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|Explain why you like (or do not like) to work in a team.
5 - i have some corrections i hope that help you - never begin a sentence by because/ the sentence must...
Writing FeedbackN2N - Mar 1, 2010 / djanat - Mar 4, 2010
|"Make all you can, save all you can, give all you can" it's better to save money
4 - Otherwise is one word. Also, this is a run on sentence: For basic needs, we should have money; otherwise...
Writing Feedbackmegha - Mar 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 4, 2010
|Essay on describing MY REGULAR WALK
7 - Thank you EF_Kevin, I got several inspirations on the expression about my writing. Anyway, I will try more times...
Writing Feedbackwinwin - Feb 20, 2010 / winwin - Mar 4, 2010
|business and cultural contact + development - views and your opinion
NEW - 1 .Some people say that the increasing business and cultural contact between countries is a positive development, while others...
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|sedating music - There are many different types of music in the world today.
3 - hi, I'm not good. I will share my experience. "For conclusion" - everybody uses this word. If you choose...
Writing Feedbackplotophyte - Mar 2, 2010 / saruul2004 - Mar 4, 2010
|desirable lifestyle: as a celebrity or common people. argument IELTS
Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Mar 1, 2010 / usalma2002 - Mar 2, 2010
|Comparison and Contrast : Differences between two lives
Writing Feedbackpurplespongy22 - Mar 2, 2010 / cathyliu - Mar 2, 2010
|Do you like to eat at home or hotel?
6 - thank you...
Writing Feedbackmegha - Feb 23, 2010 / megha - Mar 2, 2010
|essay about studying abroad in spain
2 - I enjoyed reading your essay, it was very well thought out and interesting. Here are a few small mistakes...
Writing Feedbackdefnite - Feb 28, 2010 / EF_Susan - Mar 1, 2010
|Informational and persuasive essay on travel
3 - Thank you very much! I truly appreciate your insight. As times passes and my writing skills improve I hope...
Writing FeedbackJ Carpenter - Feb 27, 2010 / J Carpenter - Mar 1, 2010
|the town of Garlsdon: Maps, roads - IELTS cambridge 5 writting task1
2 - Capitalize the first word: The central part is the town centre and surrounding it is the housing district with...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 1, 2010
|"That birthday card" - Besides the Point? A Re-thread
Writing FeedbackChenalaska - Feb 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 28, 2010
|Maps, roads - IELTS cambridge 5 writting task1 check out the grammar
5 - Thanks everyone! You are all making this forum a great place by helping each other so much. In...
Writing Feedbackmerchant - Feb 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 28, 2010
|Your school days, an enjoyable event description
5 - The enjoyable event I would like to talk about here is the spring outing activity that happened on my...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 27, 2010
|what is advantage and disadvantage of a new shopping mall ?
3 - A mechanisms of free-trades of consumerism in modern times, shopping malls are large places full of goods and service...
Writing FeedbackBBOY - Feb 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 27, 2010
|TOEFL assay: You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business.
4 - I see that you are very good at writing in English! I'll help with a phrase in this sentence:...
Writing Feedbackcuchocruz - Feb 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 27, 2010
|Havisham: My Story based on the Poem Havisham
Writing FeedbackAdamking120 - Feb 25, 2010 / Adamking120 - Feb 26, 2010
|personal narative -mexico tattoo
NEW - started writing this personall narrative for a senior english assingment..feeling kinda stuck. please helppp Laying my head back...
Writing Feedbackbootsietootsie - Feb 26, 2010 / — -
|micheal jackson : rock with you
4 - 1958: when Michael was born in lower middle class family with a curse of being black. ---- if you...
Writing Feedbackkasi_gem - Feb 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
|descriptive essay about my favorite animal (the lion)
Writing FeedbackESCRIBE - Feb 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
|which one do you think--- a wide range of courses --most/least important
3 - Nowadays, along with the emphasis on the overall development of individuals, students now stay ... ---- you don't need...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
|Modern buildings are appearing in large numbers, we should build our buildings in traditional styles
5 - Well, it is a very difficult language to learn! You are doing very well. The way to practice is...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
|How to Apply to Universities in America from Indonesia (process analysis)
3 - ...but something always goes gets in their way. Some people just cannot afford it, and some people just...
Writing Feedbackpurplespongy22 - Feb 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
|a narrative reflective essay regarding education
2 - If you are writing in the present verb tense, keep consistent about it: When his class mate, Ken Harvey,...
Writing FeedbackDeedames - Feb 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
|Indian-White Relationship in Colonial New England, can you check my essay
3 - You can't just start by saying something had been some way without saying "when" you are talking about: When...
Writing FeedbackJuan8897 - Feb 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
|A healthy person: What do people do to stay healthy in your country?
2 - Like in other countries, a healthy life style and having a healthy society is one of the main prioritiesofin...
Writing Feedbackplotophyte - Feb 25, 2010 / Rod_Farva - Feb 25, 2010
|"Freedom to Failure" - Definition & Example paper, passive voice, prepostion use
2 - Yes, isn't it interesting that we crave that sense of connectedness, so we blog and twitter about what...
Writing Feedbackkjwerner - Feb 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 25, 2010
|TOEFL essay (compare work of artists and scientists)
3 - Good advice, Peng! I also think this essay needs an intro paragraph that talks about both artists and...
Writing Feedbacksheryl82 - Feb 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 25, 2010
|[TOEFL essay] Teachers should update their knowledge every 5years.
Writing Feedbackduke616 - Feb 22, 2010 / duke616 - Feb 25, 2010
|Personal Story - The Child Hood
Writing Feedbackhyori14 - Feb 23, 2010 / cathyliu - Feb 25, 2010
|Green Change - "cause and effect" essay
6 - What a powerful line this is! When people deeply understand the cultural turbulence that takes place, they really...
Writing Feedbacknewsha31 - Jan 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 25, 2010
|Essay-Mommy Makeovers, Newest Trend in Cosmetic Surgery-Feedback Welcome!
4 - Questions are good attention grabbers, for sure. They are almost a little cliche, though, because of how overused rhetorical...
Writing Feedbackamymich79 - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 24, 2010
|Personal Essay- How the children from India transformed me
Writing Feedbackjenniferrchan - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 24, 2010
|ESSAY 250 WORDS - IELTS - Politicians and Scientists
Writing Feedbackvictorp_sv - Feb 20, 2010 / winwin - Feb 24, 2010
|Politicians and scientists have the greatest influence on earth.discuss IELTS GT
4 - I like your argument that politicians and scientists have influence on earth. It seems very vague though as to...
Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Feb 15, 2010 / hey_millie - Feb 24, 2010
|People are being demoralized day by day.Discuss IELTS GT
4 - Perhaps elaborate on your conclusion or tie it into another paragraph somehow. Otherwise a great essay!...
Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Feb 17, 2010 / Veta - Feb 24, 2010
|Nanotechnology (implications and the future) - essay polishing
2 - There are many different implications that nanotechnology has for the future.--- this kind of sentence always weakens an essay....
Writing FeedbackClyde - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 23, 2010
|In some countries children have very strict rules of behavior,
Writing Feedbackplotophyte - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 23, 2010
|Anti-social behavior, lack of respect to others -help me make some improvement
5 - This is what colons are for----> There are mainly two causes of this phenomenon: the negative influence of ......
Writing Feedbackadverb - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 23, 2010
|Reasons-winners are be motivated by money & fame, what impacts on youth & itself
3 - Great thanks, klusterfunk. (1)Due to the rapid ecomomic development, Due to /Owing to/As a result of; Along with...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 22, 2010 / cathyliu - Feb 22, 2010
|"big or small inventions and their roles" - English Composition Clep
2 - When you use a semi-colon, you are supposed to have a complete sentence worth of words on each side...
Writing Feedbackmonessie - Feb 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 22, 2010
|toefl writting:Printed books have greater effects on society than television
2 - In fact, people in growing numbers prefer television to printed books, considering it efficient and effective. Yet, there are...
Writing Feedbackelvis_ma - Feb 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 22, 2010
|TOEFL IBT ESSAY "Telephones have had more positive effects on human kind than TV
2 - Don't write it all as one long paragraph. Separate it into some 4 or 5 sentence paragraphs: ...telephone,...
Writing Feedbackcandy890411 - Feb 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 22, 2010
|A point to believe - Can anyone help me to short my creative essay?
15 - The whistle blows, and I hesitate. ---- I think this is better, but maybe you made it 2 sentences...
Writing Feedbacklittle636 - Feb 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 22, 2010
|garbage sites, safety council - GRE Argument
Writing Feedbackwoodcrowfoot - Feb 20, 2010 / woodcrowfoot - Feb 22, 2010
|"Do Phone Calls Increase Voter Turnout?" - article summary and critique
NEW - I was hoping to get some quick revisions for the rough draft of my article critique, I feel like...
Writing Feedbackggc540 - Feb 22, 2010 / — -
|'just a typical teenager' - Creative writing Who am i? essay
5 - thanks alot.....
Writing Feedbackeram - Feb 18, 2010 / eram - Feb 21, 2010
3 - When you write, use capital letters at the beginning of every sentence. When you write the word Pakistan, capitalize...
Writing Feedbackkasi_gem - Feb 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 21, 2010
|In achieving happiness,relationship is of more important than anything else.
2 - Thus the most frequent reason given for studying has changed to be a desire to become an authority in...
Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Feb 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 21, 2010
|GRE issue essay:"The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes..."
Writing FeedbackYeming - Feb 16, 2010 / Yeming - Feb 21, 2010
|TOEFL"It is better to marry some who is similar to you rather than different
4 - I guess you finish it in a rush. Criteria, other believe, definitely, Some believes that marrying a person similar to...
Writing FeedbackPoojasugandhi - Feb 19, 2010 / cathyliu - Feb 20, 2010
|Marshalls made me realize how sine qua non a higher education is
3 - Jonathan, you are a hero. Thanks for helping so many people lately. I see what the problem is...
Writing FeedbackBlaqnsassy - Feb 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 20, 2010
|Is persistence all that is needed to be successful? - A SAT essay
3 - god thesis statement. This is brilliant. Patience and motivation are indeed the components of persistence. Thanks for sharing...
Writing FeedbackDemha - Feb 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 20, 2010
|Educating Children with Toys - help me with these pargraphs
5 - Consequently, toy manufacturers are designing toys that can aid children in learning to initiate action, to taking care...
Writing Feedbackmary123 - Feb 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 20, 2010
|Narrative Essay (an experience) - "How do I approach him?"
5 - Well, for good clear composition, you ca use the last sentence of the first paragraph to establish a...
Writing Feedbackbharat2363 - Feb 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 20, 2010
|'Building character' - Community Service- Synthesis Essay
3 - This should be a comma and not a semi-colon: Having community service as a requirement to graduate is a...
Writing Feedbacktiger13twin - Feb 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 19, 2010
|GRE Argument essay:Finding new jobs for laid-off XYZ company employees
2 - This is looking very strong! ...last year those who used Delany found jobs much more quickly than did...
Writing Feedbackeringao - Feb 19, 2010 / EF_Susan - Feb 19, 2010
|THE PROCESS OF FORGIVENESS, BLAME, AND SELF-ACCEPTANCE
3 - Hi Overall great essay. But I'm sure that your readers will be much happier if you stop using profanity....
Writing FeedbackMementoMori - Feb 2, 2010 / Demha - Feb 19, 2010
|IELTS Essay - Technology vs Traditional Cultures
6 - comments: Your first paragraph sounds like you are giving your opinion. That should be your final paragraph. What is...
Writing Feedbackvictorp_sv - Feb 17, 2010 / comet2000 - Feb 18, 2010
|"never thought college was important at all" - Cause and Effect
4 - Comments: So far, it's ok. I think you should expend more on your essay. It's a bit short but...
Writing FeedbackDannyrestrepo - Feb 17, 2010 / comet2000 - Feb 18, 2010
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