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|Computers: good or bad in using it for education - CBEST
3 - That first sentence is very impressive. Indeed, r eliance on computer grows every day . This explosion in...
Writing Feedbackflavia03 - Jul 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 30, 2010
|GRE Essay:- "Laws should not be rigid or fixed. Instead, they should be flexible
Writing Feedbackrajeshaaidu - Jul 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 30, 2010
|Three reasons for studying in a diffrent country
Writing Feedbacknew writer - Jul 28, 2010 / new writer - Jul 29, 2010
|Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of travel or work after high school.
3 - Hellow Lynn, There are two disadvantages on the other hand. [b]Could be better: On the other hand, there...
Writing FeedbackLynn Truong - Jul 10, 2010 / George1 - Jul 28, 2010
|As the light begins to dim, Faith.
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Jul 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 28, 2010
|IELTS: Goverment should write laws for using vehicles and everybody should follow them
Writing Feedbackruhi - Jul 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 28, 2010
|Essay about 2 kinds of friendship - Judith Viorst
Writing Feedbackdvtq - Jul 26, 2010 / dvtq - Jul 28, 2010
|SAT: QUESTION DECICIONS OF LEADERS
5 - You make your point in the first paragraph. In each body paragraph, give ideas to support your main...
Writing Feedbackalooo282 - Jul 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 27, 2010
|Male to Female ration in University admissions
2 - Ma Li, please try to write a new draft with the corrections Maria made. Do you understand the corrections?...
Writing Feedbackmary1lucky - Jul 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 27, 2010
|IELTS writing ---to what extent do you agree or disagree? modern or old building ?
3 - I see that you are already proficient, and you need "fine tuning." Here is something to help you...
Writing Feedbackcosmopolitan - Jul 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 27, 2010
|IELTS writing_International sporting occasions help to ease international tensions
2 - This is already a good essay. You showed that you understand the prompt, and you responded clearly: It...
Writing Feedbackngcanh - Jul 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 27, 2010
|Topic: Are we defined by great challenges or by everyday challenges?
Writing Feedbacktrungandhoai - Jul 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 26, 2010
|TOEFL Essay: Art or environment
2 - I had another idea for correcting the first sentence: Obviously, both of these choices are based on reasonable...
Writing Feedbackmenkim1 - Jul 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 26, 2010
|Favorite Word and why-Rate/give advice for my college essay
Writing Feedbackmrkay66 - Jul 17, 2010 / mrkay66 - Jul 26, 2010
|Preserving its old, historic buildings means respecting the previous generations
5 - That is an interesting topic. But I think that a city should preserve its old, historic buildings. Since those...
Writing FeedbackEhmet - Jul 22, 2010 / annmichelle7 - Jul 26, 2010
|Sport personalities' salaries + blaming crime on media - Writing task 2 for Ielts
NEW - Next time thread will be removed again; you must learn about composing a relevant thread title. EF ...
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|You'd find yourself at this spot each day! ; A Book and Coffee-shop
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Jul 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 25, 2010
|Cities need to preserve historic buildings or destroy and replace them?
4 - ...cannot visualize a city without its historical structure. -- add one more sentence here to make your point. There...
Writing Feedbackaysa - Jul 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 25, 2010
|Kalinese artists (GRE argument)
3 - nice!! Good point. In critical thinking, they refer to both "depth" and "breadth" of thinking. With breadth,...
Writing Feedbackvrajveer89 - Jul 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 25, 2010
|GRE (Argument203) the question about the contrast of hospitals
Writing Feedbackpauline65 - Jul 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 25, 2010
|IELTS: Advertising tempts people to buy things irrespective of their real needs;Agree
4 - No problem, Lynn but also because of the other items displayed in the shops advertisements should be...
Writing FeedbackLynn Truong - Jul 24, 2010 / Yayz - Jul 25, 2010
|sharp evolution in human history;Internet provides a lot of valuable information
7 - thanks for your helps. I have just participated in this forum and i hope to learn more experiences from...
Writing FeedbackDay - Jul 19, 2010 / Day - Jul 25, 2010
|Watching movie at the cinema or at home? Discuss and state your opinion.
5 - Hi Yayz, I got it.Thank you so much. I am beginner,so just want to know exactly my mistakes. I...
Writing Feedbacknguyenhathu178 - Jul 23, 2010 / nguyenhathu178 - Jul 24, 2010
|Violence is never a real solution to a political crisis. (MCAT written topic)
6 - Hi Ripoff, I don't see this material online anywhere, and it seems to be original as far as I...
Writing Feedbackflavia03 - Jul 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 24, 2010
|The Benefits of Televising Government Proceedings.
4 - Here are some grammar corrections: Firstly, to a great extent, the phenomena of corruption will be lessened due to...
Writing Feedbacktingingforever - Jul 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 24, 2010
|The issue of knives in general and at school - an opinion/letter to the editor
5 - The amount number of knife attacks in the community has risen dramatically at an astonishing rate. ...the...
Writing Feedbackjgv115 - Jul 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 23, 2010
|toefl essay: spending money on supporting art or protecting environment
Writing Feedbackeysa1 - Jul 23, 2010 / nguyenhathu178 - Jul 23, 2010
|Not only women but also men have to take care of their children
7 - I think the essay should be had more explanation for each idea instead of giving ideas without example or...
Writing Feedbackbluebellia - Jun 30, 2010 / nguyenhathu178 - Jul 23, 2010
|I would like to meet Jim Thorpe, the 1912 Olympic Gold Medal winner.
4 - (This is my first time editing an essay here as well! =) You switch between using Jim Thorpe's...
Writing Feedbackrmli - Jul 21, 2010 / Yayz - Jul 22, 2010
|Student living situation: Campus or Not?
NEW - A lot of my friends live in apartments off campus, while others lives in dormitories. Both has it own...
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|Making a healthy lifestyle is a responsibility of government or individual.discuss
NEW - ]Many people think it's the government's responsibility to ensure a country has a healthy lifestyle. Others believe it's up...
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|GRE (argument): Comparison of two cars
Writing Feedbackershad193 - Jul 18, 2010 / ershad193 - Jul 22, 2010
|"Welcome to the good life" - Compare and Contrast Essay (Rich vs Poor)
Writing FeedbackEggss - Jul 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 20, 2010
|My Sister and I - help proof-reading comparison/contrast paragraph
2 - Hi, Clarita I think, this is self-evident and true almost for all people, except twiling perhaps. Even...
Writing Feedbackccarlos816 - Jul 20, 2010 / Azeri - Jul 20, 2010
|Ielts topic high levels of violence in films today :D
8 - Thank everybody for your all advices. :D /To Kevin :D i'm very glad to see your encouragement for me....
Writing Feedbackharubim123 - Jul 15, 2010 / harubim123 - Jul 20, 2010
|Winners And Losers - & Help
4 - Thank you everyone for your advice. @ Kevin: I will learn to bring in metephor, simile. It will...
Writing FeedbackPhoebe Su - Jul 17, 2010 / Phoebe Su - Jul 20, 2010
|The main purpose of art is not to teach, but to show
3 - Despite the fact that there are many various purposes of art, which includes include entertainment, expression, and exhibition,...
Writing Feedbackairman - Jul 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 19, 2010
|essay - going to university and reasons for it
3 - ...there could be many possible reasons for attending college or university - from doing a degree to experiencing new...
Writing Feedbackfirefly5588 - Jul 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 19, 2010
|(Disease) Prevention is better than cure.
Writing Feedbackbluebellia - Jul 16, 2010 / Eggss - Jul 18, 2010
|GRE TEST:Issue130 How children are socialized today determines the destiny of。。
Writing Feedbacklanyuanweizi - Jul 10, 2010 / lanyuanweizi - Jul 18, 2010
|Major cities should receive all the financial support they need. GRE(issue)
Writing Feedbackvrajveer89 - Jul 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 17, 2010
|Descriptive Essay on making an important decision - test prep, CBEST.
5 - ...while bad ones bring us into the middle of nowhere. Throughout my entire life, the hardest decision that...
Writing Feedbackhoney91332 - Jul 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 17, 2010
|Scandals -whether in politics, academia, or other areas-can be useful. GRE(Issue)
6 - Here is an error: Recently, a judge of the local anti-corruption court in the state of Karnataka in India...
Writing Feedbackvrajveer89 - Jul 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 17, 2010
|Is the opinion of the majority-in government or in any other circumstances-a poor
4 - Throughout history, when a kind of opinion or the voice of the government spread about, more and more people...
Writing FeedbackLoftyyyy Girlll - Jul 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 17, 2010
|Child Labor in the World - children are not anyone's property.
8 - Well, there is a good example of how the children are mistreated. One of them dropped a glass,...
Writing Feedbackyashsingh - Jul 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 17, 2010
|The increasing number of overweight children
3 - i think that you need to explain on the means to prevent it and whether it will actually work....
Writing Feedbackscouser_ - Jul 16, 2010 / airman - Jul 17, 2010
|Memory from the past can always give people more specific guide in the present - SAT
6 - Thank you Kevin...You are awesome!! I think I do make my opening sentences sound confused and I will revise...
Writing FeedbackLoftyyyy Girlll - Jul 14, 2010 / Loftyyyy Girlll - Jul 16, 2010
|Describing graph + studying the past - two essays
2 - The given bar graph shows in percentage the contributions of three ... The contributions of three sectors changed...
Writing Feedbackvitconbobo - Jul 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 15, 2010
|'You didn't build that?' - Luck has nothing to do w/ success
10 - Luck is something that is not in one's hands, that could not be controlled. Luck might not come exactly...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jun 24, 2010 / Azeri - Jul 15, 2010
|Education comes not from books but from practical experience. (MCAT)
4 - But also Additionally, students have the opportunity to learn essential communication skills, leaderships skills, with which no one could...
Writing Feedbackflavia03 - Jul 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 14, 2010
|Developed nations have an obligation to provide aid to the underdeveloped nations.
3 - Countries with a well-established economies, welfare systems, education, and minimal levels of poverty are seen as developed and successful...
Writing Feedbackflavia03 - Jul 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 14, 2010
|Essay for IELTS : Young people should go to university or not ?
Writing Feedbackpologirl27 - Jul 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 14, 2010
|Clearview town mayoral election (GRE argument)
3 - I would write ...Moreover, there is no clear-cut evidence to suggest that... A small change makes it clearer....
Writing Feedbackvrajveer89 - Jul 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 14, 2010
|Holistic communication in nursing care
4 - Sad Encouraged to know that my tutor failed me for my holistic communication essay is going to challenge...
Writing Feedbackantolo_kim - Jun 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 13, 2010
|My (woman's) Weekend -TOEFL
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Jul 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 12, 2010
|Advantages and disadvantages of living in apartment blocks.
2 - You are smart to use the word proliferate, but actually it is used in a slightly different way. It...
Writing Feedbackkumar1980 - Jul 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 12, 2010
|GRE (Analysis of an argument): Handing over security job of a company to a group
Writing Feedbackershad193 - Jul 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 12, 2010
|Essay for IETLS: Natural Talents and Trained Talents. Dicuss.
2 - Talented people are those who attain a certain exceptional skill that others' skill cannot be compared to. What...
Writing FeedbackLynn Truong - Jul 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 11, 2010
|The most important characteristic to be successful in life and best way to tackle with difficulties
Writing Feedbacksummer_breeze3 - Jul 9, 2010 / Lynn Truong - Jul 10, 2010
|IELTS ESSAY: Effects of mobile phones
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