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|TOEFL:children should begin their formal education at a very early age
4 - I think you can give some specific examples to back up your argument. For instance, it is widely agreed...
Writing Feedbackdjanat - Apr 10, 2010 / vivien_wang - Apr 13, 2010
|Structuring essays for TOEFL and IELTS -01- Introduction paragraph
6 - djanat, in IELTS there are two general patterns of paragraphing, and either one is ok. But, apparently, pattern 1...
Writing FeedbackVakax - Apr 7, 2010 / vivien_wang - Apr 13, 2010
|Essay:Studying at home by using technology or studying at traditional schools?
2 - College students already do! ...and that they are irreplaceable, but others,in contrast,deem ...------ I just added some...
Writing Feedbackgreentea93 - Apr 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 12, 2010
|College education: available to all or to only good students?
Writing Feedbackhandonguyen - Apr 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 12, 2010
|Hotels in Taipei, Taiwan: need help on transitions between paragraphs.
Writing FeedbackKellychen1125 - Apr 9, 2010 / Kellychen1125 - Apr 12, 2010
|Should friends be honest to each other?
6 - What a good topic! for me, we first have to understand the true notion of friendship, which can be...
Writing FeedbackKokirisword - Apr 8, 2010 / dejavu - Apr 12, 2010
|Topic:The differences between Vietnamese and English culture.
Writing FeedbackMarco - Apr 6, 2010 / Marco - Apr 11, 2010
|"Don't put all your eggs in one basket"
Writing Feedbackxxkixzplayaxx - Mar 22, 2010 / xxkixzplayaxx - Apr 10, 2010
|Are people more likely to be productive/successful when they ignore opinions?
3 - Azeri, Thanks a lot for the suggestions. You do not need to support nor reject the statement, but you...
Writing FeedbackKokirisword - Apr 9, 2010 / Kokirisword - Apr 10, 2010
|Parental Mishaps: Compare/Contrast Essay of my mom and dad
4 - Thank you for your help Susan. My professor thought that my paper was well-written, due to your helping....
Writing Feedbacklydever91 - Mar 17, 2010 / lydever91 - Apr 10, 2010
|"cursing the unlucky circumstances" - A translated Passage, good in English?
5 - Thanks for help indeed Mr. Kevin. However you didn't grade the passage! Thanks for the explanation....
Writing Feedbacktasneemspring - Apr 8, 2010 / tasneemspring - Apr 10, 2010
|Comparison and Contrast essay: Solar power and Wind power
4 - Nice comparison between solar power and wind power. But I want the solar power generator. Because it is effective...
Writing FeedbackRoZe10 - Mar 16, 2010 / dextercath96 - Apr 9, 2010
|Basic archetypal hero essay on McMurphy from One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest
NEW - Hello, I need some help reviewing my essay on the hero from the story One Flew Over the Cuckoo's...
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|Essay For My Right To Be Me- feedback
4 - Well, you talk about it several ways: What happened to freedom of expression? What happened to freedom of thought?......
Writing FeedbackTheMadHatter - Apr 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 9, 2010
|'The Advantages and Disadvantages of Globalization'
2 - Globalization has contributed a lot to the world today. It boosts countries' economies, advanced technologies and improves daily life...
Writing Feedbacksyahid - Apr 9, 2010 / PrinnyS04 - Apr 9, 2010
|Children of different abilities-teach students in accordance with their aptitude
9 - Hi,stranger4ever You can list your reasons or advantages about studying together. We can discuss it....
Writing Feedbackzhangqin - Apr 7, 2010 / zhangqin - Apr 9, 2010
|IELTS essay: Topic about dependence on computers
15 - Thanks Sharkonadiet! You have some excellent vocab and I hope you keep adding to it! As ET_Kevin...
Writing Feedbacksharkondiet - Apr 5, 2010 / ept1961 - Apr 9, 2010
|Age of marriage in today's world
5 - EF_Kevin Thank you very-very-very much!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! =))))) I adjusted my essay, today I' going to pass it... I'll tell you...
Writing Feedbackthebest_kz - Apr 7, 2010 / thebest_kz - Apr 8, 2010
|Opinion Essay about how technology improve quality of human life
Writing Feedbackallisonpat - Mar 31, 2010 / allisonpat - Apr 8, 2010
|Obedience and Disobedience in their extremes!
Writing Feedbackcraver - Apr 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 8, 2010
|Paper on ethics of animal research.
3 - Because of extremely advantageous health advancements that have benefited, and will continue to benefit, the lives of human beings,...
Writing Feedbackgeorgexu316 - Apr 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 8, 2010
|TOEFL essay: People have too much free time nowadays. Do you agree or disagree?
4 - I see what you mean Kevin. This occurs because of my inattentiveness. Thank you for pointing it out. I...
Writing FeedbackAzeri - Apr 6, 2010 / Azeri - Apr 8, 2010
|Violance Against Women
2 - In western countries women are more independent and more-ormore or less equal to male in the society. It is...
Writing Feedbackasokapalama - Apr 7, 2010 / zhangqin - Apr 8, 2010
|TOEFL essay: The automobile is destroying our quality of life.
Writing FeedbackAzeri - Apr 4, 2010 / Azeri - Apr 7, 2010
|TOEFL essay: government should spend as much money as possible on social issues
7 - Oh, I see! Well, you create a problem when you refer in general to social issues. Social issues...
Writing FeedbackAzeri - Apr 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 7, 2010
|"The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare." GRE issue
3 - Human beings, no matter how strong and unconquerable, yet must nevertheless yield to destiny. Your way was not wrong;...
Writing Feedbackclaire echo - Apr 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 7, 2010
|'teacher is a challenging career' - What makes a good teacher?
10 - Well, this part has some room for improvement: There is no point giving students tons of homework if...
Writing FeedbackPhoebe Su - Mar 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 7, 2010
|TOEFL:plan activities for the free time
4 - I liked the essay.I think it would be better if you add more introgative statements in the begining.(that is...
Writing Feedbackdjanat - Apr 5, 2010 / stranger4ever - Apr 6, 2010
|What Is Common Sense?
5 - Thanks ,I am really glad to know others oppinion ,I liked all the comments, I will try to use...
Writing Feedbackstranger4ever - Apr 5, 2010 / stranger4ever - Apr 6, 2010
|"A neighbor riding with a drunk guy and letting go" - Discription Essay
Writing FeedbackEma - Apr 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 6, 2010
|MEDIA SENSATIONALISM AND TYRANNY
NEW - MEDIA: A NEW AGE TYRANNY Debate is rife whether the Media whose primary role is to inform, is...
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|Positive steps that you and I can take to tackle climate change
4 - what positive steps can you or I start to tackle climate change? Ice caps disappearing, rising sea levels,...
Writing Feedbackyuda123 - Apr 3, 2010 / SaveTheEarth - Apr 5, 2010
|Essay about "My weekend".
3 - Inspired In the On weekends, some people go to visit their relatives or go shopping or even go...
Writing FeedbackBarbiah - Apr 3, 2010 / Vakax - Apr 5, 2010
|Should government funds be used for space exploration?
3 - have been passionate predators explorers of the unknown. ... "One tiny step forward by man and...
Writing Feedbacklovinglife77 - Apr 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 4, 2010
|GRE AW Issue 69. "Government should place few, if any, restrictions...
6 - Yes, differences are subtle!! That is why I tell people to practice by reading aloud. You have to...
Writing Feedbackjade - Mar 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 4, 2010
|Comparison and contrast between Palestine and USA
8 - That means it is the kind of compare contrast essay called "opposing." Google this for a good...
Writing Feedbackmary123 - Mar 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 4, 2010
|The line chart illustrates the change in the use of new technology in general families in Britain
3 - The line chart illustrates the change in the percentage of new technology which is used in general families in...
Writing Feedbackzhangqin - Apr 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 4, 2010
|Is it better for people to be realistic or optimistic? - Feedback
5 - Goals----> "them" It not only makes your goals look achievable, but also propels you into actually realizing them. ...
Writing Feedbacklovinglife77 - Mar 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 3, 2010
|IELTS: The Natural Resistance to Changes（reason and solution）
5 - I think to argue the effect of the phenomena, so that three items can be identified. Firstly, resisting change...
Writing Feedbackzhangqin - Apr 2, 2010 / Azeri - Apr 3, 2010
|Too much attention is paid to and too much money is spent on keeping pets
2 - First, the sentence "Although people throughout the world are starving and other people spent too much money on keeping...
Writing Feedbacknittuot - Apr 2, 2010 / Azeri - Apr 2, 2010
|TOEFL:people learn in different ways and what teaching method do you prefer?
3 - Thanks Jon, these are great corrections. They use several ways methods to broaden their... One of...
Writing Feedbackdjanat - Apr 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 2, 2010
|Teaching of music, art, and drama are critical in revealing hidden abilities of children
Writing FeedbackAzeri - Mar 27, 2010 / Azeri - Apr 2, 2010
|Obesity is a big problem in most of the countries
Writing Feedbackmegha - Mar 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2010
|IELTS essay: Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare.
4 - As a result the changes, people's eating habits have also changed significantly over few decades. Use "and" before...
Writing Feedbackindrukas - Mar 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2010
|toefl writing paper ---why people attend college
2 - If you have a college education you will make more money, which in turn will enable you to have...
Writing Feedbackcietzsche - Mar 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2010
|GRE issue41---nonmainstream areas of inquiry VS mainstream science
2 - Admittedly, these non-mainstream areas, which belong to the ideology sphere, can... In the first place, because these pursuits...
Writing FeedbackJulia zeng - Mar 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2010
|"try to live within your means" - my Cause and Effect Essay
4 - You are welcome!! Well, you can practice by helping around here sometimes essayforum.com/ef-contributor-page/ we need people with life experience...
Writing Feedbackhtrrkt - Mar 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2010
|Write about your life ten years from now (100 words)
2 - --- tell them that study and work are both ongoing. I myself sometimes wonder... Furthermore, I...
Writing Feedbackoldbabie - Mar 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2010
|Edit essay - better life today vs. in nineteenth century - feedback
3 - Living in the contemporary world has many more advantages than living in the nineteenth century. --- Yeah, until some...
Writing Feedbacklovinglife77 - Mar 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2010
|university dormitories or apartments?
2 - Because student residences are safe, propitious from financial standpoint, and collective student life.--- this sentence is incomplete. It needs...
Writing Feedbacksamir614 - Mar 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2010
|Short Opinion Essay on Julio Cortazars "Night Face Up"-Feedback
2 - In that first paragraph, you tell us many things about the story, but you don't clearly establish a theme...
Writing FeedbackBilal815 - Mar 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2010
|Proportions of males and females - practising to write essays on interpretation of charts
3 - The graph compares the proportions of males and females in the highest qualification achieved for working age of population...
Writing FeedbackCharlesL - Mar 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2010
|Transitions in a human life
3 - There are many transitions in the life of human. The stage of maturity is often to be respected the...
Writing Feedbackautumnwave - Mar 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 31, 2010
|"Eco Friendly India". TOEFL essay.
Writing Feedbackmegha - Mar 18, 2010 / megha - Mar 31, 2010
|Rhetorical Analysis - Advertisement photos
2 - Right after this, add another sentence before ending your first paragraph. Make it a thesis statement that clearly...
Writing FeedbackShelty - Mar 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 30, 2010
|"the real reason for the Yosemite decline" - my argument essay
Writing Feedbackjade - Mar 25, 2010 / jade - Mar 30, 2010
|Response to Scholarly Reading of Paulo Friere's "Banking" Concept of Education
Writing Feedbackalina967 - Mar 23, 2010 / alina967 - Mar 30, 2010
|Living in the country or city? Living in the country aint all that you think!
3 - Therefore you have to go ... if you like going without money ... ...the country have has less...
Writing Feedbackjr24 - Mar 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2010
|The legal drinking age in Ontario
4 - I think you should scratch out this sentence and replace it with a sentence says something about countries with...
Writing Feedbacknafiro - Mar 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2010
|GRE ISSUE221 The chief benefit of the study
5 - Yes, I did find another one: Although time and tide elapsed, these inspiring words of Sphinx can still be...
Writing Feedbacksnowdropie - Mar 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2010
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