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Love experience - Narrative essay

2 - Good afternoon. Since the prompt was not included in this posting, I have given suggestions for grammar and...

Writing FeedbackSherali - Nov 3, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 4, 2008

a comparison and contrast from two tales from the canterbury tales

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Writing Feedbacklowryder49 - Nov 2, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 3, 2008

Intro and Thesis statement on Globalization

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An education can be defined a million different ways

4 - Good afternoon. Thank you for clarifying about the quotation; you are right to write it exactly as how...

Writing FeedbackWonderfulloser - Nov 2, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 3, 2008

Rocky Balboa: The American Dream Personified

2 - Good afternoon. A few mechanical suggestions. First, make sure that your quote at the beginning is correct; "ain't"...

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Concert report - essay for my music class

NEW - this is an essay i had to write for my music class. it has to be five paragraphs. the...

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Oates and Stone- A comparative research essay- I need a grammar review!

3 - Thank you for your help however: - Americans cannot invade other americans (as far as wars go). Therefore...

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Satirical essay; The topic is how lazy American's are.

3 - Just refrain from writing "like" and it's going to be fine....

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Everything begins at any circumstance in life - FSU essay

2 - You have some good points in this essay, but overall it is a bit disorganized. Focus on a couple...

Writing Feedbacknemiperuvian - Oct 30, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 31, 2008

[Argument]The residents of San Perdito should vote Montoya out of office

3 - I really appriate your help. Please point out in details what I can do to improve my essay. Are...

Writing Feedbackfranklamparden - Oct 30, 2008 / franklamparden - Oct 30, 2008

Gardner's theory of multiple intelligences - Persuasive essay on why music should be in school

3 - Good afternoon. I'll go ahead and give you some pointers to get you started: When you use...

Writing Feedbackchazbell - Oct 29, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 30, 2008

A passage about some measures to protect endangered animals

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Writing Feedbacksweetbitterrose - Oct 29, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 29, 2008

Is Consumerism a good or bad thing?

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Presidential Comparison paper (sociology)

3 - thank you for your feedback! I hope my sociology teacher thinks like you do....

Writing Feedbackbgibson8708 - Oct 29, 2008 / bgibson8708 - Oct 29, 2008

Essay: marry someone familiar or different?

3 - Good afternoon. Devotion has really great feedback, all of which I agree with. Since he/she has covered all...

Writing Feedbacksonali - Oct 29, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 29, 2008

topic - condom machines in school

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Writing FeedbackshatterX - Oct 27, 2008 / — -

The theme of the contest is WOW - my short story

2 - Good afternoon. Since you didn't really provide specifics about the prompt (I don't know what "WOW" is), I...

Writing Feedback4ever2bleed - Oct 26, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 27, 2008

how my writing has changed - my self-evaluation essay

2 - You have a good self-evaluation here. You examine your strengths and weaknesses, and are very honest about both. You...

Writing Feedbackfabiola017 - Oct 26, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 27, 2008

Classical Essay - Abortion The Right to Choose

3 - Thank you very much, I will rewrite it now....

Writing Feedbacktaiyaki - Oct 24, 2008 / taiyaki - Oct 27, 2008

Society of Notes...revision and comments

NEW - Last essay, I swear! I'm glad I found this site though, as it's been an invaluable resource. I'm thinking...

Writing Feedbackjangoc44 - Oct 26, 2008 / — -

Successful organization / Something what seems to be is not always the same as it actually is?

2 - Good evening. "...jobs and get promoted ." "...employees in this company begi n to ..." "...individualism...

Writing Feedbackhelenalqy - Oct 25, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 25, 2008

Definition of Education-Need filter words & eliminate repetition paragrap.

14 - hey babydoll, well i was researching for the same paper that you have discussed here. Do you still have...

Writing Feedbackbabydoll - Mar 26, 2008 / jolly - Oct 25, 2008

Diversity to me is an intrinsic part of life; a lifelong learning essay

3 - Good afternoon. It seems a bit disorganized. Are you trying to explain these events in the order in...

Writing Feedbacklilveni - Oct 23, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 24, 2008

'Young people are no longer interested in religion.' What is your view?

6 - ThuyChi, You are a very good judge of character, as I have been a teacher and am currently...

Writing FeedbackThuyChi - Oct 23, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 24, 2008

Without academic excellence, most students nowadays are squeezed out of the competition

3 - I think your paragraphs are appropriate lengths; if you divide the essay further you risk making the flow too...

Writing FeedbackshatterX - Oct 20, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 24, 2008

"realistic or optimistic" + "hardship and misfortune" -- essays edit help

NEW - Assignment: Do people truly benefit from hardship and misfortune? As an old saying in my hometown goes,"Adversities are...

Writing Feedbackhelenalqy - Oct 23, 2008 / — -

Essay: What dish holds a strong associative power for you?

5 - Thank you for your help. Now i have more words to work with so i can elaborate more on...

Writing Feedbacknikokoskinas - Oct 22, 2008 / nikokoskinas - Oct 23, 2008

It is better to have one long school vacation than to have a few short one?

6 - I think your organization is fine. You start off with a good introduction followed by a body that explains...

Writing FeedbackThuyChi - Oct 21, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 23, 2008

Responsibility- through example or behavior of others?

3 - Thank you very much. I will remember to stay in one tense in my essay!...

Writing Feedbackhelenalqy - Oct 20, 2008 / helenalqy - Oct 23, 2008

Essay: What will you bring along to Sahara + unforgettable experience

5 - Thank you, Glolia! You don't know how helpful you are to me!!!^_^...

Writing Feedbacksweetbitterrose - Oct 21, 2008 / sweetbitterrose - Oct 22, 2008

Check for my essay about my holiday trip to Singapore

2 - Good afternoon. OK, let's see: It is the smallest nation in SoutheastAs this is neither a proper...

Writing Feedbackwindcloud232 - Oct 22, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 22, 2008

Twin Pregnancies-Impact on the family

2 - Please help me shorten this paragraph, is it possible? My biggest problem is staying within the page limits, is...

Writing Feedbackhunnybun39 - Oct 21, 2008 / hunnybun39 - Oct 21, 2008

The Quality of the Decision: The Power of Thinking Without Thinking

2 - My own experience shows the reason why I want to make decisions slowly and cautiously. Decisions, when devoted enough...

Writing Feedbackjerry - Oct 21, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 21, 2008

This is my 9/11 essay intro - is it OK?

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Writing FeedbackNeelam - Oct 20, 2008 / — -

Describe a person... A rough draft thrown together i need some insight

3 - Thank you for reading my essay and responding...

Writing FeedbackJoel - Oct 20, 2008 / Joel - Oct 20, 2008

What must we do to truly understand ourselves? Difficult for people to judge themselves evenhandedly

6 - In regards to usage, I suggest one of the books from the "Prentice Hall Guide for College Writers" series...

Writing Feedbackhelenalqy - Oct 15, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 20, 2008

[Analysis of Issue] Schools should be only responsible for academic skills

2 - "How to become a useful person for society?" There shouldn't be a comma after this, and "people" should be...

Writing Feedbackfranklamparden - Oct 20, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 20, 2008

"Wild animals never kill for sport"; killing animals (argument synthesis)

NEW - British historian James A. Froude once wrote, "Wild animals never kill for sport. Man is the only one to...

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the effort involved in pursuing any goal -advise, corrections are welcomed!

NEW - Assignment: Is the effort involved in pursuing any goal valuable, even if the goal is not reached? Although...

Writing Feedbackhelenalqy - Oct 20, 2008 / — -

Essay on labor and Delivery Pain

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Writing Feedbackhunnybun39 - Oct 19, 2008 / hunnybun39 - Oct 19, 2008

First Nations Ambitions Triumph

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the juxtaposition of christian and Pagan elements in Beowulf

NEW - The Juxtaposition of Christian and Pagan elements in Beowulf mirror the mix of religious practices occurring in Anglo-Saxon society.,...

Writing Feedbackbrit12 - Oct 19, 2008 / — -

Essay: On Artificial Intelligence

8 - As in, being worth studying in schools in the US ? If that's the point, I see that...

Writing FeedbackRajiv - Oct 17, 2008 / Rajiv - Oct 19, 2008

[Analysis of Issue] Humans are becoming subservient to machines

4 - No, I don't think you lack examples; in fact, I think quite the opposite. My concern is that your...

Writing Feedbackfranklamparden - Oct 18, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 19, 2008

Essay about my weekend activities

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Writing Feedbacksol - Oct 17, 2008 / sol - Oct 18, 2008

'Love is the answer to world's questions' - Essay on why love is important in life?

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Writing Feedbackvipao - Oct 16, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 18, 2008

Summary On Pain Meds - paper

4 - Good morning. OK, let's see: "...interventions regarding any adverse reactions." "...should be well rehearsed...

Writing Feedbackhunnybun39 - Oct 9, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 18, 2008

Private Eloquence/ PAST EXPERIENCE

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Writing Feedbackcowman809 - Oct 16, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 17, 2008

essay about myself, when/where I was born, my study, hobbies, etc.

2 - "...I am the baggiest one." What does "baggiest" describe here? Do you mean biggest? I'm not sure... :) ...

Writing Feedbackcrawling - Oct 17, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 17, 2008

Cigarretes has been banned from public environment. Agree or Disagree?

NEW - Essay topic: Cigarretes has been banned from public environment. Agree or Disagree?? Around the world people are concerned...

Writing Feedbackvipao - Oct 17, 2008 / — -

How to safe the Earth + Personal reflection of my presentation - Essays

4 - Good afternoon. From your posting, it seems that this prompt requests specific information from specific material that you...

Writing Feedbackssdd - Nov 28, 2007 / EF_Team5 - Oct 17, 2008

Take advantage of every moment ; Colombia Essay/ Rutgers

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Writing Feedbackcynthia180 - Oct 17, 2008 / — -

What experiences have led you to select your professional field?

2 - "Zip, zap, zoom! " went my..." "...does my Play Station give way every..." I suggest wrapping the...

Writing Feedbackkimaya - Oct 16, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 16, 2008

An unexpected act of kindness

4 - Good afternoon. Putting this piece at the beginning would be a great idea; it's a "hook" and sets...

Writing Feedbacklearningtowrite - Oct 15, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 16, 2008

Land for human's purpose or left in its natural conditions ?

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Essay: "There's no place like home."

3 - Thanks a lot Gloria!...

Writing Feedbacklearningtowrite - Oct 15, 2008 / learningtowrite - Oct 15, 2008

Creativity is one of the highly concerned points to those aspired people

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Writing Feedbackhelenalqy - Oct 13, 2008 / helenalqy - Oct 15, 2008

The Act of Revenge, The Cask of Amontillado Essay

4 - Good afternoon. "In pace requiescat!" (1) Is correct. Regards, Gloria Moderator, EssayForum.com...

Writing FeedbackBradlays - Oct 13, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 15, 2008

Motivations of buying a product - Toefl Essay

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Writing Feedbacktoefl_guy - Oct 13, 2008 / toefl_guy - Oct 14, 2008

Should we celebrate Halloween? - essay help

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Writing Feedbackkichikov22 - Oct 14, 2008 / — -

Research advice on TOEFL, SAT, IELTS, GRE and other academic essays (page 373)