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|TOEFL-Which one do you prefer, to live in a big city (I incline) or in a small town?
4 - Restaurants would hire more employees to serve their customers. Why should "would" be deleted? It wouldn't, if you were...
Writing Feedbackyecochi - Jan 18, 2011 / KeyJewel - Jan 21, 2011
|The Importance of Brotherhood and Loyalty to Personal Beliefs (obstacles)
3 - No comma necessary here: I look up to his confidence and hate his anger. However, despite everything, there...
Writing FeedbackJasonCahela - Jan 14, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 21, 2011
|IELTS-fatherhood ,motherhood or both?
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Jan 18, 2011 / ARIA - Jan 21, 2011
|Overwork and Stress - Cause and solution
4 - That's great. I am also impressive your nickname "Shark on diet". Thank you very much for your help. (Lý...
Writing FeedbackNapoleon - Jan 6, 2011 / Napoleon - Jan 21, 2011
|TOEFL - Music bring numerous benefits to human being
4 - candy lovely: I think your essay in the topic,but it still have a drawback except grammer which lack of...
Writing Feedbackcandy lovely - Jan 20, 2011 / taylor kong - Jan 21, 2011
|Live in a big city (more chances, transportation, jobs)
Writing Feedbackmishal alzaid - Jan 20, 2011 / dumi - Jan 21, 2011
|"whenever there is problem they can help each other" -the quality of a good neighbor?
Writing Feedbackcandy lovely - Jan 19, 2011 / TayElliott - Jan 21, 2011
|Eating @ Home or in Restaurants?HOME food comes with freedom, low cost & high quality
Writing Feedbackmishal alzaid - Jan 20, 2011 / Rhettgray - Jan 20, 2011
|TOEFL- Should young people take several jobs before they take a long-term one?
5 - Well...actually...the reason why I choose the opposite side is because there is enough vocabulary relating to this aspect in...
Writing Feedbackstudent7 - Jan 16, 2011 / student7 - Jan 20, 2011
|TOEFL SPEAKING-The most embarrassing moment for me
Writing Feedbackwhitney - Jan 15, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 20, 2011
|IELTS: children spend more time on watching TV
Writing Feedbacklippea - Jan 20, 2011 / lksidestep - Jan 20, 2011
|IELTS：Should the government pay for medical care and education?
Writing Feedbackvena9000 - Jan 13, 2011 / lippea - Jan 20, 2011
|IELTS-Money spent on different forms of entertainment (WT1)
8 - I did this task before and my teacher advice me not to explain every thing and explain the main...
Writing FeedbackSyaza - Jan 15, 2011 / candy lovely - Jan 19, 2011
|The study of history places too much emphasis on individual - SAT
2 - ...to the efforts of Churchill or Stalin, Ignoring ignoring uncountable and ordinary soldiers who risk their lives in...
Writing Feedbackmuzhihao1 - Jan 17, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 19, 2011
|TOEFL: amusing movies or serious movies
Writing Feedbacktaylor kong - Jan 19, 2011 / TayElliott - Jan 19, 2011
|A person you know is planning to move to your town or city (Bangkok, Thailand)
6 - Hi,Linying... Thank you very much for correcting my mistake and I will try my best to avoid them.. And...
Writing Feedbackcandy lovely - Jan 19, 2011 / candy lovely - Jan 19, 2011
|Hard choice - neither between life and death nor between love and freedom, but between truth and lie
Writing Feedbacklinying - Jan 14, 2011 / linying - Jan 19, 2011
|Do you think that ease does not challenge us and that we need adversity to help us...
3 - I want to hear some overall comments in fact... But anyway thanks for checking my essay. I'd like...
Writing FeedbackJealous0503 - Jan 18, 2011 / Jealous0503 - Jan 19, 2011
|I recommend that government should spend more money on improving highway
2 - A public debate has arisen on should government spend more money on improving highways or public transportation has arisen...
Writing Feedbacktaylor kong - Jan 18, 2011 / wendy_the - Jan 18, 2011
|Some believe universities are responsible to prepare people for employment
NEW - Some people believe that universities are responsible for preparation of young people for employment. Others believe universities have other...
Writing FeedbackGladchenko - Jan 18, 2011 / — -
|People care too much about their appearance than before. Do you agree?
6 - To add to the other suggestions, how about societal pressures? The fact that we as a society often judge...
Writing FeedbackChim Can Cook - Jan 17, 2011 / ameddy - Jan 18, 2011
|Essay about work hours Long or short work hours - feedback
2 - rephrase this sentence....it is not having a good structure i feel "Long-standing and till nowadays; we have been living...
Writing Feedbacksalam237 - Jan 18, 2011 / ajit88rai - Jan 18, 2011
|"My sociable mother" - describe a person you admire
NEW - Hi Please tell me about this essay I wrote about a person I admire, and I choose 2 characteristics...
Writing Feedbackploniite - Jan 18, 2011 / — -
|How money was spent in different entertainment- IELTS task
4 - cool....I think this time it was quite precise and related to the shown graph. cheers and good luck.please do...
Writing FeedbackARIA - Jan 17, 2011 / ajit88rai - Jan 18, 2011
|'Aladdin's lamp antique aroma' - Do memories hinder or help people?
5 - Thank you. I consider that I should state clearly at the beginning in my conclusion and leave a space...
Writing Feedbackcharpay_k - Jan 16, 2011 / charpay_k - Jan 17, 2011
|Personal thoughts about meaning of living
2 - Well I have been thinking about how life it occasionally is for nearly two years, duringirrevelant different times; while...
Writing Feedbackfekfek - Jan 17, 2011 / kungpo91 - Jan 17, 2011
|(IELTS topic) shopping has become a favorite past time among young people..
Writing Feedbackkode336 - Jan 16, 2011 / lokesh - Jan 17, 2011
|Expressing my inner world through Photoshop
5 - --> this sentence makes me think that you are often unconfident about your works. what about just...
Writing Feedbackltpvan - Jan 13, 2011 / mimiQ - Jan 17, 2011
|TOEFL: TRANSPORTION (subway is the most efficient and environmently friendly?)
Writing Feedbackwhitney - Jan 16, 2011 / pashnetala - Jan 17, 2011
|the 20th page of Time magazine.
Writing Feedbacklucky_mimi8592 - Jan 15, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jan 17, 2011
|IELTS ACADEMIC WRITING ABOUT GOVERNMENT FUNDING ART.
3 - I think you should say standards of living instead of life standards. I also think you should add another...
Writing Feedbackmyosotis214 - Jan 15, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jan 17, 2011
|Job satisfaction: factors, element of well-being
5 - thanks a tonne lokesh...well its really nice to get guidance and opinions ...please do give me your reviews about...
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Jan 16, 2011 / ajit88rai - Jan 17, 2011
|5 senses essay - "Why are you at Columbia Basin College?"
Writing Feedbacksupremeacy - Jan 12, 2011 / supremeacy - Jan 17, 2011
|TOEFL -AMBITION (to teach Chinese as a froeign language)
2 - your answer is good but not great use adverbs as much as you can and use besides, furthermore, however,......
Writing Feedbackwhitney - Jan 15, 2011 / pashnetala - Jan 16, 2011
|Younger people are not suitable for important positions in government of countries?
Writing Feedbackcharpay_k - Jan 14, 2011 / charpay_k - Jan 15, 2011
|Everyone should have a person who you interested (my nephew)
Writing Feedbacklwshing - Jan 9, 2011 / peevzeeweez - Jan 15, 2011
|"Blame the government" - SAT PRACTICE ESSAY: (practicing for the sats)
4 - Well, first, I consider that you'd better add some examples into your essay, since it is important to write...
Writing Feedbackivantav - Jan 12, 2011 / charpay_k - Jan 15, 2011
|Theory of Knowledge: Evidence to support beliefs
2 - I think every area of knowledge required requires a varied amount of evidence. Ethics is also an...
Writing Feedbacktanyasilva11 - Jan 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jan 14, 2011
|TOEFL: small town has some advantages such as healthy life and better facilities
4 - ... according to some factors, Some people prefer to live in tall ... One of the conditions that...
Writing Feedbackazar1921 - Jan 4, 2011 / linying - Jan 14, 2011
|People with talents: BORN OR MADE?
3 - Thank you very much, perhaps i can use Albert Einstein as my example? What do you think? I really...
Writing FeedbackPaulaine07 - Jan 12, 2011 / Paulaine07 - Jan 13, 2011
|IELTS : government spend money on old buildings or new buildings. agree, disagee?
3 - Thanks for your advice. This is really helpful :) i will try much to correct my mistakes and also...
Writing Feedbackjennifer92 - Jan 12, 2011 / jennifer92 - Jan 13, 2011
|Smoking should not be permitted in restaurants
3 - Thanks Maria for useful suggestion. I need help in both grammar check and ideas I expressed. I...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jan 10, 2011 / vaishali1980 - Jan 12, 2011
|Student, not teachers or administrators, should be in control of their own education
4 - Great job here... I'll identify some erors: Who is better at the decision for education? Is it the student,...
Writing FeedbackBNMS - Dec 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 12, 2011
|Sporting Events: Outlet for a patriotic feeling or the way to reduce the tension?
5 - Suggestions are helpful, thank you. I don't know whether u can see or not, i rewrote the essay. I...
Writing FeedbackBobur - Dec 28, 2010 / Bobur - Jan 12, 2011
|Factory farming food. Your opinion about what it's better to eat.
Writing FeedbackBobur - Dec 28, 2010 / Bobur - Jan 12, 2011
|"When someone's dancing over a clover, don't slow their step"
Writing Feedbackem2always - Jan 7, 2011 / canes4life - Jan 12, 2011
|"Ehhlo dis is five Sta Pandah callin" - essay about self
4 - I think I would just rewrite your line where you pretend you're a waitress with correct spelling/ grammar, and...
Writing Feedbackashleymc16 - Jan 10, 2011 / mwgstan - Jan 11, 2011
|TOEFL: Smoking in restaurants should not be permitted, agree or disagree?
4 - need to give opposite opinions' views about how it is their freedom to smoke where they want but then...
Writing Feedbackjunerosie - Jan 10, 2011 / atham64 - Jan 11, 2011
|"I'm from Kuala Lumpur" - Essay about my self
4 - There are eight members in my family which is my father, my mother, two older brothers, one older sister,...
Writing Feedbackthenadi - Jan 11, 2011 / atham64 - Jan 11, 2011
|Describe a diagram that shows the enviromentl issues raised by a product
2 - Hi Ilaria! I'll try to improve this... you should put all these sentences into one paragraph. The...
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Jan 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jan 11, 2011
|No matter if it's original, more important is how useful is this idea for the people in a new way?
Writing Feedbackrajeshaaidu - Aug 27, 2010 / rajeshaaidu - Jan 11, 2011
|ielts essay: zoos should be built to protect rural animals, do you agree?
3 - This is so excellent. The grammar is great, and the style of writing is rhythmic and clear... I think...
Writing Feedbackstarwish - Dec 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 10, 2011
|Describe a music video or a concert has made an impression on you.
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Jan 7, 2011 / sweetheart87 - Jan 10, 2011
|Eating at food stands or restaurants OR Prepare food at home?
NEW - Nowadays, eating becomes very important for each people.Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants because it's...
Writing Feedbacktuthuy3659 - Jan 9, 2011 / — -
|ielts: cultural heritage used to attract tourists and promote tourism
Writing Feedbacksakura0v0 - Jan 5, 2011 / waqar - Jan 9, 2011
|IELTS: Should the government choose university subject for students?
3 - What do you mean by these people? If you mean sociologists I would prefer "These sociologists" or "They"....
Writing Feedbackriny - Jan 7, 2011 / saloca7 - Jan 8, 2011
|"to fund the building of affordable housing for students" - GRE Arguments
Writing Feedbacksaloca7 - Jan 5, 2011 / saloca7 - Jan 8, 2011
|IELTS essay-unhealthy diet and do not enough exercise
3 - Humans health has become ...when you talk about the time (present) you have to use the parfect tense. ...
Writing Feedbackmelodybai - Jan 2, 2011 / riny - Jan 7, 2011
|University is the place where people seek to further develop their expertise
4 - their expertise and knowledge support their causes (?) to take a degree that's more widely accepted, to...
Writing Feedbacksweetgoofy - Jan 2, 2011 / riny - Jan 7, 2011
|Conscience upholds a string of moral values in life; SAT practice essay
5 - How is this? 1st paragraph Conscience is a precursor that determines one's acts. The question if conscience is...
Writing Feedbackjtpl - Jan 4, 2011 / jtpl - Jan 7, 2011
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