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|A mistake i learned from - narrative essay
2 - The pleasant man from the phone call was actually the head coach of the basketball team. He told me...
Writing Feedbackgacesaa - Apr 23, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 24, 2009
|Religion is good for the people - does it touch on the line of poetry?
4 - There is always a certain amount of fun in engaging with a new language. What's your first one? English...
Writing FeedbackProt - Apr 22, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 23, 2009
|Personal Objectivity of James Joyce- research paper
3 - This is going to be a great paper! You weave together the information very well. I only found two...
Writing Feedbackhevyhomie - Apr 22, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 23, 2009
|English Comp. CLEP essay - "guns outnumber the population"
4 - Therefore , his proposal is an adept way of limiting the damage done to society through.. (Above) Technically,...
Writing FeedbackSairaTasartir - Apr 22, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 23, 2009
|TOEFL Essay - Parents are the best teachers (Devotion and penetration)
8 - You might want to "exhort" parents to spend more one-on-one time with their children. That is one way to...
Writing FeedbackMonkeyDDragon - Apr 14, 2009 / SairaTasartir - Apr 23, 2009
|We can't negative wholly benefit from nuclear technology
Writing Feedbacksecret1302 - Apr 14, 2009 / SairaTasartir - Apr 23, 2009
|GED Practice essay: Do you think people learn from their mistakes?
7 - Your concluding paragraph could use some beefing up. And I think if you gave some examples of people learning...
Writing Feedbackspczmb - Apr 14, 2009 / SairaTasartir - Apr 23, 2009
|Essay: Are exams necessary? Yes ... they are!
5 - It's a good idea to find a couple of examples where exams aren't used and compare them to examples...
Writing Feedbackyemenja - Apr 16, 2009 / SairaTasartir - Apr 23, 2009
|English Comp. CLEP - "Discontent is vital to growth and development"
7 - Thanks for your help! LOL... seems to be a popular topic! (either that, or we are both studying from...
Writing FeedbackSairaTasartir - Apr 22, 2009 / SairaTasartir - Apr 23, 2009
|'Some empires refused to learn from history' - English Comp. CLEP - practice essay
3 - In the first paragraph, you'll start out stronger if you write, "can be taken to mean" instead of: It...
Writing FeedbackSairaTasartir - Apr 22, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 23, 2009
|Early human development is strongly influenced by nature
6 - Is this supposed to be a five paragraph essay, or a 4? For a standard, five paragraph essay, this...
Writing FeedbackAlshebah - Apr 14, 2009 / SairaTasartir - Apr 22, 2009
|Growing housing bubble ignored by ecomomists
3 - Why are we<<Avoid the use of editorial we, us, or our in academic writing when referring to general humanity....
Writing Feedbackmichaelfrye1970 - Apr 22, 2009 / twilocity - Apr 22, 2009
|My father sacrificed alot in his lifetime ; Someone Who Has Influenced My Life
10 - Is this supposed to be a five paragraph essay, or a 4? For a standard, five paragraph essay, this...
Writing Feedbackcboggs0027 - Apr 3, 2009 / SairaTasartir - Apr 22, 2009
|narrative essay- giving birth, its not graphic
2 - Hyphens: It was two-thirty in the afternoon on a gorgeous sunny, fall, Tuesday. My favorite day of the week....
Writing Feedbackpurfec8gel - Apr 21, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 22, 2009
|What is the right stuff essay
5 - Instead of "arrogance," you could just say that they needed a robust ego, and let the reader decide for...
Writing Feedbackmichaelfrye1970 - Apr 18, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 21, 2009
|The Concept of Courage as Illustrated by Different Characters
3 - According to Atticus Finch, an honest lawyer in Harper Lee's novel "To Kill a Mockingbird", teaching the children that...
Writing Feedbacktak7171 - Apr 20, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 21, 2009
|Aphorism essay - "A Better Tomorrow"
5 - Thanks...
Writing FeedbackNinja Fox - Apr 14, 2009 / Ninja Fox - Apr 21, 2009
|The Death Penalty is more costly than imprisoning someone for life
Writing Feedbacktapsghost - Apr 20, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 21, 2009
|Does Success Come from Luck or Work?
Writing Feedbackadalumi - Apr 16, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 20, 2009
|Career, exploration, travel, home - check these paragaphs
11 - Here is what to do: Read some articles and see what special ideas they contribute to the topic....
Writing FeedbackThuong - Apr 15, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 20, 2009
|GED Practice essay: Do you think stronger laws should be enacted to...
Writing Feedbackspczmb - Apr 19, 2009 / spczmb - Apr 20, 2009
|Holocaust Essay (genocide subject)
Writing Feedbackahausermun - Apr 11, 2009 / Melanie Rose - Apr 20, 2009
|Essay about war and religoion during 1990s in Europe-Balkan
4 - ...especially when war is going on toward you all around me . In Serbia, people who were living...
Writing Feedbackgacesaa - Apr 19, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 20, 2009
|Art Paper - Elizabeth Murray
4 - Like Kevin said, I would strengthen the first paragraph. One way of doing that is by quoting Murray near...
Writing FeedbackLink42 - Apr 14, 2009 / silverystars - Apr 18, 2009
|Suxanne - a story about one of my dreams
3 - Wow, your opening imagery is graphic and gripping. Great job. If you want to make your story even stronger,...
Writing Feedbacknizarnasir - Apr 14, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 18, 2009
|"Is racism becoming an obstacle in today`s world?" - correct my essay
4 - In our diverse society, racism is facing proving to be one of humankind's major tensions in this day...
Writing Feedbackstudent001 - Apr 16, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 17, 2009
|"King of the Jungle - story feedback
Writing Feedbackmeshaal - Apr 14, 2009 / meshaal - Apr 16, 2009
|500 word image essay (Black Hair Report)
4 - You seem to be on the right track. Now go into more detail. Why were they "jumping" through the...
Writing Feedbackteelyons - Apr 14, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 16, 2009
|"the chase" story
4 - thank you guys, ur really helpful. but Sean can u suggest some better verbs. im really bad at this....
Writing Feedbacknewsha31 - Apr 13, 2009 / newsha31 - Apr 14, 2009
|Essay to Compare and Contrast Two members of Your Family
Writing FeedbackQueenie31 - Apr 13, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 14, 2009
|Psychology Concepts applied to the real world
5 - ...taught them to sew their clothes... She stayed very close to her sister and brought her along so...
Writing Feedbackteelyons - Apr 13, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 14, 2009
|"Who Swims with the Tuna" by Quammen and "Riches of the Sea" by Scully
3 - I think it was David Brin who first pointed out that environmentalists are always only really concerned with creatures...
Writing FeedbackCodyB - Apr 13, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 14, 2009
2 - I would often judge people on assumptions I had been brought up with. Since starting college, I have...
Writing Feedbackkazzy31 - Apr 12, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 13, 2009
|Many people regret that they had not attended a university, but none regret that have a degree
4 - Hi adalumi, your topic and mine are the same thing :D essayforum.com/writing/university-career-preparation-self-6375/ I think your essay is...
Writing Feedbackadalumi - Apr 10, 2009 / MonkeyDDragon - Apr 13, 2009
|Education Playground -- letters after your name
Writing Feedbackzoomdots - Apr 11, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 12, 2009
|IELTS ESSAY: lessons with teachers versus others sources
Writing Feedbackeffy_sun - Apr 8, 2009 / effy_sun - Apr 11, 2009
|SAT essay: Are people's lives the result of the choices they make?
4 - Thanks ^ ^...
Writing Feedbackkitty Freud - Apr 9, 2009 / kitty Freud - Apr 10, 2009
|TOEFL essay: movies - serious or amusing?
11 - If you like Blackadder, you should check out some of Atkinson's stand-up comedy. A few skits are "Mr Bean-ish,"...
Writing Feedbackeric_ly - Apr 8, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 10, 2009
|Something That Changed Me - Becoming a Bully
13 - Yes, six! (Picture me with an amiable yet incredulous expression.) At least, that was my experience. I'm all...
Writing FeedbackANSH729 - Mar 27, 2009 / silverystars - Apr 10, 2009
|The individuality, use of machines and traveling for pleasure - essay
Writing FeedbackChidem - Apr 5, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 10, 2009
|Apprenticeship Program Aplication
Writing Feedbackangelfight - Apr 9, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 10, 2009
|Economic paper: the role of opportunity cost in financial decision making
5 - Like Kevin, I can only guess at your meaning, as a result of unfamiliarity with the subject matter combined...
Writing FeedbackAbby002 - Apr 7, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 10, 2009
|Advertisers, affecting our childs thought process
10 - Overall this is a really well constructed essay. I wonder, though, if you might make a bit stronger if...
Writing Feedbacklilmisha - Apr 3, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 10, 2009
|Definition Essay: Building the Blocks, Becoming Successful (The Climb)
3 - "Success" is derived from the Latin word "successus"... You can follow Sean's advice by using a new topic...
Writing Feedbackbhoptl - Apr 8, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 9, 2009
|Pushed to hard work-----a positive or negative development?
Writing Feedbackkirin - Apr 8, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 9, 2009
5 - As you rework this essay, think about how you can move, as you progress from the introduction to the...
Writing Feedbackhannahkim91 - Apr 8, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 8, 2009
|Hypocrisy in the Chrysalids
Writing Feedbackmacawtopia - Apr 6, 2009 / Rosamond - Apr 8, 2009
|It's with God's miracle that human miracles are innovate; Human Mind vs. the Computer
Writing FeedbackRosamond - Apr 5, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 6, 2009
|The higher goal the bigger efforts for it. (SAT Essay)
5 - About that thesis, I think you should move this sentence to the end o the first paragraph: People should...
Writing FeedbackGiovane - Apr 5, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 6, 2009
|Essay on England's Right to Tax
Writing FeedbackReborn777 - Apr 5, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 6, 2009
|Limiting the Use of Dispable Plastic Bags
5 - Chidem and HD, thanks for those great insights. It helps in more ways than you know; it helps me...
Writing Feedbacklenzo537 - Apr 5, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 6, 2009
|qualities required for a happy marriage
Writing Feedbackkaynling - Apr 5, 2009 / kaynling - Apr 6, 2009
|Some of my thoughts - an essay
8 - "some thoughts - an essay" This seems to be the crux of your problems. An essay is not usually...
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Aug 12, 2008 / EF_Sean - Apr 6, 2009
|The Big Three, Japanese Archetypes
3 - Well, about the space limitation, remember: you could, if you had to, write this whole essay in a single...
Writing FeedbackFDeacon - Apr 4, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 5, 2009
|Essay on Obama's Stimulus Plan
8 - Well, if you have to remain neutral, perhaps you could focus on the fact that it is controversial, turn...
Writing FeedbackFDeacon - Mar 31, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 4, 2009
|My sculpture paper, Emile Antoine Bourdelle
6 - I agree with Kevin -- you have met the requirements and given a decent description of the artwork, but...
Writing FeedbackMoeMoe1 - Apr 1, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 4, 2009
|Introduction essay for Death of a Salesman prompt- Critiques?
3 - You're on the right track. Willy is only truly happy when he is working with his hands. If he...
Writing Feedbackkeentimothy - Apr 2, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 4, 2009
|"Important truths begin as.." (CLEP English Comp w/essay)
4 - Oh, that is an interesting point you made, about the difficulty of writing when you don't know much about...
Writing Feedbacknazgolg2000 - Apr 3, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 4, 2009
|The mighty (movie) essay. Max's past.
Writing Feedbacknewsha31 - Apr 2, 2009 / newsha31 - Apr 4, 2009
|Pledge of Allegiance, under God, separation of church/state, essay feedback
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