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|IELTS argumentative essay for Salaries of Sports Athletes
3 - Ricardo, you were not able to properly paraphrase the original prompt. You mistook the presentation of facts in your...
Writing Feedbackricardof360 - Jul 17, 2017 / Holt - Jul 18, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 : Give opinions on teaching a foreign language in primary school years.
5 - @hailung Thank you for your comment. - But as i know, many students who learn foreign language early have...
Writing Feedbackthaongoc - Jun 30, 2017 / thaongoc - Jul 18, 2017
|Narrative essay for English about overcoming fears
2 - There is an unanswered question in your presentation. You said "Never give up without trying because you will never...
Writing Feedbacklavonnamark - Jul 17, 2017 / Holt - Jul 17, 2017
|Problems and Solutions about local museums
Writing Feedbacktunglinh0907 - Jul 16, 2017 / lavonnamark - Jul 17, 2017
|[IELTS Writing Task 2] - TV alienates family members
4 - overall, good essay. I would fix some of the grammar mistakes tho such as find=found in the first sentence,...
Writing Feedbackchantieh - Jul 16, 2017 / lavonnamark - Jul 17, 2017
|The question is whether the motherhood is essential in raising children. IELTS Writing task 2
Writing Feedbackdaiha20082009 - Jul 16, 2017 / Kaylee - Jul 17, 2017
|It is an absurd that a newspaper is the most crucial source of information
Writing Feedbackkiki2807 - Jul 17, 2017 / Holt - Jul 17, 2017
|[TOEFL iBT INDEPENDENT TASK] THE INTERNET OR PRINTED MATERIAL FOR RESEARCH?
3 - Minh, your body paragraph for your reasoning is acceptable. The problem is that your opening paragraph and concluding paragraphs...
Writing FeedbackMinh Nguyen - Jul 17, 2017 / Holt - Jul 17, 2017
|Some people say it is wrong to keep animals in captivity. Others say that are benefit for animal
2 - Nguyet, the next time that you post your essay for review, please post the complete original instructions along with...
Writing Feedbackthuy_nguyet - Jul 17, 2017 / Holt - Jul 17, 2017
|After graduation from high school, most students tend to attend colleges or universities
Writing Feedbackthanhha19973 - Jul 17, 2017 / Holt - Jul 17, 2017
|GAP YEAR could be a huge asset if used for proper activities - IELTS
5 - I would also say that the essay above does not have a proper balance idea and number of words...
Writing Feedbackhailung - Jul 1, 2017 / lamabeto - Jul 16, 2017
|Protecting the environment by any person is welcomed but multinational cooperation is more important
2 - Robin, if you say that the solution to the problem lies in a multilateral solution, then you must take...
Writing FeedbackRobin_Ni - Jul 16, 2017 / Holt - Jul 16, 2017
|[IELTS Writing Task 2] - Some people propose that smoking should be banned completely
6 - @tunglinh0907@daiha20082009 Thank you for your responses! @thuy_nguyet I think there's no maximum limit to the length of your...
Writing Feedbackchantieh - Jul 14, 2017 / chantieh - Jul 16, 2017
|IELTS task 2 Writing - About should Sports be compulsory at school?
3 - Hi Nguyet, i'm glad to have a chance in sharing with you about writing, especially academic writing. i suppose...
Writing Feedbackthuy_nguyet - Jul 16, 2017 / putjaaa - Jul 16, 2017
|IELTS Task 2: Travel and work are the only reason for learning a foreign language
3 - I think your essay is good, easy-to-follow writing, understand the topic. However, there are a few mistakes in your...
Writing FeedbackAllentseng - Jul 15, 2017 / tunglinh0907 - Jul 16, 2017
|Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Writing FeedbackYuTingJim - Jul 15, 2017 / YuTingJim - Jul 15, 2017
|Motorways have both positive and negative impacts on the social community
3 - @Holt Thanks for your advice ,Holt ! I understood that its was my mistake to forget the question but...
Writing FeedbackHieugod28102001 - Jul 15, 2017 / Hieugod28102001 - Jul 15, 2017
|The prevention on health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine.
2 - Sana, your paraphrasing is not in the acceptable format. It does not clearly explain the original topic for discussion...
Writing Feedbacksana saeed - Jun 26, 2017 / Holt - Jul 15, 2017
|Motorways help people travel quickly and cover long distances but they also cause problems.
Writing Feedbackanuthomas121 - Jul 15, 2017 / anuthomas121 - Jul 15, 2017
|Folklore Turkish food - Dolma/Yaprag
2 - Farhad. you need too develop the evolutionary story of Dolma from the Yaprag stage before you being to discuss...
Writing Feedbackfar2124696 - Jul 15, 2017 / Holt - Jul 15, 2017
|[TOEFL] Students take distance-learning courses or in a real class. Which one is better?
3 - @Holt Thank you very much for the careful comments. I didn't notice I missed the conclusion at the last...
Writing Feedbackvivisky720 - Jul 13, 2017 / vivisky720 - Jul 15, 2017
|[IELTS: Task 1] Shares of the mobile phone market - the table.
Writing FeedbackLinh Linh - Jul 14, 2017 / Holt - Jul 14, 2017
|My Autobiography..... I'm the only child.
4 - @anna14 Why not dividing your paragraphs into several topic sentences? Let's say, the first paragraph is about your educational...
Writing Feedbackanna14 - Jul 13, 2017 / d2ny - Jul 13, 2017
|The pie charts compare the percentage of a certain school's expenditure annually in UK
2 - Susan, your work cannot be scored because you did not upload the image that was provided to you for...
Writing Feedbacksmvicp - Jul 12, 2017 / Holt - Jul 12, 2017
|The graph gives information about drinking habits in the US by age.
2 - Hoang, you are not properly summarizing the information referred to you for reference in the graph. Aside from identifying...
Writing Feedbackhoangmyvo - Jul 12, 2017 / Holt - Jul 12, 2017
|Skill development among children does not go hand in hand with technology use
4 - Don't you think your essay quite too long? You should learn how to make your sentences more succinct....
Writing FeedbackTrangDoThuy - Jul 11, 2017 / hoangmyvo - Jul 12, 2017
|In about 300 words, describe one thing you would like to see changed or improved in your own country
4 - Hello, your idea about the topic is ok but I think you should use more complicated grammar structures so...
Writing Feedbackcherri mocha - Jul 11, 2017 / hoangmyvo - Jul 12, 2017
|The pie charts compare home ownership and renting for 1991 and 2007 in percentage term.
Writing Feedbackhoangmyvo - Jul 12, 2017 / hoangmyvo - Jul 12, 2017
|We can not help everyone in the world that needs help...
2 - Albert, unless the prompt indicates specific problems and issues to be addressed in the essay, it would be best...
Writing Feedbackalbertsimonvn - Jul 12, 2017 / Holt - Jul 12, 2017
|(IELTS) Nowadays people communicate in different way with each other because of technology
2 - Chen, you want to know the biggest problem that I see with this essay? You focused on a specific...
Writing Feedbackbarthe - Jul 11, 2017 / Holt - Jul 11, 2017
|Cooperation and competition are imperative and children should master both of these skills
Writing Feedbackhailung - Jul 9, 2017 / hailung - Jul 11, 2017
|Problems and Solutions to the Increase in Number of Flights as a Result of Tourism (IELTS)
Writing Feedbackjasonhwang - Jul 10, 2017 / huongtienganh - Jul 11, 2017
|The importance of local history as opposed to world history
3 - @Holt thank you so much for your comment, Holt. I really appreciate. Would you mind If I asked you...
Writing Feedbacktunglinh0907 - Jul 10, 2017 / tunglinh0907 - Jul 10, 2017
|It is neither possible nor useful for a country to provide univesity places for all young people
3 - Dang, in all instances, please remember to post the original prompt requirement along with your response essay. That will...
Writing Feedbackdangvan - Jul 9, 2017 / Holt - Jul 10, 2017
|IELTS Task 2: Being economically success while at the same time having a clean environment?
3 - @Holt Thank you Holt! I have always been struggling between writing complex sentences and stopping long sentences. I will...
Writing Feedbackjennyjenny - Jul 8, 2017 / jennyjenny - Jul 10, 2017
|[IELTS TASK 2] Social life at work and outside work. Discuss
Writing Feedbackxhang24 - Jul 8, 2017 / xhang24 - Jul 9, 2017
|IELTS Task 1 - Graph of employment rates in Australia, Switzerland, Iceland, UK, New Zealand, and US
3 - Katya, in your opening statement, always make sure that you present a proper overview of the information that you...
Writing Feedbackkacanakya - Jul 9, 2017 / Holt - Jul 9, 2017
|Changes in family structure and its member_gender role => What changes occur? Positive or negative?
4 - Hi @kngan172000 Here are my "modifications" As a result, family structure and member's contribution are modifying daily. I...
Writing Feedbackkngan172000 - Jul 8, 2017 / Slumar206 - Jul 8, 2017
|The Tabard Towers Theme Park - IELTS Writing Task 1 Sample
Writing Feedbacknumissh - Jul 3, 2017 / numissh - Jul 8, 2017
|Railways vs roads - I consider both traffic systems equally important to our societies.
2 - Kevin, let's get one thing straight here. When you are given an opinion essay to write, specially one that...
Writing Feedbacks11015kevin - Jul 8, 2017 / Holt - Jul 8, 2017
|IELTS Task 2 - Teaching Situation in Classroom No Longer Exist by 2050 (Education)
2 - Karen, it would be best if you followed the proper manner of stating an agreement or disagreement with the...
Writing Feedbackkarennnn - Jul 7, 2017 / Holt - Jul 7, 2017
|"Spending all your free time studying is not a good idea" What's your opinion? Write an essay.
6 - Hello!! The introduction is your power statement. It's the one thing that decides whether or not someone will...
Writing Feedbacksspedicato1 - Jul 1, 2017 / DoctorWho - Jul 7, 2017
|University English Blog post based on the movie Kill Bill
2 - Rosaleen, opening with the quote by Ferguson is a good approach as it explains the content of your forthcoming...
Writing Feedbackrosaleen98 - Jul 6, 2017 / Holt - Jul 7, 2017
|There are many governments that ban smoking in public places, and a great number of business also s
2 - Pham, this is a well discussed essay that needs only a few minor points for correction. For starters, I...
Writing Feedbackquynhanh12345 - Jul 6, 2017 / Holt - Jul 6, 2017
|People are leaveing their home countries to seek a better life
3 - @Holt I see, thank you very much for pointing out my mistakes. In the meantime, I tried to remake...
Writing Feedbacknumissh - Jul 4, 2017 / numissh - Jul 6, 2017
|Underappreciated home nurses in California
2 - Juliette, if your paper is all about cultural worth, you might want to rethink your current opening statement. There...
Writing Feedbackjewels238 - Jul 6, 2017 / Holt - Jul 6, 2017
|Organizations should provide support to society as its benefits far outweigh costs.
Writing FeedbackHidy - Jul 5, 2017 / Holt - Jul 6, 2017
|Should grade 12 University level English be a requirement for entry into all university programs?
3 - Yoojin, first up, your title is isn't engaging or intriguing enough to catch the reader's attention. You are stating...
Writing Feedbacklonelypeach - Jul 5, 2017 / Holt - Jul 6, 2017
|Cars will be driven by computers not people in the near future. Positive or negative - ielts
5 - Interesting choice of topic. You did a great jobs of giving examples of you're thoughts however I would choose...
Writing Feedbackgiangchu210 - Jul 4, 2017 / Alyssag1 - Jul 6, 2017
|Graduates should travel and work for a period of time instead of going directly to university
6 - @Minh Thi According to + source will lower your overall score due to the fact that the examiners...
Writing FeedbackMinh Thi - Jul 4, 2017 / hailung - Jul 5, 2017
|IELT T2- Punishments are neccessary to help children learn the right and wrong from early age
6 - @Holt : thanks for great insight! especially about the structure. I have question on However if you happen to...
Writing Feedbacklamabeto - Jul 2, 2017 / lamabeto - Jul 4, 2017
|The number of civilians holding various federal government jobs. IELTS Writing Task 1
3 - Hi Holt! Thanks for teaching me how to post, i'll make sure to transfer the other task in another...
Writing Feedbackkaijean - Jul 4, 2017 / kaijean - Jul 4, 2017
|Traditional games or new, electronic games are better for children?
4 - Cu, please provide the complete prompt requirements for your next essay exercise so that you can be properly assessed...
Writing Feedbackcuthilananh2000 - Jul 2, 2017 / Holt - Jul 4, 2017
|Can we use animals for our personal benefit or this is unacceptable?
Writing Feedbackrock07 - Jul 2, 2017 / Holt - Jul 4, 2017
|[TOEFL] Some famous athletes and entertainers earn millions of dollars every year.
4 - Eric, in my opinion, you cannot score higher than a 3 with this essay because of inconsistencies in your...
Writing FeedbackERIC SUNG - Jul 1, 2017 / Holt - Jul 4, 2017
|Children are increasingly spending less time to their parents.
4 - Nguyen, there is a disconnection between your paragraph title and the actual discussion that you present. In your title,...
Writing FeedbackGnad - Jul 1, 2017 / Holt - Jul 4, 2017
|Writing task 1: The percentage of 10-15 year-olds chatting online and playing games.
6 - @Red Moon Rephrase your first paragraph and note some little mistakes.. Could you please check my thread and help...
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Jun 22, 2017 / Babbie419 - Jul 3, 2017
|IELTS Task 1 - Sales in a college bookshop
4 - Dear, @kacanakya This can be simplified to one sentence. The table figure covers sales report on three...
Writing Feedbackkacanakya - Jun 29, 2017 / SHanafi - Jul 2, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 1 - What those kids are doing
4 - Rodolfo, it is a general rule in the use of English Language that a paragraph must contain at least...
Writing FeedbackSupermanSkivvies - Jun 30, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Jul 1, 2017
|IELTS Task 1 - Learning difficulties faced by students from two schools (table)
3 - @okorobiadimma14 , Thank you for your advice! I have a clearer idea on how to write the overview for...
Writing Feedbackwinnienwk - Jun 30, 2017 / winnienwk - Jul 1, 2017
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