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|Taking standardized tests to prove learning progress - Toefl IBT writing essay
6 - Well, this shows that is not a good prompt for the TOEFL, as it requires some cultural knowledge...
Writing Feedbacktuanlnc - Aug 25, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 4, 2009
|earth hour or how to save the world -essay
Writing Feedbackquia - Aug 30, 2009 / quia - Sep 4, 2009
|Mistakes make success--GRE Issue
Writing FeedbackHellgreeting - Aug 25, 2009 / yx200986 - Sep 4, 2009
|GRE issue---Government support or restrict scientific research
4 - Thanks, EF_Sean! I have learned a lot from your comment. I will be cautious to the problems appeared in...
Writing Feedbackyx200986 - Sep 1, 2009 / yx200986 - Sep 4, 2009
|esssay -global warming&natural disasters
8 - In the long term, burning off fuels in trying to grow up the industry for the better economy are...
Writing FeedbackHarryK - Aug 25, 2009 / jgv115 - Sep 4, 2009
|Purpose for earning more money should not become the main goal for us - toefl essay
6 - The grammar remains so rough that it is very difficult to follow what you are writing. "Some people...
Writing Feedbacksirius51 - Aug 30, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 4, 2009
|Her. A short and random idea.
11 - I was thinking about using this piece as a springboard for my Stanford essay also. Something along the lines...
Writing FeedbackLlamapoop123 - Aug 29, 2009 / Llamapoop123 - Sep 3, 2009
|Toefl essay -- planning and organization
5 - to start with, people now are faced with a more sophisticate society that before, emerging along with the development...
Writing Feedbackclaire echo - Aug 19, 2009 / sirius51 - Sep 3, 2009
|The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one.
2 - "The technology's development brings about many changes in our society, today. One of these changes is the way people...
Writing Feedbackstranger1130 - Sep 2, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 2, 2009
|TOEFL: Movies or television now play an important role in our life
Writing Feedbackdhanh90 - Aug 15, 2009 / sung_tung - Sep 2, 2009
|Cbest Essay - Proble in Community
5 - Try "Our community, Muirland Community, experienced a rash of break-ins last year" instead. You have various minor...
Writing Feedbackelainedlcruz - Jul 20, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 2, 2009
|time spent for studying and playing
6 - I think children need to concentrate on their study for a little time, and then they can play. concentrate...
Writing Feedbacksung_tung - Sep 1, 2009 / stranger1130 - Sep 2, 2009
|Narrative Essay Writing on Indian American Culture - Feedback
2 - There's so much drama in your parents' story. I'm wondering why, then, this essay reads so slowly. Part of...
Writing Feedbackkrnraj1310 - Sep 1, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 1, 2009
|Access to information about the defendant criminal record - Ielts writing task
Writing Feedbackorlando - Aug 29, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 1, 2009
|"We found no sign of my mother" - I thought what happened at the night was my allusion
10 - Not bad overall. A few comments: This doesn't quite work. Rephrase. Identify you? Or respond...
Writing FeedbackELL - Aug 29, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 1, 2009
|the multimineral Zorba pill (GRE argumentative essay)
3 - Simone and I have a long-running disagreement on whether it is a good idea to attack the methodology of...
Writing Feedbackchitra - Sep 1, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 1, 2009
|Similarity and comparison - GRE essay writing
Writing Feedbackprabudhak - Aug 31, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 31, 2009
|Students should be in control of their own education (IBT)
Writing Feedbacktuanlnc - Aug 28, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 31, 2009
|A concise narrative about an important event - UF Architecture college essay!
Writing Feedbackmshireling1 - Jul 16, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 30, 2009
|Spanish Language proficiency
15 - Once you have left helpful comments for two other forum members, then you can start your own thread...
Writing Feedbacksad_an6el - Aug 17, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 28, 2009
|The relationship between an organization and environment - essay
9 - The first sentence is awkward, due to the lack of an article in front of "business environment" and the...
Writing FeedbackTarunPathak - Jun 21, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 28, 2009
|'money and riches' - What Is the Purpose of Higher Education?
5 - If you seperate your paragaphs by an empty line then it's clearer & easier for everybody to read. In...
Writing Feedbacktho91 - Aug 25, 2009 / tuanlnc - Aug 28, 2009
|Education career. Everyday you deal with kids and their challenging behaviors. Why put up with that?
4 - Meh. This is fairly dull. Why not recount a narrative about a student you taught, so that we can...
Writing Feedbackrvw1919 - Aug 27, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 27, 2009
|it is important to find out if the decision will be popular with others (IBT)
5 - Your grammar and word choice are generally correct, so you are in good shape for taking the TOEFL. ...
Writing Feedbacktuanlnc - Aug 26, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 27, 2009
|Should we tell the truth always in order to preserve our friendship?
8 - First, you must register an account on this site. Then, On the right-top corner, there is the "New Thread"...
Writing Feedback123toilama - Aug 26, 2009 / tuanlnc - Aug 27, 2009
|GRE: Corporate executives' responsibility
Writing FeedbackJunYuan - Aug 26, 2009 / JunYuan - Aug 27, 2009
|traditional foods vs international fast food (which is bad)
Writing FeedbackEricc - Aug 15, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 26, 2009
|'Everyone was burned to crisp' - "Jacob" - grammar for my Essay?
4 - This part is confusing to me. You should state that Jacob insisted on quitting school first. Otherwise, there...
Writing FeedbackSPak - Aug 26, 2009 / Llamapoop123 - Aug 26, 2009
|[toefl] topic (dis/agree) There are times when lying is acceptable.
4 - I think lying for good purposes is not only acceptable but also necessary. White lies are sometimes very useful....
Writing Feedbacksugarzhi - Aug 26, 2009 / tuanlnc - Aug 26, 2009
|Old saying; 'experience is the best teacher' -Review for CLEP
11 - Should be an "are" here because of the word "and". ____________________________________________________________ _______________________ I would suggest including...
Writing Feedbacktg2009 - Aug 12, 2009 / JunYuan - Aug 26, 2009
|Non-traditional Student College Personal Essay
Writing FeedbackSFLady77 - Aug 25, 2009 / SFLady77 - Aug 25, 2009
|Moral and ethical standards and effective leadership--GRE issue
3 - Why do you mention business leaders? The prompt specifically asks you to discuss public officials. I think you...
Writing FeedbackSuperkid - Aug 24, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 25, 2009
|princeton summer- I practiced soccer with my cousins
Writing Feedbackladidi - Aug 25, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 25, 2009
|Appearance and society values--An GRE issue
9 - Tell us what you mean by that. I'm also curious about your insights on differences in thinking patterns....
Writing Feedbacktsp8487 - Aug 23, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 25, 2009
|Benefits and drawbacks of urbanization. Better life for older in the countryside
Writing FeedbackJino - Aug 4, 2009 / HarryK - Aug 25, 2009
|GRE: Knowledge and Rejection of Authority
5 - Thanks Notoman for aiding me with my English. Thanks Sean for correcting my inaccuracies and also giving me...
Writing FeedbackJunYuan - Aug 23, 2009 / JunYuan - Aug 25, 2009
|GRE Argument ---antibiotics study results
7 - I am in favor of Simone. What you really should focus on is the last sentense. Since you have...
Writing Feedbackyx200986 - Aug 24, 2009 / Superkid - Aug 24, 2009
|TOEFL Subjects like art should be a part of child's education, it's a beneficial and necessary trend
Writing Feedbacksugarzhi - Aug 22, 2009 / sugarzhi - Aug 24, 2009
|'Given name from God' - UNC- Chapel Hill College Essay
4 - Usually, you would use this sort of essay to talk about experiences you have had or qualities you possess...
Writing Feedbackemilysimpson - Aug 22, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 23, 2009
|I laid there,hoping that I could pass into the void & never return; PATIENCE
6 - I've moved this to the essays and term papers thread, which seems like a better category for it than...
Writing Feedbackkennethfatty - Aug 23, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 23, 2009
|The Saluda hospital - Advice for my GRE argument
6 - "The author" works. Or "the newspaper," or "the article." These all would be more standard, and accurate, than "the...
Writing Feedbackmathsam - Aug 8, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 23, 2009
|The surest indicator of a great nation---GRE Issue
Writing FeedbackSuperkid - Aug 23, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 23, 2009
|Do you believe that change is a "good and necessary" thing?
5 - Study up on articles, as you sometimes leave them out. Also, be aware of plurals; you often neglect...
Writing Feedbackjeff - Aug 22, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 22, 2009
|Topic: Children engaging in paid work can have both negative and positive effects
5 - I can see how the prompt -- which itself blurs the distinction between child labor and youth employment --...
Writing Feedbackstranger1130 - Aug 19, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 21, 2009
|TOEFL essay: Has easily-prepared-food improved the way people live?
7 - You don't need to address counterarguments in a TOEFL essay. In fact, you probably don't want to. You certainly...
Writing FeedbackLiwen - Aug 20, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 21, 2009
|Criminal records, British and Australia laws - IELTS Essay
9 - Passive constructions use the object of an action as the sentence's grammatical subject, as oppose to the active voice,...
Writing Feedbackstealthreaction - Aug 18, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 21, 2009
|IELTS Essay: Main purpose for Universities
Writing Feedbackcxfcxh - Aug 18, 2009 / jyxff - Aug 21, 2009
|Music helps people both personally and maintains the culture values of country
5 - Hi EF_Sean, GeneK, EF_Simone thank you much for your comments. I will incorporate your comments in my next essay....
Writing Feedbackprabudhakshin - Aug 20, 2009 / prabudhakshin - Aug 20, 2009
|"Wise people appreciate the little things in life" - narrative essay
Writing Feedbackbal0601 - Aug 11, 2009 / bal0601 - Aug 20, 2009
|"Actions speak louder than words" (do you agree or disagree with the statement)
Writing FeedbackJanie Tine - Jul 29, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 20, 2009
|compare and contrast what conflicts the heroes have and how they face them
Writing Feedbackhollyn91 - Aug 20, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 20, 2009
|Vice-President of Phi Theta Kappa; SERVE the underserved/Experiences
2 - No, the question is not the same. The second question is both more general and more specific, asking for...
Writing Feedbacksad_an6el - Aug 20, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 20, 2009
|TOEFL; Television Versus Friends and family
Writing Feedbackdhanh90 - Aug 14, 2009 / sad_an6el - Aug 20, 2009
|The proper use of public resource--GRE ISSUE Appreciate your advice
4 - I notice that you work implicitly within Maslow's hierarchy of needs, which asserts that people will not care about...
Writing FeedbackSuperkid - Aug 19, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 20, 2009
|The benefit of a global university-- GRE topic, need help
Writing FeedbackSuperkid - Aug 18, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 19, 2009
|English Aboriginal feature article.
3 - Even an editorial should probably be a bit more comprehensive and tightly reasoned. The Australian government should make it...
Writing FeedbackBillmc - Aug 19, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 19, 2009
|"Memom, how did you draw this?" Topic of Choice Essay -- opinions and critiques
5 - As others have pointed out, you point isn't really clear here. You decided that you were interested in art...
Writing FeedbackMichelleHob - Aug 19, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 19, 2009
|Formal educational credentials and hiring employees - GRE essay
5 - To improve your sentence by noticing that DON'T MISS WORDS, I believe your essay will be more attractive and...
Writing Feedbackwonglofu - Aug 11, 2009 / Superkid - Aug 19, 2009
|Concept and story line good; I need help with correcting the grammar in my essay
4 - We patiently waited alongsideof many other excited spouses and parents. As the buses pulled up, everyone started cheering...
Writing Feedbackjenni929 - Aug 19, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 19, 2009
|"pet proposes man disposes" - TOEFL: Should pets be treated as family members?
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