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|Computer games are time consuming and they do not provide educational value
3 - I think you already have a quite good sense of grammar and vocabulary. What you need now is to...
Writing Feedbackfafut123 - Nov 5, 2017 / rubychautran - Nov 6, 2017
|Studying English will give many advantages to myself and to the future of Timor-Leste.
5 - @Holt Thank You so much, it's my mistake. I've made this essay to applying free IELTS, this essay talking...
Writing FeedbackCrissia - Nov 5, 2017 / Crissia - Nov 6, 2017
|Essay: responsibility of parents for their children behaviour
Writing FeedbackOzRamsay - Nov 5, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Nov 5, 2017
|Population worldwide until 2100 and its distribution between developed and developing countries
2 - Khang, you are looking at a possible high score of 4 with the type of presentation that you have...
Writing Feedbacktmkhang1999 - Nov 5, 2017 / Holt - Nov 5, 2017
|Vegetables are the best thing you can eat.
Writing FeedbackMyNguyuen - Nov 4, 2017 / zamzamii - Nov 5, 2017
|"Leadership and learning are indispensable to each other" - Chevening essay
2 - Yomna, your presentation is too greenhorn. The one problem with presenting an academic leadership and influencing presentation in this...
Writing FeedbackYomnaelkhiamy - Nov 4, 2017 / Holt - Nov 4, 2017
|Is government responsible for child obesity? The positive intervention would be beneficial.
9 - Hi @holt Somehow, all of your comments in this thread has given improvement in my IELTS writing. Thank...
Writing FeedbackOzRamsay - Nov 3, 2017 / Yeskiputri11 - Nov 4, 2017
|A letter of reference to my English teacher from the previous school (IELTS TASK ONE)
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Nov 4, 2017 / Holt - Nov 4, 2017
|Rate and comment on my argumentative essay for GRE- Late night television news viewership decline
4 - Hi, this essay is already good but there are some tiny english mistakes in term of grammar and typos....
Writing Feedbackxin - Nov 1, 2017 / rumihumaira - Nov 4, 2017
|The topic describe positive side when living in city - opportunities, career, raising children, etc.
4 - I'd have to assume that this is for an academic essay because you didn't specify it. Or is it...
Writing Feedbackse7enkieu - Nov 3, 2017 / rumihumaira - Nov 4, 2017
|Essay: Do the advantages of shopping online outweigh the disadvantages?
4 - @WriteWell @Holt Thanks for your assessment about my essay, it's immensely valuable. Hope to receive more help from you...
Writing FeedbackLonggbauu - Nov 3, 2017 / Longgbauu - Nov 4, 2017
|The cheap air flight should be banned because it pollutes the air and brings many other problems
2 - @hanhhnhii your opening paraphrase is inaccurate and does not apply to the original prompt. Your sentence number per paragraph...
Writing Feedbackhanhhnhii - Nov 3, 2017 / Holt - Nov 3, 2017
|Upraising e-books, good or bad? Adv vs disadv essay.
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Nov 2, 2017 / hanhhnhii - Nov 3, 2017
|[task 2] Some people believe that it is a good idea to continue to work at their old age
4 - @Holt Glad to hear that. With your help, I've finally found the solution to my problematic presentation. Thanks. ...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Nov 3, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Nov 3, 2017
|Essay: television influence on people's behaviour. The effect is negligible.
2 - Ainur, dial it back a bit. Are you writing a practice essay for TOEFL or are you just writing...
Writing FeedbackOzRamsay - Nov 2, 2017 / Holt - Nov 3, 2017
|The question about protecting all wild animals or not
3 - Zhou, as far as this essay is concerned, I cannot review it for applicable content due to the missing...
Writing Feedbackzrq - Nov 2, 2017 / Holt - Nov 3, 2017
|Broadcasting manipulation to promote clothes, fashion advertisements is a prevailing trend
Writing Feedbackhanhhnhii - Nov 1, 2017 / hanhhnhii - Nov 2, 2017
|The less you use internet, the more you feel happy in life. Ielts writing topic
5 - @Huonglypham since this is the first time you have written a task 2 essay, I can understand how and...
Writing FeedbackHuonglypham - Nov 2, 2017 / Holt - Nov 2, 2017
|If you could give money to only one type of charitable organization, which one would you choose?
3 - Behzab, your discussion is faulty from the very beginning because you have chosen to represent several charities in your...
Writing Feedbackpier - Nov 1, 2017 / Holt - Nov 2, 2017
|[task 2] children should not do any paid job, in spite of its benefits
2 - @LadyOfClockwork Hello! I think you started off well, with straightforwardly answering the question. But the essay somewhat loses it...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Nov 2, 2017 / Raza93 - Nov 2, 2017
|IELTS Task 1: the graph compared the consumption of fish and meat in a country
NEW - Question The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country...
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|IELTS Academic Writing Task 1: Bar Chart 1(Car Trips Taken by Men and Women)
5 - "overall" is more suitable for conclusion, so you can reorganize the paragraph in your assay....
Writing FeedbackIELTS_Academic - Oct 27, 2017 / vivian45222 - Nov 2, 2017
|IELTS Task 1: compared the graph and table about water consumption
2 - Dear Yimin, besides providing all the numbers, you better explain information like which area has the higher water use,...
Writing Feedbackvivian45222 - Nov 2, 2017 / skhaor - Nov 2, 2017
|What does it mean to be an "Aussie?"
3 - I enjoyed reading your writing. Living a country which has less diversity, I am interested in what makes Australians...
Writing FeedbackBobovikisan - Nov 1, 2017 / tenkei - Nov 1, 2017
|Rate and comment on my argumentative essay for GRE - super screen movies
4 - Thank you for your comments and a big thanks to Holt specially for your insightful response. I am glad...
Writing Feedbackxin - Oct 31, 2017 / xin - Nov 1, 2017
|Number of people think that animals should get rights as people and animals should not be exploited
2 - Guan, you did not provide the complete original prompt along with your response to the essay. You have only...
Writing Feedbackguan721 - Nov 1, 2017 / Holt - Nov 1, 2017
|TASK 1 For the past year you have been a member of a local club. Now you want to end your membership
2 - @acsstudent you have a pretty good grasp of what you want to say. The problem is in your sentence...
Writing Feedbackacsstudent - Nov 1, 2017 / Holt - Nov 1, 2017
|CBEST writing practice: internet is useful or harmful for human?
3 - Your explanation about internet was good. You just have to focus on the grammar. By practicing more or reading...
Writing Feedbackianoah - Nov 1, 2017 / federik - Nov 1, 2017
|When is Rome, do as the Romans do. Acceptation for the foreign culture. Direct question essay.
3 - SG, I think your overall score for this direct question essay could fall under the marker of 6. Your...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Nov 1, 2017 / Holt - Nov 1, 2017
|Unsatisfying career for those who change job frequently?
3 - Plamena you have fa failed Task Accuracy score because of the severe mistakes you made in the opening paragraph....
Writing Feedbackplamchiiii - Oct 31, 2017 / Holt - Nov 1, 2017
|Some people think more money should be spent on researching other planets to live, such as Mars.
2 - I would change the opening sentence as follows: There are some individuals who believe mankind should invest more...
Writing Feedbackkimthanh194 - Oct 31, 2017 / WriteWell - Oct 31, 2017
|Some people agree with the growing up infrastructure such us adding more railways than roads
Writing Feedbackyogann - Oct 31, 2017 / Holt - Oct 31, 2017
|IELTS TASK 2_ People have the right to university education, and government should make it free
3 - Van, you did not accurately paraphrase your prompt topic and discussion instruction. So you will lose TA points for...
Writing Feedbackscully_vananh - Oct 31, 2017 / Holt - Oct 31, 2017
|Increasing the fuel price will have a negative effect because it will increase the cost of transport
3 - I think there are numerous problems with your essay, so i think you should rewrite this one.Let me show...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 29, 2017 / Watsup - Oct 31, 2017
|Which would be cooler, a castle or a tree house? Language advice needed! ;)
4 - Tree houses neither compliment history, nor bring out the ... ( I think this is better.) Your argument...
Writing FeedbackBobovikisan - Oct 30, 2017 / tenkei - Oct 30, 2017
|Trusting and controlling issue over the internet. Direct questions essay.
3 - SG, your essay is very good but needs to be improved in terms of prompt responsiveness. Your format follows...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Oct 30, 2017 / Holt - Oct 30, 2017
|[task 2] International aid: necessary or not?
2 - Gang, you did an extremely good job in the prompt paraphrasing, but the overall discussion was faulty because you...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 30, 2017 / Holt - Oct 30, 2017
|It is equally important for the government and individuals for paying attention on healthy diet
2 - Sandra, Your opening statement shows that you have been learning how to properly paraphrase prompts. There is however, one...
Writing Feedbackhiimsandra - Oct 30, 2017 / Holt - Oct 30, 2017
|Give reasons for your answer on statement that happiness is contemplated as substantial in our life
Writing Feedbackleo_learn - Oct 29, 2017 / leo_learn - Oct 30, 2017
|Exercise or a balanced diet to health? Discussion essay.
7 - @Jimmy879873 Hello, This essay is complete integration, I think it is almost flawless. I've been taught to...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Oct 26, 2017 / hiimsandra - Oct 30, 2017
|Voluntary service is not a compulsory part of high school programmes... yet
3 - Liou, your discussion is not aligned with the prompt requirements. You are being asked to discuss one side of...
Writing Feedbacklalasihcing - Oct 29, 2017 / Holt - Oct 29, 2017
|The increase in university fees and tuition for a family goes far beyond the consumer price index
2 - Lanya, there are a number of problems existing in this essay that makes it impossible for me to consider...
Writing Feedbackmalanya123 - Oct 28, 2017 / Holt - Oct 29, 2017
|Expanding more empty places in universities for young students; education problems essay
3 - Ameila, you started out discussing one topic in this essay and ended with a different altogether. All of your...
Writing Feedbackhuongmyy - Oct 28, 2017 / Holt - Oct 29, 2017
|Has online social networking helped us or harmed us?
4 - Hello, Here are some corrections, obsessed with social networks and often go her information can still be passed...
Writing Feedbackdarlynng - Oct 28, 2017 / just_writer - Oct 28, 2017
|IELTS W2- Some people believe that it is good to share information freely, others don't
4 - Hello, Your essay doesn't have the right structure. There are too many paragraphs, and two of them with only...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Oct 28, 2017 / just_writer - Oct 28, 2017
|It is better to put an entrance fee for museums
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 27, 2017 / Arlen - Oct 28, 2017
|IELTS-Task2- the reason of learning a different language
8 - Hi hlim, besides the errors of misunderstanding the topic, I would like to point out that the conclusion at...
Writing Feedbackhiimsandra - Oct 26, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Oct 28, 2017
|[task 1] The charts show the relative size of populations of countries of the European Union
2 - Gang, you had a slight misunderstanding of the provided listing beside the pie charts. The reference to "All other...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 28, 2017 / Holt - Oct 28, 2017
|UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college
4 - Due to certain changes in company / forum policy regarding user participation, I can no longer continue to advice...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 26, 2017 / Holt - Oct 28, 2017
|The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.
3 - You have to state an overview in the introducing paragraph. Try to say something such as the number of...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 27, 2017 / CeciCob - Oct 28, 2017
|Boarding school is an excellent paradigm for children to comprehensively develop
5 - @linhluong158 You have some strong points. However, please check for proper capitalization in your first paragraph. Then around the...
Writing Feedbacklinhluong158 - Oct 27, 2017 / inok26 - Oct 27, 2017
|Some people enjoy changes and new experience, others like to stay unchanged. Compare both approaches
3 - @Watsup Hi. I'm glad to paraphrase the prompt for you: =>Changes are a favorite of some people, who...
Writing FeedbackWatsup - Oct 26, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 27, 2017
|In the chart the population distribution in age, of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050
4 - @Holt Thank you for your corrections. I'll improve my writing accordingly. As a English learner, I have been...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 27, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 27, 2017
|Is it Self-Defense? Or is it Spreading Chaos? - Gun Control Essay
3 - Hamza, this research / opinion paper is tremendously one sided in presentation. Any research paper that wishes to inform...
Writing FeedbackHamzaza - Oct 26, 2017 / Holt - Oct 27, 2017
|Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people.
2 - The facts about the airplane being able to travel against the rising sun would be nice to have a...
Writing Feedbackpier - Oct 26, 2017 / Avflores88 - Oct 27, 2017
|Nowadays people can purchase goods from another country with just one click or phone call
2 - Hello @just_writer, Here are my suggestions: It is a controversial discussionissue and I thinks it is a negative progress....
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 26, 2017 / pier - Oct 26, 2017
|The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods a
Writing Feedbacktom090897 - Oct 26, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 26, 2017
|[WRITING IELTS TASK 2] - Mass Media controls people's mind. What can be done?
7 - I can understand your confusion. While this type of essay is normally written as a singular opinion essay, there...
Writing Feedbackchantieh - Oct 25, 2017 / Holt - Oct 26, 2017
|Cambridge FCE: WRITING ABOUT FOREIGN LANGUAGE KNOWLEDGE
3 - Andre, you have a good start to the opening statement. It is interesting and hooks the reader in. However,...
Writing Feedbackandreloc - Oct 26, 2017 / Holt - Oct 26, 2017
|Tables below present information about sales of fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas over Europe
2 - The presentation of the essay information is remarkably improved from your practice essays yesterday. I guess you are getting...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 26, 2017 / Holt - Oct 26, 2017
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