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|Fast Food is Killing America One Combo Meal at a Time
2 - @bultmlisaj when you write an academic research paper, do the writing from the third person point of view. You...
Writing Feedbackbultmlisaj - May 13, 2018 / Holt - May 20, 2018
|Passengers on London Underground per hour, from 6 a.m to 10 p.m. - IELTS Task 1
2 - Sil, there are 2 mistakes in this essay. The first, is that Your opening and closing paragraphs are run...
Writing Feedbackforsil - May 12, 2018 / Holt - May 20, 2018
|People tend to live alone which may have both beneficial and detrimental effects
3 - Nguyen, this is a single opinion essay that you opted to discuss as a double point of view. That...
Writing FeedbackToantranchauquoc - May 10, 2018 / Holt - May 19, 2018
|Explain some possible reasons and solutions for the issue of obesity - IELTS writing task 2
3 - David, the main problem with your essay is that you began the discussion of the given topic in the...
Writing FeedbackDavid Doan - May 9, 2018 / Holt - May 18, 2018
|Could taxation decrease fast food consumption? - IELTS - Writing Task 2
Writing Feedbackforsil - May 13, 2018 / Ann777 - May 15, 2018
|Social status and material possions as the best parameters to judge the people's value?
2 - Please write the prompt of the essay in the start. To be honest the complete essay appears to be...
Writing Feedbacklhyang - May 13, 2018 / Rizwan89 - May 13, 2018
|Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity/IETLS task one
Writing Feedbackwonderinwander - May 10, 2018 / TJLuschen - May 11, 2018
|MOTIVATING OTHERS FOR ARMED FORCES
2 - Hi, here are my suggestions: time and again and that stated, 'The Military ... joined themilitary I...
Writing Feedbackresalat - May 4, 2018 / TJLuschen - May 11, 2018
|DISCUSS- If living in a country where you have to speak different language can cause social problems
Writing FeedbackAnn777 - May 9, 2018 / forsil - May 9, 2018
|Smacking children is the best form of discipline. - IELTs writing task 2.
3 - Quang, this essay will receive an immediate failing score based on the prompt deviation that you created. The essay...
Writing Feedbackrotlata01 - May 7, 2018 / Holt - May 9, 2018
|A competition entry: An important person in history
2 - Loc, this essay indicates information that covers only the reason why this person became famous. It does not give...
Writing Feedbackkakaloc1681998 - May 7, 2018 / Holt - May 9, 2018
|Help ! Ielts writing task 1 about the percentage of men and women regular exercise
2 - Dorothy, this analytical essay will receive an automatic failing score due to the lack of word count. You failed...
Writing Feedbackso11123 - May 7, 2018 / Holt - May 8, 2018
|Pollution and countries development - IELTS - Writing Task 2
4 - Thank you Holt, I have now searched how to structure different typologies of Writing Task 2 in IELTS and...
Writing Feedbackforsil - May 6, 2018 / forsil - May 7, 2018
|Show reasons why young people should not leave school before the age of 18
2 - Hi trifecta, is this a Essay for IELTS/TOEFL? If you provide us the purpose it will be easier...
Writing Feedbacktrifecta - May 6, 2018 / forsil - May 6, 2018
|The crime is still increasing - how to stop this? Teach criminals a lesson.
Writing Feedbackbollbat5566 - May 6, 2018 / bollbat5566 - May 6, 2018
|An ongoing discourse on whether children playing computer games is inherently a bad thing or not
3 - @martmaye Currently, there is an ongoing discourse ... awkward sentence end OR sentence fragment (unsure) Second paragraph:...
Writing Feedbackmartmaye - May 2, 2018 / tuedearerbluejay - May 3, 2018
|Looking for more other measures (than petrol price) to resolve problems with traffic and pollution
2 - Dung, this is an extent essay. So you need to provide a response that has an emotional extent to...
Writing Feedbackdungdevil216 - May 3, 2018 / Holt - May 3, 2018
|Overseas Study Tour is Worthwhile for Young Students
NEW - pre-school children and elementary school students abroad Although many people think that study tour programs for pre-school children...
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|It is argued that the attainment of goals is often determined by the factor of fortune.
Writing FeedbackQuaAng - May 2, 2018 / QuaAng - May 3, 2018
|The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong
2 - @zandu, your essay has good vocabulary and examples, but Introduction is too long. If you can break it down...
Writing Feedbackzandu - Apr 29, 2018 / Neha_b123 - May 2, 2018
|"How does the increase in the availability of information influence life in today's world?"
Writing FeedbackHoffmann161 - May 1, 2018 / Hoffmann161 - May 2, 2018
|Human activity has had a negative impact on our planet
2 - If you are writing for IELTS, please avoid sentences like "Although I am more favor ... his essay will...
Writing Feedbacktrunghau - May 1, 2018 / Neha_b123 - May 2, 2018
|The rich are getting richer but the poor are getting poorer. What is the reason for this situation?
2 - Trung, I cannot mark this test because you did not indicate what kind of test you are taking. There...
Writing FeedbackMai Quoc Trung - Apr 30, 2018 / Holt - May 1, 2018
|TOEFL Writing "Public libraries are no longer useful!"
2 - Zheng, you must change all the wording of the first paragraph. You cannot borrow any portion from the original...
Writing Feedbacknickbigbang - Apr 30, 2018 / Holt - May 1, 2018
|Provide examples of solutions to reduce traffic in big cities
2 - Dao, this is a pretty good direct response essay. The prompt that you provided, along with the discussion instructions...
Writing Feedbacklvddqt - Apr 29, 2018 / Holt - Apr 30, 2018
|Free online download. Positive or negative?
3 - Thank you Holt for your detailed assessment. I will work on the key points that you mentioned. Although with...
Writing Feedbackjommiejr - Apr 28, 2018 / jommiejr - Apr 29, 2018
|Should animal experiments be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer?
3 - @Holt Thank you for your advice! So for this prompt, can i use the following structure: 1. Paraphrase...
Writing FeedbackThisisJanice - Apr 27, 2018 / ThisisJanice - Apr 29, 2018
|Your company organizes a sports event for a local community. LETTER
3 - You need to stop putting a title for your letters. The IELTS test does not require you to give...
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Apr 28, 2018 / Holt - Apr 29, 2018
|The best of the best inventions for the last decade - PTE writing
2 - Hi Peter, The quality of an academic essay is measured by its complexity; how cogent and concrete are the...
Writing FeedbackPeterBrown - Apr 27, 2018 / abdo65619 - Apr 28, 2018
|What is better: work only three days a week for long hours or five days a week for shorter hours?
3 - Ling, the weakness of your TOEFL essay starts with your first paragraph. The introduction of the discussion topic and...
Writing FeedbackMaiya - Apr 27, 2018 / Holt - Apr 28, 2018
|IETLS Writing Task 2: The measures to improve waste management through recycling
3 - I noticed that you have missed incidentally some commas Therefore,when substantial ... Also, the question is asking you...
Writing Feedbackkhalit - Apr 27, 2018 / PeterBrown - Apr 27, 2018
|Junk Food Is Harmful To Teenagers
4 - You need to make good points of reasoning to support your stand in the topic. "Make local dishes" is...
Writing Feedbackderin - Apr 22, 2018 / jommiejr - Apr 27, 2018
|Why so many children work instead of going to school? Child labor
2 - Joze, are you writing this for an English test or just for an English writing class? I am going...
Writing FeedbackJozelearner - Apr 26, 2018 / Holt - Apr 27, 2018
|Animals are being used in medical researchers
2 - There are 2 topics for combined discussion in this essay. These topics are medical research and product safety tests....
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Apr 26, 2018 / Holt - Apr 27, 2018
|You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture. Letter
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Apr 25, 2018 / sfiza - Apr 27, 2018
|Essay about the fraudulents
Writing Feedbackdd_ee - Apr 26, 2018 / dd_ee - Apr 27, 2018
|What is better: participating in different outdoor activities or just spending time at home?
2 - for me, your essay is well organized. there may be some grammatical errors like: In additions, I stand...
Writing FeedbackQuynhAnhHo - Apr 25, 2018 / curiouscat - Apr 26, 2018
|Ielts Writing task 2 about Married women and teens
2 - Hi so11123, I thought your writing was pretty understandable in this essay. Maybe your thesis statement could have been...
Writing Feedbackso11123 - Apr 25, 2018 / TJLuschen - Apr 25, 2018
|Many students attempt to study abroad in foreign countries - merits and demerits of such decision
4 - @hassonmax some corrections are bellow Studying abroad refers is a lucrative way to studying educate those...
Writing Feedbackhassonmax - Apr 24, 2018 / sfiza - Apr 25, 2018
|More advantages than disadvantages of life in a house compared with living in an apartment
6 - Living in house(Bad) : 1.Consume energy E.g. If your house has a side-walk, you have to shovel snow. 2....
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Apr 22, 2018 / so11123 - Apr 25, 2018
|The Earth is facing a huge environmental problem such as climate change
2 - In your essay, you should clearly tell the control measures that government should use to reduce the future impact...
Writing Feedbackgauhar_tem - Apr 22, 2018 / Wanyabanda - Apr 24, 2018
|TOEFL writing task 2: Which of the two approaches should busy parents spend with their children?
3 - Sera, when you are asked "Which of the two methods do you prefer?" you are being asked to pick...
Writing Feedbackpepe33 - Apr 22, 2018 / Holt - Apr 23, 2018
|Funds for building a sophisticated railway network.
Writing Feedbackderekhsu - Apr 20, 2018 / derekhsu - Apr 23, 2018
|Recently many film and music pieces are given online for free. Is it a positive trend?
Writing Feedbacknaz2018 - Apr 22, 2018 / sfiza - Apr 22, 2018
|Essay about the ten top rice- producing countries in 1999 Writing IELTS task1
5 - Thank you. if I supplement my essay may you continue correcting my other fault, please. ... rice-producing country...
Writing Feedbackphuonguyen479 - Apr 21, 2018 / phuonguyen479 - Apr 22, 2018
|An ongoing discussion whether boys and girls get benefits more at mixed or single-gender schools
2 - Fiza, your essay is not good at all. You merely provided talking points, discussion topics, if you will, in...
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Apr 21, 2018 / Holt - Apr 22, 2018
|Ielts - CULTURE AND CHARACTER FROM THE CHOICE OF CLOTHES?
2 - Maryam, you have confused a simple single opinion essay discussion with an extent essay. The instruction question is simple,...
Writing Feedbackmaryam syed - Apr 20, 2018 / Holt - Apr 22, 2018
|Is it possible to say a lot about person's culture and character from his/her choice of clothes?
3 - Zainab, you did not understand the task requirement. This is not an emotional extent essay. Rather, this is a...
Writing FeedbackZainab110 - Apr 20, 2018 / Holt - Apr 22, 2018
|Metal price prediction - Abstract review
NEW - Hi all, here is the abstract for metal price prediction. My supervisor advised me to rewrite for bad grammar....
Writing Feedbackhuangjiaqi12 - Apr 21, 2018 / — -
|CBEST. Television encourage or discourage learning - or does it do both depends on circumstances?
Writing FeedbackAid1 - Apr 1, 2018 / Aid1 - Apr 21, 2018
|The charts compare, in percentage terms, five expenditures in a specific British school
2 - .... were the main schooling expense expense of the school in three.... ... with the number numbers of...
Writing FeedbackGiangNguyen - Apr 19, 2018 / haleemasadiq - Apr 21, 2018
|Building a large shopping centre in the neighborhood. My vote pro or against.
2 - Shela, there are two mistakes contained in this otherwise acceptably presented opinion essay. The first mistake is that your...
Writing Feedbackxierablind02 - Apr 19, 2018 / Holt - Apr 20, 2018
|Technology and traditional values coexistence
3 - Personally, i think your essay is really quite good. However, i think you just need to repeat your opinion...
Writing FeedbackLong Nguyen - Apr 18, 2018 / Amber98 - Apr 20, 2018
|Newspaper source (paper or website) - Ielts essay- writing task 2:
2 - Phung, read the prompt instruction sentence. You were asked to agree or disagree. Therefore, your last sentence in the...
Writing FeedbackAmber98 - Apr 19, 2018 / Holt - Apr 20, 2018
|A big chunk of people's earnings goes to purchasing material things
5 - Thank you so much for your feedback. I am trying to improve with each practice everyday before the actual...
Writing Feedbackjommiejr - Apr 18, 2018 / jommiejr - Apr 20, 2018
|TOEFL. There's a question whether a trip should be taken with the company of a tour guide...
2 - Tess, always stick to the timed practice tests. If you fail to write an essay within the allotted time...
Writing Feedbacktaokyuhyun - Apr 19, 2018 / Holt - Apr 19, 2018
|Movies and television have more positive impact on young people than the negative - TOEFL
2 - Tianyi, you do not need to focus so much on your word usage because you have clearly understandable representations...
Writing FeedbackAsphodel - Apr 18, 2018 / Holt - Apr 19, 2018
|IELTS Academic Discussion Essay - Spending money on improving existing public trasport
3 - Nidaa, unfortunately, I cannot grade your work because you did not provide the complete prompt for my reference in...
Writing Feedbacknidaa91 - Apr 18, 2018 / Holt - Apr 19, 2018
|Energy usage in Australia and house gas emissions. IELTS Writing Task 1 - IELTS 10 Test 1
3 - Daofan, the first thing you have to remember is that the opening paraphrase contains a specific number of sentences...
Writing Feedbackdophan - Apr 18, 2018 / Holt - Apr 19, 2018
|What is your view on dillema: better life in the city or outside of a rural area?
Writing Feedbackmaya137 - Apr 18, 2018 / Long Nguyen - Apr 18, 2018
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