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|Rhetorical Analysis - Advertisement photos
2 - Right after this, add another sentence before ending your first paragraph. Make it a thesis statement that clearly...
Writing FeedbackShelty - Mar 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 30, 2010
|"the real reason for the Yosemite decline" - my argument essay
Writing Feedbackjade - Mar 25, 2010 / jade - Mar 30, 2010
|Response to Scholarly Reading of Paulo Friere's "Banking" Concept of Education
Writing Feedbackalina967 - Mar 23, 2010 / alina967 - Mar 30, 2010
|Living in the country or city? Living in the country aint all that you think!
3 - Therefore you have to go ... if you like going without money ... ...the country have has less...
Writing Feedbackjr24 - Mar 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2010
|The legal drinking age in Ontario
4 - I think you should scratch out this sentence and replace it with a sentence says something about countries with...
Writing Feedbacknafiro - Mar 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2010
|GRE ISSUE221 The chief benefit of the study
5 - Yes, I did find another one: Although time and tide elapsed, these inspiring words of Sphinx can still be...
Writing Feedbacksnowdropie - Mar 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2010
|Tony Hoagland's "Romantic Moment" -- personal response essay
Writing Feedbackmbiscoe25 - Mar 4, 2010 / mbiscoe25 - Mar 28, 2010
|IELTS essay-sports professionals people vs.people in other essential professions
2 - There has been some debate over whether athletes should get higher incomings incomes compared with... It is...
Writing Feedbackgmt_snail - Mar 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 28, 2010
|Computers and operation systems - My introduction
5 - How about "compete to" instead of "compete about" ...are competing about releasing to release the best operating systems....
Writing FeedbackRaz - Mar 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 28, 2010
|A woman's place should be in home?
8 - That is an important point, thanks! However, I don't see any contractions in the essay. Some words...
Writing Feedbackhungvud - Mar 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 27, 2010
|ielts:role of computers in education
Writing Feedbackgingerpopo - Mar 23, 2010 / gmt_snail - Mar 27, 2010
|TOEFL:People enjoy change.others like their lives to stay the same
Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 23, 2010 / djanat - Mar 26, 2010
|the effects of stress (cause and effect paper)
11 - Here is another way to improve this sentence: Considering the fact that everybody deals with puzzling matters everyday, it...
Writing Feedbackbrooke4013 - Feb 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 26, 2010
|"How people look, dress & act reveals their attitudes and interests" -GRE ISSUE
Writing Feedbacksnowdropie - Mar 24, 2010 / snowdropie - Mar 26, 2010
|Take caution (one important aspect of your character)
2 - No need for drastically here, because it has no meaning in the sentence: Time drastically came to a halt...
Writing Feedbackmegdance48 - Mar 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 24, 2010
|Is Technology changing the world for better?
4 - to lead a live where we know when we have a sufficient amount of material comforts. material is always...
Writing Feedbacklongwu - Mar 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 24, 2010
|DREAM BRING ME TO ANOTHER WORLD
4 - She was right to say that, because it applies in many situations in real life. But there are some...
Writing Feedbackautumnwave - Mar 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 24, 2010
|Toefl integrated essay：Were there life-form on Mars？
4 - Good example! These have slightly different meanings, though!! If you say it completely refutes the passage, it sounds...
Writing Feedbackodie6467 - Mar 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 24, 2010
|"Preventing Herpes" - Current Issue in Public Health using an article about health problem
9 - I think this should be two sentences instead of one: Herpes is one of the most co mmon sexually...
Writing Feedbackcomet2000 - Mar 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 24, 2010
|My essay relating to job satisfaction :)
2 - Satisfaction obtained from work is considered as a more and more by many to be a crucial way to...
Writing Feedbackgmt_snail - Mar 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 22, 2010
|Introduction/Thesis Help (good family = good future, bad family = bad future)
9 - Usually people say, "The teenage years" rather "the years of a teenager" Oh, I'm glad you finished and...
Writing FeedbackKurogashi - Mar 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 21, 2010
|I believe that both classmates and parents have considerable influence on children
Writing Feedbackjimmy1983 - Mar 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 20, 2010
|Cause & Effects of Computer Addiction
5 - Thanks for all the kind words and help. If you guys see anything else or can think of something...
Writing Feedbackbrown287 - Mar 18, 2010 / brown287 - Mar 19, 2010
|TOEFL:Decision can be made quickly
2 - We have to take make decisions. "make" Almost all people have to make some decisions in their daily...
Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 19, 2010
|TOEFL:Some people trust their first impression about a person character
3 - "Lot" is a singular noun, so you have to write: There are many people who believe that the... ...
Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 19, 2010
|"What is love?" - It's the beauty of a rose, yet often vile as her thorns
Writing Feedbacktrevor5249 - Mar 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 19, 2010
|Private car ownership has grown dramatically in recent years.
Writing Feedbacksaruul2004 - Mar 2, 2010 / cathyliu - Mar 18, 2010
|'Getting what is different' - TOEFL:People are never satisfied with what they have.
2 - Great intro paragraph! The first factor is the jealousy. The jealousy ... Jealousy also makes people to...
Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 17, 2010
|TOEFL: Most of secondary schools include the art and music course in their annual program
Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 14, 2010 / mocixuan - Mar 17, 2010
|GRE argument: sales prediction
2 - In sum, the author wants to make a prediction about the future sales whereas his deduction contains several facets...
Writing Feedbackmocixuan - Mar 16, 2010 / r43ew - Mar 17, 2010
|insufficient respect towards old members of society
Writing Feedbackvikasp - Mar 15, 2010 / vikasp - Mar 16, 2010
|Report Help - Reflection on choice of education.
Writing Feedbackspecwarop - Mar 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 15, 2010
|living in one place or always moving for a good job ,house,or even climate.
3 - This is very thoughtful, but you will need to practice English a lot. It's hard to learn, but you...
Writing Feedbackmuxuan - Mar 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 15, 2010
|Words effect (Cause and Effect essay - Power of words)
Writing Feedbackbilal ABUZENAH - Mar 12, 2010 / bilal ABUZENAH - Mar 15, 2010
|Technical Article: How GNU/Linux differs from Unix
Writing Feedbackvinaytp - Mar 12, 2010 / vinaytp - Mar 15, 2010
|American Government "Paper" Concerning the Constitution...
3 - During the drafting of the United States Constitution, the legislating delegates were faced with solving several dilemmas, including... In...
Writing FeedbackMarkTwain90Angl - Mar 13, 2010 / EF_Susan - Mar 14, 2010
|"It is the artist, not the critic," GRE ISSUE144
4 - We human beings always feel our oats when talking about arts. --- What does "feel our oats" mean? I...
Writing Feedbackflydreams - Mar 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 13, 2010
|TOEFL:reading fiction or watching movies
2 - Reading fiction is more advantageous than watching movies. First of all, reading fiction such as novels or short stories...
Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 13, 2010
|comparing myself now to myself in the past
2 - your essay seem clear to understand. the bad thing is you have mentioned a lot of details i suggest...
Writing Feedbackangel 91 - Mar 11, 2010 / djanat - Mar 13, 2010
|TOEFL: Schools should allot some hours a day to the physical exercises for their students.
2 - i think that you have little problem with grammar i'm pointing out some of your mistakes hope it will...
Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 12, 2010 / vikasp - Mar 12, 2010
|TOEFL:a university plans to devlop a new research centre in your country.
2 - Most of the universities in the world seek to develop some research in some various countries. These research...
Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 12, 2010
|IELTS Writing: opinions on children's part-time job
Writing Feedbackzebraessay - Mar 10, 2010 / zebraessay - Mar 12, 2010
|What difficulties will face your country in the next ten years?
4 - Thank you Kevin, Your comments everytime help me much indeed, I really appreciate your responsiveness....
Writing Feedbackplotophyte - Mar 10, 2010 / plotophyte - Mar 12, 2010
|Hunger - it's difficult to fully grasp the plight of it; Causes, Concerns and Symptoms
3 - Thanks!!...
Writing Feedbacksperkie - Feb 28, 2010 / sperkie - Mar 12, 2010
|"people wanting to be important" - Definition essay: Pride
Writing Feedbackmaryam_mah - Mar 10, 2010 / maryam_mah - Mar 11, 2010
|SAT prep essay about materialism
3 - While countries like America and England enjoy ... Because of low production costs, and because of American and...
Writing Feedbackjordansearches - Mar 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 11, 2010
|TOEFL:Sport may be dangerous if we will become possessed by it too much.
3 - You didn't capitalize the first letter of the essay. Whatever the reasons for the sport practiced by young...
Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 11, 2010
|Photographs/ Reminisce about the past ; Classification Essay
6 - Sounds like a tough class, but it will make you a good writer! I think you should google dianna...
Writing FeedbackGYG17 - Feb 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 11, 2010
|History & Literature Vs Science & Mathematics; Every subject is important
2 - Taylor, that's really nice of you to spend so much time with it. The argument over... Some people may...
Writing Feedbacketaewoo - Mar 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 11, 2010
|Sharuk Khan! He is my favorite hero.
6 - Sorry!! I can't give an accurate grade, because I don't know how these are scored. But if it's...
Writing Feedbackmegha - Mar 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 11, 2010
|GRE issue 153 skepticism in studying
Writing Feedbackclaire echo - Mar 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 10, 2010
|TOEFL:A person' childhood years are the most important years of a person's life
3 - Great job, Sabuhi, thanks!!! I think this correction is great, but it might be a misundersanding of...
Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 10, 2010
|should or should not schools create single sex education
Writing FeedbackSpitFires - Mar 8, 2010 / SpitFires - Mar 10, 2010
|IELTS Essay -250words - Technology Progression has a negative impact on us?
3 - You write almost perfectly. I want to tell you, though that your first paragraph seems incomplete. It should have...
Writing Feedbackvictorp_sv - Mar 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 9, 2010
|GRE issue 48 History is like a puzzle
4 - Yeah, your sentences seem complex, like sentences used in formal writing. I notice that you are good at varying...
Writing Feedbackclaire echo - Mar 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 9, 2010
|SAT practice essay about the possibility of knowing oneself
Writing Feedbackjordansearches - Mar 9, 2010 / jordansearches - Mar 9, 2010
|TOEFL topic: wheter or not to build a school in your hometown
Writing Feedbackpeter007 - Feb 24, 2010 / djanat - Mar 9, 2010
|Life in symmetry - Essay.
2 - You have a verb tense problem at the beginning. You can do this: Today, I spent almost two hours...
Writing FeedbackWanderer_x - Mar 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 6, 2010
|Email and text messaging threats written language
Writing Feedbackmalek1406 - Mar 3, 2010 / malek1406 - Mar 6, 2010
|University education is mandatory to get a good career. Discuss opinion. IELTS
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