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|Toefl essay: Modern technology; single world culture will not be created
2 - Especially, ancient cultural people, they will conserve their civilization to distinguish themselves from others. Loose sentence. The...
Writing Feedbacklittle_wingg - Feb 5, 2011 / shelok - Feb 5, 2011
|Personal essay about myself - my identity
2 - I want to find places to shorten sentence and build intensity in the writing: To many high school students,...
Writing Feedbackwemm3 - Feb 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 5, 2011
|"you can see the wonders" - Season of change
3 - Probably the reason no one helped you is that the help you gave others was like this: "Thats nice....
Writing Feedbackajoye - Feb 1, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 5, 2011
|Don't Judge---Story from my life that teaches a moral (for english class)
Writing Feedbackem2always - Jan 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 4, 2011
|Center Stage; The music has begun
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Jan 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 4, 2011
|IELTS-most effective media for communication
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Jan 31, 2011 / ajit88rai - Feb 3, 2011
|A good son or daughter has a responsibility to obey parents and keep communication with them
2 - I try to give some suggestions for the first 2 paraghaps => Parents sacrifice for their children from...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Feb 3, 2011 / KathyLala - Feb 3, 2011
|"Moving into the land of dream" how to improve my narrative essay
8 - Here are some edits => It was time to say goodbye! => When the airplane arrived in Detroit, we...
Writing Feedback8jhoi8 - Feb 1, 2011 / KathyLala - Feb 3, 2011
|"Grateful to God" - personal experience essay
Writing Feedbackisyraf - Jan 31, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 3, 2011
|'murky aspects of life' - The study of history has value
Writing Feedbackminaplusplus - Jan 22, 2011 / minaplusplus - Feb 1, 2011
|O Level essay: Animals and birds should never be kept in cages. What's your opinion?
Writing FeedbackChim Can Cook - Jan 20, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 1, 2011
|"Punta Cana" - My Favorite Vacation
5 - Your first sentence is excellent... perfect grammar. My favorite vacation destination is in the Dominican Republic, because it...
Writing Feedbackfdmonta - Jan 26, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 1, 2011
|Why People Cheat? (cheating has its advantages and disadvantages)
Writing FeedbackChuchu8892 - Jan 26, 2011 / surfsamurai - Feb 1, 2011
|Reflective essay about global warming - legislators should listen to constituents .
2 - As the time passe s, more and more animals are suffering from the effects of Global Warming. We...
Writing Feedbackthania93 - Jan 30, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 1, 2011
|Adults always say that life was better in their childhood and school days than it is
Writing Feedbackrenga78 - Jan 25, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 1, 2011
|my dad teaches me and has a big influence on me
5 - This is a good start, but you should look through to find the first excellent sentence: My dad has...
Writing Feedbacknee - Jan 25, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 1, 2011
|academic writing task 1- family types living in poverty
4 - Excellent progress in this thread. I'll add an idea about that first sentence: The given table depicts in...
Writing Feedbackaspasiakor - Jan 25, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 1, 2011
|Gender imbalance in classes is still proved to be acceptable
4 - This part should be simpler: Some claim that students are bestowed on benefits if the numbers of men and...
Writing Feedbackyaiba24 - Jan 25, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 1, 2011
|IELTS-is change required or not?
6 - A common expression is: Practice makes perfect. That is a common cliche in English. But it is NOT good...
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Jan 26, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 1, 2011
|'one and only one' - some people are born with certain talents
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Jan 26, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 1, 2011
|"if i hadn't gone in the basement" - the time i made a costly mistake
2 - Your essay was chosen for a rewrite by the writers from college admission essay help. Below is the...
Writing Feedbackajoye - Jan 31, 2011 / EricJ - Feb 1, 2011
|Toefl essay : One thing representing your country to an international exhibition
3 - Hi, little_wingg "rich of taste" Do you mean "Various kinds of flavors"? How about replacing it with "Plentiful...
Writing Feedbacklittle_wingg - Jan 28, 2011 / yecochi - Jan 31, 2011
|Does advertising encourages us to buy products that we really do need?
6 - Advertisement is an action which is taking greater part of human's an effort that is taking up a large...
Writing Feedbackniki - Jan 26, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 31, 2011
|(No) Sympathy for the Devil
2 - I have to change a word or two in this first sentence: Light filtered through the steel frames windows...
Writing FeedbackAtlasa - Jan 26, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 31, 2011
|About religious discrimination, Muslim and Ms. Gordon
Writing Feedbacknida2192 - Jan 30, 2011 / Chocolette - Jan 31, 2011
|What features of restaurant I care most?
Writing Feedbackwhitney - Jan 18, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 31, 2011
|IELTS-is a break good or bad after high school for students?
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Jan 28, 2011 / sabrinayaa - Jan 31, 2011
|"No support for the U.S. space program" - CLEP Composition - Product Safety
3 - ... the car industry, the airline industry, and the defense industry to name a few.--I think you should write...
Writing Feedbackmichalms - Jan 24, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 30, 2011
|IELTS-good news/bad news? whats the best?
2 - The credit for this awareness... goes to the power of media. News has become a quintessential part of...
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Jan 24, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 30, 2011
|Toefl, There is nothing that an uneducated person can teach an educated person.
3 - I'll improve the clarity right here: We can learn a lot of things from their the behavior, experiences...
Writing Feedbackhaleh - Jan 24, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 30, 2011
|Community that I belong - "The lab"
6 - Good essay and well written, you answered the prompt very well. I like this question. But there is...
Writing Feedbackltpvan - Jan 24, 2011 / chunf - Jan 30, 2011
|'nuclear family'; The extended family becomes less important than in the past
Writing Feedbackskyzhangty - Jan 30, 2011 / Shandana - Jan 30, 2011
|O level essay: School uniform- sense of identity and good discipline
3 - You have to pluralize Uniform: "Uniforms are boring!" "Uniforms are unnecessary!" "School can still do well without uniforms!"...
Writing FeedbackChim Can Cook - Jan 23, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 29, 2011
|"Children require the love shared by both father and mother" Fatherhood & motherhood
3 - In the past, there was a convention that fathers only are responsible for satisfying the material needs of the...
Writing FeedbackKSR - Jan 23, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 29, 2011
|Long-distance flight consumes more resources and pollutes more than cars
Writing Feedbackzhixiang - Jan 23, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 29, 2011
|"It is better act than just complain" grammar and spelling on this paragraph
3 - Grisbel, thanks for doing such a great job here! You are making essayforum better by giving above-average help like...
Writing FeedbackCharito - Jan 26, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jan 29, 2011
|IELTS-computers..use,future prospects and over-dependence.
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Jan 28, 2011 / machinairum - Jan 29, 2011
|IELTS: Post-school qualifications in Australia - men dominated by reaching 90%
2 - This is the hardest kind of writing. It is very hard to explain charts properly, so do not be...
Writing Feedbackaspasiakor - Jan 26, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 29, 2011
|O level narrative:an attempt to help led to unexpected consequences for the helper.
2 - Cook woke up and found himself lying in the corner of a valley. --I like this very interesting first...
Writing FeedbackChim Can Cook - Jan 26, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 29, 2011
|Rock involves sex sense,drug abuse,strong language;there are many types of music
2 - I t is generally believed that the music is voice of heart and a musician capable of conquering the...
Writing Feedbackfbi666 - Jan 28, 2011 / shesprettyodd - Jan 28, 2011
|Leadership and ethics.Situation you have dealt with these issues and influenced you
5 - EF_Susan Thanks susan you have been generous in giving 6 out of 10.But can u help me in making...
Writing Feedbackyasirshah - Jan 11, 2011 / yasirshah - Jan 28, 2011
|Born talented or taught? - ielts essay
2 - -Music, sport etc has made usour life meaningful. although Although food, shelter and clothes are mans man's basic...
Writing Feedbackmanisha234 - Jan 28, 2011 / ajit88rai - Jan 28, 2011
|About the Grad CF Course (difficulty, diversity)
3 - Sorry I'm so slow! Still catching up from the busy season... Shouldn't Institute be capitalized here? ...
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Jan 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jan 27, 2011
|Fatherhood crisis - women are solely responsible for deciding to have babies
2 - Aria did definitely give a thorough analysis, but do you understand all of it? It looks confusing! Do you...
Writing FeedbackBarbieTsu - Jan 21, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 27, 2011
|Do you believe the use of Internet in formal education is a good idea? - IELTS Task 2
5 - Some believe the Internet can change the essence of the traditional education from a serious issue to a kind...
Writing FeedbackARIA - Jan 21, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 27, 2011
|Costa Rica, A memorable place, descriptive essay.
2 - This is too much for the reader to interpret, and not enough imagery. Let detail is more. The...
Writing FeedbackBradrick84 - Jan 25, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jan 27, 2011
|How to deal with a gift of money ?
4 - Hi Ajit I think you must be a little disappointed about me, because I still have so many mistakes.It...
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Jan 25, 2011 / sabrinayaa - Jan 27, 2011
|Essay : study at home by using technology in the future?
3 - Thanks, Dumi. I'll give only a little help because Mishal only gives a few words in response to other...
Writing Feedbackmishal alzaid - Jan 20, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 26, 2011
|emergency money; spend your earned money immediately or save it for future ?
10 - -Hey Sabrina, try to finish Norman Lewis book. It has all you need to have an excellent grammar. Just...
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Jan 22, 2011 / ajit88rai - Jan 26, 2011
|The success of a community and people's willingness to limit their personal interests
4 - When people dream the same dream, all (all what?) becomes one; but if the partners touch an incongruity and...
Writing Feedbackcharpay_k - Jan 17, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 25, 2011
|Some people think robots can improve humans' life in the future
Writing Feedbackrenga78 - Jan 20, 2011 / renga78 - Jan 25, 2011
|Jobs that you enjoy or jobs that you can earn a lot of money
Writing Feedbackwhitney - Dec 30, 2010 / pashnetala - Jan 25, 2011
|IELTS: Is television a very useful tool when it comes to education?
3 - ...and has only insignificant positive effects on a child. This essay will show my opinion for both views. Instead...
Writing FeedbackAlsu - Jan 21, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 24, 2011
|Should juries have access to information about the defendant's. IELTS Task 2.
3 - Let's try to improve this first sentence a little bit: The decisions made by juries, which can interfere with...
Writing FeedbackARIA - Jan 22, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 24, 2011
|MY REASON FOR VIEWING LIFE AS AMAZING (I was in five different hospitals)
2 - You can't start a sentence with Did like this... unless you are using poetic license. :-) Did not have...
Writing Feedbackshurtleffryan - Jan 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jan 24, 2011
|an essay about why laptop is important to me?
2 - Everyone needs to have an important object in her or his life. Capitalize: Inspiron with the model...
Writing Feedbackwbsxe - Jan 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jan 24, 2011
|No role for teachers in the classroom because of computers?
2 - This sentence needs to have an article before Education: Educational sector is not an exception. I don't mean to...
Writing FeedbackArunj4mast - Jan 21, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jan 24, 2011
|IELTS-do ads make us to buy more or is it a need?
4 - thankx khushi, i got it right in third try...lol....but no matter how many attempts i take right now...it will...
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Jan 23, 2011 / ajit88rai - Jan 24, 2011
|An essay about the results of a survey of adults education-IELTS
3 - Hello, As far as I know when you write your introduction for IELTS task 1 you must avoid copying...
Writing FeedbackSuYper - Jan 19, 2011 / Liliya - Jan 23, 2011
|CRIME RATES are increasing due to uneducated people migrating to the cities
3 - Hey, I think this essay is solid. It's a well-made argument that absolutely does show strong evidence that crime...
Writing Feedbackceko - Jan 15, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 23, 2011
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