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|"The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare." GRE issue
3 - Human beings, no matter how strong and unconquerable, yet must nevertheless yield to destiny. Your way was not wrong;...
Writing Feedbackclaire echo - Apr 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 7, 2010
|'teacher is a challenging career' - What makes a good teacher?
10 - Well, this part has some room for improvement: There is no point giving students tons of homework if...
Writing FeedbackPhoebe Su - Mar 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 7, 2010
|TOEFL:plan activities for the free time
4 - I liked the essay.I think it would be better if you add more introgative statements in the begining.(that is...
Writing Feedbackdjanat - Apr 5, 2010 / stranger4ever - Apr 6, 2010
|What Is Common Sense?
5 - Thanks ,I am really glad to know others oppinion ,I liked all the comments, I will try to use...
Writing Feedbackstranger4ever - Apr 5, 2010 / stranger4ever - Apr 6, 2010
|"A neighbor riding with a drunk guy and letting go" - Discription Essay
Writing FeedbackEma - Apr 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 6, 2010
|MEDIA SENSATIONALISM AND TYRANNY
NEW - MEDIA: A NEW AGE TYRANNY Debate is rife whether the Media whose primary role is to inform, is...
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|Positive steps that you and I can take to tackle climate change
4 - what positive steps can you or I start to tackle climate change? Ice caps disappearing, rising sea levels,...
Writing Feedbackyuda123 - Apr 3, 2010 / SaveTheEarth - Apr 5, 2010
|Essay about "My weekend".
3 - Inspired In the On weekends, some people go to visit their relatives or go shopping or even go...
Writing FeedbackBarbiah - Apr 3, 2010 / Vakax - Apr 5, 2010
|Should government funds be used for space exploration?
3 - have been passionate predators explorers of the unknown. ... "One tiny step forward by man and...
Writing Feedbacklovinglife77 - Apr 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 4, 2010
|GRE AW Issue 69. "Government should place few, if any, restrictions...
6 - Yes, differences are subtle!! That is why I tell people to practice by reading aloud. You have to...
Writing Feedbackjade - Mar 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 4, 2010
|Comparison and contrast between Palestine and USA
8 - That means it is the kind of compare contrast essay called "opposing." Google this for a good...
Writing Feedbackmary123 - Mar 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 4, 2010
|The line chart illustrates the change in the use of new technology in general families in Britain
3 - The line chart illustrates the change in the percentage of new technology which is used in general families in...
Writing Feedbackzhangqin - Apr 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 4, 2010
|Is it better for people to be realistic or optimistic? - Feedback
5 - Goals----> "them" It not only makes your goals look achievable, but also propels you into actually realizing them. ...
Writing Feedbacklovinglife77 - Mar 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 3, 2010
|IELTS: The Natural Resistance to Changes（reason and solution）
5 - I think to argue the effect of the phenomena, so that three items can be identified. Firstly, resisting change...
Writing Feedbackzhangqin - Apr 2, 2010 / Azeri - Apr 3, 2010
|Too much attention is paid to and too much money is spent on keeping pets
2 - First, the sentence "Although people throughout the world are starving and other people spent too much money on keeping...
Writing Feedbacknittuot - Apr 2, 2010 / Azeri - Apr 2, 2010
|TOEFL:people learn in different ways and what teaching method do you prefer?
3 - Thanks Jon, these are great corrections. They use several ways methods to broaden their... One of...
Writing Feedbackdjanat - Apr 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 2, 2010
|Teaching of music, art, and drama are critical in revealing hidden abilities of children
Writing FeedbackAzeri - Mar 27, 2010 / Azeri - Apr 2, 2010
|Obesity is a big problem in most of the countries
Writing Feedbackmegha - Mar 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2010
|IELTS essay: Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare.
4 - As a result the changes, people's eating habits have also changed significantly over few decades. Use "and" before...
Writing Feedbackindrukas - Mar 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2010
|toefl writing paper ---why people attend college
2 - If you have a college education you will make more money, which in turn will enable you to have...
Writing Feedbackcietzsche - Mar 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2010
|GRE issue41---nonmainstream areas of inquiry VS mainstream science
2 - Admittedly, these non-mainstream areas, which belong to the ideology sphere, can... In the first place, because these pursuits...
Writing FeedbackJulia zeng - Mar 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2010
|"try to live within your means" - my Cause and Effect Essay
4 - You are welcome!! Well, you can practice by helping around here sometimes essayforum.com/ef-contributor-page/ we need people with life experience...
Writing Feedbackhtrrkt - Mar 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2010
|Write about your life ten years from now (100 words)
2 - --- tell them that study and work are both ongoing. I myself sometimes wonder... Furthermore, I...
Writing Feedbackoldbabie - Mar 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2010
|Edit essay - better life today vs. in nineteenth century - feedback
3 - Living in the contemporary world has many more advantages than living in the nineteenth century. --- Yeah, until some...
Writing Feedbacklovinglife77 - Mar 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2010
|university dormitories or apartments?
2 - Because student residences are safe, propitious from financial standpoint, and collective student life.--- this sentence is incomplete. It needs...
Writing Feedbacksamir614 - Mar 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2010
|Short Opinion Essay on Julio Cortazars "Night Face Up"-Feedback
2 - In that first paragraph, you tell us many things about the story, but you don't clearly establish a theme...
Writing FeedbackBilal815 - Mar 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2010
|Proportions of males and females - practising to write essays on interpretation of charts
3 - The graph compares the proportions of males and females in the highest qualification achieved for working age of population...
Writing FeedbackCharlesL - Mar 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2010
|Transitions in a human life
3 - There are many transitions in the life of human. The stage of maturity is often to be respected the...
Writing Feedbackautumnwave - Mar 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 31, 2010
|"Eco Friendly India". TOEFL essay.
Writing Feedbackmegha - Mar 18, 2010 / megha - Mar 31, 2010
|Rhetorical Analysis - Advertisement photos
2 - Right after this, add another sentence before ending your first paragraph. Make it a thesis statement that clearly...
Writing FeedbackShelty - Mar 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 30, 2010
|"the real reason for the Yosemite decline" - my argument essay
Writing Feedbackjade - Mar 25, 2010 / jade - Mar 30, 2010
|Response to Scholarly Reading of Paulo Friere's "Banking" Concept of Education
Writing Feedbackalina967 - Mar 23, 2010 / alina967 - Mar 30, 2010
|Living in the country or city? Living in the country aint all that you think!
3 - Therefore you have to go ... if you like going without money ... ...the country have has less...
Writing Feedbackjr24 - Mar 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2010
|The legal drinking age in Ontario
4 - I think you should scratch out this sentence and replace it with a sentence says something about countries with...
Writing Feedbacknafiro - Mar 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2010
|GRE ISSUE221 The chief benefit of the study
5 - Yes, I did find another one: Although time and tide elapsed, these inspiring words of Sphinx can still be...
Writing Feedbacksnowdropie - Mar 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2010
|Tony Hoagland's "Romantic Moment" -- personal response essay
Writing Feedbackmbiscoe25 - Mar 4, 2010 / mbiscoe25 - Mar 28, 2010
|IELTS essay-sports professionals people vs.people in other essential professions
2 - There has been some debate over whether athletes should get higher incomings incomes compared with... It is...
Writing Feedbackgmt_snail - Mar 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 28, 2010
|Computers and operation systems - My introduction
5 - How about "compete to" instead of "compete about" ...are competing about releasing to release the best operating systems....
Writing FeedbackRaz - Mar 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 28, 2010
|A woman's place should be in home?
8 - That is an important point, thanks! However, I don't see any contractions in the essay. Some words...
Writing Feedbackhungvud - Mar 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 27, 2010
|ielts:role of computers in education
Writing Feedbackgingerpopo - Mar 23, 2010 / gmt_snail - Mar 27, 2010
|TOEFL:People enjoy change.others like their lives to stay the same
Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 23, 2010 / djanat - Mar 26, 2010
|the effects of stress (cause and effect paper)
11 - Here is another way to improve this sentence: Considering the fact that everybody deals with puzzling matters everyday, it...
Writing Feedbackbrooke4013 - Feb 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 26, 2010
|"How people look, dress & act reveals their attitudes and interests" -GRE ISSUE
Writing Feedbacksnowdropie - Mar 24, 2010 / snowdropie - Mar 26, 2010
|Take caution (one important aspect of your character)
2 - No need for drastically here, because it has no meaning in the sentence: Time drastically came to a halt...
Writing Feedbackmegdance48 - Mar 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 24, 2010
|Is Technology changing the world for better?
4 - to lead a live where we know when we have a sufficient amount of material comforts. material is always...
Writing Feedbacklongwu - Mar 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 24, 2010
|DREAM BRING ME TO ANOTHER WORLD
4 - She was right to say that, because it applies in many situations in real life. But there are some...
Writing Feedbackautumnwave - Mar 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 24, 2010
|Toefl integrated essay：Were there life-form on Mars？
4 - Good example! These have slightly different meanings, though!! If you say it completely refutes the passage, it sounds...
Writing Feedbackodie6467 - Mar 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 24, 2010
|"Preventing Herpes" - Current Issue in Public Health using an article about health problem
9 - I think this should be two sentences instead of one: Herpes is one of the most co mmon sexually...
Writing Feedbackcomet2000 - Mar 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 24, 2010
|My essay relating to job satisfaction :)
2 - Satisfaction obtained from work is considered as a more and more by many to be a crucial way to...
Writing Feedbackgmt_snail - Mar 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 22, 2010
|Introduction/Thesis Help (good family = good future, bad family = bad future)
9 - Usually people say, "The teenage years" rather "the years of a teenager" Oh, I'm glad you finished and...
Writing FeedbackKurogashi - Mar 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 21, 2010
|I believe that both classmates and parents have considerable influence on children
Writing Feedbackjimmy1983 - Mar 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 20, 2010
|Cause & Effects of Computer Addiction
5 - Thanks for all the kind words and help. If you guys see anything else or can think of something...
Writing Feedbackbrown287 - Mar 18, 2010 / brown287 - Mar 19, 2010
|TOEFL:Decision can be made quickly
2 - We have to take make decisions. "make" Almost all people have to make some decisions in their daily...
Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 19, 2010
|TOEFL:Some people trust their first impression about a person character
3 - "Lot" is a singular noun, so you have to write: There are many people who believe that the... ...
Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 19, 2010
|"What is love?" - It's the beauty of a rose, yet often vile as her thorns
Writing Feedbacktrevor5249 - Mar 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 19, 2010
|Private car ownership has grown dramatically in recent years.
Writing Feedbacksaruul2004 - Mar 2, 2010 / cathyliu - Mar 18, 2010
|'Getting what is different' - TOEFL:People are never satisfied with what they have.
2 - Great intro paragraph! The first factor is the jealousy. The jealousy ... Jealousy also makes people to...
Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 17, 2010
|TOEFL: Most of secondary schools include the art and music course in their annual program
Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 14, 2010 / mocixuan - Mar 17, 2010
|GRE argument: sales prediction
2 - In sum, the author wants to make a prediction about the future sales whereas his deduction contains several facets...
Writing Feedbackmocixuan - Mar 16, 2010 / r43ew - Mar 17, 2010
|insufficient respect towards old members of society
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