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|Essay on theories as to why one might be service orientated and others not.
2 - You might want to discuss what you mean by service-oriented a bit more. For instance, would you consider someone...
Writing Feedbackjenfkb - Feb 8, 2009 / EF_Sean - Feb 10, 2009
|Kouzes and Posner's practices within a leadership event.
3 - The essay seems on-topic to me. If the "five main practices" you mention in the intro have sub-steps, as...
Writing Feedbackharperme - Feb 8, 2009 / EF_Sean - Feb 10, 2009
|Supposedly we, young people, are no longer interested in religion, and thus losing belief in God.
5 - To stay on topic, you might want to deal with the issue of belief. People who really believe in...
Writing Feedbackceberus - Feb 9, 2009 / EF_Sean - Feb 10, 2009
|"The Great Gatsby is seen in two ways" - Help with Essay Writing -
10 - Hello! If someone pastes material from other websites, it causes problems for us and can possibly lead to...
Writing Feedbacksara213 - Oct 9, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Feb 9, 2009
|Education Through My Eyes
Writing Feedbackmllaury - Feb 3, 2009 / mllaury - Feb 9, 2009
|Domestic Abuse (persuasive essay)
3 - Wow, Sean gives really excellent feedback. To me, and perhaps to other readers, this is a valuable piece of...
Writing FeedbackTiffiny9880 - Feb 5, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Feb 6, 2009
|How does Singapore compete with emerging markets in attracting FDI
2 - Singapore has an open and export-oriented economy It is unwise to plan FDI strategy without taking trade into...
Writing Feedbackultraman365 - Feb 5, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Feb 5, 2009
|Grammar check for AOI paper (political struggles in history)
3 - Overall a good job. Some minor fixes, in addition to Kevin's: "In addition to that I have traveled...
Writing FeedbackTaka014 - Feb 3, 2009 / EF_Sean - Feb 3, 2009
|TOEFL: 'the things are simple' - Childhood is the happiest time of people's life
3 - You may want to add more depth to your essay by considering the different types of childhood a person...
Writing Feedbackpope4e - Feb 3, 2009 / EF_Sean - Feb 3, 2009
|Teachers should encourage their students to question everything - essay
Writing Feedbackdragon - Feb 2, 2009 / dragon - Feb 3, 2009
|Essay About Malcolm X
3 - After the collection of a great number of words, he had no problem understanding books, and thus he began...
Writing Feedbackmingbaau - Feb 1, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Feb 2, 2009
|USC Cinematic Arts Essay (Emotionally Intense Moment)
Writing FeedbackZagayer - Jan 29, 2009 / Zagayer - Jan 31, 2009
|College Dropout Rates - vause & Effect Essay in 3rd person, need direction
5 - ""She had spent countless hours filling out admissions and scholarship applications, talked about all the details of campus and...
Writing FeedbackDenise - Jan 30, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 31, 2009
|Introductory Paragraph: Mary Shelley and Frankenstein
6 - I would suggest starting with something more specific, instead of a general statement about personal triumphs and tragedy. Of...
Writing FeedbackInnocuity - Jan 28, 2009 / Zagayer - Jan 29, 2009
|Essay on different customs between the US and Korea
3 - Sean is right, this is a list of cultural differences. I know you aren't finished with it, but what...
Writing FeedbackDayna - Jan 27, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 27, 2009
|Feedback on the "Sound and the Fury" Passage analysis
6 - Oh, thanks for that. Yes i tried to make the sentence introduce the subject of having Dilsey being mislead...
Writing Feedbackjvmoose - Jan 27, 2009 / jvmoose - Jan 27, 2009
|"Living Through Death" - Jimmy; personal essay
Writing Feedbackcleanconscience - Jan 26, 2009 / cleanconscience - Jan 27, 2009
|1984 / Modern Day surveillane proposal, but im an art student
4 - Your essay is a promising first draft of how the modern world contains Orwellian elements. It has nothing to...
Writing Feedbackliamg87 - Jan 11, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 26, 2009
|Tragic Hero in "Antigone" by Sophoceles- essay feedback
7 - The two parts of the prompt don't need separate paragraphs. The answer to (1) is "Creon." The answer to...
Writing Feedbackluckystar - Jan 18, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 26, 2009
|""At present you need to live the question" -help with any grammar mistakes
Writing Feedbackjkigwe - Jan 25, 2009 / jkigwe - Jan 26, 2009
|About edgar allen poe essay
11 - Shock and sophistication is a mixture that can so easily be either loved or loathed, but the point is...
Writing Feedbacknotmysuitcase - Jan 9, 2009 / silverystars - Jan 26, 2009
|Essay Analysis of a Photograph
Writing Feedbacksilverystars - Oct 17, 2007 / silverystars - Jan 26, 2009
|review - Position(s) of responsibility you have held
Writing Feedbackvj_justin - Jan 15, 2009 / silverystars - Jan 26, 2009
|A Letter from Birmingham Jail (loaded words effectiveness)
5 - thank you all for reading it i appreciate it very much and will definitely make the adjustments you suggested!...
Writing Feedbackremembermo - Jan 20, 2009 / remembermo - Jan 25, 2009
|ESSAY: SHOULD TUCK SHOP STOP SELLING "JUNK FOOD"?
5 - That's interesting about U.S.A. Today taking both sides... smart strategy! Speaking of editorials, my grandmother recently wrote an editorial...
Writing Feedbacknpxzs - Jan 23, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 25, 2009
|Ref: Analisis of instructions and procedures.
3 - Here are some suggestions to get you started: "the power on/off button " "The second page displays...
Writing Feedbackfernaj13 - Jan 24, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 24, 2009
|Nature and nurture essay research (GRE exam)
2 - It may be more accurate to say not that people inherited particular personality traits, but rather that people inherited...
Writing Feedbackavih - Jan 23, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 23, 2009
|Narrative Essay (what to be when you grow up) - I need critique
4 - Thank you for the help! I am actually planning to specialize in pediatric oncology : ) I actually follow...
Writing FeedbackBrinajada - Jan 23, 2009 / Brinajada - Jan 23, 2009
|By age 24, 60% of bullies have a criminal record; Introduction/ Essay on Bullying
3 - "By age 24, 60% of bullies have a criminal record." Also, do you know that 92% of statistics are...
Writing Feedbackcoollint - Jan 22, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 22, 2009
|Several different ways in which colleges fail to prepare students for life.
7 - Using a solitary example weakens an essay that is supposed to discuss "Several different ways" of something, because it...
Writing FeedbackKayshel - Jan 19, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 22, 2009
|Oedipus the Tragic Hero
Writing Feedbackvkwang - Jan 19, 2009 / vkwang - Jan 20, 2009
|Great Expectations - Charles Dickens. Tension and suspense.
4 - You include a lot of plot summary and details that really have little or nothing to do with how...
Writing FeedbackViral - Jan 17, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 19, 2009
|GRE essay (Science and Art)
2 - Your essay lacks focus. It is not particularly clear what your thesis is, or what sort of relationship, if...
Writing Feedbackavih - Jan 17, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 17, 2009
|"In the middle of difficulty lies opportunity"; significant event or achievement
3 - Use a dash to separate these: "In the middle of difficulty lies opportunity" -- Albert Einstein Oh,...
Writing Feedbackvj_justin - Jan 15, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 16, 2009
|"The New Lone Rangers" and "Foot-binding" are representing the same sort of character
2 - This is interesting reading good luck with your grammar try buying greegs list it should help you in the...
Writing Feedbackchipmunk - Jan 15, 2009 / mcglownn - Jan 15, 2009
|'Inspiration to my brother and sister' your short and long-term goals and priorities
4 - Nice essay with a nice touch of personal feelings... It will be better if u can split and make...
Writing Feedbackrosy - Jan 11, 2008 / vj_justin - Jan 15, 2009
|Comparing slavery in the American and Russian serfdom
Writing FeedbackYeereina - Jan 20, 2008 / Zuhayr90 - Jan 14, 2009
|Leadership experience - leader is one who learns from their success and failure
Writing Feedbackkbros9193 - Jan 12, 2009 / vj_justin - Jan 14, 2009
|The person I admire happens to be my rival - Essay on Role model
13 - Thanx...
Writing FeedbackULL - Jan 3, 2009 / ULL - Jan 14, 2009
|need help with fixing my essay, "LETTER FROM BIRMINGHAM JAIL" response
Writing Feedbackamonet520 - Jan 10, 2009 / amonet520 - Jan 13, 2009
|Sexual Harassment research essay
2 - Revise for conciseness by taking out unnecessary words. They suck the life out of writing! :) To begin...
Writing FeedbackKarim Fathi - Jan 12, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 13, 2009
|Infertility treatments essay
2 - To answer your question, I think you should put title WITH the author's name so that it is perfectly...
Writing Feedbacksarahmk - Aug 7, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Jan 13, 2009
|Ending Underage Drinking by Making It Legal. Should underage drinking laws be changed.
Writing Feedbackcarebear - Oct 8, 2008 / carebear - Jan 13, 2009
|"rules of the game" in society - essay, opinions
Writing Feedbackyohooo - Jan 10, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 12, 2009
|The Process of Unification - Satirical essay on Religion
Writing FeedbackGcardwell - Nov 11, 2008 / lady_b - Jan 12, 2009
|"The Great Changes" - Essay Feedback
3 - This opening part: For most people, high school is just the next step of education. Most students havetheir...
Writing Feedbackseanydee - Jan 11, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 12, 2009
|Discrimination and predjudice - psychological and sociological views
Writing Feedbacksarahmk - Aug 20, 2008 / sarahmk - Jan 12, 2009
|Essay on Kafka's Metamorphosis
Writing Feedbackbizkitgirlzc - May 28, 2007 / gmanz - Jan 11, 2009
|need help with this essay - "the subjects with which you had difficulty"
Writing Feedbackkbros9193 - Jan 10, 2009 / kbros9193 - Jan 11, 2009
|an experiment essay - A memorable evening
Writing Feedbackonindo - Jan 9, 2009 / onindo - Jan 9, 2009
|Magic Lu Chen - essay help
5 - Good influential essay, I'm not fond with your system of writing, but I can sense your emotion with Lu...
Writing Feedbackfl415 - Dec 27, 2008 / mikedogg90 - Jan 9, 2009
|'People use some drugs, always' - essay about drugs.
8 - People always use some kinds of drugs. Despite the effects of drugs, millions of people constantly consume (abuse?) various...
Writing Feedbackjurgita - Jan 6, 2009 / mikedogg90 - Jan 9, 2009
|Essay comments - "invention that has influenced modern society"
2 - Great job!! My suggestions would be other than calling, what else can a cell phone do that significantly improves...
Writing FeedbackJerrySpock - Jan 6, 2009 / mikedogg90 - Jan 9, 2009
|A Separate Peace Essay during World War II in 1943
6 - Commas can be your friend. To help you out, here are some rules on commas: grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/commas.htm Many teachers...
Writing FeedbackShardul - Jan 7, 2009 / EF_Constance - Jan 9, 2009
|'Liberalisation of aviation' - Airline deregulation essay
2 - The airline industry currently occupies a very important place in the Irish market, due to both the major changes...
Writing FeedbackTizzy - Jan 6, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 7, 2009
|writing technique advices for the essay " regular and election days"
8 - It is better than it was, certainly. You now sound more thoughtful, and have gone into more depth on...
Writing Feedbackcraver - Jan 2, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 6, 2009
|Odyssey essay; 'Sure God created man before woman...'
6 - Well, for a high school or undergraduate essay... really for any essay... quotes can be added in at the...
Writing Feedbacksczyra - Jan 5, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 6, 2009
|Peony in love is my favorite book. Take a read of this essay
5 - Jerry, that is some great advice. Actually, the thesis sentence often goes at the end of the first paragraph....
Writing Feedbackjenf3r - Jan 5, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 6, 2009
|response paragraph for the essay "why we crave horror movies"
Writing Feedbackcraver - Jan 2, 2009 / craver - Jan 6, 2009
|Essay comments - "A place you go to relax"
4 - Thank you two for the feedback! I will change the end of the first paragraph to (my thesis statement):...
Writing FeedbackJerrySpock - Jan 5, 2009 / JerrySpock - Jan 5, 2009
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