 and Art Essay: Revise/Edit what i have so far.
2 - Songs were written. Paintings were painted. Poems were recited. Photos and videos were taken. This whole sentence has...
Writing Feedbackcaudet89 - Nov 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 5, 2010
|Importance of One Parent Stay Home with Their Young Children For The First Few Years
2 - Today, young people in every part of the world hope to have successful success in their jobs ....
Writing Feedbackthunguyen88 - Nov 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 5, 2010
|"the percentage of each source of energy used in America" IELTS Writing task 1
NEW - The given two graphs illustrate the percentage of each source of energy used in America during the period of...
Writing Feedbackmoondikasina - Dec 5, 2010 / — -
|About "climate change and Fossil fuels" - what is causing climate change, human role
NEW - Examine the role of one human activity in causing climate change, and discuss how further deterioration may be prevented...
Writing Feedbackwsyzoscar - Dec 5, 2010 / — -
|Essay about concerns with education; students not learning helpful material- feedback
2 - Education is one of my personal concerns. ----boring first sentence... not much meaning. It is just informative. "I...
Writing Feedbackleesharshukov - Nov 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 4, 2010
|Essay about proving that experience is greater than books. - Feedback
2 - We try to use gender-inclusive sentences, here, so if you are going to address sirs address madams, too!...
Writing FeedbackEssayfreak - Nov 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 3, 2010
|"Forget How to Remember" - College Essay Idea Rough Draft
Writing FeedbackD Kneco - Nov 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 3, 2010
|Some want independence and some prefer to live with thier families ,which you prefer?
2 - You should practice typinf each of these sentences 10 times so that you remember the correct grammar: Nowadays...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Nov 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 3, 2010
|In Barnaul youth will be interested in theatre
2 - Creative group "Project-41", working on base of «Regional palace of youth", has begun preparation of socially significant PR-project "Theatrical...
Writing Feedbacknathalie1912 - Nov 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 3, 2010
|"there is more to life than just reality TV shows" -Argumentative Paper on Television
Writing Feedbackkangi - Dec 3, 2010 / Cloud_Tek9 - Dec 3, 2010
|Drawbacks of unpaid work and recommendations to improve it.
2 - Along with the enthusiasm that a person gets, there may also be existing unfavorable conditions. in line with this,...
Writing Feedbackbrenda - Nov 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 2, 2010
|The advantages of pursuing dreams rather than giving up on them - TEOFL
Writing Feedbackjasminebi - Dec 1, 2010 / vaishali1980 - Dec 2, 2010
|Classify TV programs - classification essay type
2 - 'Entertainment is the most favorite for many people' you can use this sentence as ' Many people watch TV...
Writing Feedbackthaitam - Dec 1, 2010 / vaishali1980 - Dec 2, 2010
|Ielts essay; I believe that companies' changing employees is acceptable.
3 - The fourth paragraph is similar to second one. My suggestion is that you can conbine both in one paragragh....
Writing Feedbackphuocqui - Nov 27, 2010 / riny - Dec 2, 2010
|'younger need thrill in their life' - young people enjoy life more than older
2 - they lost interest in learning new things and experienced about thrill. Older people thinks try to accomplish...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Dec 2, 2010 / riny - Dec 2, 2010
|''The critical analysis of being an international manager'' - compare cultures
4 - The role of an international manager requires involves several requirements. In this essay I will like explain...
Writing FeedbackFaiza79 - Nov 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 1, 2010
|The meaning of success is complex and individuals define it to suit their personal achievements
2 - The genuine meaning of success is complex and individuals define it to suit their personal achievements. Success can simply...
Writing Feedbackmdipeolu - Nov 30, 2010 / kawaiikoinu - Nov 30, 2010
|The knowledge we acquire outside of school is the most important.
2 - Nowadays, there are two opinions concernedconcerning the importance of school. [ Some hold that our most important lessons are...
Writing Feedbackwhitney - Nov 28, 2010 / kawaiikoinu - Nov 30, 2010
|Does the development of technology lead to environmental pollution and energy crisis?
2 - I think your essay is a bit harsh...it sounds like you think science and technology is (maybe a bit...
Writing Feedbackseiya152 - Nov 23, 2010 / elisabeths - Nov 30, 2010
|Filling the Gap: Legalizing Organ Trade (Persuasive Essay)
2 - Only about 20,000 received them that year, while over 7,000 people died when new organs would have saved them....
Writing FeedbackFlying_Pie - Nov 23, 2010 / EF_Susan - Nov 30, 2010
|Déjŕ vu, I did it in reality - boyfriend essay story
5 - okay thanks for your help =D and no thiis wasn't for a collage applicatio it's a personal narrative....
Writing Feedbackbluechick54 - Nov 28, 2010 / bluechick54 - Nov 30, 2010
|Increasing Number of Strays Causes Threat to Shelters and Organizations
3 - Hi Evelyn, you write very well! The solution to your problem is to get more raw material for the...
Writing FeedbackBellaItalia088 - Nov 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 29, 2010
|A new factory will be built in your hometown, do you agree or disagree?
3 - your essay is good but you did not write following a thesis-led. I think you should give more reasons...
Writing Feedbackriny - Nov 29, 2010 / huongvt - Nov 29, 2010
|Raw food vs Cooked food - How's my intro?
13 - That's okay! A lot of people will be able to learn from this thread in the future. Thanks, everyone......
Writing FeedbackA00226270 - Nov 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2010
|"The media has the power to instill ideas" - National/Local Concern Prompt
2 - No need for the comma in the first sentence. The first paragraph is a little off-putting because a...
Writing FeedbackDeadmaster - Nov 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 27, 2010
|Peer pressure - "OUR DESIRE TO CONFIRM IS GREATER THAN OUR RESPECT FOR OTHER OBJECTS"
Writing Feedbacknigeria - Nov 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 27, 2010
|should students have part-time jobs while studying?
3 - This is pretty good! One way to improve your writing is to make a longer intro paragraph and a...
Writing Feedbackcamthangtu - Nov 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 27, 2010
|Getting message from different news resources to understand events under more objective perspective.
10 - Well, it's probably okay. I sometimes say the same things to different people, because sometimes people need the...
Writing FeedbackStridercoo - Nov 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 27, 2010
|'My friend, Park - someone' has taught me more about the importance of life than else
Writing Feedbacktjdduq1213 - Nov 20, 2010 / danado0ona - Nov 27, 2010
|"yeah, i socialize with scum" (anarchic, autistic, messy )
Writing FeedbackHalfred C - Nov 25, 2010 / Halfred C - Nov 27, 2010
|The Effects of Love (A Cause/Effect Paper)
2 - Eighteen years old is not too old for any kind of love, puppy or otherwise. After all, "puppy...
Writing Feedbackcucciola21 - Nov 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 26, 2010
|Government should sponsor to build up museum and theatre .
4 - As to whether government should sponsor on the building of a museum and a theatre, the public holds...
Writing Feedbackwhitney - Nov 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 26, 2010
|Is the ability to tolerate problems as important as the ability to fix them
2 - I'll give some more corrections. Please practice every correction by typing the sentence 10 times. That is the way...
Writing Feedbacksgl - Nov 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 26, 2010
|Alcoholism vs. other addiction - Compare and contrast
5 - I don't think it is helpful to begin the essay with a sentence about addiction types being ample....
Writing Feedbackanb_duck - Nov 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 26, 2010
|Experience of children with divorced parents (proficiency exercise)
NEW - In many years,there has been a growing problem about children with divorced parents experience more difficulties among families not...
Writing Feedbackmervischsouth - Nov 26, 2010 / — -
|Pre-nuptial agreements. Do you think everyone should have it?
4 - I believe both parties will know if there is the need for a pre-nupt before they marry if they...
Writing FeedbackTaniad - Nov 17, 2010 / femifash - Nov 26, 2010
|Compare and contrast your way of life with that of your parents
3 - Never type this: more better ...always far more better than their fathers' lives. ...attitudes toward professions and ways...
Writing FeedbackMivi - Nov 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 26, 2010
|"About the experience of shopping for a new car" - Reasons to buy a Toyota Corolla
4 - I don't think this opening sentence is as effective as it could be. You could give an opening...
Writing Feedbackeraf18 - Nov 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 26, 2010
|governments should spent more money for health education than research-feedback
4 - Hi Sobin, I see that Adelyne did a great job of correcting the errors. I will enjoy correcting your...
Writing Feedbacksobin - Nov 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 26, 2010
|An important skill for a person in the world today (using a computer)?
4 - De Silva and chu tuan phong i appreciate your corrections and opinions. Next time i will be careful about...
Writing FeedbackGlobal guy - Nov 25, 2010 / Global guy - Nov 26, 2010
|What is the most important animal in your country (cow in India)?
5 - These are my first 2 paragraps edit. I hope it helps =>Animals are extremely important in the country's economy....
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Nov 25, 2010 / KathyLala - Nov 25, 2010
|From China to America: Culture Shock (food, manner) - living in a new country
7 - Kevin: You are sooo sweet! I am not a good writer at all, but thanks for the confidence-boost. I...
Writing FeedbackKianna - Nov 2, 2010 / Kianna - Nov 25, 2010
|"Countries of residence of overseas students in Australia" graph for ielts
6 - The chart shows the trend of the number of foreign students in Australia between 1982 and 2000. We...
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Nov 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 25, 2010
|IELTS : Why should we learn how to operate a computer?
5 - Nice! I like this term... Capitalize Internet. You gave good topic sentences for the paragraphs! So.....
Writing Feedbackanb_duck - Nov 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 25, 2010
|It's good that government taxes the flights, especially in the period of holiday
5 - You can also write "heavier" I agree with the statement that government should be try to reduce air...
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Nov 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 25, 2010
|"Stop working for child?" IELTS essay
2 - very nice topic..:) in paragraph 3: ...,being a scientist etc etc is not formal.you use ''and so on.'' instead...
Writing Feedbacklilyace - Nov 23, 2010 / mervischsouth - Nov 25, 2010
|Struggling with an ethical decision at the age of 12
4 - The first 4 sentences... I think they are the sentence you need to to write to get warmed up......
Writing Feedbackkipta - Nov 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 24, 2010
|Working women have happier lives. for or against?
4 - it is good topic, and sure to write in possitive only. more and more advantage to the society...
Writing Feedbackmervischsouth - Nov 22, 2010 / aishwary18 - Nov 24, 2010
|It is not good to move to a new city because you will lose old friends.
4 - You are right. I agree that the fourth paragraph which is about they will lose some of old friends...
Writing Feedbacksaracoo - Nov 21, 2010 / saracoo - Nov 23, 2010
|Persuasive essay on implementing uniforms at schools
6 - thank you very much...sadly i don't think that my class is going to continue the essay thing.Looks like we're...
Writing FeedbackSr7248 - Nov 10, 2010 / Sr7248 - Nov 22, 2010
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