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|"the personal consumption of butter" - IELTS task 1 Homework 1
2 - This graph shows the personal consumption (in grams) of butter, margarine and low-fat or reduced-fat spreads per week [omit...
Writing FeedbackAnne25 - Aug 12, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 12, 2009
|Gay Marriage: Is It Right?
13 - Note: I deleted John6503's comment to which Llamapoop123 is responding, because it ran afoul of our guidelines prohibiting postings...
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|"Goods And Service Tax At All India Level"- how 2 improve this article
Writing Feedbackescritor - Aug 10, 2009 / escritor - Aug 12, 2009
|"About a time when you thought an experience would take place in certain way"
3 - This is essay drags on a little. The lesson learned not really something that would effect your character or...
Writing Feedbackpresario32 - Aug 11, 2009 / Llamapoop123 - Aug 11, 2009
|"It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value"
Writing Feedbackmathsam - Aug 10, 2009 / Llamapoop123 - Aug 10, 2009
|Results of publicly funded scientific studies for free -help for GRE issue essay
Writing FeedbackUlribe - Aug 10, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 10, 2009
|Personal Essay - Travels; I have inherited my mother's wanderlust
4 - I love experiencing the magic and draw of various cultures, each with their own flavor and distinctions which seizes...
Writing Feedbacksarahstu - Aug 9, 2009 / Liebe - Aug 10, 2009
|Summary-Response Essay - Celebrating Nerdiness by Tom rogers
5 - Your summary is okay. Your thesis should probably include a summary of the reasons why you agree with...
Writing Feedbackkingdomcome - Aug 2, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 9, 2009
|"hard work leads you to success in your life" - need help in correcting my essay
5 - Your logic here isn't very tight. Overwhelming evidence suggests that hard work is in fact the key to...
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|Classification and Divison Essay on different "sources of energy."
6 - Natural fossil fuels, yes. Biofuels are universally considered renewable, as you point out. So, if petroleum becomes a biofuel...
Writing FeedbackReborn - Aug 3, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 8, 2009
|Causes and Solutions for increasing traffic congestion
6 - I'm sorry, but we cannot tell you what your score might be as we are not trained IELTS scorers....
Writing Feedbackrosamond00 - Jul 30, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 7, 2009
|For Eng 121 class: Use of critical thinking using Mary Postgate and Yellow Wall
Writing Feedbackbiggestv - Aug 3, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 7, 2009
|Looking for a review of My Philosophy Paper
12 - I agree with that advice in general. Good writers say what they have to say rather than telling...
Writing FeedbackAli MacLennan - Aug 2, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 7, 2009
|Getting up early and starting day's work in the morning should always be preferred by people
4 - You need to attend to basics. For example, you must place a space after punctuation marks, as I have...
Writing Feedbackmansten - Aug 7, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 7, 2009
|Originality and thinking - GRE Issue No:2.
Writing Feedbackdesigningsally - Aug 1, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 7, 2009
|Archie isn't just a typical guy I've encountered in my life! - Unforgettable person
Writing Feedbackelainedlcruz - Aug 1, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 6, 2009
|Dangerous sports and activities - for fun, money, or for nothing
11 - It's not so much that it sounds weird as that nobody knows it. This is a dictionary word that...
Writing Feedbacksugarzhi - Aug 3, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 6, 2009
|Saving money for future is more useful than spending on travel.
2 - Is that true? How do you know? Students often start essays with an assertion that whatever they are...
Writing Feedbackgh52km42 - Aug 5, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 6, 2009
|Essay on Urbanisation
2 - For what purpose did you write this essay? I see you've got it posted under undergraduate admissions essays, but...
Writing Feedbackkillerwind - Aug 5, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 5, 2009
|Colleges for gain knowledge, new experience & prepare for future career - TOEFL
11 - Indeed. And, in literature as opposed to workaday prose, ornate sentences are still acceptable. (David Foster Wallace, anyone?)...
Writing Feedbackstardust - Jul 31, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 5, 2009
|To be elected as the country's president gives prestige and honor.
Writing Feedbackelainedlcruz - Aug 4, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 5, 2009
|Cbest - Back to Basics
2 - One strength of this essay is your use of supporting evidence. However, you will need to work on your...
Writing Feedbackelainedlcruz - Aug 5, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 5, 2009
|'Harmful effects on our environment' - Benefits and Drawbacks of Urbanisation
10 - Thank you Notoman, Sean, it definitely quenched my curiousity^^ I'll practice hard, and thanks for the website !!...
Writing FeedbackHarryK - Aug 2, 2009 / HarryK - Aug 4, 2009
|Bringing emotion - television has destroyed communication among close people?
3 - Overall, quite good just little things i noticed. "According to the survey" -I think it would sound...
Writing Feedbackmomotou007 - Jul 30, 2009 / et_350 - Aug 4, 2009
|"A government's role" - academic writing test IELTS to be correct
8 - You should always say what you are going to talk about in your introduction. That's what makes it...
Writing FeedbackPinklemon - Jul 20, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 4, 2009
|"Who made history"--A difficult GRE Issue topic
9 - Private Joseph Martin kept a diary during the Revolutionary War. His detailed writings prove to be an invaluable...
Writing Feedbackmathsam - Jul 31, 2009 / Notoman - Aug 3, 2009
|I closed my eyes and started the chanting!; The moment of the Lords.
Writing Feedbackmbjaya999 - Jul 31, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 3, 2009
|Not eveything that is learned is contained in the books
20 - Very practical of you to give yourself another month. But, since your problem, in particular, has been thinking of...
Writing Feedbackorlando - Jul 20, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 3, 2009
|If people want to have a good future they should have a careful plan
2 - I understand the reason for the meditation on religion with which you preface this essay, but I feel that...
Writing Feedbacktimmytos - Aug 3, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 3, 2009
|Essay (On) Love
7 - This is a difficult topic to deal with. Our ability to describe any emotion is very, very limited. We...
Writing FeedbackOnd - Jul 30, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 3, 2009
|The current technological innovation (the first writting in this web)
4 - Sean's advise is very sound. Follow it. Here's my advice: Don't use a translation devise when searching for the...
Writing Feedbackmoula_moula - Aug 1, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 2, 2009
|The benefits of technology versus the costs
Writing FeedbackJanie Tine - Jul 23, 2009 / Janie Tine - Aug 2, 2009
|Vimy Ridge,Day of Deliverance,Constitution Act;3 Defining Moments- Canadian History
4 - Okay, I suppose the analogy itself isn't so bad. But mostly, the intro consists of general statements that don't...
Writing Feedbackalicia15 - Jul 27, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 1, 2009
|Food Stands Vs Eating at Home = Convenience Vs Quality
8 - there are more and more people now choosechoosing food stands or restaurants instead of home when having a meal....
Writing Feedbackfearistheenemy - Jul 22, 2009 / ruonan59 - Aug 1, 2009
|The intellectual benefits of attending a university - advice my second GRE issue
17 - Thank you, Noto. I can understand the difference between great discoveries and the greatest discoveries. Your revision of the...
Writing Feedbackmathsam - Jul 27, 2009 / mathsam - Aug 1, 2009
|Ielts essay: living and studying overseas
Writing Feedbackorlando - Jul 29, 2009 / orlando - Aug 1, 2009
|My best friend in elementary school; Friendship forever
Writing FeedbackLibra - Jul 23, 2009 / designingsally - Aug 1, 2009
|Essay on A Prayer for Owen Meany
Writing FeedbackTottenham125 - Jul 31, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 1, 2009
|Social Work Theory, Skills and Methods Assignment
6 - Post the essay you submitted originally, and the comments you got back on it. That way we can give...
Writing Feedbackelzbietabielec - Jun 21, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jul 30, 2009
|Correct and rate my essay essay. Its on laws being rigid or flexible
Writing Feedbackdesigningsally - Jul 30, 2009 / EF_Simone - Jul 30, 2009
|How my gay father, family and community have shaped who i am today - uc prompt
Writing Feedbackx country 001 - Jul 22, 2009 / Janie Tine - Jul 29, 2009
|True Friendship Essay (living without friends)
12 - I think your revised essay is quite good. However, I am really confused with this. You said,"As we grow...
Writing FeedbackAlexbig - Jun 29, 2009 / Janie Tine - Jul 29, 2009
|[TOEFL] Global events
7 - "Nuclear" is an adjective. "Money crisis" ought to be "monetary crisis." Sometimes people do use a noun as...
Writing Feedbackjohn6503 - Jul 28, 2009 / EF_Simone - Jul 29, 2009
|[TOEFL] Being creative rather than planning.
Writing Feedbackjohn6503 - Jul 27, 2009 / EF_Simone - Jul 29, 2009
|GRE essay: Sadness and happiness
8 - This sort of essay perhaps calls out for a discussion of the principle underlying the prompt. The prompt is...
Writing Feedbacksoarer - Jul 22, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jul 29, 2009
|Illegal Aliens and Their Quest to Stay in the United States
3 - You also need to set up some background in your intro. So, for instance, why not just grant everyone...
Writing Feedbackswatson - Jul 28, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jul 29, 2009
|Reasons why people listen to music
7 - I would recommend you to give specific genre of music that people would listen to relieve their stress from...
Writing Feedbackfearistheenemy - Jul 23, 2009 / john6503 - Jul 28, 2009
|Work alone or in groups
10 - Oh I didn't read the question thoroughly, I thought it was asking whether you agree or not, which mostly...
Writing Feedbackfearistheenemy - Jul 21, 2009 / john6503 - Jul 27, 2009
|Story that affected me most - my TOEFL essay
5 - Your grammar structure and sentencing skills look really professional considering that English isn't your first language. However, for TOEFL,...
Writing Feedbackfearistheenemy - Jul 17, 2009 / john6503 - Jul 27, 2009
|First Essay: How to Pick the Right Fights
4 - Your essay suffers from some ambiguity about what you mean by "fights." The title suggests that are you are...
Writing FeedbackTamzus - Jul 25, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jul 26, 2009
|"working outside the academic world" - Advice for my GRE issue
2 - One of the strengths of this essay is its nuance. Your distinction between academic fields and the specific examples...
Writing Feedbackmathsam - Jul 25, 2009 / EF_Simone - Jul 26, 2009
|The New Bus Driver
7 - You can find a fairly comprehensive list of racial epithets here: en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_ethnic_slurs Several of the terms listed are...
Writing Feedbackkennethfatty - Jul 25, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jul 26, 2009
|TOEFL---"the young people should plan or organize."
3 - Can you imagine that a house is built without a plan or a house plan only contains a rendering...
Writing Feedbackphebe - Jul 22, 2009 / tiantian12 - Jul 25, 2009
|web designers use the techniques of human psychology and brain structure...
Writing Feedbackmbjaya999 - Jul 23, 2009 / mbjaya999 - Jul 24, 2009
|Good Boss, Bad Boss: Compare/Contrast Essay
27 - Oh, yes. People think that online courses will be easier but, because so much of communication occurs through...
Writing Feedbackbreeny - Jul 11, 2009 / EF_Simone - Jul 24, 2009
|workaholic; Spending money on taking vacation, travelling is better than saving
Writing Feedbackjohn6503 - Jul 23, 2009 / trangquynh - Jul 23, 2009
|graduation grieves me
3 - I find the choppy sentences and awkward phrasings add up to a kind of poetry. But, unfortunately, prose is...
Writing FeedbackLibra - Jul 22, 2009 / EF_Simone - Jul 22, 2009
|Least Favorite Place Essay
Writing Feedbackshamey - Jul 18, 2009 / EF_Simone - Jul 22, 2009
|[TOEFL] Observing or studying animals teaches us a lot about human nature
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